Jack and Boots - When Magic Breaks Through

Hi Adrian,
A delightful story! I have only read the first few chapters but I can already see that it's just the sort of thing I like to curl up with on the sofa so have starred and backed it! Looking forward to reading the rest of it and your other two books. I think it's sad that really good books seem to be lost in obscurity simply because they have no publicity other than the weekly rated books list.
I also have three on autonomy and would be most grateful if you could take a peek at them and give me your opinion.
Good luck!

Dee x

How totally wonderful you are, Adrian!! :) Thank you so very much for backing my memoirs/testimony book. :) May God richly bless you. :) Love, Susie :) p.s. I have also gold ******-rated your book :) - could you please ****** mine, too. Every ****** -ing & backing more than 24 hours moves our books up authonomy's lists. :) I want to ask you if you could please keep my book on your bookshelf because, I'm #1 on the editor's desk & I don't want to lose traction & to remain in the top 5 to be chosen February 28. :) Please read my profile page: I had a mini-stroke Nov. 10 with slurred speech for an hour & numbness of tongue still & over 24 smaller ones where I couldn't speak since & I"d sure like to cross the finish line of the editor's desk after almost 1 year of trying on authonomy. :) Thank you from the bottom of my heart for helping me :) - I have lost 3 sisters to strokes & my last sister, Mary had 2 heart attacks this past year.

Jack and Boots - I hate to be the one to disagree with the other comments, but I wasn't captivated by this. I think your premise is good and with work it could work, but I found the first sentence awkward and badly formed. 'Jack spent all day worrying about what birthday present to ask for' would possibly be better. Speaking as a 'Mum' I'm not sure I would provide salmon and cucumber sandwiches for 'supper' during the week. And do you really mean 'supper' - to me that is something you have just before going to bed and children as young as Jack would probably have milk and biscuits. The morning of his birthday, Jack is creeping down the stairs, avoiding the squeaky one, and crosses to listen at the door, then you say his Mum hears the stair squeak - needs sorting. Finally choosing a pet is very subjective. Personally I would think a puppy is far more messy than a kitten. Puppies need a lot of work with house-training and need lots of attention, kittens almost automatically use a litter tray and are quite happy to be on their own. Writing for children is deceptively difficult. You have to make it readable but as children learn by what they read it also has to be correct (or at least that is how I feel). The sentence 'Jack's smile turned to surprise' does not make sense. Sort out these problems and you will have a good story. Good luck.
Kristen Stone
Kianda Mala - The Monkey Man

A marvelous children fiction. At the same time aged men can explore entertainment from it. Fiction is deriving from visualization. Your power of visualization is laudable, because your style is directly mean for children, but indirectly a pat for aged generations.

Joy J. Kaimaparamban
The Wildfire

Hi Adrian, What a delightful,imaginative enchanting story. I read 12 chapters,and could have read more had the time been allotted. I love boots, and the dialogue between Jack and his new best friend is believable, clever and at time quite humerous.

Jack is such a boy and I think boots will appeal to both boys and girls. The magic and the way you tie in factual history was an added bonus...Well done Backed without Hesitation and star rated Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart

Rated this one too, the family favourite. :)

Hi Adrian

This is a great book for kids. I liked the way you had Jack go through the various cats in the rescue centre and Boots has a terrific personality - reminds me of the Psammead in the Five Children and It. Backed.

Nicole
Chosen

My children would have loved this book and it would be perfect for schools where a little mischief in the plot keeps its audience concentrating. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

Enjoyed reading your story. Well done!

Suz

How fab a talking at that can take you to a magic tree. How wonderful being eight and having such a secret and one that nobody else can hear. This is a delightful story I can see the youngsters at sitting cross legged mesmerised by your tale and lost in their own imaginings. Nicely written, superb dialogue between Boots and Jack. Hope this does well for you.

Wilma1
Knowing Liam Riley – please take a moment to take a look.

How fab a talking at that can take you to a magic tree. How wonderful being eight and having such a secret and one that nobody else can hear. This is a delightful story I can see the youngsters at sitting cross legged mesmerised by your tale and lost in their own imaginings. Nicely written, superb dialogue between Boots and Jack. Hope this does well for you.

Wilma1
Knowing Liam Riley – please take a moment to take a look.

'If it doesn't move the story along lose it' ...it's hard to imagine anything less helpful than this kind of inane comment. Who decides after all what should and shouldn't be left in? Children love detail and will often ask for it where they feel its been left. From what I've read, this has the hallmarks of a good solid old-fashioned children's story...which is precisely what real literature is all about! Well done and good luck with it!
Stewart

Good pitch and good plot saw something similar in a movie a while ago but was a bit stupid, had to be with Myers as the cat. Good voices for the age but perhaps too much attention to detail, reached for a sandwich on a plate at the center of the table. Some advice given me if it doesn't move the story along lose it. Opening paragraph Mom asked him several times, asked him what... It hangs. That's the kind of thing that happens when you work off screen and don't print. For some reason when you print it jumps out. But very cute, loved old Boots telling about the plague, very clever.
The Tails of Willie Gusty

Very well written.
Backed with pleasure.
Spare a time in your busy schedule to look my book over, will appreciate any comments or backing.
Pamela
'The Outrage'

Adrian: do apologize for this spam comment but I did BACK your book. Though my book is currently on the Ed's Desk, I can still use your comments on my book before the end of this month. Thanks - cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

A charming children's story with fascinating characters. Wonderful imagery. Sparkling dialogue. Spot on storytelling. A pleasure to read. Backed.

A wonderful storyline. Very well written.
Backed with great pleasure.

Dawn
Sammy and the Wise Willow

You have written a very interesting and endearing storyline and created two great characters in Jack and Boots. The dialogue is well written and the pace of your story flows nicely. This and your descriptive writing ensures that both children and their parents will enjoy your work. Backed with pleasure.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

A fantastic story that I would have been happy to use in my classroom with the younger age groups and proud to have put on my children's book shelves. For the present I can only shelve you here, so I do.

BACKED

JACK & BOOTS
This is a charming children’s story. I believe all cats know more than they let on they do so I bought this premise with no trouble. You have good characters in both Jack and Boots. I think you’ll find a wide schoolage audience for this among kids who are tired of Harry Potter’s magic and want to read a book that seems as if it really could happen. I’m happy to add it to my shelf. If you have a moment, would you look at mine (Grain of Salt)? I’m in 3rd place but only holding on by my teeth. Burgio

ADRIAN A. MOORE: Jack and Boots - When Magic Breaks Through

Dear Adrian,
I thought this was a truly fascinating story - so alive and believable!; I can imagine Jack already so thrilled at getting his new cat, a pet his mother tried to convince him he could do without... and the first chapter started off rather lovely with a lot of humor and a nice dialogue that parents and children can relate to.

If you asked me how my son felt reading your book; I would say plenty; he was chuckling to himself; so there, you got a child wrapped up in your book totally engrossed on the screen. This is a light-hearted read and one in which I liked as well.

Shelved!

Romilla
Forgetting Sally

Dear Adrian

I have started to read your writing and must say that it is compelling. Already you have established your animated characters in my head, ( they are not leaving soon) and i feel strongly to back your book now. I do wish to be part of your climb to the top on this site. CONGRATS and I will comment more as I read more

BACKED BY ME FOR SURE.
Please take a moment to look, comment which is important to me, and back my book. if not that is OK also

The VERY best of luck to you

Denise
The Letter

a good and enjoyable story; good flow and narrative...on my watchlist...
read SEASONS.......

Dear Adrian, What a delightful book. :) Your pitch beckoned me, as did your crisp dialogue & sentences, to read & keep on reading. Hope you'll write a lot more books. :) I'm backing your book :) - hope you'll take a moment to back my 2 memoir books. :) Thanks. :) Love, Susie :)

Love this book - of course my love of cats doesn't hurt but really this is a great books for boys and girls! Such fun. Backed with pleasure.

Liz
The Cheech Room

Thank you for backing The Darkwood Tales, not only for the support but also for the fact that it brought me to look at your work. Absolute genius. The series of Jack and Boots is one that should be snatched up by a publishing house! I read your bio...don't give up. Your books have tremendous promise! I am backing and continuing to read on!
Carrie
The Darkwood Tales: Demouri's Defeat

Pleasure to read.

Philip John

I'm always looking out for things that my little boy might like to read when he grows up a bit, and this definitely fits the bill. It's exciting, imaginative and realistic. You have an excellent way of portraying quite a complex premise in simple terms and keeping a young audience (and an older one!) interested.

Backed with pleasure.
Abi xxx

This is such fun! Thoroughly enjoyed the half a dozen chapters I've read. Backed.

(I nearly bought a cat called Boots years ago, but someone else got there first!)

Rachel

Lovely story... I wish you the very best of luck with it. kind regards pinkcoffee 'In The Moment'

This made me smile while reading. I love this story and Boots especially, a magical read.
Backed with a grin
K

Enchanting story, well worded and the language is perfect for young children who want to read by themselves. Boots character is well predicted. The ending of the first chapter hooks you to read on. Jack is your typical 8 year old boy who love a good adventure, trusting and very very sweet. Absolutely magical. Backed.
Rakhi (Sir William...)

Adrian
This is a captivating tale for youngsters.The level of the language used ,coupled with a lack of long-winded descriptions, makes it just right for your intended audience. I am backing it.

Just one thing I noticed in chapter 2: between the sentence beginning, "I don't know his name ...." and that beginning, "Don't listen to him ...." there seems to be missing a reference to the dish being thrown by the cat. Am I right?
Best wishes with this.
William Roberts

Well done, you have a six year old fan sitting next to me who reckons your story rocks(her words not mine although I did really enjoy your Jack & Boots stories).

Backed

Kev

Nice idea here. A promising children's story for sure. I particularly like your characterisation of the neurotic, controlling mother! The dialogue has merit but at points you could do with refining conversations as they can seem a tad formulaic. I guess you just really want to get on with telling the core story - nice and endearing fantasy writing. Stories like this always do you good! Well done, Adrian.

Alexander

Adrian
This is a good well written childrens tale. It makes a change from the usual current fayre of wizards and vampires, a good return to an old style read that parents as well as children will enjoy. I liked the line in your pitch 'at first jack thought his cat boots was just a talking cat'. Just - talk about understatement! Read to the end of chapter two, wish my kids were still young enough to enjoy this. Backed
Charlie

I love this; if I had small children, I would read this to them. Backed.

AJ (Haunting Memories)

"'Does he do any tricks?' asked Tommy....'I only got him this morning,' (Jack) said, not really answering the question.'" Well, now there's an understatement! Boots is just a 500 year old talking cat who takes Jack to a magical land inside a tree where there is a Princess Deer, pixies and biting flowers. Best birthday present ever, and a wonderfully charming story! Backed!

HJ
The Pearl Edda

Here for our read swap thingy :)
I was going to read this tomorrow but got sort of sucked in when I glanced at it, and carried on reading. I'm a sucker for a good children's story and I feel that this is good one, from the title onwards. I can see myself reading this aloud to a class and I can see it appealing to your target audience. I think the idea of a magical pet is a good one, wouldn't we all have liked one of those? (Still would actually!) Jack is a likeable and realistic character and you have created a good setting for him and the adventure to take off from. I'm happy to back this and am not one for nit-picking as I believe I'm not really qualified.
Bests,
AP
(The Awesome Adventures of Matty McDuff)

Well, I am sorry but I just had to back this book at the end of chapter 1. it is beautifully written and the end of the chapter came as a surprise even though I had read the pitch. I can see why your children couldn't settle to sleep after your story telling - far too much to think about and talk over. i did read on and was not disappointed; it is make believe but with a gentle charm that has the feel good factor that kids need (OK, I admit it - I need the feel good factor too). Backed with great pleasure - this is just what a parent would want to read to or with a child. John / Tacitus 'Where Truth Lies'

This is really charming. More so because you've written it after spending years making up stories for your own children. A lot of youngish kids fiction these days tend to centre around little horrors and the trouble they get in to, so its very pleasing to read a well crafted story in which the MC is basically a decent sort. I very much like the gentle humour in your portrayal of the parents. I can't think of single small person I know who wouldn't thoroughly enjoy this and I wish you much success with it.
Popping it on my shelf.

Kindest Regards,

Alethea (The Hather House)

This is the kind of book I would want my daughter to read! It says that it's okay to believe in magic, about belief in yourself and others is what makes the world go 'round. Backed with pleasure!

Brittany
My Last Notes

I read the first three chapters and found the whole premise of a talking cat very clever, and the character of Boots well drawn. For cats are proud, independent creatures, who probably would talk as Boots does given the chance! I own an elderly and stone deaf cat who does in fact need her claws trimmed as she only goes out now on a "needs must" basis, and her tree climbing - or even scratching - days are long behind her. : - )

I liked the notion of a dog as "a messenger of doom", also the way each chapter ended on a cliffhanger, such that you would want to read on to learn what mischief Boots has in store...

Backed.

Vanessa
Banana In The Briefcase

Charming and delightful with great characters! Children will love these. Backed, with a capital BACK.

You had me at the pitch. Just reading this on the back of a book in a shop would make me buy it for a child that I knew (mine is sadly grown up). The stories themselves are --ha--magical-- well- characterized with a lot of heart and love. Backed.

I think these are really wonderful books for kids - and am truly surprised that they aren't doing much better here! I'm shelving and backing all of them, and I really wish you luck, and a load of success in attempting to get them published somewhere.

I think the stories are totally accessible to the target age, AND their parents. I think they are imaginative and (secretly!) educational. And, most importantly, I think that deep down inside each of them, beats a heart and a voice a such goodness, wonder, and magic, that it shines through every word, paragraph, page, and adventure. You have truly captured something unique and wonderful in these tales. Backed with pleasure!

Hello Adrian,
I have had your book on my shelf for sometime. I finally had time to read it and I am glad to have back it for so long.

Daniel “Storykeeper”

What a sweet little read! The pitch sounds great. This whole concept sounds very appealing. I think alot of the Harry Potter readers would love this, I'm sure it would reach a large group of people. I will comment more once I've read more.

Sweet story, great first chapter. It needs a few more surprises like that one and a bit of tightening in places but I can see this doing well. Good luck with it.
Helen (The Girl With No Shadow)

I like your story. I've read thru chapter 4 and I want to read more and, for that reason, I am backing your book. Nice work!

Loving regards! Callaghan