Tales from Boggleton

Andrew, your Intro and first chapter read well. Nothing to nitpick there. My little niece would definitely buy the book.

Happily backed.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

Tales From Boggleton is a book I would buy in a heartbeat for my grandchildren aged 6.7 and 8. You have wonderful names for your characters that would intrigue them, and you have pitched your writing at exactly the right level for your target audience. Backed with no nitpicks.

What a fun little story, and full of appropriate lessons - just as kids are getting into cliques at school and meeting up with new challenges. Mr Bodger is like Nanny MacPhee for the whole class. :) I would love for my daughters' teachers to read this to their classes.

I might suggest that you condense some of your sentences - I know the musical quality of these sentences is important for children's books, but I still think some of the sentences are too much, and contain a few too many adjectives/adverbs. Also, I think the prologue is unnecessary. Maybe the man in the green overalls could be the narrator in the beginning, outlining the town's groups to the readers, letting us know that there's a new family in town who are just getting used to it. I just thought the prologue didn't fit. Personal thought.

backed
Genevieve
Under the Same Sky
p.s. I'd love to know what you think of my book sometime

Hi Andrew,
This is very well written and targetted at its intended audience - shelved

I didn't see anything that stood out as a problem and it is a very enjoyable read.

Good luck with this

John Booth (Shaddowdon)

Hi Andrew. Pitch looks good. The book has a nice feel to it for children, at least I think they would see it that way. Writing is competent and the story sounds and reads simple enough but is interesting although, here again, I can only imagine how children see things. Only read 3 chapters but I think it will do well here as a childrens book. Best of luck with it. On my shelf.

John Harold McCoy - Bramwell Valley

Boggleton seems a good place to begin discussions about changing things. It is a book to be used as a teacher or parent shared exercise with children. It could provoke lively discussions about bullying. Good luck with it Anne "Tyson's Tale."

This is very clever indeed and I applaud what you're doing here. I could imagine it being used in classrooms, or for parents to read aloud. I'm not entirely sure it would be something children would necessarily read on their own.
My one quibble is a bit odd and it sounds as if I'm judging this on literary fiction grounds, but it's POV. I think even young children find it easier to follow a story if they're not jumping from head to head. I did find that a bit distracting.
But overall I do like it very much indeed and really wish you well with it. Oh, and happy to back it.
Jane
WALKER

Like this a lot: good story line, and well written. No problem putting this on my bookshelf!

I love this and the kids will too! Good work buddy! This should and will do really well here! Backed with pleasure!
Simon

I love children's books, they are my guilty pleasure. When I go to book shops I kneel on the floor and flip through them. Then when the clerk asks who I am looking for I say, my nephew. When in reality they are for myself. yOu are right there is no other book on the market like this. Boggleton is an interesting place. I am looking forward to reading on. If I had a child I would share this with them.
The writting is easy, smooth and engaging. Everything a child's book should be.
Backed.
T.L Tyson-Seeking Eleanor

The names of the people remind me of the Mr. Men books I read to my children when they were little. I love your use of colours, a man with orange hair and a black beard and only eating sausage rolls. I told my children just such stories when they were little with Jack and Boots and his adventures. I love all the names of the children and the people they meet. Larry Spud and the greenies, sounds a bit like lunch.
This is a charming story with lots to keep little minds busy and mouths smiling. I will back it with great pleasure

Adrian
Jack and Boots

I like to read books for younger children especially when they are helping to teach them how to behave in a better way. This is well written and perfect for young minds to comprehend. I am happy to back it.

Tony
Life Bringer

Much needed, very humourous, and yep, i would read it to my nephew. Kid's stories are mystery to me, as are kids, as are women, as are little badgers and all the tiny bwunny rabbits who live in the sky.
Seriously, I see the potential.

BACKED

You've spelt Birmingham wrong.,..Ha HA.

This really is different. On my shelf.
Refreshing to read someone ready to go for it
with a positive view of the world.
My problem, after reading the pitch I was scanning
like mad looking for these morals secretly woven in..
Blodger ios great. Best luck with it.........Mikey...The Free

As a former schools inspector (only 20 miles from you!) I can see this being a great hit in primary schools. The curriculum is often too crowded to introduce new initiatives, but since this can be introduced as part of the literacy programme, teachers would welcome it. It's very well put together, with very clear messages in the context of fun stories. May I suggest that you persaude someone well-known from the education world to write you a preface? Backed with enthusiasm. Best wishes, Tony.

Father O hara is a wonderful character and so is the Ibberly Jibberly family. The pargraph about the family licking their bowls is very funny and all along the story in spite of the 'sad Boggleton' carries a wonderful light humour. Love this
Backing it
Christina

A nicely written, interesting story with plenty of very different characters that I think children will like and bond with. I would guess that an age range of maybe 6 -10 would be more likely than 4 -9. I think this book could go places. Backed with pleasure.
BADD

I just love your dialogue! It is so quirky, yet true to each situation and character. And the portrait you use it to paint is just perfect for little children, not to mention their parents. Each character has a distinct personalitty and sometimes quirks to match. Well done. Shelved.

Fantastic descriptions in the intro section, and the dialogue rings true to my ear. The bad grammar in the last spoken line of chapter 1 ("they never learns") is a particularly nice touch. Fine voice for a children's book. Backed.
--Daniel
Every Atom Belonging

Tales from Boggleton

Hi Andrew,

Moral tales with lessons inside them for children, an important genre in children’s books for hundreds of years, I work in a school and we use social stories and allegories all of the time to share ideas and explore concepts. This is fun, use alliteration and silly words well to make this a read out loud treat. The only suggestion I would make is the pitch, it is written like you are a celebrity, hey, maybe you are, but you’re writing is fine enough already and the pitch is about the stories not about you. Let us, your readers, pour on the praise for what is a good piece of children’s writing with a heart. Enjoyed this and happy to support it, best wishes and good luck

Andrew W
(Sanctuary’s Loss)

I read chapters 1,2 9 and 26, a quaint story looking at different aspects of challenges children face growing up. Mr Blodger seems to be the problem solver changing Boggleton to a happier village. I think this will suit the age group intended. I am not sure if I would change some of the narratives into action by the characters themselves to engage more and quicken the pace. On second thoughts as it is for children it might not need this, I am throwing suggestions but please note I am still learning and there are many experts on this site that can help more than me.

It is interesting and if it does get all the messages across in the pitch then you have a book with potential. I hope you get many more positive comments and wish you luck.

Shelved

ww Lisa

A Fine Line

This is perfect for the age group it is intended for.

Good luck

Melxx
Impeding Justice

I like the premise of the story, so I read the first chapter. It's a very creative world. All the different names have confused me, however, so soon in the story. Maybe you could parcel out the background within the story instead of all at once. So far it's fun. I look forward to reading more.