A Wolf's Duty

I absolutely love this book, and I remember reading all three in the series when they were posted on fictionpress. It has to be one of the most interesting werewolf novels I have read. You develop the characters personalities very well and allow readers to get involved with their emotions. I loved this book as well as a Wolf's Oath.

If you could possibly give me feedback on my book, Ten Drops of Blood, I would be very greatful. Thanks

Shades of Grey

I was hooked by this. Not the usual werewolf story and wow, was there ever a difference! It was very well executed and the plot worked well. I got a sense of extreme empathy for the Main Character, especially with the abuse. I rated this very highly and will put it on my watchlist for including on my shelf at the next available opportunity, which will probably be soon.

I'd love for you to have a look at my book, Enchanted Trap, if you get a moment. I adore feedback, and of course, backing and rating if you feel it is justified. Thanks.

It is possible for her to seek human companionship [is] she should wish it.

should be [if] not is

she may one day find a man that she falls in love with, she could build a family [is] she wanted to.

again should be [if]

My next duty as [Prince] will be to produce an heir and I think we should get some [practise].

should read:

My next duty as [King] will be to produce an heir[,] and I think we should get some [practice].

On the word practice.. i'm not sure if its how you spell it where you come from.. i know that some countries spell some words differently like realize in some places is realise... If this is the case then i guess disregard the spelling change.

I really enjoyed your story, i found it to be fastinating, interesting and intriguing. I loved the way the story flowed and enjoyed how unlike most books he was unable to help her out of situations..

I think that it showed that woman do not always need men to rely on because they can't always be there when needed.. some stories are a bit cliche in that thought.. it was refreshing to see that your story had him doubting his abilities to save her and his willingness to set her free because of it..

good luck on your stories and may your dreams of getting this published come true.. it deserves it.

I loved [as his fragile control on his anger began to slip]
Thanx so much for not dragging out the first chapter! You get right to the point,,the good stuff! I love that.
can't wait for chapter 2

Hi, I'm new here...just started to read your book, and so far I'm loving it!! realy awesome, hope you'll check out mine! Everlasting: Love has no limits, (heavy focus on romance!!)

Backing your work and recommending to others. Hope you have a chance to look at another paranormal thriller, Dark Side by CC Brown. They're friends of mine. Good luck to you!
Sue50

It's a great story and you're a great author. Thank you for sharing your work with us.

Hi, I read your stories at fictionpress and I loved them =D I hope to be able to keep reading from now on =D Congratulations; you're an amazing writer and you have a great gift! =D

i love the entire wolf series, read all of it it's great.

Rainbowchild1 she is not a bitch if you read!!! Its the same story and she stated tons of times on fiction press that she had it on this site as well. sorry but calling people a bit** when they specifiaclly state this sh** is wrong.

thieving b***t, you got this of fictionpress.com

and you had to do two stories from the same author!

you have to steal other peoples work! you must be so pathic!, you don't have an imagination! what a loser!

Just got done with the first chapter and I'm absolutely hooked. One thing though, watch out for run on sentences. There were a couple. Okay, now back to reading...

I LOVE THIS!! it's 2 AM now...I couldn't stop reading! There HAS to be more...right? I mean, what happened with Sebastian??? Is he ok? And what about with Amanda and Alex and Tobias and...ok, I could keep going on and on and on...lol.
THIS BOOK IS SO ADDICTING!!! BACKED! :D
~Lacy

This is a good book. I am not a writer myself, but I love the way this book is written. It is perfect for the reader. It is very interesting and exciting.

Hi Jennifer, I'm not a critic, just a mere scriptwriter who enjoys a good, structured, interesting journey. Happily backed.

blessings,
jim

I seem to be into werewolves right now. I really like this story. My only suggestion would be to tighten up the dialogue. Backed with pleasure. Deb - Forever Love

This is a great read- an addicting story! Fast paced which keeps the reader interested but at one time during the book Alex like gets attacked by several different people in a short period of time- it was almost a little too much. Also several characters keep asking what a "mate" is and later what a "hunter" is. These are common words- need to find another way of a character expressing confusion about how this applies to them other than asking for a definition of a commonly known work- it makes the character appear unintelligent. There are some minor typos, but these were few and didn't detract too much from the story. Some examples are as follows. Chapter 2- "... it didn't have all that may (many?) students..." Chapter 21 "...will need to (be?) twice as vicious..." Chapter 46- "...she could build a family is (if?) she wanted to." and "she would die, bit (but) she has have the choice." Anyway thank you for sharing this enjoyable story and best of luck to you. Desi.

Backed

Saffina Desforges

This is a strong plot. You keep the plot rolling in a fast moving story that leaves the reader wanting to keep reading. Your project is interesting and I had a great read.

Thank you.

A strong introduction - plenty of emotion to draw us in. I love a good werewolf story and I'm keen to read on when I get the time.

A really enjoyable story so far. Good flow and character development. I did find that as I read through it that you tend to over-use Tobias' name... in almost every sentence where he is adressed by Alexandria, you repeat his name too frequently (or so I thought) ... Really enjoying the overall story so far (I'm 23 chapters in) and I sincerely wish you every success with this project.

Sincerest best wishes,

Aneza Lee Immelman
Book I of the Harpy Chronicles - The Namari

Hai loved the way tobias and his wolf related to each other and i specially loved the trust between Alex and Tobias, it's not in every tale where you let the love of your life fight a super powered wolf especially when she's not invincible and this for me proved what a great writer you definately are.GREAT JOB

Dear Jennifer, looks like we have found our next big TV series. It looks like you have captured the nuance of another great fantasy novel, that never lets up from the first page. I was pulled straight in by your passionate undertones, which was only unsurpassed by your originality. So breathless and brave enough to carry on reading, your recherche of eluciadatory prose, I now wait with baited breath to read your next book. Brave, passionate and very persuasive. Good luck and best wishes with your book. It can become a best seller, with the right sort of interest. Take care, Cicuta, [ Carl, Arcane ]. And please look out for my backing.

This book kept me engaged from start to finish. Your book is happily backed. I am looking forward to reading A Wolf's Oath. Good luck!

I loved this. The story was very well written and the plot captured me. It was a very enjoyable read. (I read the whole thing.)

Oh, I like this. Cover attracted me in the books list, then the pitch. I really like the blending of fantasy and reality - some of the best stories involve that. The werewolf kindgdom seems so normal with its king and councillors, then we go to the girl and her mother in fear of the drunken father. The end of chapter one promises a brilliant meeting of the two. I've only just begun reading, and will comment again when I've got further. Have you on my watchlist and think this will be a shelver from the look of things.
Cariad
STONES.

good writing... good idea that work- your narrative and dialogue also work very well...on my watchlist...
read SEASONS...

Great work! I've read many paranormal romances and this one was very well put together! Most of the ones I read are predictable to a point, but this one left me in a state of suspense. I can't wait to get started on A Wolf's Oath. I'm happily backing this =3.

Hi Jennifer, I like the way you have combined the genres. Your strong characters interact intriguingly. There are many werewolf stories on site, but yours seems a deeper character study than most I've read, which is pleasing.
Backed with pleasure, Barry
LITTLE KRISNA AND THE BIHAR BOYS

Hiya,

I don't really post to this site anymore because it's much more difficult to upload than on other websites. Ryan's story is fully finished on fictionpress.com as well as all my other work: past, present and future. They're under the username Jennyt82.
I hope this helps and sorry it's taken me so long to get back to you, i've been without the internet for a few days.

Jennifer
I have read both A WOLF'S DUTY and A WOLF'S OATH twice (LOVED THEM!!!!) and are dying to get a hold of your third book (Ryan's Story) if you have to posted anywhere.
Amy J
A RISING MOON

Jennifer
I have read both A WOLF'S DUTY and A WOLF'S OATH twice (LOVED THEM!!!!) and are dying to get a hold of your third book (Ryan's Story) if you have to posted anywhere.
Amy J
A RISING MOON

This is a good example of the genre with many original touches to distinguish it from the pack (ha ha!) Tobias and Alexandria make for engaging MCs. shades of a werewolf version of Christine Feehan books but an entertaining read nevertheless. :)
Jim Darcy
The Firelord's Crown

I am sooooooooo in love with this book! Really, I am not kidding, I do not get why this is not published yet. It is the first book on this site I am going to be reading from start to finish! Seriously ... Definitely on my bookshelf!

I'm so glad you posted the whole book. I will def be reading this all the way through, but wanted to go ahead and leave a comment letting you know that I think it's brilliant! Also, when I am done with this, I will read the next and comment on it at that time. Good luck to you.

Case (Revelation)

Hi Jennifer... I loved your writing. The protective character of Tobias made his character so touchable and Alex's independent nature made for great balance. I couldn't stop reading till I finished this... the same goes for "A Wolf's Oath". Jammylmd mentioned another one of the other website. What website is that? I would love to read some more of your work.

This is one of my favourite books on here, I have read all three of the series posted on the other website. It almost immediately drew me in and I think I read the first two books over the course of three days. The characters are all so real and relateable, although I can't choose whether I like Tobias, Sebastian or Ryan the most. It certainly is outstanding work and I have backed it.

This was a great read. I began to read and couldn't stop. I found myself drawn in by how human the characters seemed even though they weren't human. On to read the next one!

Everything about this is just....splendid! I have to put this on my shelf, at least for today! Enjoyed what I have read thus far and plan to read more later! Best wishes with this outstanding work!

L. Anne Carrington, "The Cruiserweight"

You start us off with a conflict that draws us in - will Tobias take a mate - perhaps a high born lady instead of his chosen one. The father is getting old, theirs some doubts, but Tobias proves strong by not giving into temptation - the hero of this tale, I assume. As the chapter switches POV, I didn't immediately see the connection and was a little surprised by the candor - "You fucked him." Now that I've finished the chapter, it seems appropriate since (again, I assume) it comes from the villian. As one lies helpless and Natasha cries for help, we see the connection. You've caught my attention and I'm enjoying this. Backed.

This was a great story- loved the characters and the plot moved seamlessly. Just a few nitpicks though- Alex's age kept changing from 17 to 20. Her father referred to her as being on the brink of turning 21 due to the inheritance- then she had a birthday with Tobias in which they celebrated her 18th. There were also a few grammatical errors peppered throughout which distracts the reader sometimes but otherwise you have an excellent grasp of dialogue and plot development. I loved it and this is now shelved! Good luck!

i think that was the most tiring book i've ever read-it had me hooked from page one. well done. it always amazes me the different outlooks on were-wolves and other such creatures people have!!!
definately shelved
R

Night flower

I love this from the first moment and cannot wait to read the rest.

Shelved.

Jo xx

Spoilt, Fire Starter, Charlottesville and The Mystic Garden

Hiya,
Thanks for reading, I have actually read the Carpathian series and loved it though i based the mating thing more on the fact that actual wolves mate for life. And yes, I agree that coming up with something new in this genre is hard but i guess it's just a matter of working the different angles. As for Fred and Alex's mother's death, all is explained a little later. Good luck to you too.

Hi Jennifer,

I love paranormal romances. I was reminded of Christine Feehan's Carpathian series a little, especially with the life mates and telepathic communication between them. But it's very difficult to write something that has never been done before in this genre. (Hell - I'm writing about vampires!)

Good hook to the ending of chapter one, it made me want to read on. I wonder whether you should have made more of the fact that Fred killed Alex's mother? Or did he? I've only read two chapters so far. If he did kill her, why hasn't he been arrested/put in prison? If she's still alive, where is she? Sorry I'm being a bit pedantic.

But I'm cheering for werewolves and up you go on my shelf for a bit.
Good luck!

Berni
(Fledgling)

Hi Jennifer,

I love paranormal romances. I was reminded of Christine Feehan's Carpathian series a little, especially with the life mates and telepathic communication between them. But it's very difficult to write something that has never been done before in this genre. (Hell - I'm writing about vampires!)

Good hook to the ending of chapter one, it made me want to read on. I wonder whether you should have made more of the fact that Fred killed Alex's mother? Or did he? I've only read two chapters so far. If he did kill her, why hasn't he been arrested/put in prison? If she's still alive, where is she? Sorry I'm being a bit pedantic.

But I'm cheering for werewolves and up you go on my shelf for a bit.
Good luck!

Berni
(Fledgling)

Hi Jennifer,

I really enjoyed reading this. I was pulled in right away and found myself unable to look away.

“What is it, dearest one?” His mother asked. His should be (h)is.

“Mum. Mum.” she sobbed. she should be (S)he sobbed.

Good characterisation and dialogue. Also a good ending to chap 1. Your writing style is smooth and easy to read.

Chap 3.

“Now look what we have here, it’s raggedy Ann(.”) Emily laughed. I replaced the comma with a period. I’ve read in a few writing books that you should use a period as opposed to a comma at the end of dialogue if what follows is an action, such as Emily laughed. If it’s a tag line he/she said then use a comma.

Tobias is slightly arrogant but maybe I’ll warm to him as the story continues. So far, I’ve enjoyed what I’ve read and think you have a promising story here.

Shelved!

Shinzy :)

Jenny,

I like the situation. The story starts off in a good place. I'm not sure I like Tobias, but maybe you intend him to be as arrogant and impatient as he comes across to me. I suppose at this stage, we're meant to feel sympathetic towards Alexandria.
I think the writing could stand a bit of cleaning up. I think you overuse adverbs. Adverbs are not often needed at all. I noticed that sometimes you use two in one sentence. I'd get rid of at least 90% of them.
I don't think you have a clear handle on POV. When we spend a scene in a character's head, we can only see what that character sees. The expression on a character's face, or the colour of his eyes, is not something the POV character can see.
I'd spend less verbiage on bodily reactions. I'm not a fan of eyes snapping open, heads whipping around, hands flying up etc. When used a couple of times in a chapter, it won't bother me, but when used a lot, the effect is unintentionally comical.
Trust the readers more. You don't need to tell the readers what to feel, or how to feel it. The readers will gather for themselves what the character feels.

I wasn't sure about this at first as I felt the council should recognise that only 1 destined mate would be right for Tobias and not question that. But as I read on I knew why this had arisen. I liked the way that Alex communicated through her pain and that's how he found her. The pitch sounded superb and very interesting. The only other thing that could be established earlier might be if he is in human form, which I guessed he was from the description of turning when he awoke. I think this should do well here.
Kendall Craig, The Halo (of Delight)