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Beyond The Gaze

David Francis

An irreverent small cyclops falls in love, stumbles on a postmodern argonautica and discovers his true identity, before making a dramatic homecoming.

 

A small cyclops called Noughtaless lives on Sicily, an outcast without family, friends or memory of who he is. He falls in love with Galatea, a sea nymph. She finds his irreverent humour irresistibly entertaining, though he infuriates as much as he intrigues, and she mocks his aspirations by joking she'll be his - if he brings her the underpants of Eurydice.
The cyclops Polifemeo asks him for his help in an affair of the heart. When the ogre reveals the identity of the girl in question, things get out of hand and Noughtaless decides the time has come for a change of location. Soon hopelessly lost, he only just survives a series of encounters with legendary characters and hazards, ineptly sending up the exploits of Hercules and Jason and the Argonauts in the process. Eventually he descends into the Underworld, where he discovers his real identity... and rescues Eurydice. He goes astray again, but help is finally at hand.
The scene is set for a dramatic homecoming, in which he must find the courage to confront Polifemeo and take responsibility for his own destiny... and the lives of others.

 
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September 1218 BC. The Mediterranean, east of Sicily.

 Noughtaless is the name. An inventor from Sicily, a good talker and a bit of a chancer, and I can describe myself as a man of the world. Well, I can’t actually, because I’m a cyclops. I’ve been to some amazing places and believe me, I’ve seen such unforgettable things I’ll still remember them when I’m dead. 

Yes, I’m a cyclops, I’ve got just the one eye. But please don’t jump to conclusions. I’m not a big rough ogre or anything like that. I don’t eat people. Heaven forbid! There’s more to me than meets the eye.

I was away from Sicily for a few years, and I’ve got quite an adventure to relate. So how shall I begin? Well, to be honest it all happened by accident. I needed to get away, that’s for certain. It’s just that I made an unusually thorough job of it.

 

When I navigated safely out to sea from the bay where the boat had been at anchor, setting a course across the strait for the nameless island, everything seemed to be going well. The island lay on the horizon in the clear light of a cool late summer morning. No more difficult to get to, you’d think, than the full stop at the end of an uncomplicated short sentence. This was the first time I’d taken my boat out into the ocean. I should’ve been nervous and excited about it, every one of my senses heightened, concentrating to the last straining nerve, et cetera, et cetera. Instead I was so preoccupied with... well, certain other recent events, let me just say, and leave it there... that my attention was anything but fixed on sailing, which seemed an undemanding kind of employment. You see, the wind was so gentle and the sea was so calm, there wasn’t really anything for me to do.

Progress was slow. Behind me Etna lay, discharging its trail of light grey smoke, wilfully refusing to withdraw into the distance. It was like a guest you want to get rid of; you’ve said goodbye, but they won’t leave. Every time I looked back the great mountain loomed over the shore.

Now, the still conditions were certainly welcome, for I would’ve been reluctant to take the boat on its first voyage across the wine-dark sea in a gale. But it meant progress was wretchedly slow, and the boat didn’t require my full attention, and so it was hard to keep my thoughts from returning to... well, did I mention certain other recent events?

I tried to find things to do. I unfurled the awning so that I’d have some shelter from the sun, pulling the thick canvas sheet across the frame above the gondola. From time to time I got up and stood on the flat rectangular deck, striking poses as I scanned the horizon, wondering how Jason looked when he sailed away from Iolcos in the Argo with all his companions. I unpacked supplies from their storage compartment in one of the hulls and had something to eat. I moved the levers that turned the rudders, checking the steering mechanism. The boat weaved ponderously from side to side. I tried the horn, an abrasive klaxon that began with a drum roll before it unleashed its simple tune of a dozen notes or more.

Slowly, painfully slowly, the island edged closer. Time passed. The sun reached its zenith, and little by little sank towards the western horizon. It was a distance of just a few miles across the strait, but I realised it would be night before I made landfall. The water slapped eerily against the hulls. Navigating an unknown coast without daylight was a prospect that made me... well, it had my attention now. But even with my cyclops eye there were limits to how well I could see in the dark, and suddenly it occurred to me I’d acted with a very lackadaisical sort of recklessness. One firm collision with a rock would bring the excursion to a premature end. More to the point, me too.

And so as the light weakened over the next couple of hours, so did my resolve, and I was reduced to a state of near panic as I strained to see what lay in my path, giving every obstacle, real and imagined, a wide berth. I placed the lamps at the front of the boat. But that didn’t help much, because I had to hop all the way back into the gondola to steer. It was very stressful. Eventually I disengaged the paddle and decided I’d hold my position until morning, when I’d be able to plot an approach safely. Besides, who wanted to come skulking ashore in the dark? I’d embark on my new life with the sun lighting my way. I was going to reinvent myself as a man (yes, a man, not a cyclops) who would impress the haughty néreid. For Galatéa I’d been like a bad habit, something furtively indulged that left her feeling ashamed! But I was going to make myself worthy of her love. I stretched out on the floor of the cabin and covered myself with a blanket. Thoughts went round and round in my head, most of them burdened with regret, and I sighed many times. But I had a purpose. I could look forward to a fresh start. I’d forget about the past and all its mistakes, limitations and failings. Things would be different. I was moving on.

It wasn’t a good night’s sleep. I had the impression I was awake all night, though I must’ve slumbered at least fitfully. How else can I explain the fact that I started wide awake a dozen times? Every unusually vigorous slap of water and loud groan of wood, every sudden breeze and distant seagull’s cry set my pulse racing and left me staring wide-eyed at the awning over my head. I felt an almost irresistible urge to jump up, in case something awful was about to happen. But I told myself I was being irrational and scolded myself for spinelessness, and on each occasion I took a deep breath and forced myself to stay put. If I was going to impress Galatéa, I had to be able to show a modicum of fortitude.

But there were times when I was hanging on to my self-control by my ragged fingertips. 

When I finally noticed the first horizontal streaks of dawn, I got up and walked onto the deck, desperate to complete the crossing. The gloom slowly dispelled and I stared round. There was nothing but empty sea! I turned full circle but there was no land anywhere in sight; a state of affairs that wasn’t altered as the improving light pushed back the horizon. I couldn’t believe it. The elusive island had seen me coming, waited until it got dark, and then slipped quietly away!

Only it hadn’t, of course. It soon occurred to me what must’ve happened, and I cursed my stupidity. The island, no doubt, was still exactly where it had been at twilight the previous evening. It was the boat that had moved. I’d stubbornly kept my head down, assuming it would remain stationary if it wasn’t under sail. But there was a notoriously strong current between the island and the mainland. It had carried me away. Overnight I’d drifted far from my intended destination.

“Now that was careless!” I muttered to myself.

In passing my test of nerve, I’d failed to observe an elementary rule of seamanship. Keep watch.

But I was philosophical. There was no need to panic. I’d solved many problems in my life, and I was sure a bit of simple logic would solve this one. Soon I had a plan. The current flowed southeast, from which it was only natural to assume I’d gone astray on the same bearing. All I needed to do was sail in the opposite direction, northwest, to return to my starting point. However, I had the presence of mind to realise that if I simply turned round and sailed straight back, the boat would be struggling against the same current that had swept me away in the first place. It would therefore make more sense to sneak up on the island by a different route. I’d run northeast for a while, then change my direction to northwest, eventually bearing round due west. In other words, I intended to proceed along three hitherto untravelled sides of a rectangle, rather than back along the first, the one already taken. This would bring me to the far side of the island, avoiding the troublesome current altogether. 

I congratulated myself. It was all perfectly straightforward. The weather was fair, and the boat’s conduct wasn’t giving me any cause for concern. What could possibly go wrong? Soon enough the great volcano would appear on the horizon. And I believed I was entitled to be optimistic, for though I’d drifted quite blindly all night, I’d managed to avoid every single stray rock. My nautical inexperience had placed me in grave danger, but good fortune had saved me from disaster!

So I turned the mast to take full advantage of the light breeze, engaged the sails, which were soon spinning languidly, and set off on my new bearing. After an hour I changed course as planned, and started back towards the island. Taking my position from the sun, I headed northwest. The wind picked up, and after a few hours I turned west, expecting to see land at any moment. But the sea stretched before me without limits for the rest of the day. When darkness fell there’d been no sign of anything resembling terra firma, not so much as a solitary rock, let alone the familiar peak of Etna. My complacency ebbed away. It seemed there was a bit more to this business of navigating the open seas than I’d thought, and there really seemed only one thing to be said on the matter. Which I duly said.

“Feck!”

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Jack Hughes wrote 584 days ago

A cleverly written and intelligent story, based on classical mythology. Your characters are very well thought out and have great depth. Beautifully descriptive and very original, an outstanding piece of neo-classical storytelling.

Backed with pleasure, best of luck David.

Jack Hughes
Dawn of Shadows

Marsi wrote 584 days ago

What convinced me is your writing style and deadpan treatment. I haven't had time to get down to the underworld yet but shall come back and do so. Backed with pleasure. All the best M

Alexander85 wrote 601 days ago

hey David,

wow sounds like a classic already. good effort and thank you for the backing.

Alexander Allen- 'The Middle of Nowhere'

Lynne Ellison wrote 604 days ago

A very entertaining and comical read, especially for someone ( like me) interested in the ancient world.

Lynne Ellison

The Green Bronze Mirror

Almost_Lady_Onogoro wrote 606 days ago

Small is beautiful :) I love the small irreverent cyclops - my kind of man :)

If only there were more men like him in the world, this world would be so sweet

E. Yazykova wrote 614 days ago

Hehehe I like this, a very unlikely main character and I like how your writing is lightly humorous and witty without forced jokes that seem to plague other light-hearted books. In light of this, I think that first part with the introduction should be taken out, simply because it's a bit cliche and you tend to put some over-used things like "there's more to me than meets the eye" - let the readers discover that for themselves. Backed.

E. (Silver Flows East)

Ann Mynard wrote 614 days ago

David,
Delightfully different read and extraordinary writing; when Greek cyclops meet sea nymphs, mayhem is bound to happen and that makes for an intriguing story. All the best with this.
Backed,
Ann Mynard (Windshadow)

Pen Power wrote 618 days ago

Loved your chatty, witty style in the opening chapter. We willing follow Noughtaless on his journey as you make us want to read on and find out what he is going to get up to. Light hearted fantasy meets the mythical world and you make it work superbly.
Well done
Alice

S.C. Thompson wrote 622 days ago

Quite inventive and endearing. Put this at the top of the heap of take-offs on Greek mythology and Homeric epics.
One small nit: I'm not hip to the ocular peculiarities of the Cyclopsian physiology, but in humans, having but one eye precludes stereoscopic vision. If that holds true for the Cyclopian orb, then the island Naughtaless sets sail for would get larger and larger, not closer and closer; and Mt. Etna would slowly get smaller and smaller, not further and further away. This lack of depth perception would provide many opportunities to make Naughtaless a real Cyclops, not just a creature of fantasy . . . but that's just me, being a short-sighted ( not surprisingly, also physically myopic) and quick-to-offer-useless-and-ill-conceived-suggestions natterbob . . . write on!
sc

Elijah Enyereibe Iwuji wrote 622 days ago

Hi David,

A great mix of ideas, well crafted and written. I love the adventure and your little cyclops. I do enjoyed it to chapter two, and it sounds interesting, engaging and charming read. Use of words and concept is excellent, a masterscript. Goodluck with it.

Book, Line and Sinker wrote 622 days ago

Hi David! My first read and also my first comment on here. I've lots to look at so I've just tasted your first 2 chapters. I am in absolutely no way qualified to critique but I loved the clever play on words with the 'eye', which you echo nicely but I didn't feel that all the conversation was natural. Felt good to be in an imaginary place though - believable.
I noticed you've backed me, so thanks for that.
Rachel Harding

Cariad wrote 624 days ago

Oh, and your pitch is superb. 'An irreverant small cyclops falls in love....' How could I resist! And I've always loved the Greek myths, too.

Cariad wrote 624 days ago

'Willfully refusing to draw into the distance' - lol. Naughty old Etna. I LOVE the voice of this cyclops - and they don't get enough attention paid to them. I have a strong visual of what he describes and I care about him already, which some writer's don't manage over several chapters. I think this one is a keeper so I've watchlisted you while I read further.
Polly
STONES.

Eunice Attwood wrote 624 days ago

A great sense of the ridiculous - just my cup of tea. Fantasy mixed with mythical creatures (or were they). WHY NOT? It works for me. An updated version of the great classical stories of our history - in fact I think I prefer your version. I rather fancy your book and think it should stay on my shelf for a very long time - though I might have to move it back to my WL occasionally to give others a stint. Love it, Love it, LOVE IT! Backed for sure. Eunice - The Temple Dancer.

name falied moderation wrote 625 days ago

Dear David

It is so good to see that your book was well received. I have already commented and backed your book, and as at times the backing have not shown, i will back your again, just to MAKE SURE.
I do wish you the very best with your writing

Denise
The Letter

SusieGulick wrote 625 days ago

Dear David, I love all of the adventures & quest of cylops & his falling in love. :) What a wonderful story. :) "Naughtaless is a pretty cool name, too. :) Your pitch beckoned me to read more & your tight dialogue & paragraphs made for an easy enjoyable read. :) Hope you'll write a lot of books. :) I've backed your book :) - hope you'll take a moment to back mine. :) Thanks so much. :) Love, Susie :)

Elizabeth Wolfe wrote 628 days ago

Dear David,
I like your little cyclops. I've read the first chapter and find your writing humorous and witty. I like the way you're deconstructing and reconstructing some of the Greek gods and creatures of legend. Some great phrases, too, like "hanging on to my self control by my ragged fingertips" and "did I mention certain other recent events?" Very humorous!

BACKED
Elizabeth Wolfe (MEMORIES OF GLORY)

GK Stritch wrote 628 days ago

Dear David Francis

Beyond the Gaze is priceless -- the pitches brilliant. Excellent.

Best and backed.

GK Stritch
CBGB Was My High School

philip john wrote 628 days ago

What a super mix of ideas! I have enjoyed every word of what I have read (so far) and reckon that a book like this ought to succeed even if not too many people are into Greek mythology these days. Perhaps Matt Groening could be persuaded to do a few more stories on the subject!

Philip John

marywood18 wrote 630 days ago

Thank you for your support of, An Unbreakable Bond, I am recovering from my, brush with death and in a goood place, still not physically strong, so this is a return backing in appreciation of your support for me. If you would like me to I will read and comment properly in a few weeks time, but you will need to message me to remind me of this. love Mary

Suzalex wrote 632 days ago

Nice job here. I love the storyline and opening. The only thing I would suggest if to trim the fat:
little by little could simply read: slowly
Etcetra . . . etcetra: unecessary, just a big red ribbon on the narrators voice saying "Look at me, look at me!"
Small details like that.
I will get back to reading it and if you find this kind of critique helpful, I can leave further comments.
Backed.
Suz

zan wrote 633 days ago

Beyond The Gaze

David Francis

Your short pitch is wonderful - An irreverent small cyclops falls in love, stumbles on a postmodern argonautica and discovers his true identity, before making a dramatic homecoming.
I think your avatar image would make a more appropriate cover for this book because of your MC's description as a cyclops - quite striking really, that image. Affairs of the heart, taking responsibility for one's destiny, as well as the lives of others - I like your themes. Your 1218 setting in chapter one was engaging and the narrative voice confident.
Nautical inexperience might indeed place one in danger! I don't mind a sea stretching before me without limits, for years actually! Rather envied your MC here, although I could identify with his desire for terra firma. Yes, there was a bit more to navigating the open seas . . . I think this is quite entertaining, happy to back you and hope to read more when I can.
Unusual storyline, unusual characters and your writing is superb. All the best with it.

Huseyin Angay wrote 633 days ago

I like the idea of a cyclops that has more about him than meets the eye.
Interweaving of the past and the present helps deliver the story in nice chunks, which keeps some tension going. It also offers a more balanced view of the arrogant nereids than we would have got solely from the smitten, small cyclops. On the other hand, I do like unreliable witnesses without dissenting voices from the wings -- in fiction, anyway.

'Let's just say'
Is this meant to be a mannerism or just a slip of the keyboard? I've seen it repeated a few times.

One for the Myth Series. But I think you need a Booker or two under your belt before they'll take you on. Shame. Would have fitted right in.


Best regards.
Huseyin
All Things Noble

D. L. Stroupe wrote 634 days ago

David, I have to say I enjoy your writing, and more so than a lot of other books here on authonomy. It's a relaxed and easy read, by which I mean the images come easily and I don't have to work at understanding what you're saying. I hope you stick with this to the desk, even if you aren't seeking representation.

cat5149 wrote 634 days ago

This is very well written and I enjoyed reading it. Shelved, with pleasure.

Carol

andrew skaife wrote 634 days ago

I think this is fantastic. You show imagination and drive in every word. Great language and this would be an incredible hit with the YA audience.

BACKED

name falied moderation wrote 635 days ago

Dear David

I would like to commend you on the skill you have and the imagination and the talent in writing this work of art
of yours. I wish I had half of your talent. Where does one get such original work like this, such a gift. I feel sure you
feel like me that it is your baby and you so want to see it succeed. I do wish you all the best in rising and also
getting this book of your published. ( I wish I had half the talent some of you have on this site)

BACKED BY ME FOR SURE.
Please take a moment to look, COMMENT which is important to me, and BACK my book. if not that is OK
also

The VERY best of luck to you

Denise
The Letter

cat5149 wrote 635 days ago

Great story and great writing. Shelved, with pleasure.

Carol

CarolinaAl wrote 636 days ago

Hilarious. A quirky romp filled with surprises. Fascinating, other worldly characters with real emotions. Excellent dialogue and narrative. Intriguing storyline. Laugh out loud wit. Lucid writing. Backed.

Owen Quinn wrote 638 days ago

gre\t fun, an enjoyable read hat is crying out for cgi treatment, pythonesque in nature

Joanna Carter wrote 638 days ago

I've paused at the end of Ch 3 because I have to back this immediately! What a treat to discover something so different, and so well written.
Joanna
Fossil Farm

B. Worm wrote 640 days ago

Loved it, from ‘feck’ to ‘froideur’. (Poor old Polyphemus, always seems to get a raw deal.)

Andy M. Potter wrote 642 days ago

David, fine writing. kudos! great sly humour, strong pace, clean prose.
on my shelf.
read your first 3 chapters. not a picky quibble, micro or macro.
very best wishes, andy

This is awesome and concept is fresh. I love it.
All the best.
Backed,
S. vinay kumar,
the ark and the aroma of peril

memphisgirl wrote 643 days ago

I might use this to teach the concept of voice, that elusive "absent presence" beneath the narrative. I very much enjoyed your first chapters.

Memphisgirl
Ashes By Now

Eric Laing wrote 643 days ago

A wonderful opening chapter. Your little cyclops has an engaging and charming voice. I was pulled in immediately. I hope he makes landfall in a cyclops friendly locale. :) Is there such a place? I guess we'll find out.

Typo: willfully -- in the sentence about the light grey smoke-- is missing an L.

All the best with this!

Eric

nsllee wrote 655 days ago

Hi David

This is a great idea. I love the classical world setting combined with the contemporary voice and would happily read further. Backed.

Nicole
Chosen

Despinas1 wrote 670 days ago

Brilliant story. Great writing. A very deserved backing
Helen
The Last Dream

Cariad wrote 682 days ago

'There's more to me than meets the eye' - great. I love this. It's quirky, different, easy to read. I am shelving it to enjoy, and I will back you for certain.

eloraine wrote 696 days ago

Imaginative, different and wondrful. I wish you the best of luck with it. E.Loraine Royal Blood Chronicles book one

Ferret wrote 706 days ago

Funny and original. I like the escape from the sirens due to nasty head cold...Backed.

stoatsnest wrote 712 days ago

This is delightful-well written inventive humorous and a pleasure to read. backed.

mclevin wrote 712 days ago

I am a member of The Red Arrow Brigade -- a one-man army that fights for books on Authonomy that are moving backwards in rankings due to the cluelessness of most readers.

Unfortunately for you, Beyond the Gaze is too clever and inventive for the masses; in other words, it's a great book. Anybody who knows how to read and who loves literary humor will love Noughtaless (nice) and follow him on his adventures, rooting for him all the way.

I am backing this book. If not, the literary terrorists win.

Best,

G
Notes on an Orange Burial (a tragicomedy)

karien wrote 712 days ago

What an adorable cyclops! I hope Galathea comes to her senses and gives him the love he deserves.
The first time I saw Homer's wine red sea was at nightfall from a little fishingboat in Crete.
The water turned wine red in front of our eyes as the last light left the sky.
Karien

Lara wrote 726 days ago

Great stuff and much enjoyed, already backed. A bit naughty, and why not? I'm all for irreverance.
Well done
Rosalind
Good For Him

Zero-serenity wrote 729 days ago

haha, you have skills to write this. It kept me smiling in amusement pretty much the whole time. You've a nice little world here, thanks to your descriptive words, and I didn't see any grammar/punctuation mistakes to distract me from it. So good job =]
backed
~Zero, No Title Needed

Antonius wrote 729 days ago

Funny, Lovely, bitchily, a voice of reason and satire akin to the great Creation, you might like that, very much in a similar vein, but yours is angry funnier, and bitchier. delightful.
Tony

Andrew Burans wrote 729 days ago

Your highly descriptive writing style coupled with whit and a touch of humour ensures that your finely crafted story will be a hit with the YA audience. Your work is well paced and well written.. Your use of imagery is excellent and your character development is solid. Backed with pleasure.

Cheers,
Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

Roger Thurling wrote 729 days ago

David
Wine-dark sea ... huh! So that's where Homer stole the phrase from, since he definitely followed Noughtaless in 1218BC
Are you a Professor of Classics?
"Nice breasts. World peace." ... what a line!
Well ... with a week to spare, and accompanied by Smith's Classical Dictionary, I could laugh my socks off at this. A Christmas present for every one of my classicist friends
The Odyssey: " ... a great story and the greatest ending in literature." I like the bit about his dog best.
Great fun - I enjoyed this very much. Not 'Literary Fiction', but 'Fiction about Literature'.
Roger Thurling

eloraine wrote 734 days ago

Perfect for your target audience, backed with pleasure. E.Loraine Royal Blood Chronicles book one