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date submitted 14.09.2009
date updated 09.12.2009
genres: Fiction, Literary Fiction, Thriller...
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The Olive Tree

chris ricketts

When harsh words are said amidst the branches of an olive tree, the life of Yani Souvris changes irrevocably.

 

Set in the Peloponnese peninsula of Greece, The Olive Tree is the story of Yanni Souvris. When words are spoken in the branches of an old olive tree, his life falls down around his feet. Leaving his sheltered valley existence for the city, Yanni meets Anna, Christos and Adam - others who also have histories to hide. The Olive Tree is a story of how the sins of the fathers are born by the sons, weaving tragedy through the family tree. It is a story of human self-deception amidst earthy passions. It is a lyrical book.

 
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  The Olive Tree

 

On a branch high in the tree, the caterpillar looked at himself in a teardrop of rainwater and failed to see the beauty that lay within...

 

 

Yanni sat at the bus stop, kicking the red sandy earth at his feet.

It was quiet except for the clicking noises of the cicadas as they hopped from leaf to leaf around the nearly dry trickle the villagers called the river. Above his head the olive branches drooped in the midday sun, their black fruits pulling the tree toward the ground. It was nearly November and time for their harvesting. Yanni loved harvest time. The common understanding of seasonal unity where no man or woman felt alone and each had a part to play in the survival of their neighbour. He delighted in the sapping tiredness of a full day’s work; women on ladders collecting the final few riches and men buckling under the weight of over full baskets.

    The bus was late. He picked up a small stone from between his feet and chucked it into the water. A lizard scurried up the dry bank towards the rocks above. He would miss all this. It had been his world for so long. He had hidden everything so well, created a safe haven for himself. Only his guilt had shattered it.

    A distant rumbling noise broke his thoughts. He looked up the road towards the horizon. It was not the bus. It was Nikos with his creaking, old van filled with barrels of wine. Every Friday he made the journey to the lower village, through the gorge in the mountains. His truck wheezed and rumbled as it pulled its weight apologetically across the uneven surface. Nikos himself added to its misery. He was a colossus of a man, a chest like Atlas but without the bearing of a God. In local legend, Nikos was said to have moved the Hadean Rock - a boulder of granite that lay in the heart of the village blocking the entrance to a small cave. It was behind this rock that the villagers believed was the road to the underworld - the pathway to hell. As a child, Yanni had worried that it would be his fate to find himself dragged, kicking and screaming, towards this rock and that the earth would then swallow him whole.

    The van rattled past. Yanni waved towards the dusty window. He knew that Nikos had seen him but there was no response, his gaze was fixed steadily on the road ahead. He was just like everyone else. They had averted their eyes as he carried his bag down the steep road. His grandfather had warned him that people would be cruel in their objection. He had had advised him that leaving the village was the only escape.

    ‘Yanni, a small community like ours never accepts. You’ll be alone in your life here.’

    However he had always felt alone. Even in the presence of crowds on a bright summer’s market day, the stalls dripping with the home-made produce of the people of the valleys, he had felt alone. They smiled, they talked, they whispered gossip of those not present, but they didn’t know him. They bought his jars of sweet-tasting forest honey, bartering them for eggs, bread or cheese and his secret remained unknown; and it could have so easily remained that way. He had hidden it for so long, buried it so deep within him that even his own soul had denied its truth; but it had  fought its way to the surface, ugly and destructive, even more powerful for its suppression.

His mother had cried, his father had turned cold and spat insults at his feet. Only his grandfather had given him the time to explain, to try to communicate his feelings; but nobody sat with him now, they all knew he was leaving and their shutters were closed and their doors bolted.

    Yanni looked up the road towards the village. The houses were small, the streets narrow and sandy, and clothes hanging from overhead balconies moved gently in the breeze. The only audible noise was the clanging and clattering of sheep bells, adorning the doorway of the only shop in the village. It was here that Grandfather lived. His shop was like the Delphic Oracle. From within its four walls, men and women would solicit advice from one of the oldest villagers. Dressed in his hand-woven jacket, Grandfather would stroke his beard and widely open his eyes. Every shopper left with a grey-haired wisdom that often gained further respect as it travelled throughout the community. The weather, births, deaths - all understood from the wisdom of his Grandfather.

    As a boy, Yanni had sat on the woollen rugs at the back of the shop and listened to their stories. With loaves of bread tucked under their arms, they would lean over the counter and divulge their meagre transgressions; but Yanni knew that his transgression would not be dealt with this way - he knew that if he leant over that same counter, darkness would fall on that little shop and the Hadean Rock would roll.

    A cloud of dust was coming towards him. It was the bus. From the isolated village high in the mountains, it would take Yanni down to the coast where the blue Aegean washed the shores. A sense of fear crept through his bones beneath his white cotton shirt. He suddenly realised that he might never see his village again and that the world outside was a place of strangers. How would he survive without his family and security? Part of him wanted to run back up the road, throw himself in front of the bolted doors and beg for forgiveness; but villagers were strange with something they did not understand, there was no prescribed attitude, there was no structure on which to base their feelings, and so they cut off the offending invader from their society and closed the door to his face.

    With a creaking of tired brakes and numerous journeys, the yellow bus stopped at the feet of Yanni. He took a last glance at the village and stepped on board the rough metal rung. Buying a ticket to Patras, he walked down the aisle towards a spare seat. The smell of the bus was almost nauseating-it was acrid with petrol, perspiration and stale perfume. Cigarette butts littered the floor alongside tickets of forgotten travellers carried through the same valleys many months before. As he sat by the streaked window the valley opened up before him; the gorge widened as they descended and the small wizened olive gave way to the imperious poplar and larch that held their heads up high to the clear heavens. Sweet bushes flanked their sides and orchards of oranges and lemons displayed themselves in subservient rows before them. In this greener landscape the houses grew accordingly, balconies became verandas, wood became sandstone brick. The red roofs dominated the valley floor, while flashes of intense colour from the bougainvillea escaped from below their magnificent facades. Yanni had forgotten how rich these valleys were, how different from his mountainous refuge.

    As the bus rattled along more people lined the route- men and women opening cafes, sweeping the streets in front of their houses, hanging their laundry in neat walled gardens; but down here, in their world, the sun baked hotter. He could feel the salty perspiration run in zigzag lines between his shoulder blades and he mopped his brow discreetly with the cuff of his shirt. The girl sitting opposite him smiled and fanned her face with a glossy magazine.

    ‘It’s hot today,’ she said.

    Yanni nodded. She looked American, he thought, but he was not sure. Her face was pretty but her mouth too big. Her skin was pale.

    ‘Do you speak English?

    The soft tone of her voice appealed to him, but he was unsure whether to reply, the inner nagging voice of his father was drowning her words. ‘Foreigners have no shame, no respect for one’s silence or space. They’re invaders. They bring their money, their loose culture, their openness and put up concrete hotels, neon signs.’

    However, it was different now, he could ignore that voice - the village was many dusty roads behind him.

    ‘Yes, I speak English; but not very well,’ he replied, realising that his words sounded staccato, embarrassed in case she thought he was uneducated.

    She turned in her seat to face him, her hair catching the sunlight.

‘I’ve just come from Epidaurus,’ she smiled, ‘magnificent! But I suppose you’ve been there many times?’

Yanni would have listened to her idle tourist details without a problem but being asked to take a part in her conversation irritated him.

‘No, I’ve never been.’

His shortness didn’t dissuade her.

‘Oh, you really should, the avenue of trees is beautiful and you walk up a pretty forest path to a huge amphitheatre. They still perform plays there. Can you imagine a more dramatic location to perform in?’

Yanni watched her as she spoke. She was prettier than he had originally thought. Her eyes had a definite sparkle when she talked, the brown flecks smoldering within the green; and, she was near enough to his age, maybe a year or two older, but no more than twenty-four or five; but even so, his mood was not for conversation. He couldn’t shake the gloom that sapped his strength. He looked out the window and watched the ever-changing landscape roll past. It seemed a long time since he had left the familiar sights and sounds of the village.

‘But my favourite place has to be Delphi,’ she continued, her interest unbroken by his reticence. ‘It’s breath-taking, the whole valley opens up before you. And what a climb! I was exhausted by the time I reached the top, but it was worth it.’

He felt jealous of her experiences; she was becoming the invader of his territory. In his dreams he had placed his life in the hands of the Oracle, but in reality its mountainous retreat had always been a journey too far from his narrow existence. He had rarely left the valley, let alone travel out of the peninsular onto the mainland.

‘No, I’ve not seen it.’ It was a brusque answer and all that he could manage in reply. He attempted to dilute its severity with a smile. The effort was far from successful; she appeared disconcerted by his cool demeanour.

‘I’m sorry. I’m talking too much; bad habit when I find things interesting. We just have nothing to compare with all this ancient History in America.’

She frowned slightly, her well-shaped eyebrows sloping down around her eyes. The moment was becoming awkward but he couldn’t think of anything to say. He needed to escape, but his mind couldn’t conjure up the route or how to take it. He thought of yawning, looking tired or falling asleep but that would have been too obvious. It would also have been strange to him. His own worries had kept him awake persistently for the last four months; the message of Easter haunting his nightmares, shadowy figures hidden within each darkened corner of his room.

He could remember standing in front of the small church door, the crowd sweeping past him, swinging and swaying like a giant drunk, meandering from side to side through the dusty streets, a deafening noise pouring from its collective mouth; and held aloft in their penitent hands, hundreds of burning effigies of Judas, each one representing the sinful traitor; the disciple whose name brought curses. It was an old custom of the villages, not practiced in the cities; but it contained such passion for those who upheld the tradition. The traitor was slain over and over again. His soul would never be allowed rest with the vengeance of the multitude.

The bus ground to a halt at a small town. The driver stood up stiffly from his leather seat and gave them twenty minutes.

    ‘Would you like a beer?’ she asked.

    ‘I don’t drink,’ he lied.

    ‘You don’t drink and don’t talk; I really should leave it at that, shouldn’t I?’

    Yanni felt his face redden. The straight-forwardness of her words compelled him to politeness.

‘I’m sorry,’ he called after her, ‘let me buy you a cup of coffee. My name is Yanni.’

He thrust out a hand and she acknowledged his gesture with a smile.

‘I’m Anna, pleased to meet you.’ Her long thin fingers felt fragile in his hand.

They sheltered from the hot midday sun in a small taverna, under a canopy of vine leaves.  Around them sat the other passengers, mostly farmers making their way to the city to buy goods from the large markets.

‘So do you live in that small village high in the gorge?’

The question surprised him and he gave a quizzical smile.

‘I saw you get on the bus,’ she offered.

‘Yes, it’s very small but its home.’

Then, for the first time since they had met, the words tumbled from his lips. With artistry, he painted the details of his village - the shop, the kafeneio, the old Byzantine church creaking under the weight of its turbulent history and the cross in the square, proudly carrying the names of those who had lost their lives for the resistance. In his accounting, he realised how hard it would be to turn his back on all these things. He knew so little beyond the isolated world among the clouds. He inwardly laughed at his own poetic way of thinking – ‘among the clouds’. It had often felt that way when he had climbed the olive trees in the garden and looked across at the white dense band bringing rain, descending into the valley during winter.

‘You can talk when you want to,’ she said, the corners of her mouth rising in a smile.

‘If you’d stepped from the bus onto my streets, then you would understand,’ he countered.

    ‘You’re lucky to feel that way about your home.’

    Yanni thought of his grandfather and his shop on the corner and the people gathering on market day to parade their weekly gossip.

    ‘Are you away for the day or a longer trip?’ she asked.

    This was a question he had not contemplated answering. He lowered his eyes and distractedly pushed his coffee cup around the table. She sensed his discomfort.

    ‘I’m sorry, I didn’t mean to pry.’

    ‘It’s all right.’

    They sat in silence until the bus started to fill and they left the awkwardness behind them with their empty coffee cups. This time she sat next to him. He felt dirty and scruffy beside her. His clothes were clean but they were old, his skin filled with the dust of the dry mountain air and as dark as his roughly knotted shoes. She had a brightly coloured dress, short above the knees and daringly thin. Her shoulders were bare and he could smell her perfume. On her lap she carried a leather rucksack. He didn’t think it would hold very much, it seemed small for a trip around Greece.

    ‘You travel light?’

    ‘Oh no, my main luggage is back in Athens. This is only a few bits and pieces. I could never have carried it all.’

    ‘Aren’t you scared travelling alone? You don’t even speak the language.’

    ‘I enjoy travelling and I’ll always find someone to talk to,’ she smiled. ‘Besides this is the home of all my heroes. I had to come here, whether alone or not.’

    ‘Heroes?’

    ‘I studied Ancient Greece back home. It was part of my degree.’

    He had always wanted to go to university. He had studied hard at school, assiduously completing his homework while his elder brother ran around the fields pushing the goats in front of him with a thick olive branch.

‘You like our country for more than the beaches then?’

‘I haven’t even been to one yet.’

    The roads were wider now and the bus moved faster. The houses changed from wood and brick to pre-cast concrete. A boring similarity crept into their design and Yanni felt that all individuality had been swallowed by the mass of people huddled in their rambling streets. His shirt collar tightened as he thought of their cars, their jobs, their wives and children. His throat choked and his hands sweated at the unfamiliarity of their faces. He needed to know someone and he needed to be known.

    ‘How long are you staying in Patras?’ he asked.

    It was the first time he had opened a conversation.

    ‘Maybe a week,’ she smiled, happy for his curiosity. ‘Why?’

    Yanni smiled awkwardly, not knowing how to phrase his words.

    ‘It is just that I could do with a friend in this place.’

    ‘Good,’ she nodded, ‘I’d like some company too; but just friends, yeah? I’m not sociable in every way.’

    The innuendo made him blush. It was a thought that hadn’t in any way crossed his mind but she had made him feel as if his request for company was something base and forward.

    ‘I’m not interested,’ he replied. It was probably due to a mixture of his English skills and his embarrassment but the result was almost rude; and although he realized it, he felt safer not changing it or taking it back.

    They sat in silence through the last of the journey, looking at the city as it unfolded outside their window - a moving kaleidoscope of colour and confusion, richness and intensity. Yanni was shattered by the stream of noise that flowed from the bustling streets. Cars honked impatiently, drivers shouted angrily and women tugged children behind arms full of shopping; all of their faces strange, all of their lives unknown.

Anna smiled at him as his face portrayed his worried emotions.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Vanessa Darnleigh wrote 712 days ago

...he had had advised him...
Very nicely crafted with wonderful descriptive passages...the dialogue also works to bring out the character of Yanni and the tourist...very impressive indeed...good luck with it
Stewart

Becca wrote 737 days ago

Yanni is a very REAL character. We like him off the bat, and his annoyance at the girl is both understandable and forgivable. It's hard to put into words what you have done here. Sometimes you keep things very simple, and it's powerful. Other time things are fresh... eyebrows sloping down around the eye, for example...and that's powerful too. Yanni's feeling about home go beyond nostalgia, though there is that too. I sense he has a curious past that will become more clear as we read on. this was a beautiful read.

xBeccaX
The Forever Girl

Burgio wrote 777 days ago

This is a good story. Your descriptions of Greece are wonderful. Made me want to plan a vacation to there. You do equally well fleshing out your characters. The theme is tried and true (the father's sins extend to the son) but it's tried and true because it always makes for a good story. I'm adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

Andee Hughes wrote 815 days ago

I like Yanni. The writing is wonderful, totally evocative of Greece. And I just love the first sentence ... beautiful.
Backed.
Andrea. Breach of Faith.

chvolkoff wrote 861 days ago

Ah, Greece...this is very evocative, flowing. Yanni is real, believable, likeable. The writing goes from the straightforward to the beautiful. A pleasure to read, on a par with "Inside Out". On my shelf :)

Carole Somerville wrote 864 days ago

You have a descriptive writing style that truly sets the scene.
Good luck with this,
On my shelf,
Carole

Alexander De Witte wrote 875 days ago

Pitch brilliant; Book Cover evocative; Opening Verse about the caterpillar's reflection in the raindrop heavenly.

This is a marvellously conceived story. Excellent descriptive touch throughout the chapters I looked at (earliest few). Compelling characters. I like this because it is similar in its concerns to my piece, while being different to it yet equally original. Easy to back this. Delightful and will do very well, I'm sure.

Alexander *The Wisdom Tree and the Dormouse*

alias miss ferkit wrote 879 days ago

Thought I'd backed this days ago...I'm so behind! And I do like this very much: Lyrical, but builds something solid. Solid, the dust of the road in the air. There are so many lovely turns of phrase, and I mean, *so* many - that I find myself with mental blue pencil on a couple that seem 'off'. Twice - both times at the ends of chapters - which is where you want graceful execution. Last line of ch 1: questionable use of the word 'portray'. (Do you mean that Anna was observing play of emotions on his face?) Last line of ch 3: "There were too many unanswerable questions" seems bland as a final line of a chapter - because you're a strong stylist. Look at the end of, say ch 2: that's your power as a writer! So - I'd want to see something graceful / decisive / precise / poetic in these two places.

You have something beautiful and promising here,
Andrea
(Last Days of the Transitional Objects Institute)

Phyllis Burton wrote 881 days ago

Hello Chris, I have now read some of your second story and it doesn't disappoint. Your writing is indeed lyrical and I love the thought of a truck 'wheezing' - just one of many wonderful lines. It is Christmas (almost) and I will read some more of your story after the holidays, but in the meantime, I will back it to the hilt! Well done. SHELVED of course. Happy Christmas.

Phyllis Burton
A Passing Storm (Please would you have a look t this for me?)

writingwildly wrote 882 days ago

Really enjoying this. Like this line
Cupid has misfired in your direction ... Intelligent and funny. I enjoyed the characters from the start, and know you will provide a terrific story to go along with them.
backed
- Genevieve
Under The Same Sky
ps I'd love to know what you think of my book sometime.

Jane Alexander wrote 883 days ago

How could I NOT love this? It is set in one of my favourite places in the entire world, and you even mention Epidauros in the first chapter! I could have known I would like the writing, from your other work, so that's a given but this is so different - and so lovely.
Sorry, short comment as I have no heating and i can barely type for the cold.... which makes me crave even more the Grecian sun.
Very backed
Jane
WALKER

PS - thank Callaghan for this - I hadn't evenrealisd you had another book up..;)

Callaghan Grant wrote 884 days ago

Wow... I wish I could back this book more than once so I am plugging you to everybody. Beautiful work and I WILL read all of it but now I need to press on thru my queue.

Very impressed. LOVE! Callaghan

Callaghan Grant wrote 884 days ago

Chapter 3: A few typos, otherwise, beautiful. Your characters are dimensional, your description deeply moving. I love this work -- even better than "Inside Out". It's captivating! Great job!

Loving regards,

Callaghan

CaroA wrote 894 days ago

You have really captured the atmosphere of small village isolation in this.
Can I suggest you chop the last paragraps, - endthe chapter with the comment about him not taking it back his badly worded reply to her.
Shelving this. good luck with it. .

Harclubs wrote 896 days ago

I really enjoyed this. The setting in the opening chapter was wonderful. It reminded me of my youth, when my parents would call home to the village where I was born. There was only one telephone in the entire village and that was in the cafe. It was answered by whoever was in the general vicinity and there was always a rucus as someone was sent to summon my uncles and aunts. Your opening captures that feeling of reluctant change wonderfully well

Andrew W. wrote 897 days ago

The Olive Tree

Hi Chris,

You are right it is a lyrical story, weaved in words. Fantastic, clear, concise and well-edited writing, we could have an instant classic on our hands. But I don't think you should say the bit about weaving magic, lyrical etc in your pitch it sounds boastful, leave it to people like me to say that. Powerful story, dressed beautifully in words, majestic, human, emotionally engaging from the off. A magical scene, a wonderful focus, characters who walk fully formed and complex onto the page.

There was no problem at all in deciding to support this book, very well done, I will advertise this in the forum later, best wishes and good luck
Andrew W
(Sanctuary's Loss)

Diwrite wrote 898 days ago

This is a very accessible read.
The writing evokes a sense of place very easily, and the charactaristics of a national people are portrayed warmly and without cliche.
I found myself intrested in the main character and want to join him on his journey - both geographical and emotional.
Backed with pleasure.

Barbara Silkstone wrote 898 days ago

Chris,
I've put the Olive Tree on my Watchlist and will read this weekend.
Barbara Silkstone

Valley Woman wrote 978 days ago

Hi Chris,

I found this delightful novel on one of the book charts the other day. I am captivated by your writing, details that pop off the page. In fact, in reading this flowing literature, I feel the Greek sun on my back, I can smell the food cooking in the taverna and basically you place me there, as a reader.

The beginning of your first chapter drew me in. You seep out the details of Yanni's secret, little by little, leading with bread crumbs. As a reader, I know he must have done something unforgiveable to have shutters and doors of the villagers slammed in his face and to be disowned by his parents.

I will read more later and definitely shelve in a couple of days or so. Really, this is gorgeous! And the characters are already getting under my skin, in a good way. I feel for Yanni and the burden he carries.

Patricia
All Saints' Day

paxie wrote 978 days ago

Chris

This is what I call an 'armchair read' more comfortable to sit back and enjoy it, than to read leaning over a lap top.....Its very well written and draws the reader immediately to the picturesaque Greek mountainside..... I thought the dialogue flowed well....Anna did a good job of drawing Yanni 'out'

My only niggle is that I would have liked a clue as to why Yanni kept his secret for so long and then suddenly felt compelled to admit to what he'd done....Surely he's felt guilt all his life, so that's not really the reason he decided to confess......he'd have guessed what the outcome of his confession would have been.....maybe he could reflect whilst waiting for the bus, tell us what keeping a secret like that did to him...

I enjoyed this....best of luck.....shelved

paxie wrote 978 days ago

Chris

This is what I call an 'armchair read' more comfortable to sit back and enjoy it, than to read leaning over a lap top.....Its very well written and draws the reader immediately to the picturesaque Greek mountainside..... I thought the dialogue flowed well....Anna did a good job of drawing Yanni 'out'

My only niggle is that I would have liked a clue as to why Yanni kept his secret for so long and then suddenly felt compelled to admit to what he'd done....Surely he's felt guilt all his life, so that's not really the reason he decided to confess......he'd have guessed what the outcome of his confession would have been.....maybe he could reflect whilst waiting for the bus, tell us what keeping a secret like that did to him...

I enjoyed this....best of luck.....shelved

bonalibro wrote 978 days ago

Chris

I have to agree with Betty K. Chapter 3 is back on track. Well done.

Betty K wrote 978 days ago

Hi Chris:
My eyes are somewhat better and I can finally focus to read some chapters. I really enjoyed the first chapter. It was magnificant. I loved your introduction and your setting. I was immediately drawn into the wonderful eastern Mediterranean setting. Your writing there is superb and I could actually feel Yanni's pain at having to leave the village. From your pitch we know what the disgrace is but in the story it leaves us with a nice mystery.

You must have travelled to these areas or lived there to describe it all so well. You also seem to understand the hearts of the people there. It comes through in the writing.

I still liked chapter 2 although it seemed to wander a little and there was a little too much "telling" . I'm sure in your next edit you will tighten that up. (I get called on that myself.) Maybe too much reminiscing on the part of Yanni.

In chapter 3 you were back on track. I didn't mind him sharing the room with the girl. It seemed to come about rather naturally; even the love scene. I love exotic settings and getting into people's minds so this is definitely a book I would buy. I'll give it another night on my shelf.

Betty K "The Huguenot's Destiny"

P.S. Hopefully you will take a look at my book but I'll understand if you don't.

bonalibro wrote 979 days ago

Chapter One has a lovely lyrical quality to it. Yanni is well developed and likable. The situation with Anna, however, is strange. Why would she let him share her room in the hotel? Chapter Two meanders. What is Yanni going with himself? Is he going to sit around listening to conversations all his life? Is he going to sponge off of Anna? Chapter One left me wanting to know more. Chapter two did not.

Primrose Hill wrote 979 days ago

I loved reading your first chapter. I could see it all so clearly. I love books that take me back to places I have known, and I have picked olives in that area with my family.
So far I have only one suggestion, which is merely that I would like to see you leaving a little more to the reader's imagination. - For instance you do not need to TELL us that Yanni is gloomy and not in the mood for conversation, you could show it, and in fact do show it through the brusqueness of his reply. If you just give the reply the reader will pick up the rest. You don't need to explain either, the straightforwardness of the girl's words - it is self evident - trust the reader.
Other than that, you have a slight formatting problem to tidy up - either to indent or not to indent paras.
This book is on my shelf, and I'll get back as I read on. Lovely work. I enjoyed it. Julia

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