Jack and Boots - Boots Goes to School

Hi Adrian,

A nice tale for kids but there are quite a few missing words and other typographical errors. Also, even in children's books it is not considered appropriate to start a story with a dream. You can still include the dream scene but not right at the begining.

Ron

Adrian, I've looked at the first chapter. Entertaining read. My little niece would love this book.

Heartily backed.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

Hi Adrian :)

Thanks for backing "The Magic Meadow," I appreciate it.

I've backed "Boots" without hesitation. You're on the way with this one.

Excellent work.

Ted

Hi Adrian,
Apologies for the delay in rereading. The expanded section regarding the magical elements now works an absolute treat - the point is hammered home and reader reads on with absolutely no doubt as to where he is going.
Good job!

Love the ordinaryness of the opening chapter - children will identify immediately with the whole Monday school morning. There's a skill going on here. Place the child reading into the character of the book, this opens wide the imagination.
Felt there's some editing to do; "I was going to watch the football".
Some of the lengthier paras come over a bit awkward. I guess that you know the trick of reading aloud?
Like I said in the 1st comment. This has to be a very successful series. Keep slogging it MUST pay off.

Really lovely story which I'm sure many children will enjoy. Nice pace and good dialogue and I really like the twist at the end. I'm sure Boots/Bernard will indeed liven up school life.
Best wishes and backed, Karen.

This is the sequel to Jack and Boots? I backed the first one so I am SHELVING this one as well.

I can use your comments on my book when you get a chance. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

Hi Adrian, you have a great imagination. The story moves along nicely and the characters are very much alive. The beginning had me wondering what I was in for when you start with the cows, but having read your other comments and then realising this is the second boots book, I kind of got the picture.
Great book for children of all ages.
shelved.
Frank (Island 42)

Hi Adrian,
Good to see the second book up and running. I love a busy writer!
The first thing that struck me was the opening image of the leapfrogging cows. This is a wonderful image, yet Jack’s response to it seems very matter of fact (which of course it would be) but for reader, there is little in the way of amazement and awe at what should be a fantastical scene.

Now, assuming reader has read the first book, that’s all well and good, but in my experience most publishers would require each book in the series to stand alone, and to that end, you need to begin with some introduction of Jack, Boots, the magic, etc, etc.

I do note that on the third paragraph in you give a very brief history, but I believe it’s not quite enough. For me you need to begin with it, and you also need to expand on the fabulous imagery of the leapfrogging cows.

Don’t get me wrong, I do think you have almost got it right, but if you want your book to stand out above the others, then your opening must be truly captivating. The plus point is that you have the ingredients already there, you just need to get the order right and get make reader want to read on.

As for the rest of chapter one…it’s brilliant! Especially the hook at the end.

Backing this one as well, Adrian. Good job. If you do decide to do anything with the beginning and want me to take a look then do go me a shout.

All best
Johnny

Hi Adrian!

Wow - a sequel to Jack and Boots! I can't wait to start reading this to my daughter... She loved the first one, and will surely love this one as well! Backed with pleasure - I hope to give your sequel a little boost!

Kim
Invisible Justice