Werelove: Dusk Conspiracy

Hi! I’m adding your book to my watch list to check out tomorrow (I’m off to bed now!).
I also write YA and would appreciate if you could check out my book LOVE IN THE FAMILY.
Cheers!

Very fun. I like your hybrid mutt character. Interesting take on the whole werewolf legend.

Really like your cover and intro. Look forward to reading it. Please check out 33. Dina

First off, how clever to have a FEMALE alpha. I haven't come across that in too many werewolf stories. Not only that, but the dialogue of how your characters address one another sets the stage for a rigid societal structure for the wolves. Your writing style flows similarly to some authors I have come across in this genre, but in my opinion, just with the characters' reactions and styles of address, you have leaped your characters' world beyond what many authors have done with the werewolf genre. Terrific! Rated high and on my W.L.

-Judith B. Shields
[Twice Reborn]

Wow, this is really good. Not once had I lost interest and skipped a few parts, which is what I normally would have to do after the first few chapters in some stories. This has a nice flow to it and has great detail. I'll keep an eye out for more.

This was really good. It kept my interest and i really liked it. It had a few spelling errors/grammar errors here and there, but other than that it flowed pleasantly. So her mother died eh? I think that you should go back in the story and tell exactly what happened. Did Henry get away? How did he get away? How did Zina succeed in killing Helena?? Just some things to think on!!

Oh, duh, i just read the title at the top of chapter 1-2, heheh. But, still confused about why she's in there.

Lakisha,

i read up to chapter five, and am very impressed! Of course, your title is what caught me as i was browsing, as i love werewolves. heheh. I just wanted to give a few tips here and there, nothing too major, and take them very lightheartedly.
Sometimes, you use words that dont even NEED to be there. Im actually looking at one right now, at the end of chapter four here. "Laylah had yet to make another move..." Does another really need to be in there? maybe replace with "a".... but dont think that im trying to make you change it, heheh, if you like it, you keep it. It is your book.
I like the flow of it, but i was a little confused between the end of chapter 1 and the beginning of 2. How long after that attack was Laylah in the hospital? and for what? I was just wondering about that, is all.
Other than those, im really seeing a good storyline here, and i love it. And i'm only suggesting these things because they had been suggested to me. I enjoyed the book very much! I plan to back it. If you would, though, take a look at mine when ever you are free, and that would be great! Thanks a lot!

Lakisha,

Lakisha,

Sorry it took me a few days to check out Werelove Book 1: Dusk Conspiracy. Wow, this opens very intense and keeps building from there! Zina's a strong main character and I'm curious to see where you take her in this tale.

Nice work! Backed! Looking forward to your thoughts on Head Games!

Kevin Alex Baker
Head Games

Hi Lakisha, you have made a good start with your book. You write well and your story is unfolding at a suitable pace for your genre. I like the characters, especially Zina, and your dialogue is consistently strong.
Backed with pleasure,
Barry
LITTLE KRISNA AND THE BIHAR BOYS

Hi Lakisha, The conversation told me much about Henry and Layla while keeping with the immediate situation. I was surprised that Henry was part of the Were population (or his wife?) and that Layla's relationship told there wouldn't be so strange to her if she knows about her father. An intense and absorbing opening scene. Shelved - Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

Werelove Book 1: Dusk Conspiracy

Lakisha Spletzer

Rich father, mansion, servants - but lonely and neglected. Sounds like a common ailment of that class. But of course the Weres attempt to kidnap Laylah is not. The father daughter conflict is credible. Nice action at the end of one - Zina leaping at the other woman with a snarl - seeing Henry and Laylah escaping. But no matter what, tonight would be the end of Helena Le Croix. Much tension here and must come back to see how this develops. Happy to back you and best of luck.

A wonderful work of the genre and absolutely what would be expected.

BACKED

Very good story. Exellent pose.

I invite you to read or comment on the Rebel.

God Bless,
Chipper

Very good story. Exellent pose.

I invite you to read or comment on the Rebel.

God Bless,
Chipper

Somehow you seem to have the knack of writing this futuristic fantasy material as if it is real. That is why the reader is so well drawn into the story. Not something I usually read but backed because it is so good. Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid

I always admire authors with the ability to go into the future--for some reason, my imagination doesn't work in that realm:) I think you have a great start for a stoyline and an interesting take on the "Weres". I will be watching:) Blessings - Kat (EMBRACED)

Very well crafted! The character development, the story, the pacing -- all is well handled. Stands out in its genre and speaks of true talent!

Laylah is so easy to relate to - very likeable and real.

Congratulations and two thumbs up!

Backed with true pleasure.

Johanna Kern
Master and the Green-Eyed Hope

Dear Lakisha
The book cover amazing, the pitch excellent. I thought oh no not another same old same old and when I saw the word bella in the tags I nearly screamed. TWIG - LIGHT. but your book was far from the same old. It was so well crafted with characters that have been sleeping with me last night. They need to go home now. Loved it Lakisha and CONGRATS on a good read.
BACKED for sure by me
I do hope you can cross over to my genre and review my book, please comment ( this assists me in honing my skill) and if you feel, back it.
Thanks and BEST OF LUCK WITH YOUR BOOK
Denise
The Letter

Dear Lakisha, I got so excited when I saw that you had backed, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not." :) Thanks so very much. :) Since I have already backed your book, I will put your book on my watchlist. Could you please take a moment to back my completed unedited memoir version, "Tell Me True Love Stories?" I'd be ever so grateful. :) Thank you. :) Love, Susie :)
authonomy quote: "Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs."
Here is the response I received from authonomy concerning backing:
When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved."

Good opening , but the short pitch needs to be more specific - having read it, i felt i was no further fwd - though i appreciate there's a limit to what'll fit into 20 words
s

What a stunning start to the story!
I very much like the way you convey the characteristic of the Were’s. You sense them acting as a wolf pack would the hierarchy and actions and the lack of emotion from the focus of the kill. So to me this story had an edge even in the opening. Not sure the strawberries are that important to Naiya after the encounter with the wolf. If only time allowed me to read more, you have a great story developing here!

Lakisha this is an excellent piece, pitched perfectly to attract a reader instant intrigue. I have backed it on the strength of your pitch and will return with further comments.
Brilliant. Backed
Helen
The Last Dream

The science part of it has a convincing ring. Interesting word 'roils' - never heard it before. You set the anger and resentment of Zina well. The dialogue,too,has a true sound. In ch 1 when you say 'Weres had right..' do you mean RIGHTS?
The break into violence is startling but smooth and the shapes the army changes into exciting. Your comments about the Weres' enjoyment of killing humans is chilling in it's matter-of-factness.
There's a mature element to your narrative which will enable a wide audience apart form YA to appreciate this. You've surprised me into a bit of a fan. Backed. lynn

Highly promising and a joy to read!
Backed with pleasure. Good Luck.
Frank.
If you back or have backed my work, you may also want to approach BJD (a big supporter of Sicilian Shadows) for a further possible backing of your book.

Hi Lakisha,
You write well and your story is interesting.
I back your book.
I hope you will also read my book, Zanga's Dreamworld and back it.
It is also fantasy.

Cheers.

I dont undestand a lots of these Fantasy books but I followed the first chapter of yours and found it most enjoyable. The idea that humans can only mate with their own race or clan is a worrying premise but then you suprised me by adding shapeshifters. I found your readers voice to be strong your MC has a menacing aura that you portray well.

Sue Mackender
Knowing Liam Riley

Your writing suits your genre well, particularly your action sequences. I didn't see any technical weaknesses in the parts I read. I'm quite sure this would find a broad market among your target audience. Happy to back this for you.
If you’re so inclined, please take a look at “The Job: Based on a True Story (I mean, it’s bound to have happened somewhere)”, a rollicking parable of suffering and struggle told through humor.
Thanks,
Craig Davis
http://www.authonomy.com/ViewBook.aspx?bookid=19440

What you have posted so far is well written and your use of short paragraphs keeps the pace of your story flowing nicely. Your use of imagery is excellent, your character development is solid and this coupled with your descriptive writing style makes your finely crafted fantasy a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

What you have posted so far is well written and well paced. You have created a strong character in Laylah. Your use of imagery and excellent dialogue makes your finely crafted fantasy romance a most enjoyable read. Backed with pleasure.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

This is a better take than most I have seen on the paranormal arena. Well constructed, detailed and thought through, with an excellent premise. Laylah is natural, likeable and real, and there are many little touches of the unique in this work that make it stand out.

Backed with pleasure.
Abi xxx

Laylah is well drawn and came alive for me, both in the narrative and in the very natural and spontaneous dialogue which seems so well to mirror her personality as we see her respond to a father who overwhelms her.
It's not easy for her to find love when his attitude to her boyfriend is so negative and he could have shown his love by 'trying' to tolerate her boyfriend.
She is ultimately distanced by both parents and in a sense her kidnap could be a blessing in disguise for though she will have the trauma of the kidnap she will be saved by Donil and it's the test of her loyalties and her own divided emotions which make me want to read on.

Backed
Ray
(A Child from the Wishing Well)

Very nicely done. I like a novel that starts with action and you do not disappoint. Bravo. I'll back this for you. Dave

Hello:
I am backing your book. I read chapter one which is what I do with all books on this site. If I can't get hooked, I turn it off. I got hooked on yours. You have a nice mixure of narration along with dialogue. That keeps the book moving in a nice flowing manner.

I hope you read some of Referendum For Murder. I had to do some corrections due to using present and past tense wrong. As a result I corrected chapters 1-5. You will see it flows better.

Good luck on your book.
Michael

This is not my genre, but you have a strong story and tell it well. Backed with pleasure. Colin

This is a very impressive piece of writing. Clearly, the market is getting saturated with vampires so to throw the other classical mythical beast into the mix makes such a refreshing change. Even more impressive, when the lead is a female. Your prose is fluid and eminently readable. I would say this was perfect for your target audience.
Carl
The Time Hunters

What a stunning cover. Your book is dark and mysterious and the story draws the reader right in.
backed
best

First of all I love your cover!

This is wonderful writing in a genre I'm not overly keen on, but I saw your book sitting on someone's shelf and was drawn to it.
You have an incredible imagination and your story telling ability is unquestionable.

Happily shelved
Melxx
Impeding Justice

Love the pitch and I adore werewolves anyway. But anyone can write a horror story but it is the characters that spark the story and weave old elements together to make them fresh nd alive again. That's what you do here, it'e rare to have sympathy for a rich bitch but here all the money in the world is nothing without a haven of love and comfort to fall back on. Even the name is evocative- Silentshadow. If that doesn't make your ears prick up the nothing will. Well done.

Lakisha: both pitches work for me. Perfecting your pitches is how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments to better your novel. The writing is good so I am SHELVING you.

Though I have been a very active member for over a year, I can still use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Every little bit helps. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

WERELOVE BOOK 1
This is a werewolf/shapeshifter book with a deeper level than most; it’s also a good romance. Laylah is a good main character; she’s likable and sympathetic because of the way her father both dominates and ignores her (and doesn’t like her boyfriend). I think you’ll find an audience of young adults out there who can relate to her because of strained relationships with their parents who want to follow her and see how she solves her problems. I’m adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

This is unfolding into a good read as Laylah makes for a sparkly MC. The mix of genres seems to work. Jim Darcy The Firelord's Crown

Thanks for your story, Lakisha. Hope you'll read mine, He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not & my unedited version, Tell Me True Love Stories of He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not.
Please back my TWO books.Thanks, Susie :)

Hey. I added you to my watchlist a little while ago because you're story sounded really interesting. You're story is very intriguing! I'm writing about werewolves too (my book's called Bright Eyes) and I'd love for you to be able to check it out if you could. Thanks.

Ayana

Nothing really original here, but the story is well told and will be popular with wolf fans. Backed, with best wishes, Barry
(Little Krisna and the Bihar Boys)

Fun read, I enjoyed it and look forward to you posting more.

Love it! Your writing is fantastic and the story is intriguing. Enjoyed what I read. Plan on reading more later. Backed!

Kristin
Demon in the Knight

Backed.

Jesse - Savant