The Ladies of Faith

Has another week gone by? Well, the weekend is upon us. What a great time to grab a cup of ice tea, comfy chair, and help us noobies get noticed by reading our work. If you are interested in this, please pick a book and let me know what you think. I would appreciate all comments and help . . . blessings, Pam

Hi Lynn, I like the way this launches into an issue that will be awkward at the circle. And how you’ve given just enough information about each woman, a bit about their husbands, showing the hint of problems from their POV. I noticed the dialogue was stiff once in a while because of contractions or not using them. It’s or it is (is in italic). Or “It has been a rough year” – maybe “It’s or It has (has in italic).” I'd like to read to see how they talk around their private pressures – Shelved Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

As a christian I can see this novel has a scarlet thread of biblical elements and truths running through it just like the bible itself. It is captivating and so full of home-truths and the hypocracies that have ruined the church. The pettyness and divisions are apparent I love your lines 'concentrate on what God wants and leave it at that' maybe we should all take that truth on board, and 'past not define the future what inspirational words. It is easy to see how judgementalism and hypocracy is rife in Gods church reading this and I will be more careful in the future how I judge by what I see with my natural eyes. The way you've switched pov's is well done and doesn't interrupt the flow of this spiritual masterpiece. When this is on the market I will be encouraging all my sisters in Christ to buy it (for me, that is) I need it as much as they do. This is delightful, true to life and a must read for all christians. Alice, Castell Brenin.

Hi Lynn,

Welcome to Authonomy. You have an interesting premise. Sounds like a lot of drama. Just my thing. Some good vivid descriptions to start off with. I could picture Abby in the parking lot; it’s very visual. Nicely done.

Your writing is fluid and it’s easy to read. Precise sentences and good pacing; it’s not too fast or too slow. I think you handled the POV switches well. It wasn’t a distraction at all; smooth transitions.

I’ve only read the first two chapters, but so far your characters felt real and the dialogue was believable. I sense so far, that this is a story with a lot of heart and soul and the emotions jump off the pages. I didn’t get the sense of setting in these chapters in terms of where it’s set but that might be mentioned later in the story. A good hook at the end of chap 2.

This is very well written. I’ve enjoyed what I’ve read so far.

Shelved!

Shinzy :)