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Stonefish

Sly

If someone intends to kill you, they'll probably succeed.

 

Notorious Australian assassin, Stonefish, and his squad of ex-military officers, take on the most difficult assignments, the hardest men, and they guarantee success in exchange for rich rewards.

Lobo, a lone hit man, is fixated on killing Stonefish to enhance his own reputation. Masquerading as an informer to Washington-based Inspector Patterson, Lobo draws on the vast resources of Interpol to hunt his prey.

Meanwhile, high up in the US Government, someone wants Stonefish to do their dirty work, and they won't take 'no' for an answer.

Betrayed, coerced and cornered, the assassins find themselves fighting for their own survival.

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Though an arc runs through the novel, each of the chapters posted here, after reading the first, can be read as virtually stand-alone. So, if you venture further than 1, here's a rough guide: 2 Australia - boats, surf and cruelty, 3 Africa - politics, business, and spot the clues, 4 the Baltic - gangsters and a grain of kindness, 5 America - art, wealth and envy, 6 Glasgow - some humour, 7 Alabama - explosive emotions.

Complete @ 87,000 words

 
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Prologue and Chapter 1

Prologue

 

Stonefish

Tropic of Cancer - March 2005

 

Lying on my belly in baking desert sand, I watch motionless while a scorpion skitters past searching for a quieter place to sleep.

    When it's gone I push up my shades to make way for binoculars, then check the compound again. Our subject, a fat hairy bloke, late fifties, is still sprawled naked in a hot tub on the porch of the main house and amazingly the girl is still astride him. This entire situation is starting to shred my patience.

    "Jeez," says Josh, echoing my thoughts. "How hot does he want to get?"

    "Not as hot as he's going to be," I answer. "Unless he croaks before we blow him to hell, which looks increasingly likely."

    Kees gives an appreciative snort.

    At this distance, we need to be sure of a successful single strike, but instead of precision, we're aiming to make a splash, leaving a clear message with the emphasis on 'mess'. Thus Kees, a couple of yards away from Josh and me, has an RPG-7 in tow. Using the maxim 'the closer the better,' we're in range of the M16s toted by the guards. Not that they often glance in this direction. Nobody's going to attack from the middle of a minefield ... are they?

    Thanks to the boffins who recently combined ground-penetrating radar with electromagnetic induction, we marked out a safe path last night. We're also lucky that our subject's a creature of habit, indulging in behaviour that keeps his men well away from the back porch.

    Josh wipes sweat and sand from his face and takes another look. "Finally."

    I lift the binoculars to see the girl disentangle herself and wrap a towel round her glistening body. She sets off north towards a small cabin where she probably intends to wash the drug baron out of her hair.

    "Now?" asks Kees. He's stoked.

    "Soon," I say, and he shoulders the launcher, a mine-free expanse of sand surrounding him.

    The figure of the girl distorts with increasing distance until she's little more than a mirage hovering just above the ground.

    Kees is locked onto the subject. I tell him, "Go for it."

    A split-second's pause, then the RPG vomits thunder and shockwaves as the grenade rockets towards the house. BOOM! The porch explodes in a cloud of splinters, steam and Viagra.

    "Yes!" Kees' eyes flash with triumph.

    In moments, all the king's men come running. But he's Humpty Dumpty and we're legging it down the blind side of the dune towards our jeep. No idiot's going to risk stepping on a mine to come after us, not for a dead man.

    A whoop escapes from Josh as he skids to a halt in the sand, and grins. "We must be due some R&R now, Stone?"

    Straight-faced, I say, "There's another job lined up."

    Kees and Josh both look like kicked puppies.

    When we climb into the jeep, I relent. "It's a couple of days before we fly out. Geet and Arnaud should have some entertainment waiting for us at the rendezvous."

    The grins are back. Doesn't take much to make them happy.

 

 

 

Chapter 1 - The Third Gate

 

Hell has three gates: lust, anger, and greed ~ The Bhagavad Gita

 

Stonefish

France - April 2005

 

If someone intends to kill you, they'll probably succeed. No matter how many security measures you take - bodyguards, bulletproof vests, armoured cars - there's always a way. And when it comes to professional killers, those ways are countless. The best assassins are creative, artists of death, which is why we command lucrative rewards.

    I've never failed. If I take a contract, I make the kill - one hundred percent reliability. A botched attempt can turn your client into a target - bad publicity. Reputation is everything. It's how a man earns his name, and keeps it. Stonefish: the most poisonous fish in the world, cunningly camouflaged. That's the handle they gave me a decade ago when I still lived in Australia.

    Creative, reliable, and cold-blooded. Emotion is the last thing an assassin needs when he's working, including both anger and pleasure. But he is entitled to take pride in a job well done. That can never include shooting sheep in a pen. My men and I are skilled, ex-military officers. We only take on the predators. 

    Final point, when men risk death on a regular basis, quality R&R restores their equilibrium. That's why we're staying in this classy hotel, just outside Dijon, while we plan our latest project. Low-profile luxury before the job, then afterwards, play hard, really hard, somewhere far away from the aftermath.

 

The Subject

Switzerland 

 

In a lakeside town in Switzerland, two hundred miles east of where Stonefish and his squad are billeted, Mike McLaughlin saunters into his alleged workplace, a plush waterfront office block. He sees his features fractured in the chrome and glass décor, and then reflected in the receptionist's kohl-rimmed eyes. Heather, the boss's youngest daughter, is seldom occupied by anything other than answering the phone or inspecting her French manicure. She smiles broadly at Mike, her laser-whitened teeth a stark contrast to cherry lipstick and spiky hair the same colour as her mahogany desk.

    One thing Mike likes about this girl is that she always looks him in the eye, never staring at the scarred side of his face. That's one thing he likes about her; there are plenty of others. He notices the deep cleavage, visible thanks to her otherwise-demure blouse having one too many buttons undone. As ever, an image of her slithers into his imagination - half-naked and spread-eagled on the desk - but he pushes that aside for the time being.

    "Any news?" he asks. To Mike, this is her main value. Contrary to the tight-lipped Swiss convention, Heather loves to gossip, and she knows everything about everyone at the office. He regularly feeds her with scandalous stories he wants scattered around, and listens for information that might help him get one over on his rivals. Though she may not realise it, Heather's been instrumental in the ruin of many a career, and worse.    Mike once thought it ridiculous that office politics operate the same even when the business - in this case security brokerage - is a front for illegal activities. He'd supposed that hardened criminals were above, or below, such pettiness. Now he knows that wherever there's a hierarchy, there's slander, butt licking and backstabbing. He makes excellent use of all these strategies, the last of them sometimes literally.

    One of Heather's dirty little smiles appears. "Benni's wife wants to go with him on the Bangkok trip."

    Deadpan, Mike replies, "Now that would cramp his style."

    Her smile creeps a little higher up the sides of her face, and her eyes narrow. "I wouldn't exactly call it style." 

    "Is he still in your father's bad books?"

    "More than ever. Out of spite, Daddy's refused to allow the wife to go with him, but that just means Benni gets his own way after all."

    Good for your Uncle Benni, Mike thinks. He deserves an enjoyable trip. After all, it'll be his last.

 

Stonefish

France   

 

"Perfect," says Arnaud, my second-in-command, 'happy as Larry' to be in his homeland, stuffing his face with 'Le pigeon rôti aux cinq épices.'

    This hotel began life as a Cistercian abbey, and the impressive galleried cloister above the restaurant is now exercising the eyeballs of Joshua, a square-jawed blond former-Marine from Texas.

    "I swear to God I can just about see the monks walking around up there."

    These two are our main brawn but - despite Joshua's overactive imagination - they also have excellent brains. Arnaud is six foot four of gaunt steel, dark-haired, and the oldest of us. Joshua, a couple of inches shorter, but with plenty of muscle, is thirty-three, a year younger than me.

    In a clipped South African dialect, Kees quips, "Not good to be seeing ghosts in our trade, doos."

    He's auburn-haired, about the height of Joshua but not as solidly muscled. He's also the youngest and newest member of the team; not quite bedded in yet, so only insults us with Afrikaans profanities.

    Josh sneers and mouths an Anglo-Saxon version of the vulgarity back at him.

    Our short-arse, Geet, an ex-Gurkha and a brilliant medic, grins at this exchange of hostilities. Invaluably deft at both taking and saving life, he's also the most cheerful person I've ever met. Sometimes that's good - sometimes it makes the rest of us want to wring his neck.

    Me? I'm unremarkable in appearance - your typical Aussie surfer: wiry, not particularly tall, sun-bleached hair and a tan (I do surf a few times a year). If you were looking for an assassin, you wouldn't look at me. But that's the whole idea.

    Back to the business in hand: I check that the waiters are nowhere near, then start to describe the contract. "Our client's Benni Dopfer, brother of Kurt Dopfer."

    Four sharp stares are suddenly aimed at me. "Yes, that Kurt Dopfer, the 'self-made' billionaire. For all his apparent respectability, most of his lucre comes from peddling powder and flesh."

    Kees tsks with feigned disapproval, causing Joshua to roll his eyes.

    I soldier on. "The subject's a Brit, Mike McLaughlin, who works for Kurt Dopfer, and is engaged to his eldest daughter."

    Lifting his long, connoisseur's nose from a glass of Pinot Noir, Arnaud asks, "Why would the client want his niece's fiancé eliminated?"

    "Because he's convinced McLaughlin's already killed at least two people who were blocking his ascent of the Dopfer Empire, and now Benni suspects he's next on the list. McLaughlin's a greedy man. When he's Kurt's son-in-law, he intends to be the sole heir to both the money and the power."

    "Bad plan," Geet says in his lyrical Nepali accent, his pronunciation as straight as a plumb line. "If he kills all his rivals, there will not be anyone worth bossing around - only idiots and sycophants, and they will squander his wealth."

    Kees scowls. "Then he's a fucking idiot. Shove the power. I'd be content with the cash."

    Tapping one of his gold cufflinks, Arnaud's still trying to detect the logic in the contract. "Why doesn't Benni just tell his brother?"

    "Let me guess," Geet chimes in. "Benni is not his brother's favourite person at the moment. In fact, he is under a lot of suspicion himself."

    I nod confirmation. "Yes, McLaughlin's playing a classic game - divide and conquer ... if it is him. Benni, to his credit, wants confirmation before we take the subject out."

    They're staring again. I lift my shoulders. "Don't tell me none of you ever wanted to play Sherlock Holmes. And Josh, you get to work your magic on Kurt Dopfer's youngest daughter."

    Those blue eyes suddenly brighten. "Hey, I get a pop at marrying into millions? She hot?"

    "A looker, but with the verbal trots. Useful for information, but not the type I'd want to mix DNA with. I've got photos of them all in my room."

    The arrival of another bottle of wine - in anticipation of dessert - interrupts our discussion, and I tell yet another waiter that I don't touch the stuff, I only drink water or coffee, and could do with a top up of both. I like to stay in complete control of my faculties. My men prefer to maintain a capacity to drink everyone else under the table. Thus they're more than happy to swig my share of whatever poison's on offer.

 

The Subject

Switzerland

 

Late Saturday, the nightclub swarms with punters: a mixture of the wealthy and their bodyguards. It isn't always easy to tell them apart. The spotlight-strafed dance floor and bar are both packed with bodies. At a distance from the pounding rhythms, intimate booths house young couples, some chatting, some with their mouths in much closer proximity.

    Mike McLaughlin arrives with Kimberly Dopfer, a slender blonde wearing an engagement ring that cost a truly painful amount of money. But ... speculate to accumulate. Fate is more than kind to Mike. After all, the girl is gorgeous as well as worth millions.

    He's not here for the music, which he detests, nor is he even capable of dancing. Mike's here because this is where the affluent go. Standing in the most visible location, he strokes Kimberly's silk-draped buttocks, sips lager and looks around to see who he knows.

    "Is that Heather?" He points to a booth.

    Kimberly squints into the darkness. "She said she'd be here. Yes, it is. Cow! She's wearing my new blue dress. Who's that she's with?"

    "I've no idea," Mike says, but intends to find out. He's possessive about both sisters. Heather's his backup in case anything happens to Kimberly before they're married.

    Investment in tow, he threads through the milling drinkers and approaches the booth. "Hello Heather. Enjoying yourself?"

    Judging from the assortment of empty cocktail glasses on the table, the answer would be a yes.

    Mike stares at the man sitting beside Heather and takes an instant dislike to him. Too tall and broad-shouldered. Dressed not much better than a cowboy - he wouldn't have even been allowed in if he weren't accompanied by a Dopfer - obviously he's a parasitic gold-digging gigolo. The man stares back, inspecting Mike's scars with insolent curiosity. Dislike quickly deepens into hatred.

    "Absolutely," Heather heartily confirms she's having a good time.

    "Who's your friend?"

    "Oh, yes. This is Josh. Josh Barnett. He's from Texas." She glances at her date, then at Kimberly, then Mike. "This is my sister and her fiancé."

    Mike's heard that name before, he's sure. Somebody famous? Has to be a coincidence. It's a common enough combination.

    "Nice to meet you," the American drawls, but he doesn't stand up or offer his hand in greeting. "Heather's told me all about you both. Planning a wedding in the fall?"

    "Yes," Kimberly volunteers. "We are."

    The look she gives the Texan suggests she might be persuaded to change her mind. Mike's grip tightens on her fingers and she casts him a questioning frown ... which the fucking cowboy notices.

    Men like Josh make Mike sick. He'd like to mess up that pretty-boy face. "Known each other long?"

    Couldn't be more than a couple of days since Mike last spoke to Heather. She hadn't mentioned him then.

    Josh replies, "Long enough to get to like this little lady one hell of a lot." He winks at Heather.

    The way she simpers, she actually seems to have swallowed the line, plus the hook, the sinker, and the entire fucking Icelandic fishing fleet.

    Mike asks, "What brings you to Switzerland?"

    "A plane." The American grins, then as the girls giggle and Mike's eye begins to twitch, he adds, "Just joking. I travel a lot. It was Switzerland's turn."

    So, he can't or won't explain what he does for a living. The arsehole's obviously on the hunt for a rich wife, and Heather appears more than willing to oblige.

    "Stroke of luck, coming here," Josh goes on, and nods agreement to his own words. "Heather says her father might find me a place in his company. You've apparently lost one of your best couriers lately."

    Yes, and it took some doing, you fucking Neanderthal. Mike's hands itch with the need to punch Josh's lights out. I've made better men than you disappear off the face of the planet.

    But he smiles. "If we're likely to be working on the same team, we should meet up for a drink. I can give you some tips." Some very sharp tips.

    "Sure. Just say when and where. I'll be there."

    Mike suggests the most remote bar in the vicinity, partway up a mountain and almost surrounded by forest. "Good lager, and quiet on a Sunday night."

    "Sounds great," Josh replies. "See you there tomorrow. Eight-thirty okay?"

    "Perfect." Of course, Mike will tell the sisters that the Yank never showed up.

 

Stonefish

Switzerland

 

A man like McLaughlin has no understanding of psychology. He thinks everyone's the same as him - lying, cheating, and prepared to destroy other people's lives for his own gain. Now while that's true in our case, Joshua might have been just a regular bloke who really was called Barnett, looking for a steady job and a girl, and no threat at all to McLaughlin's ambitions. We'd anticipated Josh having to dig much deeper or do a lot more winding up to provoke retaliatory action. But apparently our subject's successes to date have made him rather blasé about murder.

    The venue for their meeting is a single-storey chalet half-hidden in woodland above the lakeside town. Delicate alpine flowers shiver outside in the cold breeze as the sun begins to set. Inside, a small elderly bloke serving at the cluttered bar is probably its owner, given that the curios decorating the room look as bizarre and antique as he does. His interest in his customers doesn't extend beyond taking their money. After closing the till, his eyes clamp back on the tiny TV set muttering amidst dusty plastic daisies, music boxes and cuckoo clocks.

    If it weren't for Arnaud and me, and two old men playing cards, the place would be deserted. Apparently the beer's better than the coffee, which wouldn't be difficult. Both are preferable to hiding outside with Geet and Kees, but considering the whole team's here on this one (slow time of year) we can keep all eventualities covered. We're padded up against the chilly night, so a certain amount of body armour lurks beneath our jackets.

    In accordance with our plan, the subject arrives before Josh. Leaving his BMW at the far end of the car park, McLaughlin strolls inside, buys a super-strength lager and stands at the bar, sipping from the bottle. He looks fit enough, slim, sandy-haired and about six foot tall. He's wearing jeans, an open-necked shirt, a sports jacket, and chunks of gold on his fingers. As expected, there's no sign of a knife or gun, but we've decided he's the stiletto type - a sneaky blade in the back.

    It would be interesting to find out what happened to his face. Something like that can make a bloke overly sensitive. I suspect that Joshua, so good-looking that he scarcely has to raise an eyebrow to get laid, rubbed McLaughlin up the wrong way by simply existing. That he then made a point of staring at those scars was just the cherry on top.

    Speaking of the devil, Joshua's hire car pulls into the car park and he manoeuvres it nice and close to the Beemer. McLaughlin watches through the window and doesn't bother to suppress the smile. He's thinking this is going to be easy.

    He calls a greeting when Josh enters the bar, and holds up the bottle. "Can I get you one?"

    "Yeah thanks. The same."

    When both have drinks, they settle at a table not too far from ours, McLaughlin facing away from me. Arnaud and I fake a game of cards while I eavesdrop on the conversation via Josh's special cell phone and my earpiece.

    They talk about the usual opening stuff, the brand of lager and the lousy weather, then cars. McLaughlin attempts the topic of football ... soccer ... but realises he's onto a loser with the American. The drink vanishes quickly and Joshua goes to buy more.

    When he returns, they discuss the Dopfers. Though Kurt's Austrian, his wife's English; that goes some way to explaining the daughters' names. The family chose to live in Switzerland, apparently because the people here are less nosey about the rich and famous. McLaughlin's in his element, explaining how he met and wooed the fair Kimberly, and making insinuations about how hot she is in the sack. Then he buys the next round.

    "Don't mind me asking, Mike," Josh ventures as McLaughlin puts the bottles on the table and sits down. "What happened to your face?"

    The man's back stiffens, but he forces out an answer.

    "Acid."

    "Fuck, no! How?"

    "I pissed someone off."

    I bet he did. People rarely learn.

    "Dude, hope you got even," Josh says.

    McLaughlin shrugs, swallows some lager and detours further into murky waters. "If you're going to work for us, you should know that the Dopfer business employs a few unsavoury characters."

    "Figured so." Josh looks right at him, tips his bottle in a salute then takes a deep pull. His breath hitches and he pats his stomach - the alcohol starting to take effect. "In fact, I'm relying on it, Mike."

    That earns a hard stare.

    During all this, Arnaud and I shuffle, deal, lay down cards, slide coins across the artificially distressed table top, and murmur a French word or two. Occasionally, one of the wooden clocks on the wall whirrs, regurgitates an asthmatic cuckoo then sucks it back.

    Joshua takes another swig and dives into the deep end. "Now if I could get the confidence of Kurt the way you have, I'd be a real asset to the business, and the family. We could help each other out, Mike, cover each other's asses. After all, there's enough money and sisters to go round." He then notices his bottle's empty, so he fetches more.

    It seems McLaughlin's decided to string him along, to be Master Craftsman to Josh the admiring apprentice; they discuss tactics over another couple of rounds. The suggested strategy includes sly hints about character assassination and disappearances. His confidence inflated by alcohol, no matter how in control he imagines himself, Mike uses euphemisms and gestures to brag about his exploits, secure in the knowledge that all will remain unrepeated.

    By now, Josh is blinking a lot and has a slight slur. We four and the ancient landlord are the only folks left in the bar. Time for Arnaud and me to make ourselves scarce. We drink up and leave, then take cover in the night.

    The lights are going out as the last two customers emerge from the door, Josh stumbling on the porch.

    "Watch your step there," McLaughlin says, cheerfully. "The cars are over this way, remember. You going to be alright driving?"

    "Sure." Josh punctuates that with another hitched breath.

    Progress across the badly lit car park is slow, but when they near the vehicles, McLaughlin walks even slower, falling slightly behind. His hand reaches inside his jacket then metal gleams in the gloom.

    I whistle. Josh hits the ground rolling while Kees springs up from between the cars and fires a Taser. The subject goes down, convulsing. His stiletto skids across the tarmac as Geet dashes in to clamp an anaesthetic-soaked cloth over the gaping mouth. In seconds, stillness ensues. Relieved, I slide the redundant Sig P220 back into its holster and we handcuff McLaughlin's wrists and ankles before bundling him into the back seat of the hire car.

    Kees drives the winding mountain roads towards the agreed rendezvous and I ride up front with him, keeping an eye on our heavily sedated guest. The BMW follows with Arnaud at the wheel and Joshua probably still grinning. Our convoy's completed by Geet who's retrieved my Lexus SUV from its woodland hideaway.

    By the time we reach our destination, McLaughlin's awake but confused by too much chemistry and electricity. I ring Benni Dopfer.

    "Hello, sir. We have your problem contained, and can confirm your suspicions are correct."

    I watch the subject as I speak. He frowns in a vague sort of way, his scars puckering at odd angles.

    Benni simply says, "Finish it."

    "Will do, sir. An unfortunate accident."

    When I close the phone, McLaughlin's suddenly alert. He's shaking his head and searching for something to say. The coin finally makes its way down the sorting mechanism and gives him the green light.

    "I'll pay more than whoever that is. I'll double it. I'll give you a million to kill him."

    I get out of the car to join the others. Arnaud's smoking a much-needed Gitane, the acrid smell of which I almost enjoy. Once we're ready, Kees opens the back door.

    Glancing inside, I allow the subject this much: "Even if you could pay a million, I don't double-cross clients. It's bad for business."

    Given my lack of belief in an afterlife or reincarnation, I'm not sure why I bother explaining. It's not like he'll benefit from the lesson.

    Not even in the very short term, it turns out. The idiot still imagines he has a chance. Struggling violently to escape the cuffs, he screams, "This isn't fucking fair!"

    Kees glares at him. "Neither is stabbing someone in the back, dickhead." Without waiting for a response, he fires the Taser at the man so that Geet can administer another dose of anaesthetic. Then he glances round and adds, "Even if it is just that drunken doos over there."

    Joshua fights off a smirk while Kees and Arnaud haul the subject over to the Beemer, and manhandle him into the driving seat.

    Joining them, Geet turns to look at me.

    I nod.

    From a pocket in his parka, the Nepalese medic takes a contraption, a device he and Josh concocted between them, naming it 'The Impactor'. He uses this now to deliver a swift deathblow to the subject's skull. The resulting injury is consistent with, amongst many other scenarios, a traffic accident. Also, all the consequent mess is inside the car where it belongs. Geet checks the vital signs and smiles as he announces, "Finished." Finally, he removes the handcuffs from the body.

    We rig the car to guarantee it will burn, and thus complete the tragedy of a young man who goes out drinking with a new friend, has one too many and then, when driving home alone, loses control on a bend, skids off the road, and perishes in a fireball.

    As the BMW vanishes over the side into a rocky ravine, Kees sighs. "Waste of a good car."

    "Yeah," Joshua agrees, then belches.

    "Okay about tidying up loose ends with Heather?" I ask.

    "Sure. When she gives me the news of Mike's fate, I'll be so ashamed about letting him drive, that I'll never be able to face her again."

    "Pity," says Kees. "She looked to be worth one."

    Joshua chuckles and winks. "Worth a few more than one, dude."

 

Inspector Darren Patterson

Interpol, United States National Central Bureau, Washington, D.C.

 

Darren picks up the phone on the third ring. "Patterson."

    A familiar thick accent replies, the words full of moisture, "Hello Inspector."

    "Good to hear from you, Vik. Any news?"

    Vikram nearly always has news - an informer without equal - though Darren can't begin to guess how the man unearths so many secrets. He'd met him once; a stooped elderly Hindu, frail alongside Darren's thickset five-eleven frame; swarthy and dishevelled compared with Darren's Caucasian geometry: square shoulders, military flat-top and trimmed blond beard. It would be easy to underestimate Vikram, but Darren doesn't make such mistakes. He hasn't hauled himself up the Interpol hierarchy by accepting stereotypes, or by following the countless Goddamn rules.

    "Yes," Vik answers. "Confirmation that we just missed him in Africa."

    That sounds like an accusation, but Darren lets it pass.

    "I suspected as much. If we'd had a few more hours..."

    "The trail's gone cold."

    Damn. This informer has handed Darren some of his greatest triumphs: a terrorist cell, an international drugs cartel and a team of East Europeans trafficking children. The credit always goes to the arresting police force, naturally, but Darren knows it is his own efforts that bring the beasts to bay. And of all the world's villains, Stonefish is the trophy he most wants. Vikram, as the key to that success, must be kept optimistic and onside.

    "Don't worry. He'll not lie low for long. Keep digging. So will we."

    "Of course, Inspector. Stonefish cannot keep his reputation inflated without the oxygen of publicity."

 

Lobo

Washington, D.C.

 

After saying goodbye, Lobo closes the cell phone and drops the Indian accent. "Thank you, Inspector." Then he chuckles. With Interpol and every police force on the planet working for him, he can't fail.

 

 

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mr.shelley wrote 566 days ago

I’m almost lost for words here, Sly. OK, so it’s a thriller and one hopes to be gripped, but this grabs the reader by the collar and propels them round the world at breakneck speed. That we don’t get completely lost is largely down to the way you maintain PoV with the steady hand of a hitman, even when two scenes close-up involving the same character (Josh in the first chapter) are drawn from different angles.

I was constantly out of my depth with this story, seriously challenged by its complexity. I can’t begin to grasp the imaginative skills, the research, the design skills and the concentration it must have taken to write it. And you write proficiently. Your spare prose contains hardly a redundant word, and yet it is constructed on just-so verb and noun choices. One of my favourite moments, we’re up a Swiss mountain in the barren car park of a no-hope bar, about to commit a murder, and you tell us: ‘Delicate alpine flowers shiver in the cold breeze.’ Not a bad description of the state you’ve put your readers in… Fabulous image-making.

‘Stonefish’ stands out from a host of published thrillers through its sub-text. Whilst we recognise the amoral nature of the contract killer’s job, with constant reminders that we mustn’t get attached to your characters and certainly not to heroise them (‘We’re paid killers; what we do is illegal, immoral and repulsive. We’re not the good guys; we’re just not as bad as the men we kill’), there is also this ethical undercurrent in the choice of targets, and – in the case of the African elimination – a geopolitical / philosophical dimension which suggested to me the author had a world view I could plug into. This made it even easier to keep scrolling.

After a few chapters I only gave up because my eyes hate on-screen reading. I want to see this in a book, and soon, please.

dreamertothemax wrote 578 days ago

Since I wrote my last comment I have read the rest of the book and I wanted to now comment in full.

Firstly, this book definitely deserves the top spot. It actively draws us into a world (so far removed from our own) that Stonefish and the team inhabit. You feel like you are one of the team, and you become heavily emotionally attached to all of the characters before you've even noticed it.

Unlike many of this genre which are often slightly over the top (going into tooo much detail about what guns and what equipment etc) this novel is spare and faultlessly executed - providing us enough information to bring the scenes to life but not so much that the scenes are overwritten. It gives just enough information for our imagination to fill in the gaps. The author's tone is perfect, the writing is very professional and clearly well edited.

You have bought life to the characters, and especially Stonefish. I feel he is a complex and interesting character - capable of cold-hearted murder (the shark thing is pretty damn mean although the guy did deserve it) but also with his own morals etc. In fact by the end you want to give him a hug because he's a pretty good guy...The rest of the team are equally likeable and we are often given little insights into each of their personalities, from sparky cousins to how some of them go out of their way to help in certain situations...

I like how varied all of the kills are, and I like that each one is justified - so that we are completely hating each of the bad guys by the time they come to die. It reminds me of Burn Notice, a TV programme where an ex-spy fixes peoples problems when the police can't and the bad guys invariably get killed in each episode. But when I watched some of the episodes I sometimes felt uncomfortable that they had got the person killed, which I didn't feel here at all....so you must have done it better.

I read the whole thing in two sittings, although I'd have liked it to be a little longer I thought it was gripping, emotional, funny, interesting, engaging, well researched and every other positive word I can think of.

If this doesn't get published I'll eat my hat...or my novel!

Backed wholeheartedly.
Leila
Life Is Not A Love Song

Aevanyll wrote 620 days ago

I can't remember if I did go back and leave a review on the full book, so if I have, you can disregard this, lol.

There are precious few books I can actively reread and not tire of, but this one takes the cake, Sly. Most books of this genre, once you read through them once, and know what is going to happen, it just doesn't interest you the second time around. Your characters manage to grip the reader so well, though, that they are near and dear to one's heart, and it is a pleasure to reacquaint oneself with them. The plot certainly doesn't hurt. Action, action, jibe, humour, action, sweet moment, action, action.

All threaded through with a nice descriptive touch, charmingly vindictive Scottish ladies, and an inability to hate the idiot Interpol Inspector. The last one was a bit unfortunate, but using his viewpoint in the jungle was very intriguing. The POV of a 'normal' person as regards the team was refreshing.

And even though it is in the thriller, crime genres, there is still a subtle thread of emotion through the book, that draws the reader in, and humanizes Stonefish and his team. And tears your heart, at the end. To top it all off, the chapters read like episodes in a TV series. You don't NEED to read the whole thing through to understand it. You just need to have the will to stop reading when it is midnight and you have work the next morning.

All in all, a brilliant book.

And that is my overall review - Aevanyll

Tari wrote 639 days ago

This is enthralling from the first sentence with the tension between the guy and the scorpion. Tensions accelerate rapidly with the ‘mark’ in the tub, and the girl' joy riding'. Already there is fear, sex and violence. The reader is now captivated. The radar and electromagnetic induction responder is impressive – great in-depth research.

Loved the sentence ‘the porch explodes in a cloud of splinters, steam and Viagra.’

This definitely has a strongly structured dramatic arc starting with an inciting incident of the scorpion, rising tension to a climax and resolution ending with a hook.

That was a clever play on Stone fish and scorpion as the Stonefish as you well know is a member of the scorpion fish family. Maybe that’s why the scorpion skittered away instead of attacking,

You write with almost a fever in the blood, hot, fast and sexy albeit the killers are stone cold vicious but with the deep waters of a dark philosophy underneath. Truly supercharged writing that electrifies the reader.

The narrative is also strong but clear and concise making for an easy flow. The language is exemplary. The style in first person invokes intimacy first off, claiming the reader’s ear and loyalty. The descriptions are excellent from the brawn of Arnaud and Joshua to the ‘dirty little smile’ of Heather. Loved the line ‘verbal trots.’

The demise of McLaughlin gripped the guts, deliciously terrifying. This is surely one for the men, although having said the girls would be entranced.

The chapter was a tapestry of interwoven fragments from the Tropic of Cancer to France to Switzerland and back again ending at Interpol, Washington.

This story is deeply philosophical embracing all the emotions and sins from fear, greed, envy, lust including more with further reading.

Surely unputdownable. If I was reading this page turner in bed it would be an all-nighter.

Already backed with pleasure. This will surely reach the desk.

Kind regards,
Katyxxx
Phobic Dawn.

Anthony Brady wrote 767 days ago

Such a pity a team, that Sly has assembled here, was not operational before the USA/UK Iraq & Afganistan useless ventures. A selective early "take out" of the key despots would have saved millions of the wasted money not to mention the countless casualties. Who said?: " Victory is achieved on the piled up bodies of the dead!" My only regret having read the whole book, was that a cohort of the top arms dealers did not get the treatment. The quotes heading each Chapter are exquisitely apt. I have never come across a more perfect summation of the different styles and periods of high art as can be found here in one stunning paragraph. I will not name the Chapter; others will have to find it for themselves. They won't be disappointed.

This is a movie in words and bound to attract modern film producers because of the wide - global in fact - ethnic diversity of the characters. This is action on a canvas of international dimension. I hoped that Zanga might be tossed head-first down the shaft of his goldmine. What am I saying? I started reading this marvellous book as your typical "bleeding heart - Love & Peace! - Man! Now I am planning to join Sly's team. Just shows you what an effect that brilliant writing like this can have. Definitely one for the best-seller lists. Watch-listed, Shelved, Backed and Commented upon with pleasure.

Tony Brady. - SCENES FROM AN EXAMINED LIFE - Books 1,2 & 3

scoz512 wrote 17 days ago

Hmmmm you may have written some of the best characters I've come across in a while. Fantastic. Lots of good action and suspense. Like the world, like the conflict, like the moral dilemmas...no complaints. Sorry this is sorely lacking any usable critiques or improvement tips, but I guess that just means this needs to be available in book form right about now =). Just wanted to drop you that message. Congrats on the recognition...keep up the good work,

Sara
War of the Wastelands

JKass wrote 80 days ago

Wow, just wow.
Strong stand alone chapters totally did it for me. Straight to the action just about every single time. Great characters, great research ( as they are ex military they would be using weapons, terms, and tactics foreign to a civie. You tackle these rather well). I really liked the variety of the hit methods. You can only read so many chapters of "Bad asses rush in and shoot some guy in the face." before i think I'm reading something written by Jason Stathum, this was never a problem here. It was an around the world trip of badassery not ever seen before on Authonomy. Backed and starred!

wespollet wrote 503 days ago

Hi Sly, I read this in december but didn't get a chance to place on my shelf as it was full. THis IS ONE ACTION PACK STORY ...EVERY CHAPTER IT IS EXCELLENT. i BACK IT AND HAVE PLACE IT ON MY SHELF!. HAROLD ALVIN(icon)WESLEY

RonParker wrote 520 days ago

Hi Sly,

I see you aready made it to the top without my help and it's eay to see why. Congratulations and well done.

Good luck.

Ron

Susanna.K.James wrote 521 days ago

Hi Sly
I've read to the end of Chapter Two and I loved it (although it is not my normal genre.) I was particularly impressed with your detail and originality when it came to the 'kills.' So many other people have commented that I'm not sure that I can offer much advice to improve this stunning piece of writing, however, I do have one or two observations to make.
Firstly, I was also a bit stunned when you launched into first person for Stonefish's point of view but I can see why you have done it and eventually I got used to it and enjoyed it. By giving us his POV in 1st person you immediately make him a more sympathetic character and the reader empathises with him. Making a cold blooded killer into a sympathetic character was not going to be easy and this definitely helps; we have insight into his consideration for his 'escort' and his men. You have also done such a great job in showing the unpleasant characteristics of his 'victims' that I have ended up being totally behind Stonefish. He is not a villain - he is just ridding our world of the truly vile. Good for him. ;)
The second point I wanted to make is a small one. I did wonder when Josh gave his real name in to McLaughlin whether that was going to be a mistake. Is that not a bit amateurish for an assassin? I can see from how Chapter Two is ending that Lobo is going to track down Stonefish through Josh, however, I do think that if it stands out to me - a none thriller reader - that you may have a problem convincing the expert readers of the genre that this would really happen.
I also feel that I must comment on the non-sex scene. For most of chapter two I was reading with dread about what was coming next on Tindale and Raynor's boat. You certainly built up a lot of suspense about the forthcoming sadistic rape of the two girls and to be honest, in a very perverse way, I felt let down by the lack of detail. I suppose that, like the rest of the world, because I have gritted my teeth and ploughed through the gruesome detail of the sadistic and brutal sex scenes in Sven Larrson's 'Dragon Tattoo' trilogy, I expected something similar. I may be totally wrong here but I suspect that more detail about these horrors might be something that your readership has 1.) grown acclimatised to; 2.) now expects and 3.) would to lead to even more sympathy for your protagonist when he rids the world of this fiend. Likewise, depicting some tender moments between Stonefish and his Lady escort would only have increased your reader's sympathy for the character. Describing her as having more 'moves that Garry Kasperov' is clever but very distant.
Finally, can I just suggest that you remove a few commas in the opening few paragraphs, they can be a bit distracting - especially the ones either side of the words 'and' or 'but.' (Totally and grammatically unnecessary.)
I wish you all the best at the editor's desk - you deserve to be there.
Best wishes,

Susanna
'Catching the Eagle'

HannahWar wrote 523 days ago

Sly, I've read all as promised and here's my comment: your writing is excellent, descriptive powers, dialogues, storyline are all solid as a house. I have a few 'buts' now though, and I think it's better to hand them to you then continuing in superlatives of praise.

I wonder why you've chosen to write the Stonefish parts in the first person narrative. According to me, it doesn't really add to the story as that is built up from small units anyway. Everywhere 3rd person narrative would have made the reading smoother, I think. Maybe also because he has a job that is difficult to identify with and he's surrounded by colleagues, who are described with as much, or even more, details. He could also be the MC in 3rd person.

By chapter 4 the build up of the components started to be a bit 'boring', the reader constantly has to switch from one perspective to the other and thinks back to earlier chapters but in between so much has happened already. I found the description of the setting in chapter 4 a little marginal as a result of which I couldn't really tune into this 'job'.

All-in-all, I think you've written a formidable thriller but I wouldn't be surprised that you will be asked to blend it into a more consistent whole instead of the contiunation of separate parts. But, hey, who am I? I'll definitely watch the series when it's on TV. Excellent material for that. Hannah

HannahWar wrote 530 days ago

Dear Sly, halfway into enjoying chapter 3 I have to make one remark already before I forget it. What makes you a superior writer is that you've written a book that will please almost everyone from the learned intellectual (for the immaculate prose) to the average reader (for the engrossing read). You near perfection and that makes a struggling writer such as myself very, very happy (and humble). Love it! Talk to you later. Hannah

Emily Christine Smith wrote 535 days ago

Hi Sly,

Congratulations on making the review in the top five! A while back you kindly commented on my book and I've only just had a chance to reciprocate - not that you need it. Your book is, quite obviously, an immensely thrilling read. I've backed it happily.

I am not one for action books but WOW could you change my mind. The people, the settings, the pace - it's intimidating. All so real and you just have to keep reading. I know my partner would LOVE this book - he's a fan of clever, intriguiing novels with a fair share of bullets and blood spattered throughout. If this were in print - I'd buy it. Absolutely.

I think we'll be seeing this on a shop shelf in no time, Movie rights to something like this has to be a cert!

Well done on clearly scrupulous research and a passion for writing that leaps from the page.

All the best,

Emily
Fanning The Fire

Bob Jones wrote 536 days ago

Hi Sly,
Congratulations on making the editors desk!

Bob Jones / TakeAway

Tom Balderston wrote 536 days ago

Congratulations on your selection.
Tom Balderston
The Wonder of Terra

Mary Air wrote 536 days ago

Congratulations.

Justin Time wrote 536 days ago

Congrats & respect.

weaver58 wrote 537 days ago

Congrats Sly! Well done.

Justis Call wrote 537 days ago

Way to go, CONGRATULATIONS!!

Justis Call
Prestidigitations

Cly wrote 537 days ago

Hi Sly congrats!
Cly (Hybrid)

Beccy Blount wrote 537 days ago

Greetings, Orlando asked me to give you a last minute BACKING! on account of your acute eye.
Beccy.

St. John wrote 537 days ago

This is a fine piece of storytelling and the writing is very polished. You deserve to be where you are - good luck.

Howard Matthews wrote 538 days ago

This should just plain be on the shelves. There are writers with a string of "best selling" titles to their names who can't write this.

Backed and rated

Howard
Heretics of Death

PATRICK BARRETT wrote 538 days ago

I came back to rate you under the new star system and read some more. This is spot-on for its genre and deserves its success. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

Fontaine wrote 541 days ago

Hugely enjoyable, great characters and vivid description. Your book reminded me a litle of one of my favourite authors, Christopher Brookmyre and in particular his (younger) team of mercenaries in All Fun and Games Until Someone Loses An Eye. Your book has great humour which lightens the mood of what could have been a very dark book. I like the MC very much. He is well drawn as are his team and you have gathered together a good cross section. I do hope this book gets published and is the first of many. I think it is highly marketable.
Usually I comment in detail but could find nothing to criticise.
Two phrases I liked and they both made me laugh. 'splinters, steam and viagra' and the moment when he 'crossed the night club floor 'investment in tow'. Very clever.
Will WL for now and get in on my shelf as soon as I can,.5 stars.
Fontaine.
Legacy.

Wussygirl wrote 541 days ago

I'm not a great lover of gun-toting thrillers, Sly, but this one had me hooked. It's the sharp, crisp prose and the ever-changing (and very effective) shifting POVs which did it for me - plus a very engaging central character in Stonefish. Okay, I did raise an eyebrow when he survived a 'graze' to the head from a bullet which Lobo reckoned would have blown it apart like a pumpkin - but I saw it happen on Eastenders recently (Jack) so I guess it's possible. And who wants him dead anyway?

I do hope you're ready with the final MS - this is one that HC cannot ignore!

Shelving you soon, and thank you again for your fab review of my book - you are a real gentleman

*One tiny nit...and only because it was the ONLY time my eye stuck on your text. On page 1, when you say 'Kees is locked onto the subject', wouldn't it read better to follow with: "Go for it," I tell him.

GOOD LUCK!

Andi Rinke
Ginger the Gangster Cat

Trevor Williams wrote 541 days ago

This grabs me despite the fact that I have no sympathy with any of the characters. The laconic delivery and constant changes of location and POV gives the book a filmic quality that makes you want to keep reading.
Backed.

cicuta wrote 542 days ago

Dear Sly, Geet! and I were once good friends. Back and forth, I frantically wrestled with your frenetic thriller, [ You know I am not a critic Sly ], but the sangfroid of your character Stonefish, has a certain likeable quality, that could probably kill you at more than a mile away. I was easily enveloped until chapter four, [ Leaving 5,6 and 7, for when I've got nothing great to read ]. I truly mean that Sly. Its my type of writing, style, panache, professionalism and poise. I would pick this out on a bookshelf in a heartbeat. That's why it'll be on my shelf until you show me the rest. [ I promise to pay for it ]. Seriously though. I can't pick at any punctuation because I have no intentions to be ignorant. But your story and style are fresh and perfect for today's modern publisher. Its a matter of being noticed, without needing to sell your Soul. I can't gush any more without sounding appalling, but truly Sly. This is what they call, " A F*****G BEST SELLER! ". Good luck and best wishes. Carl, [ Cicuta, Arcane ].

Orlando Furioso wrote 542 days ago

May I shamelessly petition for a little shelf time exchange, sir, during your run in?
Orlando
WATCHING SWIFTS

Emma Morgan wrote 542 days ago

I found the switching between first- and third-person narrative a little hard to follow at first, Sly – I think different fonts or formatting might help. The Stonefish sections are more readable, for me; you let the character come out through his choice of language and actions rather than relying too heavily on exposition. (That said, the name ‘Stonefish’ will always remind me of an old character from Neighbours, and I’m probably not alone in this.) You understand your genre and write well within it, sounding informed and authentic when referring to e.g. weaponry rather than like someone who’s just Googled the information they need. Very slick and competent – good luck with getting an HC review.

lionel25 wrote 543 days ago

I read the prologue and first chapter. Very intelligent writing [explodes in a cloud of splinters, steam and Viagra... ...asthmatic cuckoo... spotlight-strafed (appropriate use within the context). Definitely kept my interest.

Only spotted three minor issues.

1. ...sure of a successive single strike. [An alliteration in the works. This is minor, though.]

2. split-second's pause [split-second pause]

3. Use of cliches. This works well when you modify them., eg. swallowed the line, plus the hook, the sinker, and the entire fucking Icelandic fishing fleet. The plain ones like "kicked puppies" and "the cherry on top" sound, well, like cliches.

On the whole, this has serious commercial potential. Very satisfying read. Happy to shelve your work.

mongoose wrote 543 days ago

OMG< just checked back and I first read this 433 days ago!!! At the time I said it was a cracking good read, really well done but not my usual type of thing. Funny, I think my tastes must be changing because, re-reading it, I found myself REALLY enjoying it. :) And silly me for leaving it so long.. I barely dare say it (because it's like giving the kiss of death) but surely THIS is commercial enough for HC tastes? It's also extremely well-written and bloody visceral (and I do like my viscera). I can feel my father smiling (from wherever it is that violence-loving old soaks go after they pop their clogs) and muttering 'told you so'.... He'd raise a glass of scotch to your success. I might run to a Midori!
HUGE good luck. Janex

Doomsday-profit wrote 545 days ago

Very well done. I like the style. No need to elaborate further, it has all been said. Best of luck.

CarlosRedivivus wrote 546 days ago

Sly--nicely done--gentlemen 'serial killers' (so to speak) in a serialized format. Very tightly written--and (as seems appropriate) no more 'back-story' on the principals than is strictly necessary to tell them apart, give them separate voices and functions. You don't need any help from a reader ranked 4588--but I'm putting you on the shelf for November--to do what I can to keep you on the desk. Best regards, Tony

Marita A. Hansen wrote 546 days ago

Hi, Sly. Well, I can see why you have so many backers. This is a very tight and well-written story. Your plot/structure and characters are very strong. The layering of scenes, alternating between Stonefish, the subject, and the authorities/people chasing Stonefish, creates an interesting plot. In the Prologue we are shown exactly what Stone and his crew do, no mucking about, just straight in with the action. After the introduction of Stone and his men (a bunch of ex-marines) the reader is shown the next target, Mike McLauglin, a very unsavoury fella. In the 3 chapters I had time to read, I thought the different ways in which these men were eliminated were ingenious, my favourite being Kerry ending up as Shark bait-a suitably sadistic ending for the sadist. And I didn't feel sympathy or horror at their untimely deaths either, because they were so horrible that Stone was basically doing the world a favour by taking them out.

Stone and his men are great characters. Their physical description as well as their idiosyncrasies make them likeable. Because of this I don’t want them to get caught by Interpol/Inspector Darren Patterson/Lobo. The way in which the authorities are attempting to get Stone through Josh builds the tension in the story, making me nervous. I give you credit that you’ve created characters that kill but come across as sweethearts-how the hell did that happen?

In relation to your writing style, I thought it suited the subject matter. I especially liked the way in which you described people, in particular the subjects. It felt like you were giving the reader a dossier on them, like an assassin is given: all the information required for the hit. It was precise, nothing flowery and straight to the point.

However, your style wasn’t clinical, and had nice touches of description, eg. Occasionally, one of the wooden clocks on the wall whirls, regurgitates an asthmatic cuckoo then sucks it back. I thought this was clever.

All up, this is an entertaining read. Best wishes, Marita.

Old Bob wrote 547 days ago

This is a really gripping story with a lot of characters. I think it will be easier to track them once I become more familiar with them. I feel everyone is going to be significant -maybe some of the gang to the detriment of Stonefish. This is a classic thriller beginning and it's got me hooked. Right now I want to read more before I say more.

Good luck, Sly.

Old Bob

lisawb wrote 548 days ago

I backed this before, and have again had it on my shelf for some time, it deserves to be on the Editor's desk. It is compelling, full of depth and very talented.

Backed and rated with pleasure.

Lisa

JeffCorkern wrote 549 days ago

This easily deserves my backing. I have seen exactly this kind of stuff on sale. I don't think Authonomy has made an offer for anything that made the ED's desk yet, but this might break the pattern.


This is pretty black-and-white stuff. The good guys are GOOD GUYS. The bad guys are BAD GUYS. And the girls all have VERY LARGE BREASTS. There's a substantial audience for this kind of story-telling.

You write it well. There's a spot or two where it might be overblown, but I think it would be better to let an editor make that decision.

"This hotel HAD BEGUN life as a Cistercian abbey---" The act of beginning life began and ended in the distant past, and therefore past perfect is required.

"McLaughlin's in his element, explaining how he met---" Needs a comma pretty badly. It reads awkwardly without it. Again I suggest some grammar study.

"Joshua agrees, then belches." Comma needed here too.

The Mystery of Esmirrena wrote 549 days ago

Ok, so here it is:

- first, I think thriller isn't my favorite genre... so for me, chapter one is enough... sorry.
- apart from that, I can see there have been some real work, choosing the right words, making sure the readers get himself included in the story as a attentive audience. That's what is going to bring you to the editor's desk this month or for sure the next!

So good luck!

Cheers! Jeremie

Saint wrote 551 days ago

Back to you, Sly...

I read chapter one of Stonefish. You didn't disappoint me. Now I know why you're ranked way up there. Wow, what kind of mind does someone have who writes this? Scary! Hopefully you don't speak from "assassin" experience. I'll never know, will I?

From that first line in chapter one--"If someone intends to kill you, they'll probably succeed." Scary, but a true notion. It sets the tone for the book and we know your protag is ruthless and almost emotionless.

I haven't read too many books in present tense. I wrote my first novel in present tense and had an editor tell me it was the most difficult. Do you agree? Was there a reason you chose this tense?

You write with the experience of a great writer--changing from first person to third. You rarely use attributions--he said, she said, etc. Your dialogue clips along and you get right to the action creating scenes packed with punch. You know how to start your scene late and exit early...perfect.

Here are a few of my favorite phrases: lyrical Nepali accent, verbal trots, threads through the milling drinkers, parasitic gold-digging gigolo, the way she simpers, she actually seems to have swallowed the line, plus the hook, the sinker..., alpine flowers shiver outside in the cold breeze. Ah! Beautiful. You bring inanimate objects to life and give us a prompt visual on your characters without overdoing the description.

I really enjoyed your quick, sharp voice. It's definitive--never waffling, only certain and committing--like you're driving down the autobahn, your destination in clear view.

I'm hopeful that you've given your protag a weakness. So far he seems in total control--which is true to character. However, I want to feel emotion for him. What makes him do what he does? Is he emotional about anything? If so, what? Will that lead to his demise? I'll have to read on to find out, won't I? So far I like him because he's not flamboyant and doesn't drink. (Although, I have to admit I hate the f-bomb, but I'm a prude.)

I'll have to look up what a sychophant is. Here in America I think we call them psychopaths. Do you mean the same?

Do you have a publisher for this? Tell me more. I look forward to reading on. I will back this book.

Michelle (WILLOW)

jaydee wrote 551 days ago

Yet again, I am sooo jealous of the talent I find on this site, and so desparing of ever matching that talent, I might as well pull my book and run!
You are a wordsmith. This reads so flawlessly that I was carried along and drawn in from the first paragraph. I will read and, hopefully, learn something from you. This is how i want to write: succint, captivating, with characters that are believable.
Ready to buy the book.

Lynne Jones wrote 551 days ago

I checked this out last night and was completely hooked. I'm going to back it regardless of whether you read mine. I hope your HC review bears fruit. Jo.

PonyBoy wrote 552 days ago

What happened to my comments? They disappeared.

PonyBoy wrote 552 days ago

Really good book. Second good hit man book I have read here. I would recommend The Suicide Game by Andy Rouch to anyone here who enjoys these types of books. I happily back you and will spread the good word around the site, Mr. Sly.

PonyBoy wrote 552 days ago

Really good book. Second good hit man book I have read here. I would recommend The Suicide Game by Andy Rouch to anyone here who enjoys these types of books. I happily back you and will spread the good word around the site, Mr. Sly.

scottkenny wrote 553 days ago

Great first chapter Sly. Backed, Scott.

StarSeeker wrote 553 days ago

I understand why this is so popular. What a great character you have developed in Stonefish. I found the POV to be refreshing--seeing the view from his perspective...yet I don't find him fluffy or too likeable...just likeable enough for me to want to know what happens!
Sue

Wye wrote 553 days ago

Very good read interesting perspective. I'm sure it will do well.
Amelia

A Date in the Diary

Michael Parkour wrote 554 days ago

Nice strong POV.

cicuta wrote 554 days ago

Character crazy, and written with real poise. I thought you brought this book, with its bombastic characters, and breakneck plot; To life! Always leading the reader to some different part of their imagination. Sadly though Stonefish, I think the ED's desk will be you enemy. This book will be lost among the hopes of others, after HC's comments. I cannot believe that a publisher hasn't approached you before now. Because I am no critic, the only compliment I can offer is. What a idiot I was not have read this before now. Thanks for the memories, and good luck with everything. I genuinely hope you make it. It'd be about time. Cicuta, [ Carl, Arcane ].

stoatsnest wrote 554 days ago

You don't use any excess words and kept me interested throughout. I will back this when I get a slot. A very masculine book and deserves five stars.

S-M wrote 554 days ago

This has a great feel to it and I think the voice is its strongest asset, closely followed by the stylish narrative and dialogue - reads like a novel and worthy of a HC review.

MrDee wrote 555 days ago

Your book is so good you don't need a crit. Backed

Joanna Stephen-Ward wrote 555 days ago

Yes, I remember this even though I read it a long time ago. I'm sure I shelved it too. I'll star rank it for you now. Thanks for the message.

Joanna

Linda Brendle wrote 558 days ago

Sly, I'm a fairly slow reader, and since I hate to read on-line, I usually read a chapter or two and leave it at that. In your case, I made an exception. I read all 7 chapters and look forward to reading more. I also look forward to seeing Stonefish on the big screen or on TV as a weekly series. Well done! Best of luck.
Blessings,
Linda Brendle
A Long and Winding Road, RVing with Mom and Dad