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Write, Monkey

Ged Groves

An unemployed optimist finds a strange book that leads to unexpected seduction, love, lust and a comic encounter with a cult of alien-worshipping self-improvers.

 

With his rent overdue, unemployed but upbeat Monkey is cast out onto the city streets. Wandering on the margins of society he finds an odd-looking book as he scavenges for food. Before he can work out how to profit from his discovery he has to escape the designs of a woman in desperate need of his body and finds himself dealing with a bizarre cult of self-improvement gurus with alien connections. And all this whilst trying to salvage his relationship with his landlord’s daughter as his wolfish landlord pursues him with violent intent.

Write, Monkey is a comic romp through a landscape of love, lust and alien inspired lunacy. It’s a funny journey for a hero, but Monkey’s a funny sort of hero.

 
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© Ged Groves 2010

 

Ged Groves has asserted his right under the Copyright, Designs and Patents Act 1988 to be identified

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ISBN 1449542883

EAN-13 9781449542887

 

Artwork by GreenMonkey

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 


 

 

 

 

 

One Monkey,

One laptop,

No Shakespeare:

Write, Monkey…


 

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“Honey, the wolf’s at the door with a bill.”

“Sure it’s not a duck with teeth?”

(Mel Cash, Big Beast, 1963)

 

 

 

 

I fell into consciousness on the steps of the Town Hall with my head spinning and the feeling that waking up wasn’t going to cure it. My jaw was frozen into a gargoyle yawn like I was going to belch out some evil expectorant into the world. Coming round, I felt like Lazarus suddenly aware of a world he’d forgotten he’d left.

    The early sunlight was rubbing out the last grey of the night over the jumbled rooftops where the chorus birds were ranting their obscene show songs. I was sitting in the shadow of a stone lion that leaned over the steps rising to the studded door of the Town Hall, its gritty eyes staring into the distance. It was one of two, sentinels of bureaucracy, their sandstone hides shot-blasted by northern hail, grown over with algae, felt tip pen and the graffiti of snails.

    A big old lion it was with a big cold shadow. Around me, figures in dark coats were straightening their limbs and blowing the night froth from their lips. Sounds like creaking wood broke from their bodies as they slapped their sides to beat life into their hearts and drive out the louse battalions from their fetid recesses. Their faces were the bleached shades of driftwood, long faces sharpened by the wind, scored with the tally of excoriating journeys through a desperate City. Their clothes were parcels of drab patches, wide lapels and garish checks smeared with the scars of the street’s lacerations, some lashed with string and antique belts, others held up with braided wire or twisted ties. Their long coats were heavy as the coats on statues. Their unlaced army boots shifted and scratched as they got hard purchase on the earth. Some rose erect from the dark accumulation and marched away, others scuttled in hunched perambulations down the fuming mouths of alleys. One figure swayed past me and struck up Little Red Rooster on a tin harmonica as he was subsumed into the morning traffic. I sat for a moment till my brains were in working order and my eyes could mould their blurs into edges. Then I stood up. Ezra Monk was returned to the world.

    Here I am, I thought, six foot four, huddled on the steps among the flotsam of the City. How am I here? Under my tongue, my teeth were carpet tiles and there was a pain in the sides of my head as if my hair had been stapled down with pins pressed through my temples by some maniac hatter. Little lights swam over my sight. In a thousand possible lifetimes, how am I here like this?

 

Last night the cold had been up and out and laying its death hand on anything it could find, like my face and feet and fingers and pretty much all of me. Through the dark, slobbery breaths and wheezing snorts mingled with the noise of the traffic and the sound of distant feet. Occasional music whined and pounded. I lay alone in the cold shadows as the dark fell, shifting restless and anxious and pulling the collar of my jacket further into my beard. I heard animals burrowing into coats and pockets and hoods as I lay half-awake. There were growls and rummagings and open-mouthed chewing noises. At about two o-clock in the morning the cold had me in a very delicate position. I tried stuffing the corners of my lapels into my ears to lag them against the hooting of the night club animals as they yahooed their way down the Headroad. Cans were footballed through arenas of laughter, styrofoam trays of yellow curry slipped and flopped, flaccid kebabs were unloosed down the walls of shops. Rats hobnailed it down the gutters with greedy eyes, their jaws dancing among the fallen food.

 

At four o-clock the cries of the lost around me started.

    —Off me, demon woman.  Off devil!

    —Shuttit.

    —She’s here for me!  Off devil, demon devil...

    —Shuttit!

    —She’s at me. She’s at it again. Oh, merciful Lord, peel her off me!

    —SHUTTIT you feeble wizend!

    —She’s in me clothing… tug her out, man, tug her… she’s at me.

    —Will you SShuttit!

    But there was no shutting it for the rancid-voiced man wrapped in sleeves of matted wool howling from the bag of his throat to his demon mistress poised above him in the darkness. And soon the whole lot of them began to give it out into the night, shrieks and howls of self-pity and hoarded existential anguish. A right racket. I stuffed the lapels deeper into my ears but I couldn’t sleep and so began thinking over the events that had caused me to end up on the streets of the City with my ears suffering assaults of sound usually the province of heavy metal nightmares. And then, hailed by the siren call of the lost, the coppers arrived. In they stamped from the blue beyond, muscling through the coats and the darkness.

    —Oi! You lot. Shift. Come on, move. They worked at the words to make them threats, moving outward in a cunning pincer movement. Coats stirred and jostled and one or two of the assembled began to rouse themselves from their torpor and arrange their bodies into a sitting position.  Coughs staggered like drunks into the night air and the bodies had begun the long haul to an erect state when up sprang a gangling youth, eyes bouncing in his skull, nattering to himself and rooting about in his coat for something alive.

    —You! shouts out one copper, a lad of about nineteen with a sandblasted face mooning over the top of his uniform. Down! Out! Move on, now. But the youth was upon him before his voice had faded, swathing him in hideous whispers with his arms flailing now and his head tossing up and down. The copper slipped on a gutful of spilt curry and the youth writhed him to the ground and pounded him with feet loosely bound in fat brown trainers.

    To the tom-tom of these thuds, the others undid themselves from their gleeful transfixion and shambled into the night, a weird dance of desiccated shapes tumbling amongst the folds of darkness. Their laughter followed them clutching its baggy sides. Up sprang the copper, dark-faced and crumpled from the dust. His mate was at his side now, hand on staff. The youth was running, his knees leaping up and down as the yawning trainers slapped the pavement billowing gouts of stale foot-air. Round one of the lions he raced and was heading up the town hall steps when the coppers, agile and angry, executed a regulation pincer movement, grabbed him, tucked him under an arm in some mangling armlock and dragged him spluttering into oblivion. Out of the darkness returned the others.

    Sometime soon after I almost slept, with the rats tugging at my sleeves.

 

I had a bedsit two days ago, a snug little box at the bottom of Richmond Road. Convenient for all the major routes and a few pubs. It was not much of a room, about ten feet square with a low bed covered in army blankets against the far wall, a Baby Belling propped on a slab of worktop, a sink with an instant hot water geyser and a view of a dusty elm tree whose leaves pressed against the window where the frayed curtains stiffened their pallid flowers. It wasn’t home but it was somewhere to hang your washing. If I’d had any washing.

    It kept the rain off and if you stuffed newspaper under the door, it kept some of the wind out as well. It was a foul little dwelling but I’d got used to it. What I hadn’t got used to was paying the rent. But who can get used to that? Forking out your hard-won cash to some bloated capitalist just for the privilege of keeping the rats out of his precious property. I don’t like to be viewed as a wallet on legs, particularly by a landlord. Particularly by Mr Wolffe. In fact, most of my time over the last few weeks had been spent thinking of ways to keep the Wolffe from the door. I’d tried feigning the usual sorts of poverty — late pay packet, lost pay packet, no pay packet — but he persisted with his demands. I tried appealing to his better nature but that was a real provoker. It wasn’t that he didn’t have a better nature, just that in his case better didn’t quite earn the tag human. Last time I heard his rough grasp on the door I was sitting at the table – an interesting specimen, being a thin rectangle of Formica balanced on a frame of tubular alloy legs, about as stable under use as a rodeo saddle – penning some work of enormity in my Rhino spiral. A verse sprang to mind:

 

        I opens the door

        And the wolf’s smile shows

        So I closes the door

        On the animal’s nose.

 

    Unfortunately, life doesn’t rhyme so sweetly. By the time I had gathered the wit to spring to the door and attempt to wedge it shut with a shard of wood that used to be the leg of the spare chair, Wolffe had not only got his nose and his foot but also his shoulder on the room side of the frame and was moving into the picture so fast I saw the air quiver around him like heat haze. He flashed his yellowy fangs at me and seeing my discomfort pressed one of my grey-socked feet under the toe of one of his brogues. I saw greed flicker in the dry pupils of his eyes. I was closer than I wanted to be to someone smelling of mould and Brût. I tried to step back and he grinned at my wincing. Then he grinned again.

    —Rent time, Monkey. And very overdue, it is.

    —Morning, Mr Wolffe. What was it, now? Rent do you say?

    —Dig it out, Fur Boy, dig it out.

    —Dig it out?

    —The rent, the rent, you slacker. I make it three weeks now, he continued, raising three fingers in turn and waving their lumps in front of my watering eyes. How much Brût can a man use without passing out?

    —Three?

    —Three weeks. And I make that, let me see, three times forty-two pounds sixty is, let me see…

    —About ninety eight pounds something?

    —About a hundred and twenty seven pounds eighty, shall we say.

    —So much?

    —Oh, yes.

    —Oh, dear.

    —So, dig it out, Monkey, dig it out.

    But I couldn’t dig it out. There was nothing to dig. I strained on my trapped foot. Excuses swam through my head like idiot fish through a vacant globe. He suddenly released my foot and I was sent bowling over to the chest of drawers under the window. It wasn’t a long journey. I raked at a drawer whilst trying to massage life back into my flat foot. A hundred and twenty seven pounds and eighty pence. It was unreasonable, so much hard-caught cash for the use of this squalid retreat, even if I’d caught any hard cash at all, which I hadn’t. Wolffe folded his arms round his chest and stared at me like a greedy boy. He was an avaricious lad all right, I could tell that just by looking at him staring me out with those mouldy eyes. I opened a drawer, which was all pretence because all it had in it was my spare pair of socks, the one I saved for best. I rummaged around with the socks, looking serious. Glancing across the room I noticed that the bottoms of his trousers were wet and his shoes were dark with damp. He’d been out in the long grass had Mr Wolffe, watching the ladies in the park, no doubt.

    —Look, I said in what I hoped was a reasonable voice but which was probably only a whining sort of snivel, could we come to some agreement?

    —Oh, yes, he replied, all serious, of course we could. Some sort of agreement involving you paying me the hundred and twenty seven.

    —Ah.

    —Ah, he mused, thinking suddenly in that slow wolfish way of his, then trying to look smart by talking what he thought was posh. Do I take it that your non-payment and current evasiveness indicate that you lack the necessary wherewithal to meet the required fiscal demand?

    —What?

    —You’re broke, aren’t you. I knew it. I was only saying to Mrs Wolffe the other day, I was saying, I’ve got some right ones in the houses at the moment, all talk and no cash and some of them not even the talk. Youth of today. You could bag ‘em and sell ‘em as biscuits for all the use they are. Idle. Layabouts. Something for nothings. Good for nothings. I knew it. I was just saying…you’re broke, aren’t you?

    —No. I’ve just got a sort of…

    —A sort of cash flow problem. Heard it before, Monkey, doesn’t wash with me. Seen it all before.

    —No, not a cash flow thing…a sort of cash loss thing. Hard life, you know.

    —You what? Spent it on the booze have we? Been down the English Oak have we, supping poor Mr Wolffe’s rent money. Or is it drugs? Been snorting up the street talc have we? Bad for your nose, that. And not paying the rent can be bad for the nose and all, if you catch my drift.

    I caught it all right, along with a wheeze of instant coffee manoeuvring the room on his breath. I took my hand out of the sock drawer and twitched my nose with two fingers. Wolffe shifted his weight and leaned on the wall. He wormed his shoulder against the architrave and lowered his eyebrows. Then he smirked and looked as if he was enjoying the smirk. I had a go.

    —I got mugged, didn’t I.

    —I don’t know, he replies.

    —I got mugged by two schoolboys – don’t laugh, it’s the truth!

    —I believe you, Monkey, that’s why I’m laughing.

    —They had an iron bar. A big bar like made of iron and they were big kids, you know, not the little punky sorts you had when I was at school. They were big. And they were serious, wanted my money or they said they’d do me head in with the bar.

    —School kids?

    —Yeah, they had the uniforms as well. Said they’d split my head like a paper bag if I didn’t give them all the money I had and quick.

    —Quick? They said that?

    —Yeah. Quick.

    —Don’t teach them nothing at school these days, do they.

    —I don’t know. Does it matter? They seemed to know enough about mugging innocent passers by. An iron bar. Like a piece of scaffolding or something.

    He looked at me and pulled himself away from the wall. He heaved a deep sigh and rubbed his hands together. I didn’t like the way his eyes were looking at me, sort of serious and cunning and amused all at the same time.

    —They don’t make scaffolding out of iron.

    —They don’t? Ah, well, don’t know nothing these kids. As you say. But they made off with my money. Well, your money really.

    —They did, eh? You gave them the money?

    —Course I did. I like my head the way it is.

    —Then you’d better have some more money, then, hadn’t you…?

    I noticed it then, he wasn’t looking at me, he was looking past me to the chair under the window. I froze. I suddenly knew what he was looking at and of all the things in the room I didn’t want him seeing that. Prickly heat was crawling all over me like spiders. He took a step forward. I took a step to the side to try and cover the chair. He took another and more determined step. I looked at the biceps swollen under the sleeves of his suit and decided it was all over. He knew what he had seen. It was his daughter’s purse. The black and gold one her mother had bought her.     Oh, foolish and forgetful girl. Foolish, foolish Monkey. He lunged at the chair and me with a sudden brute ferocity and the wave of aftershave that lunged with him nearly put me out of things for good. But I dodged. Oh, I dodged with the fluency of a practised dodger and, ducking under the flail of his arm, I got to the door.

    As he snatched up the purse and stared at it in shocked disbelief I tore down my jacket from the peg behind the door and swept the notebook from the table which gave a slithering jolt and threw itself onto the floor. That table, that table that I had so hated for the past weeks, saved me. As I twisted through the door Wolffe, with an unholy roar torn from the bucket of his soul, launched himself at me full length across the room. It wasn’t a big room and it was a big launch. He hit the table top with the full force of his foot and it shot out from under that foot like a frisbee. Wolffe’s legs snapped from under him and he hit the floor with a very nasty crack. I was gone.

 

 

 

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Bec C Simmonds wrote 503 days ago

Hi Ged,

Took me a while to get into, mainly because the writing style--although beautifully written--seems quite elevated and I had to read it a few times before I got into the flow. Because the prose is filled with imagery there is a lot to take in, in a short space of time. There are so many beautiful sentences that some of them may become lost because of it's density. I would say don't be afraid to vary the intensity of your sentences. So the important ones have more impact. I loved the tone of your characters and the dialogue.

But then again some people will enjoy this style and find it easier to digest. The way you describe your surroundings of the city is reminiscent of how 'Louis Aragon' would describe Paris in his novel 'Paris Peasant'.

Bec. (Find Mark).

Lara wrote 509 days ago

I found this intriguing. I loved the idea of a locked book and although I can't know the end, the character building strongly suggests our hero's plan of making money from its apparent owner is doomed to embarrassment. A refreshing book, high starred. Lara
GOOD FOR HIM

Bill Carrigan wrote 522 days ago

Hello Ged, Many thanks for backing "The Doctor of Summitville" and for calling my attention to "Write, Monkey." I've read Chapter 1 and find it exciting, character-driven, and well written. I'll get back to you when I've read more. Best of luck, Bill

Charles Thompson wrote 531 days ago

Ged,

I just read the first chapter of WRITE, MONKEY. You have a distinct, unique voice and Ezra's plight is palpable. Also, you have a way with imagery. I notice that you tend to write in the passive voice a lot. For example, in the second full paragraph of the chapter, you have several sentences that you could write in an active voice (e.g., The early sunlight rubbed out the last gray; the chorus birds ranted their obscene show songs; I sat in the shadow of a stone). I think your writing would be even stronger if you used more active voice and less passive voice.

This link may be helpful: http://www.scribd.com/doc/43301829/The-Was-Reduction-Team

Regardless, the dialogue between Ezra and Wolffe was excellent, as was Ezra's abrupt departure. Great work.

Rob
(Aralen Dreams)

Diwrite wrote 531 days ago

You had me at the title.
Interesting, engaging, arresting - this novel grabed me and took me with it for the ride.
Personally, I like a bit more punctuation but that's just the pedant in me.

Good luck with this - not that I think you'll need it.
Diana
Pascual's Birthday

Sly80 wrote 538 days ago

Not sure what to make of Ezra Monk, out in the cold with the other down-and-outs. I enjoyed the repartee between him and Wolffe, but neither endeared themselves to me, and Monkey knows how to make a bad situation worse, or more precisely, doesn't know how to avoid doing so. We get more of an insight into him in 2 - Ginny wasn't something that 'just happened', and he also takes joy in good food. The account of how he lost his job however, has him back in the realms of 'a permanent accident'. Eventually, we do warm to the hapless poet, despite himself.

The writing is tremendous: 'The graffiti of snails', 'cans were footballed through arenas of laughter', 'torn from the bucket of his soul', 'the energy of primitive mechanics', 'poking notes out of a saxaphone'. Then there's 'the Wolffe from the door', *groan* Oddly enough, this is the second novel I've read in as many days which has elements of Virginia Woolf about it (not just the embedded homage). There is something about the intensity of the prose; if normal writing were a star, this would be a pulsar, though being a comedy, it lacks Woolf's gravity. Very clever, very funny, this gets a high rating from me, and a place on my backing shortlist.

Only one possible nit which is hardly worth the mention: 'Then you had better ... then, hadn't you ... I noticed it then'.

Huseyin Angay wrote 564 days ago

Good, strong intro. Haven't seen one as good for a while.

I love your prose. Great style with a funny, ironic look without ever letting go of the sadness of Monk's situation.
One thing that puzzled me at the beginning, though, was the prosiness of an apparent bum. I'm now reading, hoping to discover how he happens to be that way inclined. (Aha! Reconciled. He is a literary type. Thanks for not dragging the mystery on for too long and making his voice somehow unrealistic.)

The description of the store manager looking for the gumless Penny Black is hilarious and depressing at the same time.

I cannot think of anything I would do differently with the writing to make it stand out even more than it does already and that's coming from an incorrigible nitpicker like me.

A couple of points that may help:

The m-dash is the continental convention for speech, which is fine -- I grew up with it; it hasn't made me into a psycopath. But another part of the convention is to separate speech paragraphs from the action because the speech-action separation is not as clear cut as with inverted commas. It would read better if you did the same. For instance, when the coppers speak.

Minor point, I know, but you could do all your readers a favour by using a serif font. The convention is more than an affectation of the typesetters. Sans serif is really tiring on the eyes for long texts.

I am truly puzzled how Write, Monkey is not on more bookshelves. I'll play my part, but it really needs to be promoted more.

One possible turn-off I can see is the abstract City and Headroad, etc. That's not a problem to me, but there are a lot of readers out there who will automatically go, 'Ah, that's just one o' them books,' and look elsewhere when they can't spot references to a real place.
Shrug.

Best of luck.
Huseyin
All Things Noble

Andy M. Potter wrote 587 days ago

Well GG, this is my kind of story. ya done good. very good. the writing is deep yet smooth. first class.
on my shelf.

ok, just so ya don't think i'm gonna gush on, let me drop a macro narrative arc thought. jesus, he says, not narrative arc bullshit. of course, i didn't read the whole novel, so you're right in thinking how can this bloke bs about the arc. i only read chs 1, 9, 17 and 21. love them all, and was bitten by the "love" theme: will M get G? my thought: can you layer in another angle/theme? what else can M want or get tangled up in?

i know, i'm asking you to tell a different story. it's great as is, but could M, W reach for other heights?
best wishes, andy

Conchvegas wrote 589 days ago

A brilliant description of the homeless. You have a poetic style. The dialogue is fresh and authentic. I feel Monkey's desperation.
- Daniel

Eunice Attwood wrote 590 days ago

Monkey is fantastic. This is humour at its best. Great dialogue and a thoroughly enjoyable ride. Backed. Eunice - The Temple Dancer.

Lynne wrote 595 days ago

There is a lot that makes this book different from all the others, but the sheer joy of it is the ability to make me laugh. Well written and lots of fun. Loved it. Backed, Lynne, Brooklyn Bridge.

jossiemarie wrote 598 days ago

Hi Ged
I like the imagery your words the graffiti of snails gave me.
I was a little suprised by how you lad your dilogue out, i've not seen it done like that before but it didnt ditract from the story which flows brilliantly.
backed with pleasure.
love and hugs Jossie

TMNAGARAJAN wrote 599 days ago

WRITE, MONKEY
May be no shakespeare; yet limerick sort of dynamic story. Backed
TMN
"NEVER LOSE..."

petrifiedtank wrote 599 days ago

Saw a comment below about the speech hyphen thing. Charlie Huston does it, why not you?

I liked it. It didn't move fast enough for me, but I'm really lazy.

Other than that, tidy, no mistakes that I spotted, well written, and aside from that, I've nothing useful to add, so I'm off.

Good luck.

Crowel wrote 601 days ago

Great writing. Just... great.

Lacey

nsllee wrote 608 days ago

Hi Ged

Lots of style, a distinctive voice and deliciously seedy. Backed.

Nicole
Chosen

richard thurston wrote 608 days ago

Backed on the basis of the 1000 YEAR history of carrot crunching so glorified in my third NOW classic BEST SELLER 'The sign of the 8 FOOT dwarf.'

BEST WISHES


Best Wishes

Richard

rommyo wrote 613 days ago

This is blessed with a great title. Prose seems solid after 1,000 word exposure. I don't know, maybe it could use tightening. Are you British? Why do British people wrote the only passable unpublished novels? It is probably in your genome.

John Warren-Anderson wrote 614 days ago

A hilarious crazy ride. Very enjoyable and told with a unique style.
Backed.

Jim Darcy wrote 623 days ago

Chapter 13. this made for a different read. Monkey quickly establishes himself as a real characer from his droll speech and I love the wonderfully titled people of his acquaintance. The only thing that jarred for me is the way you begin speech with a hyphen. Got used to it eventually but it made it seem more like I ws reading a playscript. Just IMO. :)
Jim Darcy
The Firelord's Crown

zan wrote 626 days ago

Write, Monkey

Ged Groves

Alien inspired lunacy and a funny sort of Monkey - I am liking this already. What a fun read - and a good plot I'll freely admit.
"I opens the door
And the wolf's smile shows
So I closes the door
On the animal's nose."
This is proceeding nicely! Ouch - hope Wolffe's leg will be okay - must come back and read more to find out. Pleasure giving you a spin on my shelf. Best with it.

KW wrote 626 days ago

This book reminds the reader to stay away from "a bizarre cult of self-improvement gurus with alien connections" just like your Mama told you. Simply, a hilarious romp of a story. I loved what I read and will be back to read more once I get a little more time. "Unfortunately, life doesn't rhyme so sweetly." Your work is bursting with great turns of phrase: "We became monkeys dancing on the end of a string to the hurdy-gurdy of absurdity." This describes the actions of what most of us do on Authonomy. Much like rats pressing levers for treats in a Skinner box. Thanks for uploading the complete text, so I can come back and read more. There's my treat.

Miss Wells wrote 630 days ago

Loved this. It’s immediately apparent how much craft and high voltage imagination has gone into its design by the quality of the prose. “My jaw was frozen into a gargoyle yawn” is fabulous as is “the chorus birds were ranting their obscene show songs” and “it was one of two (not sure why you’ve got a comma here) sentinels of bureaucracy, their sandstone hides shot-blasted by northern hail, grown over by algae, felt tip pen and the graffiti of snails”. Memorable phrases continue throughout the two chapters I read and the narrative swings along with vitality and upbeat humour. Monkey himself is deliciously quirky and engaging as a character. Big thumbs up from me.

LonnieNonnie wrote 632 days ago

Your imagery is like poetry. But this is a novel, therefore in my humble opinion, too much. Coughs staggered like drunks into the night air. Great, but overall the pace is slow in what promises to be a good story. Perhaps less is more? I think part of being a good writer is keeping the reader engaged and you write so well, let there be no doubt, but your story is slowed. In short too flowery for my taste. Backed for potential.

LonnieNonnie wrote 633 days ago

Loved your title and enjoyed the writing. Always up for black humour THE TAILS OF WILLIE GUSTY

CarolinaAl wrote 636 days ago

Your dynamic story grabbed me and kept me riveted. Credible characters. Crisp dialogue. Confident narrative. Sharp wit. Vital writing. I absolutely love this masterfully composed story. backed.

paperbat wrote 638 days ago

Ged Groves. Glad I noticed your book this morning. Have already read the first chapter. Will read a bit more before I made any specific comments [only minor!] All the best. Oh, and I have backed it!

I would appreciate any comments / backing, if you think my childrens' story is fun. Jerry - paperbat Adventures

Andrew Burans wrote 638 days ago

You have written a very novel and entertaining storyline sprinkled with generous amounts of humour. I like your character development of Monkey and your use of the first person narrative voice as well as your use of imagery. This and your descriptive writing style makes your work a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

klouholmes wrote 639 days ago

Hi Ged, Original description in the early scenes. I liked the “obscene show songs” and “wallet on legs.” I was surprised that Monkey didn’t have any confrontation with the police but that establishes his evasive personality. The conversation with the landlord was really amusing and well-written, and then the purse – that made me want to turn the page. It’s a story that picks up in momentum while Monkey becomes more involving as a character. Happy to shelve – Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

andrew skaife wrote 639 days ago

A very different style of language sets this out as an individual in a group. You have something of a maverick sense of structure to your sentencing but it works well.

It is very funny too.

BACKED

name falied moderation wrote 639 days ago

Dear Ged
Your short pitch took me to your long pitch which is very well crafted, funny and promises an interesting original read. I I am amazed as I see the books on this site, with the minds, and the talent which produce writtings with such skill. How characters can be depicted to vividly using words as colors, and at how a story can be told and it depicts a movie on the mind. I do wish to congratsulate you on your book. I have not read all your writing but I do wish to back this book so it may asssit you

BACKED BY ME FOR SURE.
Please take a moment to look, comment which is important to me, and back my book. if not that is OK also

The VERY best of luck to you

Denise
The Letter

Barry Wenlock wrote 640 days ago

Hi Ged,
Wow. I'm hooked and a fan of this book. Dark, darker and darker still, funny and the voice rings like a bell.
The cover shows a gorilla, which is an ape (not a monkey) -- just a thought.
Best wishes,
Barry
LITTLE KRISNA AND THE BIHAR BOYS

missyfleming_22 wrote 640 days ago

This made me laugh, You've got a great talent for weaving humor in with your story. This is bizarre in the best way possible, I love things that are a little weird sometimes. I also really liked your writing style, it's backed up by some natural sounding dialogue. Only three chapters in and I know I'd want to read this to the end, without a doubt.

Missy

TalulaJane wrote 641 days ago

Quite commically driven/ definitely unique!
Carrie
The Darkwood Tales: Demouri's Defeat

SusieGulick wrote 641 days ago

Dear Jed, There's so many things I love about your story. :) Your pitch enticed me to read, your quotes before your chapters, your dialogue with lines instead of quotes, & most of all, I love your humor through out. :) Great read. :) Hope you write a lot of books. :) I''ve backed your book :) - hope you'll take a moment to back my 2 memoir books. :) Thanks. :) Love, Susie :)

Su Dan wrote 641 days ago

a writing style that is rich and full of great narrative. funny and interesting. this is on my watchlist///
read SEASONS...

JD Revene wrote 641 days ago

Ged,

Great opening chapter. The scariest thing about it is that I think I lived in that room sometime in 1989. Luckily my landlord was no Mr Wolfe--one thing I should mention, is that th e line about keeping the wolf from the door struck me as a smidgin predictable. I love the description and the dialogue is great.

Backed.

crazy mama wrote 743 days ago

I LOVE THIS!!!! FUNNY!!! FUNNY!!! AND BACKED!!

Marija F.Sullivan wrote 761 days ago

Great writing style and fun story. Congratulations!
Backed with pleasure,
M (Weekend Chimney Sweep)

Francesco wrote 761 days ago

Backed with pleasure! Good Luck!!
A look at Sicilian Shadows would be greatly appreciated.
Frank.
If you back my work, you may also want to approach BJD (a big supporter of Sicilian Shadows) for a further read and possible backing of your book.

Lockjaw Lipssealed wrote 766 days ago

"Was I fantisising or was she stark stunning naked under there?" Now that's some good writing!

Lockjaw

Mr. Nom de Plume wrote 770 days ago

A most unusual protagonist who, or rather that, listens to the Blues. Unusual plots often are sales leaders. Backed. Chuck (Paperboy Adventures)

Ma.Ste. wrote 771 days ago

Smart and funny. Excellent writing. Cool read. Indeed.
Ma.Ste.

carlashmore wrote 773 days ago

You have a wonderful ability to select precisely the right words for maximum effect. This is a wonderfully told book - both funny yet somehow profound. Beautiful use of metaphors and a voice that shines. More than happy to back this.
Carl
The Time Hunters

Burgio wrote 773 days ago

This is a good story. Your writing style is a strength of this. It's witty and makes this an enjoyable read. I’m adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

PATRICK BARRETT wrote 774 days ago

A funny, well written book. You have an easy to read style and your descriptions are clear and precise. This is definitely worthy of success - congratulations on a great submission. Paula & Patrick Barrett - How Mean is My Valley?

S Richard Betterton wrote 774 days ago

Great voice. I really like the style of your writing, the descriptions, the dialogue (love the word 'slacker' for some reason) and the action. Good stuff! Backed.

T.Edwards wrote 779 days ago

Ha, I love this title!

Colin Normanshaw wrote 785 days ago

Fabulous imagery and a writing style to die for. Every sentence is beautifully crafted and then woven together into the fabric of the story. Nicely done. Empathy is built for your MC from the beginning. I can think of nothing that would improve this other than a careful edit of comma useage - there are a few unnecessary ones hidden in there that could improve the reading experience. Otherwise backed with pleasure (and admiration). This should shoot up the chart..... Colin

Kidd1 wrote 788 days ago

Darkly hilarious. You have it all, Plot, structure, flow, and most of all stylish writing. Loved it. Backed

Hope you will have a look at mine, and back it if you wish.

Best,
Robert
Golden Conspiracy

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