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rank 2881
word count 33227
date submitted 13.11.2009
date updated 23.07.2010
genres: Romance, Non-fiction, Travel, Harpe...
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Mexican Takeaway

Francesca Polini

True life adventure. UK couple take on the international adoption system and the government on a wild journey through Mexico to adopt their baby.

 

When Fiamma and Shaun decided to adopt a child, they thought it might be difficult. What they didn’t expect was an international adoption system where the goalposts didn’t just shift; they disappeared.

Their decision to ‘do some good in the world’ is not shared by a process that doesn’t know its own rules, a UK government department that goes into hiding refusing all contact, people who think they are being indulgent, middle-class liberals, and strangers who are constantly judging them. In desperation they throw their lives into chaos and embark on a journey through Mexico that will test every bit of their resolve, expose them to a wild cast of Hollywood villains and heroes and finish up with the arrest of their two months old daughter at Heathrow airport.

This is a story about one couple’s attempt to navigate the maze of international adoption and to adopt a Mexican child, something that had never been done by anyone in the UK. It’s also a story of how millions of children in the world are denied a chance at a decent life because of a system that is convoluted, obstructive and often immoral.

 
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nsllee wrote 584 days ago

Hi Francesca

This is an amazing story. I can't believe the hoops people have to jump through to adopt a child - and then you read in the papers that story about that couple that were allowing their young adopted daughters to be sexually abused by some acquaintance in return for money and favours. How does this even happen? The insanity and bureaucracy of the adoption process needs to be exposed. Backed.

Nicole
Chosen

lavery51 wrote 596 days ago

Excellent much needed book. I have watched the agony of several friends as they went through the foreign adoption procedures. so many children needing the opportunity to be loved and have a better life. So much red tape. good luck. if you get a moment can you look at YO u-Turn? thanks, Lynne

Valley Woman wrote 615 days ago

Fascinating. I knew that adopting foreign babies can be frustrating, from what I've read or heard on the radio news, but reading your about your situation puts a human face on the process. Well-told.

When I read the beginning for your first chapter, I felt my heart leap up to my throat. What a perilous situation you experienced with immigrations.

Patricia

CarolinaAl wrote 635 days ago

A dynamic true story with vivid imagery and evocative narrative. Touching. Packed with emotion. Brilliantly executed. Assured writing. Backed.

name falied moderation wrote 655 days ago

Dear Francesca
this is just an amazing book cover. I dont know how this book passed by me when i came onto this site but i have just found it and am thoroughly enjoying it. Great read, well crafted with characters that are so real they are in my head.. I will carry on reading and comment further on as I would like to get this book of yours backed
Backed for sure my me. ..I would really appreciate it if your would look at my book, COMMENT , and back it. If not that is OK also
The VERY best of luck with your book

Denise
The Letter

Craig Ellis wrote 686 days ago

Great story, and an issue that needs to be brought to the forefront. Opening hook at the airport is excellent. You can taste the frustration. Makes you want ot rant at the system. Excellent read with good dialogue. Backed.

Craig Ellis
The Sun and the Saber

Daniel Manning wrote 705 days ago

So many pitfalls to endure in the goverment bureaucracy involving adoptions. Mexican Takeway is written with a passion and a fervour so I'm backing this book and hope you get it published, so minsters and officals in high positions read it. Should be read in goverment circles so they understand the impact of souless waiting rooms and bizarre questions.
Daniel Manning
No Compatibility.

Kidd1 wrote 713 days ago

This is a touching story. We adopted, and understand the frustration. Well done. Backed.

I hope you will give mine a read and back it if you like it.
Best,
Robert
Golden Conspiracy

Barry Wenlock wrote 714 days ago

Hi Francesca, I really enjoyed your book and found it both sad and interesting.
I wish you all the best with this excellent work, Best wishes, Barry

Anthony Brady wrote 714 days ago

MEXICAN TAKEAWAY

Francesca - More by accident than design you have written an essential handbook/guide to anyone considering adopting a child from a foreign country. I really enjoyed reading your book and believe that with minimal editorial input, there is no obvious barrier to it being a popular published success. Backed & re-WATCHLISTED.

Tony Brady - SCENES FROM AN EXAMINED LIFE - Books 1,2 & 3.

CraigD wrote 715 days ago

Your tax dollars at work. Great look inside a world that most people never experience. Your writing is strong, and the dialog in particular sounds authentic to me. Hope this does well for you; happy to back it for you.
Craig
The Job

eloraine wrote 717 days ago

Well written, I wish you the very best with this, it deserves to be published. E.Loraine Royal Blood Chronicles book one

delhui wrote 718 days ago

Dear Francesca --

Your passion and fire bring your story alive, and we found ourselves immediately on your side with the passport lady. What a harrowing adventure for your whole family; thank you very much for telling your story, and telling it so well. One of the bits we especially love is the way you talk about your relationship with Shaun. The way you make one another laugh and the ways that you each manage when the situation gets tough gives us a window into how and why you two work well together -- a true love story. And your love for Grace shines through it all.

Thank you for supporting The Long Black Veil; we are so pleased that you directed us to Mexican Takeaway (wonderful title, by the way), and very happy to return your backing. -- Delhui

A. Zoomer wrote 718 days ago

MEXICAN TAKE AWAY

Dear Francesca,

Truth does trump fiction and this is a story to be experienced.
There is a writer in you. I want to feel all of what you experienced and continue to experience.

I have put this on my shelf and will read more later.

Backed.

A Zoomer
(Going Out in Style)

Mooderino wrote 719 days ago

Good start, you get into the story quickly and in dramatic fashion. I thought the assport lady (Ms Farnsworth) came across a little odd. She suddenly refers to him as Shaun and then when she says 'Didn't you hear?' I wasn't sure how to read that. sarcastic? Of course she can speak any way she wants, but I found it pulled me ot of the story to have her act that way. It might be worth making her a little more cold and impersonal, at the moment it feels like you're deliberately trying to paint her as an evil bitch. She may be one, but overstating the case makes it look like she's being hard done by. A matter of opinion though.

The problems with immigration worked well as an opening scene, very dramatic and quite scary.

"God i can never get it right right!"
Is the repeat of 'right' in the above line intentional?

The meeting with Anne was short and effective. i think you got across the nature of the world they were getting into very well. The problem with being white and the short meeting was well done. The details with her red glasses, F's shoes, the car parking all added to the scene.

The stuff with Barbara was good. I think you got across her personality nicely. The story is running smoothly and I think working very well.

Providing factual info on the process along with the personal side of it was effectively done. The writing flows well and apart from a few punctuation typos (missing fullstops and th eliek) it was technically very good. An impressive piece of work. Backed.


Marija F.Sullivan wrote 719 days ago

My heart goes out to you. Backed with very best wishes,
M

- Weekend Chimney Sweep
- Sarajevo Walls of Fate

Ransom Heart wrote 743 days ago

Hi,
I backed this last week and came back to post a comment. I really enjoyed the way you hooked us with the last-minute detention as the family entered the UK at the airport. Our appetite for the story is piqued and we're ready to find out just how horrible the process was . . . and still is, as the book begins. Your use of details about the clothing and shoes you wore during the interviews was effective, and so was the inclusion of the home visitor's comment about the wine bottles. We're all wincing at that point. This is a great project with exciting prospects. Good luck. Marianne (Saint Paddy and the Sundial)

Amylovesbooks wrote 759 days ago

Hi Francesca,

This is riveting. I don't understand why it's not published! Adoption stories like this are far too common, and I would think there is a huge market for this kind of book. I wish you the best of luck, and thanks for sharing the story.

Amy
Love Match

mscynthia wrote 766 days ago

Hi Francesca,
The humanitarian implications of your story are huge. The hoops this couple jumps through to adopt Grace is frustrating but at the same time noteworthy and cute (maybe it's because they're doing it together as a couple and the end result is the adoption of a beautiful baby girl). This makes for a natural, classic plot line of wanting to acquire Grace, then set back by a lot of conflict, then to get closer (then a sort of a three steps forward, two steps back sort of thing), until their adoption goals pan out. Just wonderful!
Cynthia
Sharing Short Stories

SusieGulick wrote 781 days ago

Dear Francisca, I love that you are telling your story on adoption, so that it will help others. I can hardly wait for you to finish your books, so that I can see what happens. It is a good read because you create interest by having short paragraphs & lots of dialogue which makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm BACKING/COMMENTING on your book to help advance it. :) Could you please return the favor by taking a moment to BACK/COMMENT on my TWO Books, ... "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" ... and the UNEDITED version? ... "Tell Me True Love Stories"
Thanks, Susie :)

annaskitchenfr wrote 787 days ago

This is excellent and needs to be seen and heard by the right people. Your writing is fast paced and extremely informative. I hope you can get this published soon. I wish you the best of luck. BACKED with pleasure.

Anna
Born on Friday 13th

Sean Lamb wrote 788 days ago

I like where you're going for this book. I would suggest possibly making the chapters shorter. Maybe splitting them in half. Otherwise, the writing is smooth and easy to read. Just keep polishing. Good Luck!

Sean

Famlavan wrote 791 days ago

Systems that dehumanise are one of my pet hates, problem is systems have no human feelings yet they act as a living entity for the good of ??? Not humans.
So I’ll stop the rant.

Ms (as in mistake) Farnsworth well!! I’m going to have to stop reading this, yet I need to know what happened. Well written – this needs to be heard.

Wheel42 wrote 791 days ago

Great insight into the adoption system in UK and then the fight in the international adoption process. I have friend who have gone through this from the US. Not easy and takes forever. Your writing is smooth crisp while being very informative. Job well done.

Randy
Bound By Birth
www.randallwheeler.com

Burgio wrote 792 days ago

This is a book that needed to be written. It really reveals how idiotic is the international adoption system. How it cheats children out of a good life because it's more concerned with rules and rigid regulations. A good read. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

gerry01 wrote 793 days ago

An interesting read. i have a friend who has just adopted a child after years of trying. Red tape is bad at the best of times. I couldn't stand the nonesense.

Susan McKinney de Ortega wrote 793 days ago

Your opening chapter leaves the reader with the big what-happens-next question, creating a delightful amount of tension. Congratulations.
Susan
Flirting in Spanish
I hope you'll find time to look at my book about Mexico!

SusieGulick wrote 797 days ago

Thanks for your amazing story, Francesca. Hope you'll read mine, He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not & my unedited version, Tell Me True Love Stories of He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not.
Please back my TWO books.Thanks, Susie :)

RichardBard wrote 797 days ago

This is a beautiful and touching piece of work, especially considering that English is your second language. It's a real eye-opener to the challenges a couple faces with an international adoption. Well done. Backed.

Richard Bard
BRAINRUSH

missyfleming_22 wrote 805 days ago

This really resonates with me because this is something I've always wanted to do. International adoption is a great thing and something I've thought about for years and would probably do at one point; married or not. You have shown me a lot about what happens and how difficult it is. Does't slow my resolve though. This is a fabulous work and I am so glad I read it!

Missy

Bamboo Promise wrote 807 days ago

Your book is doing well so far. The pitch is good enough for me to back your book Backed.

carlashmore wrote 808 days ago

This has both shocked and appaulled me. As a UK resident I had no idea about some of the issues you are dealing with. Considering that English is not your first language, this is an exceptional piece of work with genuine heart. I have no idea about your history but it reads to me like there is something very personal about Fiamma and Shaun's journey. From the offset, there characters are very well drawn and you illicit an emotional response from the reader within the opening few paragraphs. This is a very improtant work and deserves to be published. The very best of luck with it.x

beegirl wrote 812 days ago

This is quite a story and well worth telling. You tell it in a good and refreshing way. It is one that should go well!
Backed,
Barbara

bonalibro wrote 824 days ago

I commented on this a long time ago and offered to back it then, if you would have a look at mine.

I am backing it outright now to encourage an honest comment on mine.

Good luck with it.

Tim Chambers
Moonbeam Highway: With Apologies to Miguel de Cervantes.

William Roberts wrote 825 days ago

Francesca
As you say in your pitch, this is a true story. If published, anyone considering adoption of a chlid would be advised to read it. I am backing it.
William (The Caves of Caerdraig)

Evernight wrote 825 days ago

This book has a really nice theme with an engaging perspective of the world through the eyes of the MC. The writing is clear and well paced, and we really get a sense of connection to the different charecters. I can see this being published and loved by many readers, and this book definatly deserves a run on my shelf :)
-Nathaniel O'Sullivan (The Seer Stone)

Manolya wrote 827 days ago

What an interesting pitch and book cover. You tell the story well with a good strong voice, engaging the reader from the start- a story that needs to be told and that pulls at your heart- Backed!

Warm regards,
Manolya- Love in No-Man's Land

jtgradishar wrote 828 days ago

Oh, do I love the theme of this book! I'm a libertarian and this stuff really speaks to me.

After considering for a bit, I would suggest omitting the first part. It's a taste of the end of the journey. While there are times when this is done effectively, I don't think it's right for your book. I think this will be a slow descent into frustration and increasing bureaucratic absurdity, and my advice to you is not to show the climax this early.

The next part is also a good start.

All in all, I think this is a good read. You do a good job of establishing the relationship between the two MC's, and this is important to making us care about what is to come. I think this will be a frustrating read, but that's the point. It will also be entertaining as it frustrates. Well done and backed!

MarkRTrost wrote 831 days ago

You know, I discovered something while reading one day. Readers read all texts as nonfiction. Now that sounds odd. But think about it. We “suspend our disbelief’ and believe it’s real. So, in a very real way - readers read everything as nonfiction.

Now - writers write everything as fiction. Whether it be true or asserted, writers write things better than they are - or worse than they are - or more interesting than they were. Remember Joe “Just the facts” Friday? He was the least interesting character. And that’s why news anchors are attractive and address us as friends. Because they feign a relationship.

You have a compelling and thrilling story to tell. And that it is a nonfiction tale - adds to the thrill. Yet as the writer you have to remember that the reader is not reading about you. We are reading a character that is you. Even if you tell us it’s true. We emotionally identify with you by making you are object: and object of affection or revulsion. We don’t know you. We don’t know how you speak and sound and stress and relax. We don’t know. So you have to define you - to the reader.

Your narrator (that is you) is too passive in the first section. This must grab the reader and make us care. It doesn’t. You meander through your prose with too many words that excuse or explain. You need to cut at least half of it. It should be written more as an assault and an insult. Your prose is too pedestrian.

The section that begins “God I can never get it right!” should be your opening section. It’s a strong start. It defines you as a character. It defines your stress. It defines the novel. Your original beginning can be placed after it. I imagine that this time was incredibly stress filled for you. But I shouldn’t have to imagine it. I should hear it. I should hear it in your voice.

This is a terrific story. It should be told. And frankly, can’t you see Angelina Jolie playing you? Her indignation? Well you should. Immigration is a hot topic. Immigration reform is a hot topic. And now with the press on the Haitian children …


Mark R. Trost
“Post Marked.”

Abhyastamita wrote 832 days ago

This story not only needs to be told, but you tell it compellingly. The opening scene in the airport is harrowing. It's amazing that anyone ever gets adopted at all, given all the hurdles you describe! This much I was expecting from the pitch, but what surprised me in reading the first chapter is how charmingly you portray Fiamma and Shaun. It makes me really pull for them!

R.A. Battles wrote 833 days ago

Francesca,

I sent some detailed comments in a message, but it looks like the last part of the message was truncated.

You have my support. Backed.

Rodney

courtmuse wrote 837 days ago

The premise and pitch of this story are enough for a backing - your topic is interesting and your writing shows some polish.

Keep working hard to bring this beautiful story to its fullest potential.

Backed with pleasure,

Courtney
The Watcher's Daughter

Karen Lenfestey wrote 841 days ago

Your opening really pulled me in. I would think this true story would definitely have a market. Your first chapter is well-done. My only advice is to clarify when you go back in time. Maybe simply label it "eight months earlier" or something.

Karen
A Sister's Promise

Ben Hardy wrote 841 days ago

What a brilliant opening, and fabulous first chapter. You start at exactly the right point in the story, and dare the reader not to continue. And then, you provide the necessary back story in an exceptionally readable, interesting manner. I would imagine that there will be many people who will be critical of your actions and reasoning, but I am not one of them. There will be just as many who nod their head in recognition of your sentiments. This is one of the few books on Authonomy that I will make an effort to read in their entirity, and it will sit on my shelf for quite some time. Thank you. Ben

Diwrite wrote 842 days ago

This is a good read and I think you tell a true story well.
The one thing I think needs a bit of work is your short pitch.
It's one of the toughest thing to write, but you'll hook a lot more people if you get that right.
There are some fantastic short pitches on this site that have convinced me to read books - there's plenty of inspiration here!

Good luck
Diana
Pascaul's Birthday

Rosali Webb wrote 843 days ago

Francesca
Interesting work! Should imagine this would have huge appeal for anyone considering this type of adoption. But not only that, there are great descriptions of Mexico, knowledge of customs, and a good plot. Well done and Backed. Rosali
Fieldtrip to Mars

Shakespeare's Talking Head wrote 844 days ago

Hi Francesca. I have to tell you, I am very impressed. I can't say I wasn't expecting it to be good, but I sure wasn't expecting a true to life account to be so very well plotted and superbly written. I've skimmed forward a few chapters, skipped a few and read, then again, and saw that the plot stayed tight through all I read. And your dialogue, and reactions were excellent. I had no idea there was so much red tape involved in saving a life. It's a very sad world we live in.

Instead of going on, I'll just say this (although it may not mean much to you): You've made Shakespeare's Short List. This is a wonderful true life story that will see publication. Shakespeare knows his shit.

Great story, Francesca.

Gerry
Dropcloth Angels

lionel25 wrote 844 days ago

Francesa, I've looked at your opening chapter. As this is a true story, I don't see the need for much more improvement.

["Of course we did. I told you so." Sean was short with her. ] The dialogue already implies that one person is short with another. No need to state it explicitly outside the tags.

Happy to back this book.

Joffrey (The Silver Spooon Effect)

Mairi Graham wrote 845 days ago

What a nightmare. And what a wonderful thing it would be if someone reading this was finally able to do something to mend the international adoption system. My neighbour adopted two children - a five year old boy and his three year old sister - from South America a couple of years ago and it took her sixteen months, with the children remaining in an orphanage, to manage all the legal hoops and hurdles. This is a compelling and necessary book. I'll put it on my shelf.

J&M JENSEN wrote 848 days ago

Mexican TakeAway is a fascinating and accesible account of the difficulties of overseas adoption! It was a great insight for me as some one thinking of taking a similar route and while it dealt with heavy topics, your light writing style meant it was never depressing or convoluted. Very well done and I wish you all the best with it.

M&J
GRAEMOR