An Eternity In Stone

This is really good especially for NanoWriMo. I'm impressed by anybody that can do that.

I noticed in some places his name is Dimitri and in some Dmitri.

What I've read of this is very enjoyable. I will try to read more as time allows. I know you said not to back it, but I'm going to put it on my shelf anyway. That way my "friends" can look at it if they choose.

Mandi Oyster
Dacia Wolf & the Prophecy

Dear Author
Your book inspires and threads a fine path. It is stimulating and provocative in content. Your style of writing is unique and offers up a treat. It was indeed a pleasure to read it.
Backed
The Lord of the Dawn.

Now I know you don't want any backings, but I don't consider backing to be merely about rankings, to me it's a bout showing some support. And I think this book is certainly worthy of it. Infact, it's better than that. Ithought the premise was absolutely beautiful. At first I thought we were dealing with a 'Dorian Gray' type story (one of my favourite books) but it isn't that at all. It feels like a genuinely original idea and whether you like it or not, I am happy to back it. Your prose is fluid, accessible yet profound. You know about the minor grammar issues so I won't mention themm. But well done
carl
The Time hunters

Hi, I thoroughly enjoyed this simple romantic opening. Girl wants guy, guy wants girl, girl makes a sacrifice, the sacrifice costs her more than she bargained for, guy is left holding the cold broken pieces. Just superb and believe me you've hooked me now. There was only one sentance that didn't seem to flow right in chapter 1 and that was "he's panted around her began growing". I wish you every success with this, Sana x

this is very good, holds the readers interest, backed

alison

Regrettably unfinished, but absolutely fascinating. Marj.

The short pitch is a little vague.
The start of the long pitch is very intriguing. Towards the end, I got little confused as to who Samara was.

The premise is like a gothic fairytale: simultaneously romantic and horrifying.

I once found an abandoned statue, overlooking neglected ground in rural Poland. It was such an unsettling find. This book reminded me of that statue.

Eerie and beautiful

Backed.
Mimi (Flickers of Mary)

Is it just me? I get the feeling that by the end of this, Dimitri will go fucked-up-crazy and tear some shit up to get back his precious Lana ^^

But in any case, its a good opening, a sentance I found a bit strange to me, "He looked backed where the figure had stood only to find nowhere." I think your missing a "him" there? or only to find nothing, ... didn't find anything else to nitpick about the writing really, so I thought I'd grab the one thing where I found myself saying "what the hell?" and throw it in your face...yeah, I know, I excel at douchebaggery....

OK - I feel nervous trying to comment, but as you clearly ask for comment, it would be churlish to not do.

I 100% love the feel of the book. (Your reading list concurs closely with mine) and I have no doubt that I can read this happily to the conclusion. I suspect I will keep returning to it over the coming days.

However, (and I have just left an editting session to read your book.) I agree with the hunting of "-ly" words, "was" and "were" and questioning their right to have a place on the page and so line one "splendidly manicured." and others could be challenged.

Secondly, I have a paranoia about repeating the MC's name as the first word adjacent paragraphs "Dimtri" pops up a lot.

The feel of the writing is haunting and beautiful. It tempts me to keep reading when I should get back to my own major edit. I would back it (but won't go against your wishes!)

I hope that is thoughtful and useful

ET

Well I wouldn't dream of backing you! This is too good a draft to be bothered with a shelf.

Great read - intriguing that I've been fussing with my chapters so long and you crank this onto the site. I wasn't gone that long was I? Regardless - I shall remove you from my shelf. Let me know when I'm aloud to put it back up there!

Love it. The concept and the phrasing. Looking forward to seeing the finished article but backing it now for encouragement. No obligation or expectation but if you did get a few spare mins between drafts I would be ever so grateful if you could have quick look at "Never My Thirst". Funnily enough my male MC claims to have stopped himself aging in order to close the age gap between himself and the girl he loved.

Hi.
I like the story and the plot is good. I must appreciate you for the narration.
All the best.
Backed with wishes.
S. Vinay Kumar

This flows so beautifully its hard to imagine its a rough draft. The choices of character names intrigued me.
Dimitri is eastern Europe/Russian in origin, Lana could be Russian too, but its also a classic name from Hollywood...see you already got me thinking just from names alone. The introduction of a french sorcerer adds yet more foreign flavour to the novel. Whilst this is not my normal genre of choice, I found myself easily captivated by your style and rich description. Some of the longer paragraphs could do with a trim and I'm sure there are editorial changes you shall make. But the richness in your writing is clear for all to see.
Will Back
David
Bailey of the Saints.

Such lovely writing. Really breathtaking...

Hi darly
Excellent writing and have backed with pleasure!
Will read more later but it's 5am here right now and after I have killed the damn rooster that woke me up and going to try to get more zzzzzzzzzz'ds LOL!
Having a rum and coke to help me on my way..........hope my boyfriend doesn't catch me!
Virginia Owen
It Never Rains In Paradise

Excellent for a first draft!
I don't dare imagine what number draft of mine I have up on this site.
I'l leave it to the experts to help you with the 'mechanics'.
Backed.

Do you know something? I'm going to back this book because I can! Tis my perogative, you try and stop me!

Full of admiration for you PI, how the hell you can rattle out quality stuff like this is beyond me.

Bob x

It's brave of you to put a first draft on here, but don't expect us not to comment :-)))) I wish my first drafts were half as good. This shows a LOT of promise, so finish it!!!! Back with pleasure. Best wishes, Tony.

My first draft is strewn with errors, structurally and gramatically. How dare you say you just churned this out. Starts to look good from where i am standing so far. Guess that is why some writers write three books a year, and i can do one small one every year.

Good premise and what i read so far is promising. I hope you don't mind me backing this now. IT is quite evident that you have talent and you will turn this into something that flows (it does now), which engages (it does that now) and has no romance in it whatsoever (it doesn't do that now - and i am of course joking being a grumpy old git.)

BACKED

An Eternity in Stone

Hi Ivy,

This pours easily and quickly onto the page, I know it’s a NaNoWriMo job but you clearly have been thinking about it for a while because your characters are well constructed and three dimensional. One of the most engaging bits of your writing I think is the rapid beginning, the joining the characters at a moment of change or action, you plunge us into the action with aplomb, confidence and we are dragged into his emotional rollercoasting thoughts. Good stuff, good luck with the 50,000 words target, if you need a break from the competition check out my book, I need all the help I can get.

Best wishes and good luck
Andrew W
(Sanctuary’s Loss)

Brilliant - love it - I want to read more...