Meet the Kreeps: Nightmare on Bleak Street

Backed January 30.

Jesse - Savant

Hi Rob very funny read, all the charisma as a rotten tooth is a brilliant line. I like the prologue good set up to the story, the monster hunter coming to get rid of the Kripps. The two policemen discussing Slaughter park were a good device to fill in some of the legends of the place and it actually made my spin chill a little, wouldn't want to be living there myself. I really like your style reminds me a little of Niel Gaimen which is a good thing, its quirky and a little off beat. Definitely on my shelf. Helena (A Load of Rubbish)

I like this book very much - I have, one way and another, read a lot of fiction featuring vampires, and I can say that this is one of funniest I have come across. Best of luck with it, because I would quite like to have it on my shelf for real.

A very funny book, with an interestingly different plot line, according to the pitch. We are introduced to the Monster Hunter and his companion quickly, and, as with all your characters, they quickly come alive. Your descriptions are striking as well as funny, and although it would be wrong to call them caricatures, your characters are certainly more than life size. The two policemen, Arabella and her 'boyfriend' Bart, Marco himself, all spring off the page with a whoop. You have a string of consistently funny one liners, such as, 'the moanin' ghost of the Park Keeper flashing his spectral light at them,' the description of Marco, 'built from breezeblocks rather than normal bricks,' and many more. Your writing is smooth and polished, and a joy to read. Backed.
Gerry McCullough,
Belfast Girls.

Hi Rob
What great fun. This will be loved by children of all ages everywhere.

Adored Arabella. I even laughed out loud a couple of times. The policemen are delightful and the whole concept has a strange ring of truth about it. I didn't spot anything to advise you on.

Good luck with this

John Booth (Shaddowdon)

Rob
Brilliant sense of humour you have! There's a bit of everything here and perfect choice of words, like 'Katarina and her massive fur coat.' Well done and Backed.
Rosali
Fieldtrip to Mars

i'm just getting started on this, but cool so far. backed

Funny - a good read

backed

kev

If ever there was a book written for me, this would be it.
It is funny, it is horror, it is fantastic.
You really don't know how much I love this. It reminds me of Chistopher Moore but edgier.
Ever since I was a little girl I have loved horror. And who doesn't like funny?
Your pitch, title and cover and *insert swearword here* great. You have a knack for writing.
There are often debates over voice in the forum, you my friend have a voice and it is one that the reader can not back away from. Your unique writings command attention. The characters are brilliant.
And my favorite line so far:
New meat to terrify and amaze. Just loved that line.
Backed
T.L Tyson-Seeking Eleanor

Rob, it's brilliantly funny.Can see it becoming quite a cool thing amongst YA to have read it. Think you may have a winner here. Great cover too. Shelved.Lynn

A great title and concept combine with humorous writing to create a real winner. Best of luck with this. Backed. Clare (Second Lives)

Hi Rob. Yep, this is a goodie. I'm always happy to come across books that keep me smiling. That's a head start with me right away. Doesn't hurt that the writing is excellent and idea/plot is intriguing (I hate the word - overused - but it often fits).
Good pitch... good prologue (chapter one before chapter one).
Chapter one (the second one...hehe) is a just a great opening for the book. Sets tht tone of dark humor beautifully. Read 3 chapters (yuck... references at the end of 3...haha), skimmed in a ways.
Heck of a job, Rob. No doubt I'll back this one.
On my shelf and the best of luck with it.

John Harold McCoy - Bramwell Valley

I like this book, it gave me a permanent smile while I enjoyed the read, you are a very good writer and have a good sence of humer and it shows, it's very discriptive, it flowes and I have no hesertion in backing it. Shelved

John

I like this book, it gave me a permanent smile while I enjoyed the read, you are a very good writer and have a good sence of humer and it shows, it's very discriptive, it flowes and I have no hesertion in backing it. Shelved

John

I like this book, it gave me a permanent smile while I enjoyed the read, you are a very good writer and have a good sence of humer and it shows, it's very discriptive, it flowes and I have no hesertion in backing it. Shelved

John

Very funny!

Great fun! I like the style and the characters. The dialogue is very good and I like that there's a lot of it. I'd be careful with some of your dialogue tags, though. Sometimes they don't quite make sense. For example, can anybody really smile "No one in their right mind goes into the park, near the lake, or ever ventures to that tiny island in its middle"? I spotted a few such tags. But that's relatively minor stuff that you'll catch when editing. The important thing is, this is a really enjoyable read and I want to see more.

Fun read and well written. Backed with pleasure.
Mark

Spooky and exciting! And some of the most polished writing I've seen on the site, too. It feels so professional - the dialogue is natural and the narrative eye popping. This is a very accomplished piece of writing.

Andrew

Brilliant cover, excellent name and fab pitch. I backed this before I read it. And now that I've read the first three chapters I see it was a wise move. This is fantastic. I'd buy this in a heart beat. Its funny and sassy and would make an excellent movie. Every paragraph is another giggle, in two short paragraphs we have such beauties as "the darkness inside the house took a firm grip of his bladder", "grabbing Bart Biggersly by the sleeve of his snot-caked jumper" and "you could just hear Bart whimper and softly breaking wind". You can't ask for much more than that now can you.
Loved and backed.
Leigh Fallon
The Carrier of the Mark

This is an absolute scream (literally!) and I think it benefits greatly from having gestated in your mind for ten years, becasue it's so well thought out, and the characters all seem to have full, independent lives Your use of language is perfect for the genre, and your descriptions are quite brilliant. Backed with much enthusiasm. Best wishes, Tony

Highly inventive and entertaining; one for kids and kidults alike.

Great Title! Alas no tags? I'm guessing that the jacket cover is your own work - pretty cool!
Excellent character studies. How clever to take the real one step further. Surely this will find publication.

The cover is brilliant, very colourful and eye catching and I love the title and the pitch is hilarious. Reading the opening, I could just picture how depressing the scene was, you paint it so well. Brilliant descriptions and excellent characters. Shelved immediately.

Sandie
The Crown of Crysaldor

Good Grief! This is marvelous! It is so completely YUCKY! I loved it! Shelved with best wishes, Jedward (Brünnhilde)

Because of the Thanksgiving holiday here in the States, I am pressed for time today, so I am gonna SHELVE you for now and swing by later to comment.

I can use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

A book filled with fun and riotous humour. Comic genius.
Frank

Lively and great fun, enough to make me forgive you for having a witch as a baddie and putting you on my shelf.
Authonomy is playing siller beggers with the font sizes, so I will pop back with comments later.

As others have noted, this is very entertaining stuff, atmospheric with great characters. The first sentence, however, made my brain hurt. It could just be me, but it just doesn't feel right. Backed because it made me laugh.
Harclubs

Meet the Kreeps: Nightmare on Bleak Street

Hi Rob

This is exceptional children’s fiction, funny from the outset, but orientated to action as well. This family are a masterpiece, I am really hoping that this book comes with illustrations as well. Great beginning, setting the scene for what is to come and I have to say I am not surprised that it is raining in Manchester! Brilliant stuff and shelved.

Best wishes and good luck
Andrew W
(Sanctuary’s Loss)

This story is certainly the work of a fantastic imagination coupled with a ghoulish sense of humor. I enjoyed this. Backed.

This is great! I enjoy YA and this one meets my interest.
Just a couple of things to tightening it up:
In the sixth paragraph the Monster Hunter whinged. I think you meant whined. :)
That were(was) a rip off even back in the 1940's.
Same para at the end, I wouldn't end with an ! because to me he is whispering or being spooky and the ! makes me feel like he is yelling it.
Overall a great story. I loved the park that no one is supposed to know about but everyone does.
A great read!

Backed by SD Gillen:)

I was lured by your title and the pitch. This is great fun and I'm sure YA - and adults - will enjoy it: very Addams family meets Boris Karloff! The descriptive passages are very good and paint a picture of the [sodden!] environment very well. Good luck with this promising story; shelved, Carolyn.

This is wonderful, wonderful stuff. Entertaining as heck, quality writing, polished, really funny and super imaginative. Why can't I have an imagination like you! I love all the great characters and settings you have created. This is sure to be a big hit.

Rob,

I'm still laughing as I'm typing these comments. You have an incredible imagination, sir. The names of some of the characters and places are too funny.

There's no question in my mind that you have crafted a tale that will appeal to your target audience and to agents who represent the YA genre.

If you'll split your full pitch into 3 or 4 paragraphs, readers will be able to follow the key plot points much easier.

The only thing I noticed in your chapters that concerned me was the use of commas where they aren't required. Nothing that a little editing can't fix.

Thanks for the laughs and for writing a book that will no doubt entertain and be a fun read.

Rodney