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rank 4582
word count 47728
date submitted 20.07.2009
date updated 20.02.2010
genres: Fiction, Thriller, Science Fiction
classification: moderate
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Sertain People Live Always

Roland Callan

The world-finder can never return, for this journey should not have been; and this chaos and hatred - can even he survive?

 

Sertain is well-used to the unknown, and to the beneficial effect his knowledge and Logic can bring to primitives and civilised alike. But he is here by accident, and if there is one planet in the known universe that would present even this seasoned world-civiliser with a challenge - this is it.

After all, what species would hate itself so much as to wreak genetic damage on its own kind? And who are the mystery world-savers that eventually emerge - are they really aligned to the Lords of the Inner Court? Are they even the same species?

Maybe Sertain is doomed to spend the rest of his long days here - what peoples could or would offer such an advanced being sanctuary?

Edited by Victor Callaghan M.A.
Reviewed by Harper Collins in October 1997:
'SERTAIN PEOPLE ALWAYS LIVE (sic) does read well and you have some intriguing technological ideas. However, we didn't feel the story was quite original and distinctive enough to find a place on our list. I've enclosed our current catalogue and some Voyager literature which should give you a broad idea of the kinds of science fiction we seek to publish. Perhaps it will inspire...?'

 
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Chapter 1

I have told this story - this incredible story - from the viewpoints of the two main characters, Sertain and Usguard 4. In doing so I have tried to present the events in chronological order, and have been very fortunate in being able to draw on eye-witness accounts, though in some cases second-hand.

 

This involved me in many travels around our world, for I believe we can now truly call it that, listening to the fabulous tales of many different peoples.

 

I am only able to tell of these legendary happenings because of the changes they brought to pass. What took place, and the fantastic being who was the essential catalyst, made this possible.

 

I have also tried to explain the many terms, units of measurement and other abbreviations and descriptions alien to us, for the easy understanding of the reader.

 

I ask my audience to indulge me if I appear at times to be using a writers licence and embellishing the facts with my own suppositions. I assure you that my intuition is as good as that of my forefathers and allows me a good measure of insight into what really happened in those far-off times!

 

Usguard 5

AS115

-0-

Sertain was a tiny dot in the corner of some complete blackness somewhere, somewhere inside his head, and he felt rushing in towards him a bright, hard, sharp dart of light. It got brighter, faster, hitting him and exploding, taking over the black and drowning him with light, blinding and deafening him. Then ELE’s voice broke through:

 

Wake up. Captain. Wake up.

 

He blinked in the quiet, still cabin, his return to reality painfully sudden, like being dipped in a cryogen. Simultaneously the PCM (physiomental condition monitor) passed a cocktail of hormones into his system, bringing him up to full survival readiness.

 

He felt almost as if he had a headache. 

 

I’d prefer not to be at full alert in this condition, he thought. 

 

He looked at ELE intently. Neither disintegration nor destruction were imminent, and after a pause he casually cleared her screen.

 

ELE could not - or would not - say where they were. Sertain was unable to find anything comprehensible on the screens.

 

Where am I, he thought, keeping his thoughts to himself.Surely we cannot be beyond navigable space?

 

He decided to go through all the sensory systems with ELE. Although it was inconceivable that she was damaged, ELE seemed strange somehow, not her usual self.

 

As he called up each function in turn, Sertain found out why. It was as if she had been blinded, all her sensors blunted. He had never known such disablement, so implausible that he began seriously to doubt her, guarding his every thought.

 

Then as the screen changed, he thought he had seen something.

 

What was that? he asked her.

 

ELE did not know. She re-ran the principal status systems, but to no avail. POSITION, VISUAL, ENERGY ENVIRONMENT - all produced blank screens, a dimly-flickering grey that was a frightening indication of ELE's impotence and his helplessness.

 

But then there it was again! - Zing 1’s orientation clearly showed gravitational influence. ELE told him this indicated a medium-sized star at about 0.05 liers. (1 lier = 5,865 billion miles).

 

Assuming her analysis was correct, it meant their blindness was total. Zing 1 was drifting towards an active star, so close to them, which they could not detect, let alone visualize. At least Sertain knew now that they were not hopelessly lost in utterly empty space, and there might be hope of salvation.

 

Despite himself, he dwelt on that, for it would be much more than being lost.  It would be the same as a cessation of existence - non-existence in pure space, a void so completely black and infinite, devoid of anything, physical or spiritual, as only the endless nothingness beyond the edges of the Universe could be.

  

Even with Zing 1's infinite drives at full thrust there would be no movement, no destination, no future, no hope. It would be suspension in oblivion.

 

Sertain firmly quashed those thoughts. If there really was a star, ELE could home in on it, following the gravitational pull.

 

Confirm it is possible to achieve stellar orbit, he ordered.

 

I confirm. ELE was reassuringly definite.

            

Wake me on obtaining near-space orbit.

Yes, Captain.

             

He shut all the screens down and returned to his bunk. His finger-tips touched the panels on the side of the bunk as he lay down and the PCM, reading his mental and physical state, prepared him for full subliminal mental restoration, flooding his system with soothing drugs and inducing unconsciousness.

 

He found himself back on patrol from the outpost beyond Gleamworld (Satellite 5), watching two massive Transworlds ferrying populations from a dying planet. Sertain kept turning the images of their collision over and over in his mind until they began to register. The sheer enormity of the catastrophe, involving the ultra-safe Transworlds - each the size of a small planet - many millions of lives, and the cataclysmic release of energy from the annihilation of the most powerful and advanced space-drives known was beyond belief.

 

Distant though they were from the supernova-scale holocaust, the blast ruptured Zing 1's hull membranes, knocking out ELE's sensors. What Sertain saw on the screens was really ELE’s panic; no simulation could convey the true image of such a shock-wave, carrying as it did imminent destruction.

 

Her bland, technical-style computations, appearing impassively on the screens like some design draft, showing the possible effect on herself, Zing 1 and the Captain, presented the most frightening information Sertain had ever seen. The images distorted as ELE attempted in vain to compute and re-compute what she was not able to envisage her own death - and as the blast hit them, Sertain blacked out.

 

The spaceship, tested beyond her energy-absorption capability, was hurled deep into unknown space.

 

Sertain woke slowly, the PCM at neutral, feeling very refreshed, but his mind full of those astonishing events. For a while he was overcome with disbelief and emotion at the magnitude of what had happened to him, despite his vast experience in space. How could he be the one? A chance in a billion, but he was lost.

 

As the memories were removed again from his conscious mind and the focus faded, he was left with an eerie feeling of isolation, orbiting an unknown star with Zing 1 shutdown and still, lost and alone perhaps forever.

 

Still lying on his bunk, he looked round the square, colourless cabin, the screens blank, his plain command-seat alone in the middle of the floor. He turned to look at the screen next to him, to go through the log, maybe in the hope of identifying a course back home, or maybe just to see his comrades.

 

He got up and walked to the command-seat, the screen by the bunk dying and the main screen coming to life so that Thortain's face filled the cabin as the last transmission from his commander came up from the log. He had not seen Thortain look like this before, his thoughts a turmoil of anxiety.

 

Thortain had brushed aside Sertain's immediate reaction that there could not be a problem with the course of both Transworlds:

 

Read the simulations! We are getting no response from either spaceship. There is nothing we can do - you must evacuate!

 

As Sertain looked at Thortain’s face in the past, running and re-running the log, his thoughts drifted, becoming abstract as he wished what might have been. He abruptly stopped the log and shook himself back to the present.

 

He had to force himself to concentrate on his situation and decide on a plan of action.

 

Damage assessment, he ordered.

 

According to the data scrolling round the screen, the inner hull membranes were mostly dead, and Zing 1 was blind to nearly all external energy sources. The outer hull, pervious to energy, would surely be sound, designed as it was to withstand the greatest forces calculable. Usually the inner membranes absorbed only the energy the ship wanted and expelled the excess, but that had not happened this time.

 

The question was, had ELE suffered a direct energy hit, unheard of though this was? Had she been traumatised, causing her strange behaviour?

 

The re-generate function - auto-repair of the ship's active 'flesh' - was virtually inoperative. Less than 0.1% of the restoration of the inner hull membranes was complete, according to the data on the screen.

   

Report on energy reserves.

             

Zing 1's negma-reactor drive was infinite where dark matter existed, but ancillary energy was not, and, if ELE was right, had been massively depleted. Re-generation could not realistically take place without further energy supplies.

 

ELE interrupted the data with an estimated simulation of their star, calculated from the effect of its gravity on Zing 1. Sertain studied it and was suddenly elated:

       

Confirm there are planets in the picture.

The star is approximately 50% spent. The relative position of two planets suggests they are capable of life support, that nearest the star the likelier, ELE reported.

 

Sertain's elation subsided as he considered what little advantage his discovery might be to him. IF he decided to chance a landing in the hope that ELE's preferred planet was life-supporting, would they survive it? He had no means of navigation, or of controlling the spaceship. 

 

ELE could not tell him what their velocity would be, or their distance from the surface, how much reverse thrust should be applied, and when.

 

With a cold, hollow feeling of fear in his guts, it dawned on him that they could only present themselves to the planet's gravity and allow themselves to fall helplessly to the surface. Even Zing 1 might not be able to withstand another shock such as that.

 

A life-supporting planet - maybe with intelligent life - in all this empty space! How in all the universe could he reach it?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Cellardoor wrote 1020 days ago

Roland

This is the best Science Fiction I have yet read on the site. It is deeply rooted in traditional story-telling, is brimming with tension and mystery, has the page-turner effect and a bloody great plot!

I'm really enjoying the read so far, very compelling and engaging. You have my backing, for sure!

Melanie.

JANVIER wrote 1030 days ago

Hello Roland,

I have to admit this is not a genre I have invest much time in, but it is easy to see that your imagination has been put to o great use here . You crafted a compelling story from its threads. Great opening chapter had the effect of setting the pace for the subsequent chapters. You came up with a brilliant plot , a mind-blowing setting and fascinating characters. This is a memorable story.Rightly shelved.

All the best.

Janvier (Flash of the Sun)

Cherenkov wrote 1031 days ago

Roland,

Wow. I really like this traditional Sci-fi style. One thing I really like about it is how we are not given more information than needed thus creating an automatic sense of tension. We want to know what is going on!

Good work.

Shelved.

Richard Davies

PATRICK BARRETT wrote 1029 days ago

Sci-Fi is not my genre until I find something really good and you certainly kept me reading. You do not over-describe and this allows my own imagination to work, lots of potential here. On my shelf. Patrick Barrett (Shakespeares Cuthbert)

Mario Brian O'Clery wrote 1030 days ago

Hi Roland, I took a look at your book based entirely on the title which was interesting. When I realised the genre, not one I usually go for, I was about to go elsewhere but thought, why not give it a go. I'll be honest, I flicked down through skimming Chapter 1 and was more convinced that it wasn't for me but reading it properly was a pleasant surprise. I must admit I re-read a couple of bits to try to understand ele and pcm but that might be more to do with me rather than your writing. Whatever genre, it reads well, the almost 'point form' style suits the subject matter and there is loads of mystery and danger packed in there. Sorry I only managed 1 chapter but I'm very new ti this and trying to read a little of as many as I can, regards, Mario - Persuaders.

A. Zoomer wrote 510 days ago

SERTAIN PEOPLE

Dear Roland Callan,

I love the tone of your introductory letter. Further along I was imagining how it might be if your people had screens for faces.
Obviously I need a coffee badly.

Your writing reads like the wind. It is truly professional.
I have given the book six stars- must publish.
A zoomer

Barry Wenlock wrote 602 days ago

Hi Roland, I'll be honest and say I don't usually enjoy Sci-fi, but I do think you write well for the gnre and I guess, thats's what counts.
Just a couple of notes:
some complete blackness somewhere, somewhere (repetition)
He felt almost as if he had a headache ( either he did or he didn't have a headache)
Excellent hook at the end of the intro chapter.

Good work, backed with pleasure,
Barry
LITTLE KRISNA AND THE BIHAR BOYS

Bocri wrote 611 days ago

15 September 2010

The literary device of stepping outside the framework of the book and addressing the reader worked well for Jane Austen and it works admirably here. The use of highly imaginative but seemingly 'genuine' technical jargon adds to the proficiently futuristic ambience of the work. The interaction of the various characters, human and automatons and the blend of backgrounds, alien planets, interiors of spacecraft, is a strong meld of the whole forming an engrossing read. A previous assault on H&C's bastions has honed this version to the right degree.BACKED. Robert Davidson. The Tuzla Run

Pia wrote 644 days ago

Roland -

Certain People Live Always - The alien voice in chapter one evokes a fascinating thought process. I love SciFi and the pitch promises a story intriguing enough for me to want to read on.

Backed, Pia (Course of Mirrors)

Kevin Alex Baker wrote 646 days ago

Roland,

This is one of those rare pieces that is dense and detailed and still manages to flow well. It's a tough line to walk, but you pulled it off! I found myself reading far further into Sertain People Live Always than I expected to, which is one of the most tangible compliments I can give on Authonomy.

Nice work! Backed! Looking forward to your thoughts on Head Games!

Kevin Alex Baker
Head Games

name falied moderation wrote 651 days ago

Dear Roland
how did I miss this book the first time around i dont know, but not this time. your book cover grabbed em and would not let go till i had read your pitch and started the book. Very well crafted and totally original. I will carry on reading and comment further on as I would like to get this book of yours backed to assist it on the climb to the top.
Backed for sure my me. ..I would really appreciate it if your would look at my book, COMMENT , and back it. If not that is OK also
The VERY best of luck with your book

Denise
The Letter

yasmin esack wrote 651 days ago

great book!

backed a while ago

THE DATE

Elizabeth Wolfe wrote 653 days ago

Dear Roland,
I really enjoy your opening. Very Star Trek. I can't imagine why HC couldn't see it! Keep writing.
BACKED
Elizabeth Wolfe (MEMORIES OF GLORY)

klouholmes wrote 656 days ago

Hi Roland, Written convincingly while the terms of the lost spaceship and Zing1’s shutdown come across clearly. The sensations that Sertain has, his horrible realization of the oblivion state, and his shock are conveyed with impact. It’s very exciting, his hope of a planet that would sustain his life. The synopsis sounds very involving too! Shelved – Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

Craig Ellis wrote 661 days ago

I agree with Roland's assessment. This is one of the best books of its genre on this site. You've passed information on at a regulated pace, always drawing the reader forward, and reviewed the cataclysm that led to your MC's predicament. Good science and pseudo-science are a must in sci-fi, and you've kept me reading by doing it very well! Backed with pleasure.

Craig Ellis
The Sun and the Saber

drachat wrote 662 days ago

Hi Roland,

I backed your book on the quality of writing; Sci-Fi is not my thing but you really put us in the action starting with Sertain and his angst over what was happening to ELLE.

Well-done and happily backed
Denise

Would you mind having a peek at my book "Road to Redemption: From Cop's Daughter to Convicted Felon?"

DP Walker wrote 662 days ago

Hi Roland
Some really clever stuff here - thought provoking and intriguing. Great visual writing with a wonderfully original plot. Backed 100%
DP Walker
Five Dares

Wilma1 wrote 672 days ago

I dont read much Sci Fi Dr Who is about my level but this made me sit up and take note iits well written and scarily believable. Backed

Wilma1
Knowing Liam Riley

Silent Storm wrote 703 days ago

Roland Callan:

You have set up a scenario of unimaginable proportions. Being in outer space on a capsule and having your navigation system compromised, not to mention, the actual space craft malfunctioned--what a thriller. We are, by the end of the chapter 1, wondering just what in the world the MC is going to do to get himself out of this predicament. Good job. Backed.

Ida L. (Silent Storm)

Andrew Burans wrote 714 days ago

Your book is well paced and your use of short paragraphs keeps the pace of the story flowing nicely. Your use of imagery is excellent and your descriptive writing style coupled with your strong command of the English language makes your finely crafted science fiction fantasy a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

Sly80 wrote 717 days ago

Interesting opening notes by the 'writer'. I'd suggest two changes here to make it clearer who is speaking. Change 'two main character' into something like 'two significant individuals', i.e. real people rather than fictional ones. Then to add to this, instead of 'writer's licence' make it 'historian's instinct' or something similar so that it's clear this is an introduction to a work of history not fiction.

On to the story of Sertain, adrift with his damaged AI, ELE, and uncertain of the effect of landing on a nearby planet. The descent is dramatic but, luckily, not deadly. Sertain walks out into snowfall to discover a corpse. We turn around to see the local inhabitants spot the Starcraft. Then the inevitable confrontation. It's entertaining trying to work out who it is that looks odd, Sertain or the Osmiths. Usguard 4 sounds level-headed, unlike his boss, a cold-blooded tyrant. Back to working out what they all look like, and it appears Sertain may be the normal looking being.

This is well written with nice descriptions, 'delicate sorbet of icy flakes', and good dialogue. The characters are as important as the technology, and both are convincing, then there is the strong plot which keeps the reader guessing, and often guessing incorrectly, cleverly wrong-footing and hooking afresh. Overall, there's the fear that authority is going to screw up big time, and that brings both the Osmiths and Sertain together as the threatened good guys. Well done, Roland ... backed.

Possible nits: 'keeping his thoughts to himself' not needed. 'Shaped like an angular flattened cylinder', omit 'Shaped like'? Only use one ? or ! and only 3 dots in an ellipse.

Owen Quinn wrote 723 days ago

good retro cover, eye catching and the pitch is good, the opening is very good, alive with solid description. The characters are well drawn and the situation fascinating. You have obviously put a lot of thought into this, both in character insights and the path the story is going. Wonderful.

S Richard Betterton wrote 730 days ago

You've created a great world, very visual. I could easily see myself travelling in Zing 1. Great stuff. Hopefully HC would feel differently about it the market for it now.

Francesco wrote 734 days ago

Crackingly believable Sci-Fi...for people like me!
Backed with pleasure! Good Luck!!
A look at Sicilian Shadows would be greatly appreciated.
Frank.
If you back my work, you may also want to approach BJD (a big supporter of Sicilian Shadows) for a further possible backing of your book
Could you also have a read (if you haven't done so) of 'Moonbeam Highway' by Tim Chambers, a wonderful book that at present sits on the Ed's desk.

Raven Scott wrote 739 days ago

SERTAIN PEOPLE LIVE ALWAYS; I like the Title very much. Although not a great sci-fi fan, I believe a good story is a good story and all I seek is for it to be told in a readable way. You do this and more.
I like the way you start the book with the stated fact that you are writing form different standpoints and have artistic liscence because of your studies of the lives and the history you are telling.
I salute your style. Backed and I truly wish you well.

Rev Raven Scott (Love is a colour too)

Mooderino wrote 741 days ago

I get that at the beginning of ch.1 the ship is in some sort of navigational difficulty, but I didn't really understand what the issue with the star was.

I also wasn't sure if he was witnessing events or remembering them. I'm guessing he's recalling how he ended up out here alone, and also dealing with some problem in the present, but I felt a bit lost at times. it did slowly start tomake sense.

I didn't have a very clear idea where he is or what kind of enviroment (size, power, capability) he is inhabiting. Part of that may be intentional, to slowly reveal these things, but i found myseklf wanting to know detals about the ship.

The second chapter seemed more straightforward. I think the writing is good, flows well although the pace is a little slow. It all felt quitre calm even though he is crash landing. Not showing the crash took a lot of the tension out of it, imo.

i take it the last line of ch.2 is meant to demonstrate how hard it would be for ELE to contact help out there, when she isn't able to contact him when he's standing outside.

I think you obviously have it all carefully planned out and things will become clearer as the story continues. Certainly it is intriguing stuff, well written and it held my interest. Backed.

Kidd1 wrote 741 days ago

This is sci-fi at its best and should have been published by HC. How did they miss this well written thrilling story? I can't fault it a bit, and heartily back it in the hopes it will get a second read. Backed.

I hope you will give mine a read and back it if you like it.
Best,
Robert
Golden Conspiracy

RichardBard wrote 749 days ago

This is an excellent sci-fi piece that is true to the genre' and keeps the reader firmly in its grip. Well crafted and fast paced. This novel is a definite winner. Backed.

Richard Bard
BRAINRUSH (2010 ABNA Semi-Finalist)

A. Zoomer wrote 751 days ago

I love the name Sertain and the title. Have you changes the book as a result of the feedback. It probably reads different in 2010. Maybe even fresher. I am glad you are still attached to the book, it's good. I don't know this genre but it seems tightly written to me. I can't comment on its originality.
Backed.
A zoomer
Going Out In Style

A Knight wrote 756 days ago

Roland,

Decent traditional sci-fi is something I adore, and this, with your unique imagination and flair for story-telling, is among the best I have read for a while, both online and in print.

Fantastic work, and backed with pleasure.
Abi xxx

zan wrote 757 days ago

Sertain People Live Always
Roland Callan

I don't normally read much sci-fi but I am a sucker for space stories. Imaginative, exciting plot, good fluent writing and Sertain's characterisation is expertly done.
Best,
Zan

cat5149 wrote 758 days ago

Hi Roland,

I don't read much sci-fi, but this is well written and imaginative. Backed.

Carol

carlashmore wrote 767 days ago

I am not traditionaly a lover of ci-Fi books, but you captured me in the opening chapter. I did think your pitch was good, just not sure if it was for me. I was wrong. I enjoyed being a part of your hugely creative world for the first six chapters I read. And I don't usuually read that much. This is a highly imaginative, accessible yet utterly believable world with some excellent archetypal myths employed. I could imagine this would make an amazing film
Backed with surprise and pleasure
Carl
The Time Hunters

Burgio wrote 772 days ago

I see from your pitch that HarperCollins wasn't crazy about this. Okay. Different tastes for different people. I liked it. I think the idea of how the earth would look to an alien is unique (why do we poison our atmosphere). I'm adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

gillyflower wrote 774 days ago

This is a very exciting book for the many who love its genre, Science Fiction. You begin with a terrifying scenario, as Sertain realises he is lost in outer space. Then comes the choice, to try to descend to the star ELE thinks the most suitable, or not; knowing that there's no safe way to land, and that he can only steer into the star's gravitational pull, and allow it to draw the spaceship down to land, at considerable risk. The planet, when in fact they land safely, is covered in snow and ice. One of the first things Sertain sees is, horrifyingly, the body of a superior life form which seems to have been simply disgarded rather than buried; something which he takes as a sign of an uncivilised people. You imagination flows freely, and draws us in to a new world. You pile up detail upon convincing detail, and in particular technical detail, much loved by fans of this genre; and you do it in a convincing way which brings your settings alive. Your writing is fluent and smooth, very professional. Backed.
Gerry McCullough,
Belfast Girls.

Sheila Belshaw wrote 774 days ago

SERTAIN PEOPLE LIVE ALWAYS:

Roland,

If I'd had time to read more of this I think you might have converted me from a non-sci-fi reader to an avid sci-fi reader. You are a born story-teller and have some thought-provoking theories which you've transposed into a very plausible and readable novel.

The prose is immediate and sparse, with no superfluous words, and the characters come alive with excellent dialogue and description.

Backed, with pleasure,
Sheila Mary Taylor (Pinpoint)

Jim Darcy wrote 777 days ago

I've just read some of Ian Smethurst's EDG chronicles and now here's a second great Sci-fi book to follow! Sertian quickly becomes established as a MC to root for and the environment you create convinces. Jim Darcy The Firelord's Crown

lionel25 wrote 778 days ago

Roland, I enjoyed your first two chapters. A smooth read graced with a creative imagination. Nothing to nitpick in these two sections.

Happy to back your work.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

Famlavan wrote 783 days ago

Sertian People Live Away

Mmm this is more then a bit different – This is very, very good.
I randomly picked chapters and this is consistently very good. I assume others have told you how good this is, so I will just add – You have one hell of an imagination! – Good luck.

udasmaan wrote 792 days ago

Ronald, this is my genre and back your book with pleasure. but I was a bit confused in your story, i dont know if you blame my english for that or your wrting, bear in mind that i am not english, i am an afghan with a little bit of english. i mean what could you do for me to get me into your fantastic story. i was struggling to follow the main character. I could hardly understand your story, i am very sorry to be so negitive, but that is what i think, and i am sure it is my english as well, because no one else has said such a thing before, or they may have, but here i say what i think. good luck

shah

Bamboo Promise wrote 809 days ago

This is a good Science fiction. I am thrilled to read more and more. I am happy to back your back.

AlanMarling wrote 827 days ago

Dear John Wickey,

Thank you for sharing your story with us. I skipped to chapter seven to cover less-traveled ground and was rewarded by aliens that had evolved without legs. Indeed, Sertain’s legs would be a fascinating study to them. Good of him to eat out of politeness, though now I wonder where his energy comes from. He analyzes their biology and filthy habitat, and you go on to describe another alien which isn’t the typical bipedal green man. I appreciate the variety of evolution, which I would expect on different planets.

Bravo! Backed.

Best wishes,
Alan Marling

AnnabelleP wrote 829 days ago

Hi, here for our swap read thingy :)
I enjoyed reading this - I'm by no means an expert on this genre, although I've read quite a few here on Authonomy. To me, this is well written, it feels confident. You clearly have a great imaginiation - it reminds me slightly of a film I've see, the name eludes me at the moment, but I'll let you know when I remember bc that's going to bug me now! You certainly have a good premise and the story is good right from the start. I don't nit-pick, so I'll just say that this is on my shelf and I wish you luck with it.
Bests,
AP
(The Awesome Adventures of Matty McDuff)

Suzannah Burke wrote 833 days ago

Hi Roland, i have stopped by to take a read and comment as promised to any writer backing Mirror in The Sky by Nick Poole during this month.

Science fiction is not a genre inside my true comfort zone, although I have read a fair few. Frank Herbert, isaac Asimov, and sveral of what I deem SF Classics....I ventured in as I alwayd do with an open mind...I am utterly delighted that i did so. This is your own unique style, yet it has the feel of the masters of the genre. I enjoyed the Logic of Sertain...there is an edgy feel to your writing, intriguing and hovering on the peripherals of more than science fiction it edges well over and into to chasm of thriller.

I wish you the very best on your journey to the ED...I have placed this on my WL and will read further as time permits.

Suzannah Burke

JupiterGirl wrote 837 days ago

Hi Roland, Masterful storytelling comparable to Isaac Asimov's, I, Robot. Compelling! Shelved. JupiterGirl (Twins of the Astral Plane)

John Harold McCoy wrote 838 days ago

Hi, Roland. Wow, got some stuff happening in this one. Good opening, excellent narrative. Nice pitch. Good approach to this. Writing is competent and easily read. Story development is good as far as I read (3 chapters). I think this is a very good effort. Should do well. I'm partial to this genre anyway. I think it may be a hair short for a novel. Not sure, though. Well worth backing. On my shelf and the best of luck with it, Roland

John Harold McCoy - Bramwell Valley

MickR wrote 840 days ago

Roland,
I like your cover. Interesting premise, although for me you long pitch didn't do the story or the writing justice.
This is a well done pice.
Backed.
MickR - The Nightcrawler

KW wrote 843 days ago

"I assure you that my intuition is as good as that of my forefathers and allows me a good measure of insight into what really happened in those far-off times!" The classic disclaimer before an unlikely adventure. It has the feel you get before reading Don Quixote or The Adventures of Marco Polo. "He had no means of navigation, or of controlling the spaceship." That does not sound encouraging, but I have a feeling Sertain will reach it. And he does, but the invisibility shield was down. Damn, I hate when that happens. The adventure deepens with the Osmiths. Next comes Orexec 3, Esguard 9 and Arexec 7. WIth them, the plot thickens. I'll be back to read more. Shelved for now.

Helena wrote 843 days ago

Hi Roland I enjoyed this read so far, its an interesting premise. I like the fact that the narrator is an invisible character so to speak and his/her opening few paragraphs places a sense of realism on this read. Sertain is good and the fact that ELE has a mind of her own is really strong, makes her a character in her own right. This is nicely written and on my shelf. Helena (A Load of Rubbish)

SRFire wrote 845 days ago

A great sci-fi. Backed with pleasure, Sana

John Booth wrote 847 days ago

Hi Roland

This is excellent SF which I enjoyed a great deal - Shelved

I liked so much of this, the analytical nature of Sertain, the description of things we take for granted in unusual terms, the narrative thrust leaving us want to read more.

The things I would change if I was writing this are:
Get rid of the introduction and just get into the story.
Don't bother explaining things like PCM - its obvious from context and don't bother telling us the distance conversions. They mean little anyway. That's it, everything else is excellent.

Good luck with this

John Booth (Shaddowdon)

KevRogers wrote 849 days ago

You've got a great mind that is clearly bubbling with ideas - brill story, well written.

Backed

Kev

K.Z. Freeman wrote 849 days ago

right on Roland bro :)

this is the type of book I would read, politics, thrills, space, great dialogue and tension. backed.

Draco wrote 851 days ago

I like the initial 'castaway in space' scenario; you have captured the feeling of isolation and near panic very well. Your pitch is intriguing and hints at the major events to come. Very promising, shelved and I'll read more.

Draco/ veil

Jonathon_LaMella wrote 851 days ago

Hi Roland,
I read the first chapter.
I like your writing style, ths has a great plot, and an upbeat character. This a good scifi story with a thriller subplot that will keep readers turning the page.
Backed.
Jonathon

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