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rank 67 (-3)
word count 19574
date submitted 10.08.2009
date updated 11.12.2009
genres: Fiction, Literary Fiction, Romance,...
classification: moderate
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Daisychains of Silence (re-submitted)

Diana Robinson

 

A story of love, lies and memory.
Charged with the fragility of family, the power of forgiveness.

 

The story unfolds over a three day period while Daisy visits her mother who has dementia.

Daisy's idyllic childhood in the highlands of Scotland ends abruptly when she is sent to boarding school, but that's just the beginning of her unravelling. Fall-out from her parents' disintegrating marriage spirals her into chaos and the 1970s Punk scene but childhood memories intrude. Was her father’s death suicide, or, as she suspects, did her mother kill her father?

Daisy keeps it all inside, but she has had enough. She marries Jake, a musician, determined to build her life from scratch, based on honesty not lies.

All goes well until the year of her silver wedding, when Jake faces a crisis of his own. Daisy reverts to old ways of coping as betrayal and family secrets, exposed after a quarter of a century, loosen the threads woven so tightly into the fabric of her life.

The story examines the bonds between mother, daughter, father, lover; the nature of commitment and the fierce drive to love. It illustrates how secrets bring only pain, and forgiveness transcends all hurts.

Mostly though, Daisy's story is about trust.

Complete at 80,000 words.

 
 

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Suzannah Burke wrote 32 days ago

Hello Diana,
I am a writer, or at least I think I am. yet I am at a loss for words. It has all been said, and beautifully.

This brilliant piece of art hit me hard. I found myself actively holding my breath, not wanting to detach myself from the umbilical cord of feelings transmitted on the screen.

This must be published. It deserves to be a cherished book read and re-read by consecutive members of a family. Cared for on a real bookshelf and discussed by all who journey into its pages.

I found your work whilst browsing the books, the title drew me. I will be ever grateful that it did.
Backed with respect and delight.

Suzannah Burke
Dudes Down Under

Philip Crippen wrote 89 days ago

Daisychains of Silence

Dear Diana,

This is world-class writing, and therefore a joy to read. I am taken by your style which I read as patiently complex. I adore the fact that you are not in a rush to gloss over the construction of this story. The characters are so important here. And how daring to create an opening chapter that is primarily summary--that we are not presented with a scene because the distance between the two women (in their own way) can not be effectively portrayed through dialogue--that would defeat the purpose, and if we are as patient as you are, their dialogue comes along soon enough. (It is much more effective in this context to compare the mother with the sharp edge of her cuttings, than for her to speak.)

Then, there is the contemporary epistlary element that you have purposefully wove in and out of the story (and that has been foreshadowed by the elements of quilting), and also the layers of letters that are created through past and present writing. Excellent stuff!

Lastly, I admire your courage in not holding back in your writing, that you manage to express events in a provocative way without spilling over into vulgarity. That is a fine line because if done weakly, this can come off quite lukewarm.

Lyrically beautiful and absolutely shelved,

Yours,

~Phil

Richard Maitland wrote 97 days ago

This is beautifully written, Diana, head and shoulders above 99% of anything on this site, and it drew me stitch by careful stitch into Daisy's world -- her pain, her memories, her shattered trust, and her need to stay mute.

You projected misplaced trust onto the reader, too. I was lulled by gentle words through Chapter 1, soothed by the rhythm of your writing -- until I looked into the mirror and saw Daisy's face, "pale and grave in the mottled silvering" and witnessed that shocking scene in the bedroom.

I think the word I'm looking for, when describing Ch.1 (although I have read the whole upload) is 'completeness'. There was not a detail overlooked, from the hardened leather of Ellen's sandals to the brittle, yellowing Sellotape in the drawer. Daisy's story, and her world, is fully-formed; living, breathing. Real.

This should, and must, be published. It's literary fiction at its very best. Shelved with pleasure -- and respect.

JD Revene wrote 182 days ago

Ali,

Wow! It's probably inappropriate to say it in a comment, but I think I hate you: This is the kind of writing that makes me despair, it's so good I know I can never compare.

The time you've taken away from here has been well spent, you've honed and polished what was a very good work and made it even better. If this is not published there's no justice in the world.

Your opening sentence is astounding, it's now my favourite ever Authonomy sentence (truth be told I'm struggling to think of a better one from published works). But that whole stanza--and it is poetry--moved me, tears welled.

And the grace notes in the body of the text. You've tightened it and you've added telling details; She was, it was said, a very sharp woman.

Wow!!!

Right, I already backed it, off to slash my wrists now . . .

radek wrote 120 days ago

It’s incredibly courageous what you’ve done. It seems odd to speak of a book so beautifully crafted, so rich and warm and intimate as violent but in its opposition to all contemporary trends its rebellion does have a kind of violence about it. Reading it we feel its intricate mesmerising rhythm, its patient stitching, slow down the rather frantic pace with which our mind is apt to run over everything nowadays. In this world of sound bites, slogans, sweeping statements and thirty second commercials we’re simply not used to focusing our attention with such lingering intensity on the intricacy of each passing moment for prolonged units of time.
I’ve said this before but I’ll say it again – The better a book is the harder it is to read it on a screen. I read accounts of football matches or glib hasty emails from friends on a screen. I found I was simply unable to give your book the close attention it warrants after having read the first chapter. Your writing deserves to be read on the printed page. No doubt about that whatsoever. There’s barely a sentence in this first chapter that I wouldn’t have been inordinately proud to have written myself. Your themes – the continuity of a life as a kind of embroidery, identity as a patient endeavour of stitching and mending – are managed with masterful tact and integrity. There’s a constant sense of meaning accumulating. Apart perhaps from your tendency to invert more sentences than I would – which may be an over-anxious desire to vary your sentence construction but might also be a deliberate decision on your part in that it contributes to the timeless drift of the book’s atmosphere - I’ve not seen a book on this site that has been more flawlessly edited.
There should be a place in the modern market for a book like yours; my fear is that there isn’t. Where’s the car crash? Where’s the unnatural sex act? Where’s the mention of the ancient text which will explain the nature of the universe if only Bud or Chuck or Dan can get to it before the bad guys?
To be honest I’d have to read the whole book to know with more conviction just how good it is. What I’ve imparted to you are my instincts. That you have a natural gift for writing is indisputable. That you have a passionate need to write is equally as evident. If this book has been sent out and met with rejection, my advice would be, please write a new novel. Spend a good amount of time working on its plot. Take a deep breath and compromise just a little. A cruel and heretic judgement of this book would be, It’s too slow. That shouldn’t be a fault; unfortunately it’s how the world tends to think at the moment.
Congratulations on having written a chapter of unusual brilliance. I wish I could read more. I will read more, but not tonight…

Wilma1 wrote 7 days ago

What a beautifully written book. Its full of warmth love and suprise, stitch by stich. I admire you taking it down to perfect it. Its a credit to you and you should be very proud. A wonderful read.

Sue Mackender
Knowing Liam Riley

Manolya wrote 8 days ago

Hello Diana,
Simply beautiful!
Backed with pleasure and can't wait to read more:)

Manolya- 'Love in No-Man's Land'

britneyjmartin wrote 12 days ago

Diana,

Great joy to read, what can I compliment that already hasn't been touched on by countless others? You've got a first class ticket to the ED and I look foward to buying this in hardback form :)

Britney
(BFL)

tlst wrote 12 days ago

Your writing has a dream like quality in that it floats effortlessly across your mind. It is the kind of writing you can lose your self in for hours and I have no criticism to make, just praise to give. Tania, This Last Summer

katie78 wrote 12 days ago

i liike your cover. i'd be drawn to it in a book store, though i'm less sure of your title.
i think you'll want to shorten your pitch. i think only one paragraph is needed to describe the highlights of the plot.
i like the line about the mother not cutting curves.
awkward line: "daisy, the daughter..." try- on this day, daisy wants only to be her mother's daughter.
your writing is beautiful, but i have trouble picturing what she's doing with the knitting needle. is she piercing the skin somewhere on her face? is she stitching it with thread?
i think clarity on this will help build the tension. i hope an active scene is coming very soon, because this is a long scene without dialogue that risks losing reader attention.

michaelgd wrote 13 days ago

Beautiful writing. Didn't see a single nitpick. Is that possible? Nah, I must've missed something. Let me read it again. LOL JK...

What can I say? A turn on my shelf? Duh!

Best,
Mike

stef nalton wrote 13 days ago

I've been reading this captivating story again and I think it works well in third-person; I think that changing to first would enhance Daisy's interior monologue - but at the cost of portraying her actions and words that you cannot use in first-person eg "Pru's voice was coming at her loudly, had acquired a strange echo" would be visible in FP narrative, not to mention "Daisy said boldly" and the like. Accomplished, though whatever PoV, because I also enjoyed the FP version, though prefer this one tbh. This *will* be picked up sooner or later because you breathe life into it, and I wish I knew how ...

Carla_Anne wrote 13 days ago

Hi Diana, This is a very delicate and tender read.. I particularly love your artistic descriptive style, you appear to paint words on an emotional canvas, oh, and what a touching soulful story of mother and daughter. I absolutely love it, its my choice of book way above many! You will probably recognise similar sentiments in my own work. I hope that Daisychains of Silence really gets the fullest recognition! Backed 100%
Carla
The Last Gift

jcoop50 wrote 13 days ago

What an amazing story, it is extremely well-written with great clarity and expression. This book deserves to be picked up by a publisher. Find yourself a trustworthy agent and do not stop until you do.
BACKED.
Jane Cooper
The Transformer

KayLeigh wrote 14 days ago

Hi Diana,

When you go to the publishers with this, I want to know so I can be one of the first to scoop up a copy. What beautiful and lovely imagery. Being the image person I am, I truly appreciate the poetic writing style found inside a book like this one. The themes are complimentary. I found myself wondering just where all these great interplay on memories and words came from, and would love to read more when I get time. For now, you have my backing (I'm gushing as I type) 100%!

Yours in Prose
KayLeigh
The Seraph's Orb

Richard Daybell wrote 14 days ago


Elegant writing, rich in vivid detail. I'm happy to back it.

Richard Daybell
Zombie Jamboree

gerry01 wrote 15 days ago

Hi Diana, I've watchlisted your book. I quickly read chapters one and five. Although beautifull written, I'm not sure whether it is my cup of tea. I'm too much of a heathen to appreciate words of more than two syllables.
Seriously though, I'll get back to it when I have a chance. Hope you get a laugh from my one. Gerry

gerry01 wrote 15 days ago

Hi Diana, I've watchlisted your book. I quickly read chapters one and five. Although beautifull written, I'm not sure whether it is my cup of tea. I'm too much of a heathen to appreciate words of more than two syllables.
Seriously though, I'll get back to it when I have a chance. Hope you get a laugh from my one. Gerry

StephenX wrote 16 days ago

My goodness. This is lovely. Your use of metaphor to paint such subtle pictures of your characters - so delicate yet effective. I think I just learned something. Thank you.

StephenX wrote 16 days ago

My goodness. This is lovely. Your use of metaphor to paint such subtle pictures of your characters - so delicate yet effective. I think I just learned something. Thank you.

Sandie Dent wrote 17 days ago

I came back last night to take another look at this, Diana, and I'd forgotten quite how beautiful it is. I read the first three chapters and can see just how much work has been put in since I last looked - it's fabulous... would back it again if it'd make a difference.

Sandie

AnnabelleC wrote 22 days ago

Dare I say it - this is a rich and complex tapestry, with layers of emotion, betrayal and history woven into it. It's the small details that make it so good, such as the mother peeing in the garden, a harmless eccentricity that's a harbringer of dementia. The casual betrayal of her father, too, by innnocently introducing her to the woman in the green wellington boots. I'm glad I kept reading - I found the opening of your MC stitching up her mouth powerful, but difficult. But this is really fine writing. It takes risks, which is what I think literature should do.
Annabelle
DISAPPEARING OFF THE MAP

Suzannah Burke wrote 32 days ago

Hello Diana,
I am a writer, or at least I think I am. yet I am at a loss for words. It has all been said, and beautifully.

This brilliant piece of art hit me hard. I found myself actively holding my breath, not wanting to detach myself from the umbilical cord of feelings transmitted on the screen.

This must be published. It deserves to be a cherished book read and re-read by consecutive members of a family. Cared for on a real bookshelf and discussed by all who journey into its pages.

I found your work whilst browsing the books, the title drew me. I will be ever grateful that it did.
Backed with respect and delight.

Suzannah Burke
Dudes Down Under

chris burton wrote 34 days ago

Diana,

This is beautifully written. Your vivid description, narrative and dialogue suit this genre well, but I think it is your characterisation which singles this out as this is obvioulsy so critical. I assume that you have been and gone and come back again on this site, as you have so few backings and comments, but with such a high ranking. In any event, this will make it to the desk... very soon I would imagine! Backed.

SteveLB wrote 35 days ago

HI Diana,
Lovely writing. Paints a really clear picture of what is happening with a fine choice of words and a wonderfully evocative style.
Very enjoyable.
Steve

A.P. Constantin wrote 37 days ago

Exceptionally fresh approach to a charged subject. I was intrigued by the narrative of the first chapter, where so much is told just by describing the process of quilting. Great device, only a bit log-winded. I though you could have said as much in half the worlds.

The juxtraposition with body-piercing was the needed jolt at just the right time. I also used body-piercing as a punctiation for emotion in my novel The Crystal Butterfly Club (in a later chapter, not yet uploaded).

I think you could get more people to read and back you if you shortened the first chapter.

Cheers

A.P. Constantin



Andrew W. wrote 40 days ago

Hi Diane

Where are you? We miss you, happy New Year

Best wishes

Andrew

mscynthia wrote 47 days ago

Hi Diana,
Daisy's day spent with her mom putting together seas of cut fabric together seems like idyllic mother/daughter moments. I was taken aback by what she did to her lips in her room after.
You do a good job of painting Daisy's character through her movements/actions. Wonderful descriptions. Shelved.
Cynthia

zap wrote 51 days ago

hi diana, this is a very poetic story and I liked the symbolic. The importance of the moment reaches deep into the farthest part of the psyche and brings out some hidden articles. The passage of time shapes relationships with others as well as with ourselves. I liked the distance which your writing created. Therefore any parts of dialogue or pov- changes with which you are presumably trying to overcome this distance did not work so well for me and I would try to alter or remove them. On shelf.

johnny d wrote 56 days ago

This is beautiful writing, evocative and lyrical. It flows like the landscape in which your story is set. Your characters are completely beleivable, and you portray them vividly but without any sentimentality. The stitching in the first chapter seems almost a metaphor for how the story proceeds - stitch by careful stitch, and prepares the reader for the pain that's ahead. Despite the gentleness of your prose, the emotion comes through strongly. A compelling read that I'm very happy to back.

Good luck,

Johnny D

Collision

Firebug wrote 58 days ago

Your writing has a nice flow and does not over-describe. I was a little confused as to what was happening to begin with, but once I read on you made it very clear what was happening. Backed.

Lesley

Tacitus wrote 59 days ago

I put this on my watchlist because it deals with love and lies as does mine (Where Truth Lies). I started reading and found it very lyrical and replete with symbolism; when I got to the piercings, I was mesmerised, shocked, gripped and had to continue reading - but I forgot to make any useful notes. Your writing is very good and your book should be published. Good luck with it. Backed with pleasure and respect for your work. Tacitus

kjc wrote 63 days ago

Thank you for backing The Ironing Board. Daisychains of Silence in on my WL. Hoping to get to it before the weekend.
Karen

Gunslinger wrote 65 days ago

This is itself a work of craftsmanship (or craftswomanship), clearly created with the same painstaking care the characters are taking at the outset. Exacting word choices and a flowing narrative with strong undercurrents. Very backed.
--Daniel
Every Atom Belonging

Roe wrote 66 days ago

I read this the first time round, I believe. Very smooth, perfect flow. Backed.

BobJ wrote 67 days ago

Beautiful. The intricate detail is like a narrative jigsaw being put together. The description of her tired face after removing the piercings is almost heart-breaking.

writingwildly wrote 69 days ago

I love this story. I love your writing style and your gift for painting a very accessible image. I only read the first two chapters, but am rating this among my top favourite stories on this site. Really beautiful.
Pop by and give Under The Same Sky a look if you get a chance. I thought your first chapter was slightly similar in style: like prose more than just words. I'd love to know what you think.
backed
- Genevieve
Under The Same Sky

andrewdawson wrote 69 days ago

Hi Diana

What a shocking yet beautifully-written intro! I was lulled into a sense of comfort as the scene unfolded then suddenly was unable to tear my eyes from the screen, my pulse racing, as Daisy removed her piercings and the twist was revealed. I read chapter two with the same sense of excitement and will shelve this to read more. Don't think there's much I can add in terms in constructive criticism. The dialogue is great, punching out of the page in places (Like the beat from 'Don't hurt her! You're hurting her...' to 'But I like seeing her insides.') and you handle Scottish dialect well -- using only a few 'wee' touches here and there. The descriptions, particularly in the opening of chapter one, are artful and vivid. This great writing. More importantly, it's a fantastic story!

Backed by
Andrew (Clan Fraser, Once Removed)

Rosali Webb wrote 69 days ago

Diana
Smashing piece of writing. Segments of the idyllic childhood are then splashed with these patches of disturbing, harrowing flashbacks. The descriptions and atmostphere take you to the next stage immediately. Very well done. I will read more but for now Backed definately. And the mention of Tetbury was interesting as I am familiar with the place.
Rosali
Fieldtrip to Mars

Robert J. Roid Jr. wrote 69 days ago

I schlepped my laptop into the bedroom this evening, together with a notebook and pen. I will take notes as I deconstruct, I said to myself. With the neighbour's cat sleeping by my side I began reading Daisychains of Silence. I emerged an hour or so later, resurfacing from your amazing writing, practically dazed. No, not practically; I was dazed. Even the cat was dazed. There was only one comment in my notebook and in retrospect I realize that it is merely a misunderstanding on my part.

This is flawless, inspired writing; this is stuff drawn and painted with the sure hand of an artist soaring at the pinnacle of her craftsmanship. Craftswomanship. I am astounded that the author of this marvellous, yet chilling manuscript could ever use the word 'doubt' when describing her abilities as a writer. I mean, seriously. I have seldom come across anything on Authonomy that folds itself out with such a seeming effortlessness, a sureness of voice—I'm repeating myself, I know—so finely textured and lovingly detailed, yet speaking of things both dark and unbalanced.

Bravo you! This is what I call literature. Find yourself an agent.

Jupiter Echoes wrote 70 days ago

an edition .....


Hi, I have read a small portion of your work. I am looking at your micro - writing.... effective intro, whether you slow the story down with too much back story, if your characters come to life quickly, your descriptive powers, the rhythm of your prose, etc. I have approached your read from the point of view of genre and market. I have judged my work to the best of my ability, but punctuation, the over use of !, grammar, spelling, are the remit of my wife so don’t think I have judged these elements at all (I only wish I could).

As the micro writing is good, I back your book. I don't expect you to back mine, but if you are just in it to climb the charts to get to Ed's desk, and don't want the hassle of reading mine, just back it.

On the other hand, if you would like a deeper read, then please look at my novel, Dream Diamond, and leave feedback that isn't a regurgitation of the past few comments. I get so many clusters of similar comments that one feels utterly worthless and is left wondering if they are good at all. If you do ask for deeper feedback and have submitted negative critisism, I still will reciprocate honestly, and will not enter a tit-for-tat comment, as I have found happens to me quite often when I get honest. Also, I will not rewrite large sections of your work in my style, which I personally find unbelievable that some authors here feel that there is only one way of writing and we all should be the same. I will work with your style, and learn from it.

Now, I am not going to be able to focus on your book holistically. I haven't the time to read entire books. Your overall plot structure, your ability to weave mystery or give a great ending, or the way you drag in the middle is really not in the design of this site. What I suggest is that you find someone whose comments you trust, become there friend, and see if they will swap books and ask for analysis of longer portions. Eh, maybe form cluster writer's circles within authonomy.

You may wonder what prompted this approach. Quite frankly, I haven't the time to spend months, reading everyday, all day, to reach an editor who, from past data, in all probability will not accept my book for publication. I could write another book in the process. Secondly, I have put so much effort into the work of others who quite obviously only paid scant attention to mine, and given some fit-all comment that means absolutely sod all.

So, here is my gift to you. You are BACKED because you deserve to backed. You have honed your craft to at least not to make an agent quiver. Whether you book has the exceptional quality to put it above the hundreds of other great writers here, I cannot say without a deeper read. Reciprocate if you want, no worries if you don’t.


BACKED.


Jupiter Echoes.

Jupiter Echoes wrote 70 days ago

Intrigued by the story. Enjoyed your execution. Certian vidiness in places that caried me along through the earlier chaps.... good characterisation with tightly written prose.... i could embrace this story and read it to the end, time permitting. BAcked all the way to the Ed's desk.

BACKED

S.D. Gillen wrote 70 days ago

This is beautifully written. You not only write well, but your story has an enchanting rhythm to it. Your story is heartwrenching, yet full of life. I really enjoyed what I have read so far.
I too, had a poppet! No one knows how much some of our childhood friends mean to us!
Good luck with this, its wonderful!

Backed by SD Gillen

Ariel Du Plume wrote 72 days ago

Diana,

Read this today and was totally engrossed in it. Excellently written with great story line. Left me wanting more. Will surely be published. Backed.

Ariel
Merkabah at the centre of the universe

Harold2 wrote 73 days ago

Great writing, thanks for sharing

Ruth Francisco wrote 73 days ago

Diana, You have the eye and ear of a poet. Each image is drawn like a finely rendered painting. Quilting and memory is a lovely metaphor, and you employ it well. The pacing is lyrical and languid, setting up the reader for a reflective kind of novel. Really quite lovely. I wish you the best with this. Ruth (Amsterdam 2012)

Miss Sully wrote 74 days ago

This is a wonderful piece of writing. Strong story with vivid imagery - backed with pleasure.

Best of luck
Grace - Suitcase of Memories

R.C. Lewis wrote 74 days ago

Yikes, read far more than I thought I would - everything posted, in fact. Obviously a compelling story, since I was so compelled to read on.

“Her mother did not cut curves. She was, it was said, a very sharp woman.” Maybe this is the geeky reaction of a geometry teacher, but I love the imagery and deeper meaning here. And then an unexpectedly (but powerfully) dark twist toward the end of the first chapter tunes us in to Daisy's demons as revealed in the following chapters.

A note: I noticed the first 3 paragraphs of ch 1 are in past-tense, then a sudden shift to present for the rest of the chapter, followed by past-tense for the remainder of the chapters. Perhaps this is intentional for a reason that escapes me, but it threw me off briefly.

After that, I stopped taking notes and just let the work soak in. As you say, Daisy's story is about trust, and I think that's why I was so drawn into it. In my own life, trust has often been hard to come by. Remarkably well done, and happily backed.

R.C. Lewis (Fingerprints)

BL Phillips wrote 74 days ago

Daisychains of Silence-

An inspired title of an awesome book. This is written with a lot of grace and a lot of feeling all of which comes through between the lines like faint light melts into shadow. There is an overhang of darkness here, a sadness that stills the heart. Daisy is injured and alone. Thoughts of her past in letters are painful yet necessary therapy. The interchanging chapters offer an revealing look back and clues to what caused it. All the details that bring her to life are there in a patchwork of emotion. This is a woman whose life started to go wrong long before she knew it and by the time she did, she couldn't stop it. She's one of those characters who is impossible to ignore.

Needless to say, I have a great deal of admiration for this author and her ability to weave heart into prose. This is very well done. Good job. -Brad (Larcenous Tendencies I & II)

JDuPlesys wrote 75 days ago

All your comments on here are well deserved, I'll just say you certainly wrap your reader into the mood. Excellently done...JD

AlanMarling wrote 76 days ago

Dear Diane Robinson,

Thank you for sharing your pearl of a story with us. Your opening scene is riveted with beautiful images, poetry in prose. In my fallible opinion, you could make this scene even better by letting the reader in on (or at least better guess at) the underling tensions in Daisy’s difficulty with Jake and her mother’s creeping dementia. Then their search for peace together becomes all the more poignant.

I was amused by the detail of the protagonist wanting to see the insides of her doll. And I loved your ending sentence, “She went down to prepare something for supper, for her mother who would forget to eat then forget that she’d forgotten.” I almost think you should start with a sentence like this, though I can understand why you might want to build up to it more gradually, so it doesn’t seem cheap. On the other hand, some stories try to draw the reader in with mystery because they don’t have any true substance; your story has substance and emotional depth, and again, I hope you’ll consider giving more hints at it earlier. I sat bolt upright when you described the mother watering the garden in more ways than one. Could you bring that scene forward?

Regardless, you’re a great writer, and I wish you the best of luck.

Alan Marling
Ghost Warrior, the Stealing

Christina McClean wrote 76 days ago

Wonderful description of quilting at the beginning, so much so that I couldnt believe what the story was turning to, the description of her sewing herself, was at once chilling, disturbing and ultimately terribly sad. I have to read this to the end.
backed
Christina
From Under the Bed

Clare Hill wrote 78 days ago

This is mesmerisingly beautiful with a chilling dark undercurrent. I didn't expect Daisy to do that with the needle, it was haunting. I have no criticism. Backed.

hamishun wrote 78 days ago

I haven't had chance to read much yet but what I have read so far left me enthrhralled and makes my book look insignificant in comparison.
Good luck with it. Backed!
Virginia Owen
It Never Rains In Paradise

jfreedan wrote 79 days ago

Odd, I thought I commented on this already......well, I recall wanting to back it because, although it's not the normal genre I read, I think it has a lot of potential. Your writing is clean and poetic, and I get a real sense for the inner emotions of your protagonist, Daisy. I'm sure this will be liked by romance readers. Backed.