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word count 13100
date submitted 30.06.2009
date updated 21.06.2010
genres: Fiction, Thriller, Science Fiction,...
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Rescuing Liberty

Amanda Washington

A precarious alliance, formed for the sake of a child, evolves into a crusade to rescue so much more.

 

Six months ago Liberty Collins was advancing in a career at a prosperous marketing firm and dreaming of a bright future. Now the only thing darker than her nightmares is reality. In a socially- and economically-collapsed America, Liberty struggles to find courage to endure and strength to protect herself. Tormented by the decisions she has to make and terrified that the price of survival will be her soul, Liberty clings to a higher power for guidance. Her faith, constitution, and sanity are challenged as the lines that separate right from wrong grow increasingly blurry.

Three months ago Connor Dunstan was a thriving personal injury attorney with a comfortable life and a deeply-buried past. Time ticks on and the country crumbles as provisions dissipate. The survival of Connor and his unforgiving niece—Ashley—rests on his ability to wield a shovel. But digging up bones is proving hazardous to his sanity.

Rescuing Liberty is a post-apocalyptic, Christian thriller; a story of finding light in a dark world and hope where none exists.

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1: Wasteland


 

 

Liberty

 

"America will never be destroyed from the outside. If we falter and lose our freedoms, it will be because we destroyed ourselves." —Abraham Lincoln

 

***June 7

 

     With a dagger in one hand and my best friend—a Smith and Wesson Sigma—in the other, I analyzed shadows outside the window. My red curls were haphazardly pulled through the back of a navy-blue Mariners baseball cap. I gripped the gun and glanced at the letters I’d carved dangerously close to the artery on my left wrist: WWL.

     Crazy much, Libby?

     “Nice warm jacket, soft-padded cell, three square meals a day. Doesn’t sound so bad, does it?” I asked the stuffed bear lying near my feet.

     Frog—as my niece Megan lovingly named the bear—didn’t look impressed by my wit. Frog had been well loved, and it showed. He was missing an eye, and the hole on his arm was visible around the edges of a Band-Aid. He stared at me, looking terrified of being left behind.  

     “That’s not fair.” I nudged Frog with my toe in an effort to redirect his gaze.

     He rolled completely over, and his big brown eye continued to play on my conscience. I sighed.

     “How do you feel about Canada?”

     Tucking the gun into the back of my jeans, I reached down and picked up the bear.

     “Don’t worry, Frog. Canada will be better. Promise.”

    Hope.

     I shoved Frog into my large hiking backpack next to a crumpled family portrait, a few bottles of water, two lighters, a small journal, a couple pens, a roll of duct tape, my sleeping bag, and a wind-up flashlight radio. The flashlight radio was turned on to scan for stations daily, but so far had only found static.

     Stretching, I scrunched up my nose at the odor assaulting me from my arm pits. It had been days since I’d last bathed in a stream outside Olympia, and I felt as disgusting as I smelled.  

     My stomach growled, reminding me of matters more essential than my neglected hygiene. I eagerly reached into the front pocket of my filthy jeans, when I remembered that the peanuts I was seeking had been breakfast.

     A person could starve to death in this city.

     Tens of thousands already had.

     My temporary shelter reeked of death and human waste. Littering the floor, children’s toys and books lay lonely and neglected under a thin layer of dust. The outlines of various footprints told stories of survivors desperately searching for something—anything.

     This had once been my sister Anna’s spotlessly clean home; now it was ransacked and damaged beyond recognition. Just the sight of the cupboard doors hanging from their hinges would no doubt send the obsessive-compulsive Anna into hysterics.

     She couldn’t see the cupboards anymore.

     Anna had tormented and terrorized me throughout our childhood, but she hadn’t proven tough enough when it really counted.

     Each breath is a gift.

 

 

     The last time I’d been in this house was for Thanksgiving. Only seven months ago I sat at the bar and obligingly chopped whatever Anna threw my direction for the holiday dishes. Her husband, Tom, was on his hands and knees pretending to be a horse for their two-year-old twins, Megan and Martin. He bucked and reared as they giggled and hooted. If I closed my eyes I could still hear their laughter.

     Their bodies remained where I found them, huddled together peacefully in Anna and Tom’s bed. No stab or bullet wounds. No blood.

     No hope. 

     This had been their first house, and Anna had turned it into a comfortable home. Family pictures littered the wall beside me—some hanging askew, others broken and lying randomly on the floor. Obscenities were carved into the coated face of their fifty-six inch flat screen TV. Deep slashes ran across once overstuffed couches, and the filling covered the floor like mounds of snow.

     Lives spent collecting these material possessions—all this crap—and none of it mattered. Nothing here had saved my sister’s family from their fate.

     Another useless tear slid down my dirty cheek.

     My sister’s family was dead, and this house was their tomb. I ground my teeth as the desire to kill those who’d desecrated it overwhelmed me. 

     No. Judgment is not mine to pass.

     I fought for control over my emotions, put down the imaginary gavel, and considered the evening view outside the window. The sun was setting on the remains of the once-prosperous city of Olympia, Washington. Calming lines of reds and oranges ran across the sky, contrasting with the dark, sinister shadows on the ground.

    Early June displayed an impressive amount of greenery and flowers. Roses—unaffected by the destruction—bloomed in every color alongside ruined buildings. Lush bushes and healthy grass grew obliviously around scattered human remains.

     Nature donned a convincing façade as it attempted to hide the passing of humankind. Intoxicating fragrances of lilacs and hyacinths put forth a valiant effort, but couldn’t mask the reek of decay.

 

 

     I rubbed my tired eyes, slipped my backpack over my aching shoulders, and headed for the back door. My fingers instinctively massaged the scar on my wrist while I scrutinized the shadows of the backyard, watching for movement. I opened the door, took another deep, steadying breath, and stepped into the dusk.

     Looking back at the house, I noticed that Tom never did get around to fixing the screen the twins destroyed. A simple chore left undone, yet it was too much.

     My throat constricted.

     Breathe.

     I stuffed the memories back behind the locked door in my mind. I’d open it someday when I was ready to welcome the madness. Even now I could hear the nightmares knocking, taunting me with a way to ease the pain, a way to forget.

     Not today—maybe tomorrow.    

     Bowing my head, I crossed myself. No organized “religion” had ever felt right—but this Catholic gesture comforted me somehow. In one simple hand signal to God I confirmed my continued belief and petitioned for His aid

     As I headed out, the gun pressed into the small of my back. The discomfort served as a constant reminder of the blood on my hands. “Thou shalt not murder,” the commandment declared, and as a child, I’d been taught the biblical difference between “kill” and “murder,but what of self-defense? Is it more of a slap-on-the-hand than a burn-for-eternity sentence?

     Perhaps the Almighty would allow an attorney?

     Of course all the good attorneys would already be in hell …

     It’s hard to stay clean while swimming in murky water. When it came down to kill or die, my lineage as a child of Cain had been proven. But every day I prayed for redemption while checking both 16-round magazines of the 9mm; prayed I wouldn’t have to use them.

     How did the line between right and wrong get so blurry?

 

 

     I walked until the sun breached the horizon, hopped over a fence, and slid into a small portable shed. Lawn care equipment and a tricycle frame were the sole contents; nothing of use. Disappointed, I peeked outside to check out the area, and was surprised to find an apple tree. Licking my lips in anticipation, I watched, waited, and listened. My mouth watered from the thought of digging my teeth into a crisp, Washington, Gala apple.

     Nothing about my surroundings was threatening; just a small backyard behind a two-story home. A chain-linked fence bordered knee-high grass. There were no abnormal movements or sounds.

     Hunger burned within me, melting my paranoia and liquefying my patience.

     Apple pie, apple turnover, apple crisp, apple dumplings … torture!

     With my gun still at my back, I could stick the dagger in my teeth and scale the tree like Rambo. I’d climbed trees as a child.

     How hard could it be?

     Footsteps came from my right. I dropped into a crouch and prayed intensely for invisibility.

     Please, God, don’t let anyone find me.

     A boy who looked about thirteen, rough and tough, with scrawny arms, long legs, and the awkward stance of a pre-teen, hopped the fence and sneaked up to the tree. He looked around nervously and embarked on his climbing mission, lurching and sliding as he struggled to find his footing on the trunk.

     The hem of his jeans caught on a small twig and as he kicked to free his leg he fell to the ground with a loud thump. Instinct kicked in, and I shuffled my feet, preparing to run out and help him.

     ‘No!’

     The voice of the call fell on my heart, commanding me to remain hidden. More powerful than words, the call flooded my senses with understanding, cautioning me against revealing myself to the child.

     No? He’s just a boy. He needs me!

     Another rugged figure came skulking from the boy’s hiding place: a man with deep-set eyes, dark hair, and a lean, muscular build. He moved fluidly, like a hunter. Not a hunter of animals, though. “Hunter” was what I called those who had escaped the burden of their conscience. They lurked in the shadows and preyed on the defenseless.

     I winced as the child smiled and encouraged the man’s approach.

     Look what You did!

     I glanced at the shed’s ceiling, adjusting my cap as I argued with the call.

     Just a kid and now he’s in the hands of some hunter. What are You doing?

     I felt no response as the hunter crept over, braced the boy’s foot, and boosted him up within reach of the first branch. The branch creaked under the youth’s build.

     I watched hopelessly as the boy stretched, bent, reached, and finally made contact with the first apple. He plucked it and stashed it in a pocket.

     Good boy! Fill your own pockets first.

      The child collected several more apples, storing the first few in his pockets and then begrudgingly tossing the remainder down to his companion. The hunter helped the boy down, and looked around nervously while the child bent and emptied the apples he’d collected into his pack. When the kid stood up, the large butcher knife he wielded glinted in the sun. 

     “Let’s go.” The man twisted back around as the boy plunged the knife into his stomach.

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gillyflower wrote 883 days ago

A brilliantly written book with a gripping plot and amazing depth. Libby is a smart, feisty woman with a conscience which forces her to continually question her life, her use of a gun, her excuse of 'self defence.' Connor is a man forced to think in a way he has previously refused to do. Left alone to look after his twelve year old niece, he feels the embarrassment of searching out the things she needs as her body grows into puberty, but he does it anyway, looking in the empty house where his brother's secretary used to live, and making unfamiliar decisions about what to get for Ashley. Meanwhile, Libby hears a voice which warns her not to show herself when the boy falls from the apple tree, and she is right. The shocking end of the first chapter, taking us unawares, is a real hook, and is matched by the scream which startles Connor at the end of Chapter Two. Your apocalyptic setting is vividly painted, the wrecked house of Libby's sister and her family matching the destruction all around, and in the shop Connor's brother was so proud of. Your style is slick and expert, and you bring your characters and settings to life so well. 'Intoxicating fragrances of lilacs and hyacinths put forth a valiant effort but couldn't mask the reek of decay,' you tell us, and we are right there with Libby. An excellent book, whose depth I've hardly mentioned as yet, but which makes it all the more original and worth publishing. Backed.
Gerry McCullough,
Belfast Girls.

Michael Stone wrote 907 days ago

Tense and edgy. Liberty is the conscientious killer. The proverbial forced hand. Connor is the slick wordsmith, almost an agent provacateur in a lawyer's costume. Together they make a great team. Ashley is the purpose, the force behind them. I didn't read far enough in to ascertain the Christian element, but it looks to be about redemption and reclamation. In the wake of the dissolution of America and its creature comforts, security and pride, two citizens bond to achieve more than mere survival, but to reclaim their status as "People", as in "We The People, in order to form a more perfect union..."

I think it has great merit and addresses fundamental desires in us all, to rise above the challenges and be more than what our circumstances make of us.

Shelved, with civic pride.

kate-360 wrote 961 days ago

Amanda,
I have not read a story this intriguing in a long time. I have to admit that I have read the chapters that are posted at lest a couple times each and each time I am drawn back into it. I enjoyed the first chapter when you described what happened to the government and how you related it to the current economic issues. I am a political science minor and the concept of Congress bailing on the American people in its time of need was ironically amusing and humorous to me. But it shows to the reader what the future might hold if Washington doesn't get its rear in gear. Frightening but true.
Liberty is such a strong, female character who uses the skills she know to survive. After having lost her career and everything she has worked so hard for in life disappear. You express Liberty's emotions to the reader so strongly it makes me feel as if I am in her position. It is deep stuff, but great reading.
Thanks for the story. It is extremely worthy of being shelved.

RichardBard wrote 276 days ago

Hi Amanda!

Since you haven’t been to Authonomy for a while, I hope it’s okay that I’m sending this through your book comment:

I’d like to thank you for backing BRAINRUSH (a Thriller) last year. Because of you it hit the Authonomy Number-1 slot, attracted an agent, and landed a film option. Now that’s a brain-rush! The formal book launch is September 1st and the sequel will be released in December. None of this would have been possible without your help. So, thank you, thank you, THANK YOU!

Sincerely,
Richard Bard, BRAINRUSH

PS. If you want a good laugh, check out the temporary book-trailer video on the BRAINRUSH website. It’s there as a placeholder for the upcoming professional video. The current one features children and it’s guaranteed to make you smile! And yes, the younger kid on the screen is really me. You can see the video at www.RichardBard.com. The link is also on my Authonomy profile page. While you’re there, check out the “Feel the Rush” promotion that will get you BRAINRUSH plus 2 FREE thrillers from the Kindle Top-20 PAID Bestseller list – yes, really!

Halsgal wrote 559 days ago

Your book is well writen, you have the ability to catch and hold the readers attention. five stars and on my watch list

Jim Darcy wrote 578 days ago

We red arrows need to stick together. :)

Eunice Attwood wrote 581 days ago

A gritty, edgy read, written in a strong voice. There is a lot of passion behind this work, from a very skilled writer.
It is a polished work of the highest standard, and I wish you well in having it published. Backed. Eunice - The Temple Dancer.

eurodan49 wrote 585 days ago

Hello Amanda.
Good, solid story. The narration “tells” and “shows” the reader and the dialogue moves it along. Lovers of the genre will have a blast.
I enjoyed the pace and the voice, so I’m backing it.
Good luck in getting it published.
Dan
PS. Please take a look at mine…comment/backing will be appreciated

Christian Rogue wrote 589 days ago

Wow, sorry it took me so long to comment on this. This is such an awesome story! Liberty is everything I like in a lead - strong and resilient. Your descriptions are poignant and realistic. Down to the gun with the initials, the teddy bear, and the characters that reside in your story. Liberty's thoughts add humor to the darkness that surrounds her- whether it is just to combat the madness going on around her like when she's thinking about clue in response to the brutal killing. Your dialogue flows effortlessly and is very realistic too. I just can't get over this. I don't have anything bad to say about this. Your blend of faith and God into this manuscript is seamless and doesn't stick out like a sore thumb. This is something that I could personally work on myself. It's great to see someone who has done this well. This is going back on my shelf, even if I've already backed it. Maybe it'll help after next week when the changes are supposed to happen. I mean, this is everything I like as sci-fi fan. Apocalyptic, thrilling, and a strong female lead. Thanks for sharing it! -Christian Rogue (Wings of the Heart)

sye wrote 647 days ago

What depth this book has! I only intended to read a few chapters but just cannot put it down.
Superbly written, brilliant plot, and fantastic overall construction.
Backed with plesure
Sye
Losing The Hate

Dorothea wrote 664 days ago

This narrative is really good. I found myself intrigued from the beginning of this book. I liked the way Libby is weighing up her Christian values with the situation as she is walking through her sister's house.

Tracy Buchanan
The Candyfloss Room

Johanna Kern wrote 675 days ago

A true page turner!

You are an amazing writer!

This is a powerful story - which leaves no leaf unturned :) Deep, sophisticated, highly entertaining and smart.

Two thumbs up!

Backed with true pleasure.

Johanna Kern
Master and the Green-Eyed Hope

slh68 wrote 676 days ago

Rescuing Liberty- This is absolutely brilliant.Really good story that draws the reader in straight away. Good character`s. I can`t wait to read some more, please let me know as soon as you put more chapter`s up.
Again, this is brilliant.
Thankyou for backing Badfellows.

Best wishes

Sarah Louise

Famlavan wrote 678 days ago

What an intelligent book!
I think how you blur what’s right against what happened through head justification and heart knowing is stunning! Great characters and a brilliant storyline. I haven't time to fully do this justice, but when I have, I will. You truly have an amazing story here.

Wilma1 wrote 682 days ago

Oh you tease, great story you hook me in I take in the plot get to know the charachters them Bham thats it ???? Come on post some more.

Sue Mackender ( Wilma!)

Knowing Liam Riley

wespollet wrote 685 days ago

HI Amanda, Thanks for a great novel. I enjoyed reading it very much. It was just too short. I like the book and anxious to know the outcome. I Back the Book Harold Alvin(ICON)Wesley

Owen Quinn wrote 696 days ago

Love it, love it, love it!

Suzannah Burke wrote 824 days ago

All the superlatives have been used. And then some.

Add my name to the long list of people that would happily pay $$$'s to have this book sitting next to the bed.

Red Arrows amaze me. This deserves better than that.

Backed with pleasure.
Suzannah Burke

tlst wrote 824 days ago

Gripping first chapter and great use of language, the asides 'passing out would be very bad' are perfectly executed. I see you've self-pub'd but feel this could easily find a mass audience. Tania, This Last Summer

John Wickey wrote 829 days ago

I know it's fiction, but we share a similar vision of the future of the nation and world. Good luck with this!

John Wickey
Future's End

A.P. Constantin wrote 832 days ago

I got carried away and read more than I had planned to. End-of-the-world-as-we-knew-it scenario happening to real people. I marvel at how beaten old themes can still captivate if the twist is done right.

One gripe: your cover. I almost passed on you book because of that picture that suggested (to me, anyway) heroic feats by the green berets (or whatever they are called nowadays) against the Enemies of the Free World. Your book is early enough in its trajectory, so that you will not lose much branding if you change the cover (just one opinion from one reader/viewer).


A.P. Constantin

The Crystal Butterfly Club

Phyllis Burton wrote 837 days ago

Hello Amanda, Rescuing Liberty is quite frankly one of the better books that I've read on this site. Survival of the fittest or the most desperate, is the name of the game. Makes you realise just how much we all depend on each other, money, food, electricity and every othe commodity that we all take for granted. This is chillingly well written and almost compels the reader onwards. I read it all and looked for more. Nothing to criticise and therefore SHELVED with the greatest of pleasure.

Phyllis
A Passing Storm (Would you look at my story for me please)

lionel25 wrote 839 days ago

Amanda, I've read your first two chapters. Great writing. Nothing out of place. Chapter 1 swept me into Chapter 2 with the stabbing, and Chapter 2 threatened to hurl me into the next. Then again, the book is published so I guess it is well-edited. Most heartily backed.

Regards,

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

cbearly wrote 843 days ago

Amanda:

You have weaved a fantastic albeit frightening vision of the future. I love how "the call" speaks to Libby, giving the reader the impression that all has not been forsaken. I also was impressed with how you incorporated the game of Clue, during the scene with the young hunter. You have a wonderful knack for allowing the reader to visualize the scene. I actually pictured steam rising from the body in the orchard. The use of Napolean's quote was flawless and I love the the fact that you have an attorney seeking redemption. Priceless!

Backed with pleasure,

Candace Bowen Early (A Knight of Silence)

shedscribe wrote 844 days ago

this is really great writing, amanda. you immediately and brilliantly capture the danger (not to mention heartache and loneliness) of this post apocalyptic world liberty lives in now. your writing is vivid and brings the reader right into the story with your characters. no mucking about, as they say across the pond.

one of my favorite lines:

"It’s hard to stay clean while swimming in murky water." it encapsulates what i would imagine is the theme (or one of the themes) of the book perfectly.

i just reread your bio and noticed you've already self-published this book, so it's probably a lil late for notes, but i'll give 'em anyway - just in case you might wanna address something in a second printing.

IMO you don't need this last line – "how did the line between right and wrong get so blurry?" it's already there, in every other word we read, without having to state it so clearly. but that's just my opinion. grain of salt and all that. ;-)

this line made me chuckle and i know it was not your intention to do that:

"I walked until the sun breached the horizon, hopped over a fence, and slid into a small portable shed." I had to reread it several times to know you weren't talking about the sun hopping the fence and sliding into a shed. ;-) think maybe there's a better way to say it.

overall though - really wonderful writing and the story is a real page turner. the end of chapter one - holy cow. i mean come on! great stuff.

shelved with pleasure. best of luck with this, amanda!

kelly
(chasing kate)

Yolanda Christian wrote 857 days ago

Rescuing Liberty – I thought the pitch was very well written but the first line was a bit too obscure for me.

It immediately opens in quite a zappy rhythm. As I read on, it was completely not what I expected at all.

Good luck with the climb.

ginafameus wrote 859 days ago

Amanda, you are a great writer. Your words were alive. At one point when you were describing they odor I thought I was going to fall out. I am still reading, but so far so good. Bringiing Liberty to life shows that you have a great imagination.

Nit wrote 864 days ago

Amanda,

When I sat down and began reading this, it seemed like no time at all had passed before Connor was emerging from the bushes, having saved the lives of Libby and Ashley. Of course, like anyone enrapt in a good book, I wanted to know what happens next. To my chagrin, I'd come to the end of the line. No fair!!!

What can I say? This is thought provoking speculative fiction, extremely well written, and most definitely a page turner.

Backed with pleasure!

All the best,
Nit

Jonathon_LaMella wrote 864 days ago

I read your first chapter. You introduced the character very well, I like your plot, you have a great writing style , and well written dialogue. Great job! Backed!
Jonathon

Lynne wrote 866 days ago

A captivating and feisty main character and an intriguing and mind boggling story. This has it all. Its a real page-turner. The end of the first chapter is such a shock. You have to turn the page. Backed without hesitation. Lynne, Brooklyn Bridge.

Raymond Nickford wrote 867 days ago

The idea of the empty US Capitol building being occupied by a mob on the exit of the politicians is startling.
Your description of the scene the dreamer confronts on waking is indeed a trauma as the desperate struggle for survival starts. The scene of streets littered with the dead and then Liberty's discovery of her dead sister and children is moving.
When the boy suddenly kills the Hunter with the kitchen knife, you catch the reader off guard and wanting to read on. I found this true of the chapter endings to #2 and #3 where you again build the tension towards marvelous cliffhangers. Shelved.
Ray
(A Child from the Wishing Well)

Lady Calverley wrote 868 days ago

Timely and chilling-- excellent writing. Shelved.

Ruth/Base Spirits

JanB wrote 868 days ago

I read through chapters 1-3.
Its extremely well written, highly descriptive and keeps the reader hooked.

I have to admit, not being an American, am a little put off by the cover and the name, its definately a book I would have looked over had I found it in a store, I much prefer a more international feel to books, it allows the reader to link more readily.
However that said, it is brilliantly written and absorbing.

Backed with pleasure

JanB
Table for One

Callaghan Grant wrote 869 days ago

Amanda! Great work! I can relate to this gal! Scary situation she's in and yet, she's trying to be/do "the good". The story reads very well. You have a couple of places where you should rework. DO NOT USE ADVERBS -- they are beneath your calibre of writing! IE: "instintively massaging", "eagerly reached into front pocket....". Try not over use adjectives either: "Useless tear", "Dirty cheek". Better "Another tear streaked/etched the grime/filth that powdered my face..." You get the idea. "...all the good attorneys would already be in hell." made me laugh. I LIKE this gal! BACKED with love! Callaghan

kevinwong_HoD wrote 869 days ago

Excellent title! Wicked quote at the beginning! "Canada will be better" line that will be destined to become a classic! Your book is awesome. So are you Amanda Washington (how appropriate "Washington" is your last name!) I want your book to get a book deal, and if my simply backing it will cause it to happen, then so be it! :-)

Yours Truly,

Kevin Wong
Author of Heroes of Destiny

Christina McClean wrote 870 days ago

There are some great comments and I am not sure I can do justice to your writing, but I'll say what I can. To me it is complex, clever. I like the mixing of imagery such as guns and teddybears. The description of the house in chapter one is disturbing. I thought the pitch was excellent but not as as excellent as the writing. backed because its so good.
Christina
From Under the Bed

maitreyi wrote 870 days ago

what a great quote to open with.

now i come to your writing and i'm really impressed. the combination of internal monologue, internal flashback and exposition is fantastically well done. i can see why this is shooting up the charts and well deserved. shelved of course.

sorry i cannot think of anything helpful to say except maybe (and this is pretty much universal on authonomy) your pitch isn't doing your book justice. you might want to soup it up a little.
xx
m
THE ETON MOTHERS' HANDBOOK

Beval wrote 873 days ago

I'm going to echo some of the other comments, gripping, tense, edgy and exciting.
Its also very moving in places, I found the part about her sister's little family was so sad, you handled it beautifully, bring out the heart ache without falling into sentiment, it was really, really well done.

Ben Brown wrote 874 days ago

i'll keep this short, your work is brilliant, i love all things sci fi and yours hits the mark! you write with amazing skill, shelved

Brian Bandell wrote 874 days ago

You have got the thriller writing style down for sure. This starts off with a bang. The characters are great. I love the cliff hanger endings for Chapters 1 and 2. This is exciting and fun.

The challenge is in pitching this to agents because the post-apocalyptic survival story has been done many times, such as The Road, Dies the Fires, the TV show Jericho, etc. This is well done, but how will you pitch it as unique? The characters are a good start. It's an odd pairing that can really sell this.

Great job. You have my support.

Brian

A.R.Latif wrote 879 days ago

You've got a distinctive voice and the dialogue, although sparse, is excellent.
I'll back it soon.

AR Latif

CitiesoftheMind wrote 882 days ago

Well, after reading what you've posted so far, I'm impressed. Can't wait to see what comes next.

gillyflower wrote 883 days ago

A brilliantly written book with a gripping plot and amazing depth. Libby is a smart, feisty woman with a conscience which forces her to continually question her life, her use of a gun, her excuse of 'self defence.' Connor is a man forced to think in a way he has previously refused to do. Left alone to look after his twelve year old niece, he feels the embarrassment of searching out the things she needs as her body grows into puberty, but he does it anyway, looking in the empty house where his brother's secretary used to live, and making unfamiliar decisions about what to get for Ashley. Meanwhile, Libby hears a voice which warns her not to show herself when the boy falls from the apple tree, and she is right. The shocking end of the first chapter, taking us unawares, is a real hook, and is matched by the scream which startles Connor at the end of Chapter Two. Your apocalyptic setting is vividly painted, the wrecked house of Libby's sister and her family matching the destruction all around, and in the shop Connor's brother was so proud of. Your style is slick and expert, and you bring your characters and settings to life so well. 'Intoxicating fragrances of lilacs and hyacinths put forth a valiant effort but couldn't mask the reek of decay,' you tell us, and we are right there with Libby. An excellent book, whose depth I've hardly mentioned as yet, but which makes it all the more original and worth publishing. Backed.
Gerry McCullough,
Belfast Girls.

Telegraph wrote 883 days ago


I felt complled by your words and charcters. The tense pace set the reader on edge. Liberty is a forceful work that speaks with a firm voice. C W

amiblackwelder wrote 891 days ago

love ur writing. U use dialogue very well interwoven with descriptions that balance the story. Ur storyline is very accessible, not too haughty or fantastical. The flow is natural and keeps the pace. Glad to watch it and back it.

Francesco wrote 896 days ago

Excellent story excellently written...excellent!
Backed.

Jupiter Echoes wrote 900 days ago

Nice premise! I'm into the book and reading along, within, because of the tight prose, descriptions and believable characterisatioin. There is a lot going for your book and i can see it progressing steadily to the Ed's Desk.

Good luck with it.

BACKED

AlanMarling wrote 901 days ago

Dear Amanda Washington,

Thank you for sharing your story with us. Your pitch ensnared me; you’ve done great work with it, building tension upon tension but still giving your protagonists a glimmer of hope. After a nod of approval at your opening lines, I skipped to chapter ten. You story offers the same small joys as found in the Road. Discoveries of usable, clean clothing (a sports bra) causes elation in your characters that the readers experience with them. These simple pleasures also help us put our life in perspective and appreciate what we do have. Along these lines, I love the line where your character exclaims she’d be happy to live in a bathroom. A little later on, you may have hit it a little too “on the nose” when you have the character think of the things “I’d once taken for granted.” That line drew me out of the experience; instead, you might have her simply reminisce about those lovely things without using those specific words.

In my fallible opinion, you could make your short pitch even more exciting by replacing the word “trio.” I believe you’re referring to the members of the alliance, but I can’t be sure because the numbers are never mentioned. The uncertainty leaves a “What?” in my head instead of the “Wow!” your pitch deserves. You may wish to change the word to “each member’s.”

These small matters aside, I enjoyed your story. Characters of conflicting personality forced to work together or perish? Bravo! Backed.

Best wishes,
Alan Marling
Ghost Warrior, the Stealing

bookjunky wrote 903 days ago

Amanda,

After reading your pitch I found it impossiblenot to add you to my watch list. Then, after reading the first two chapters I had to move RESCUING LIBERTY to my bookshelf. Congrats a rock-solid idea and a captivating read.
If you get a chance would you mind giving my book, THE WILD, WILD QUEST a looking over? I would appreciatre any comments you may have to offer.

All the best,
J. A. Johnson
THE WILD, WILD QUEST
http://www.authonomy.com/ViewBook.aspx?bookid=13246

Leigh Fallon wrote 904 days ago

I read the first three chapters and was completely captivated by the story I found myself in, destruction and devastation and the heartbraking sadness of the loss of her sister and her twin babies. Visually desturbing made more intense by her acceptance of the scene, she'd seen it all before and worse. I am intrigued to find out what had caused this, a hint or two might be nice... I'll be reading on.
The very best of luck with this.
Leigh Fallon
The Carrier of the Mark

R.C. Lewis wrote 907 days ago

I was drawn to this with the description in the pitch as a "post-apocalyptic Christian thriller" - I didn't expect to see the word "Christian" sandwiched in there, and with the rest of the pitch, it was a fascinating prospect.

Once I started reading, I wasn't disappointed. The first chapter makes the reader desperately curious, full of questions, but without being frustrating. The tantalizing tidbits left here and there as the story pieces together are just enough to keep you going. The line about all the *good* attorneys being in hell is great, and hints at the way Liberty will react to Connor later.

I was a little thrown off by the POV change between the first two chapters - I obviously don't pay enough attention to chapter headings. Not sure if there's a way to make it clearer without being obtrusive ... something to think about, but maybe it's not a problem for most readers.

Happy to back this one, and hoping to come back for more later. Good luck with this!

R.C. Lewis
(Fingerprints)

Michael Stone wrote 907 days ago

Tense and edgy. Liberty is the conscientious killer. The proverbial forced hand. Connor is the slick wordsmith, almost an agent provacateur in a lawyer's costume. Together they make a great team. Ashley is the purpose, the force behind them. I didn't read far enough in to ascertain the Christian element, but it looks to be about redemption and reclamation. In the wake of the dissolution of America and its creature comforts, security and pride, two citizens bond to achieve more than mere survival, but to reclaim their status as "People", as in "We The People, in order to form a more perfect union..."

I think it has great merit and addresses fundamental desires in us all, to rise above the challenges and be more than what our circumstances make of us.

Shelved, with civic pride.

hapless rider wrote 908 days ago

I love that she misses her 'little black number'! This is well written, effective and the world you have led me into quite terrorfying. Your three principle characters are interesting and evocative, victim and would be protectors. I like the battle Liberty is having with her own mental make up, her childhood and her loss. And I am very intrigued as to what 'the call' will prove to be, she is almost as frightening as the who predicament. Conner is also an interesting character and at Chapter 11 I am fascinated as to which way you will take him, will be become the good father and her lover or will he resort back to is own selfish ways? You have written this really well, your switch between poin of view is very good and I don't think interferes with the pace at all. The violence is delightfully casual - as it should be in a good thriller - Up load the rest! I want to find out what happens! The only errors I can see is a bit of grammar in the early chapter's dialogue. I am glad I got sent your way by your mates on the forum and wish you the best of luck with this.