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The Shouting Tree -- The Way of Redemption

Callaghan Grant

All Colleen can remember ever wanting to be was safe. This is the path that led to her victorious surrender and ultimate freedom.

 

Colleen was born and lived in Florida until the age of thirty eight when she moved away to the Pacific Northwest. The move was prompted by the resurfacing of the long-repressed memories of some of the more distressing events recounted in this work, “The Shouting Tree”, and her need to escape the codependent relationship between her mother and little sister, Cindy.
"The Shouting Tree -- The Way of Redemption" is the true life recounting of the events in Colleen's young life that were pivotal to the formation of her spirituality. "The Way of Redemption" is an essential method to this spirituality. Using this method we listen internally for the still small Voice for Truth. Following this Voice, we come to understand that "Nothing happens TO you: It ALL happens FOR you. Your Shepherd never leaves you. We also find that inside each tribulation is a blessing waiting to be harvested through our faith in, and following of, these simple principles. This first in a 3 volume series is available in the kindle lending library. Please go there and read this life changing book and come back here to Authonomy to rate it.

 
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The Shouting Tree

The Way of Redemption

 

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© Callaghan Grant

April 13th, 2000

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CONTENTS

 

 

 

You find within

these events

what you are

ready to see.


 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

To Sandy:

I told you

I wouldn’t be little

for

Ever


 
Gratitudes

 

There are so many people to whom I feel gratitude for helping me, indeed, forcing me, to write this book.  To the local businesses who would not give me a job when I was 100 lbs overweight and too crippled to work, I say thank you.  The hopelessness I felt when you turned your back on me caused me to turn inward to the Voice for Truth, Love and Forgiveness for solace and reassurance.  Within that stillness I asked my Shepherd how to feed the flocks He had given me and therein clearly heard Him say to me “Deliver your message and it will deliver you”.  The times are hard and I have learned that the times become hard when we, out of fear, harden our hearts to one another.  Thank you for the lesson of peace and self -reliance that you taught me. 

I thank those who have abused me for teaching me how not to behave towards others and how to stand up for myself without being unkind.  Daddy told me I didn’t have time to make all the mistakes on my own and for my own self edification, so I’d better learn from the mistakes of others as well.  I learned allot from Daddy just that way.  But to Dad I owe the deepest debt because he taught me that miracles can and do happen.  Daddy and I forgave one another and became the best of friends.  I wish he had forgiven himself as well.  I learned late in his days that he still carried the burden of trying to wrest from me in my youth the tributes I’d have given gladly just to please him, had he only bothered to ask me kindly.  I learned from this that, no matter how completely another forgives you, you must forgive yourself in order to make place for the Miracle to intervene,

I thank my Sister Cyndee for teaching me that some people are easier to love from a distance and that maintaining that loving feeling is far more important than maintaining proximity.  She also taught me that I am helpless to help those who will not to be helped.  I surrender.

I thank my mother for her every rescue and her devotion to her children.  She taught me selflessness.  She was an unbelievably devoted mother and educator and she taught me to respect those who give their own time to teach others quickly what they’d otherwise spend much time learning on their own.  God bless the teachers.

I thank my Beloved Husband and friend who taught me determination and salute him as the Captain of my Heart. I shall love him always.

I thank my dear Stuart who was my friend when I was in trouble and who gave me shelter and who then, again, reinforced the lesson of surrender to what one cannot change. Him too I shall love always.

I thank my Sister Christine and her husband, my Brother Brian, who teach me peace and rationality when I am battered and buffeted by my emotions, who stand with and beside me through all things, who came to the Pacific Northwest and helped me regain my sense of continuity and dimension in a culture so much less passionate than the one in which I was raised.  They rock!  And they are my rock.

I thank Dr. Wayne Dyer for his work which has led me to many insights and Eckhart Tolle whose work culminated in a satori experience on October 31st 2007, and which has carried me through the most distressing of transitions and even helped my body to begin to heal when I was near death. I thank the publishers of these men’s work.  I thank Gary Renard for his work and for pointing me towards “A Course in Miracles”.

I thank Jeff Brown, the author of “Soulshaping” who gave me the courage to self-reveal and to add the scenes in this book that gave it the continuity necessary to bring its messages to fruition.  His “naked” honesty opened my heart to emulate his courage and candor.  Thank you, Jeff Brown.

I thank my Shepherd, for never leaving me, for loving me and looking past my rage and pointing my own gaze past that illusion, deeper to the love thwarted that is at the basis of every emotion that does not appear to be love. He has taught me again and again, with infinite patience that “Love is all that IS”.  He is the source of my strength and my constant companion and I, the smallest flower of His great vine, hope only to please Him in this life and to join His other helpers in watering that vine.  I love you ALL – especially those who have hurt and misused me because it was in that great distressing that The Christ came to me and put His roots down in my heart.  May His vine bear fruit in me by this work and may all who read it be blessed with the fullness of the Holy Spirit, feel the spangled energy of His mighty chi throughout their bodies and know by His presence that this message is for THEM: “NOTHING happens TO you.  It ALL happens FOR you.  Your Shepherd NEVER leaves you, therefore – laugh!”
 
Preface

 

What is true? True is what one experiences and may recount for their own benefit and, perhaps, for the benefit of others.

What you are about to read is the recounting of true events, retold as the heroine remembers them. These events are herein shared because they have been pivotal in the formation of her resilient spirituality and relationship to God and to His creations. They are shared with the hope that you will learn from them the gentle and godly art of “The Way of Redemption”: a method by which we look closely at the most distressing events in our lives and find within them, through our willingness to do so, and with the guidance of the Little Voice within, meaningfulness that will bless our lives and our perceptions of the universe. When we learn to redeem each “tragedy” for the blessings hidden therein, we use our godly estate to reassign significance, transforming calamity into bounding personal growth strides that allow us to walk our own unique path to authenticity with courage and resilience and, omniportantly, accompanied by “…the peace which surpasses all (rational) understanding”.

Go with Colleen and with God on this journey, trusting that His love is everywhere and that, in every event, there is a lesson brought to carry you to the deeply rooted KNOWledge that “Nothing happens TO you, it ALL happens FOR you. Love is ALL that IS.” To accomplish this you have but to resign now as your own teacher and learn to listen to the Truth, whispered to your heart, by the Little Voice that knows.  It is the Holy Spirit.  It is the Voice for Love.  Follow it and it will grow stronger.  Trust it and it will lead you home.

It has been said that Truth must be lived -- to be “known”. Knowing is direct experience and direct experience of Truth is what is often referred to as “enlightenment”.  Satori experiences are brief but significant glimpses of the enlightened state. These may have after effects that linger for years, a few months, days, or, most frequently, a few blessed moments. They leave the experiencer changed but often confused; wondering what it was, sometimes devastated that they cannot get “back to” that blessed state of perception although they long to do so. This is a kind of post partum grief that most spiritual seekers experience many times in their lives, often never reaching the goal of a living salvation in which their experience of the world is of a consistent state of felt connection to God and to everything that God is. It can be the source of great despair that manifests as a longing for Home. This is the darkness that exposure to the light of Truth can bring: How do we reconcile the perfect love, beauty and grace of the satori with the world which, so hungry for that light, pulls it right out of the unwary seeker, caught up in its ebullience and, typically, filled with the desire to share the experience – to make it more real and lasting by bringing someone there with them.

I beg you, for the sake of all that is meaningful and for the sake of the world which needs this grace now more than ever, if you meet such a one who tries to bring you with them into this state of vision purified by love, go with them if you can. Open your heart and hear them. Strip away the emotional armor you have put on to protect your heart from the world. What they are offering you is a chance to share the only REAL thing that exists in this world. It is real because it is eternal: It goes with you when you leave this temporal context which is not your home, to the eternal context which is your home. Inasmuch as this dream we call “life” is such a miniscule part of our journey of self-experience, it makes little sense to consider anything here more valuable than the one Truth that goes with us, connecting us forever to one another and to God.

 

This concludes the Front matter for “The Shouting Tree – The way of Redemption”.  The remainder of this true life recounting of the events that shaped Colleen’s spirituality can be read free of charge from the Kindle Lending Library. If you do not have a Kindle, you can download the Kindle reader for free and read the text of this beautiful story of the power of forgiveness on your computer, iPad or iPhone or Mac. Please go there and read the work, which consists of `10 chapters and is complete taking only four hours to read, and come back here to Authonomy to rate it.  We thank you and know that you will be blessed by what you find in this work.

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Anthony Brady wrote 777 days ago

Callaghan,

I note your current Weekly rating is 23 to my 26 in the genre we share. I hope it reaches the highest level where it surely belongs.

Your book is the first of all on Authonomy that I have personally selected myself; up until now I responded in the spirit of Authonomy by responding to authors who, with the exception of yourself, "imposed" their books upon me like a feeding frenzy, and in most cases without according me the basic courtesy of mentioning my work.

From the outset, you invest your book with a spiritual dynamic which never wavers throughout. As a writer, possessed with profound depth of insight, you tackle the great universal themes: Attachment; Separation; Loss; Acceptance; Reconciliation and Redemption. To address these first 3 alluded to, through the personification and characterisation of a young girl, is especially challenging: you succeed magnificently.

What makes this book particularly significant, is that it avoids presenting abuse in the reader's face, for it is suggested rather than defined: it could be sexual, physical, menta. What matters is that - whatever its form - its devastating truth is manifest in the central character. In this way you capture the reader's full empathy. The Quotations from various religious sources which introduce each Chapter are fitting and apposite. The crucial scene - from which the impulse to tell the story is derived - I mean the passages describing the event with the stallion and its aftermath - is vivid and axiomatic to fully understanding the numerous points, meanings and messages which underpin the essential redemptive and healing force of love. The text has an inner timbre and is paced reminiscent of the movements in a symphony. It comes to a sweet and gentle close like music: Acceptance, Reconciliation and Redemption are merged in resonating harmony.

I would sincerely recommend The Shouting Tree - The Way of Redemption and would hope that it will not only be found in Christian bookshops but accessible to the widest public.

A significant and inspiring work. Tony Brady. - SCENES FROM AN EXAMINED LIFE - Books 1.2 & 3.


gillyflower wrote 870 days ago

A beautiful book, full of truth and insights. But also full of the horror of repeated child abuse from many different sources. Colleen is a marvellous character, sweet and strong, learning to forgive but finding it very hard, as it is. You write in a simple, straightforward style which makes your story move forward quickly, with short sentences and chapters, and you manage to portray your characters well so that they come alive. '...the tree where her heart had first shouted at the sky' is a great phrase, only one of many which allows your writing skill to take us into the centre of what you want us to see. Backed.
Gerry McCullough,
Belfast Girls.

Ancient Reader wrote 874 days ago

My dear Callaghan,

When I agreed to look at your book, I wasn't expecting it to be such a blessing! You have touched my heart over and over and I thank you, my dear.

I have read all you have up and was horrified when I realized where you had stopped! Tis not fair to hook your reader like that and then leave her dangling! Seems you are a bit of a manipulator -- all in a good cause of course. }:-)

The lyrical beauty of your writing is astounding and when you are recounting the darker aspects of your story, unfortunately, it rings with truth.

I was in tears in the scene where Colleen sees her dead grandfather in her dream. How unbearably sweet to remember from a child's perspective. And then juxtaposed with the child seeing the corpse of her beloved grandfather! It is so true to real life for a child and death. You are quite remarkable.

I loved that Colleen resolved not to "play favorites" between God and her Grandaddy.

Lucid dreaming is such a marvelous discovery.

So much truth: "It is not what happens to us that matters -- that shapes our perceptions. It is what we tell ourselves has happened that determines our experience of the world. . . . "

I think I may see why you raise beautiful, exotic birds.

This is a marvelous book so far and I believe that the rest of it will be just as fabulous! In this damaged world of ours, we need to see that horror and abuse can lead to forgiveness and love, and your story does just that.

God bless you, my dear. I am shelving this with love and enthusiasm!

Ancient Reader

Shelby Z. wrote 69 days ago

This has potential to it.
Yet the story itself didn't start off enough to grip the readers attention.
However your writing skill is really good. No mistakes in any of it as far as I could tell. It has a good pacing.
The title is really good.
Good work.

Shelby Z./Driving Winds.

P.S. Please take a look at my Christian pirate adventure Driving Winds.

AudreyB wrote 256 days ago

My book is YA with a Christian theme so I have been reading other YA/Christian books.

It's not clear to me what the audience for this book would be. Although you write very well, your diction and tone regarding people is often identical, so the reader never knows whether a new person will be a villian or a saint. This does mimic the way children perceive adults, but is confusing for the reader. It's extremely tricky to describe sex or abuse clearly, through the eyes of a child, while keeping the text rated PG. I think your scene describing the rape leans too far into prurient territory. Wouldn't Colleen focus more on the suffering of Cindy? The facial expressions of the two boys? Perhaps the sounds they made or the words they said?

Another thing I notice is that you use far too many verbs of being. It's actually more noticeable in your writing because your other sentences are so strong and powerful.

Finally, I thought it was odd that the manuscript didn't provide any narration at all to prepare us for Colleen's immorality. Yes, her choices to experiment with sex and drugs are common to children who have suffered the kind of abuse she's suffered - but it seems like she'd offer us some rationalization for why she's chosen to behave so badly. Her rationalizations, in fact, would help make her more believable, and would bring the reader along with her on her journey to redemption.

Best of luck!
~Audrey

RichardBard wrote 276 days ago

Hi Callaghan!

Since you haven’t been to Authonomy for a while, I hope it’s okay that I’m sending this through your book comment:

I’d like to thank you for backing BRAINRUSH (a Thriller) last year. Because of you it hit the Authonomy Number-1 slot, attracted an agent, and landed a film option. Now that’s a brain-rush! The formal book launch is September 1st and the sequel will be released in December. None of this would have been possible without your help. So, thank you, thank you, THANK YOU!

Sincerely,
Richard Bard, BRAINRUSH

PS. If you want a good laugh, check out the temporary book-trailer video on the BRAINRUSH website. It’s there as a placeholder for the upcoming professional video. The current one features children and it’s guaranteed to make you smile! And yes, the younger kid on the screen is really me. You can see the video at www.RichardBard.com. The link is also on my Authonomy profile page. While you’re there, check out the “Feel the Rush” promotion that will get you BRAINRUSH plus 2 FREE thrillers from the Kindle Top-20 PAID Bestseller list – yes, really!

Laura Bailey wrote 371 days ago

This is fantastically well written, although I must say, it is a little too much for me. You are in a very brave and dark territory and you do very well to write so beautifully around such a subject. I think that it is perhaps too graphic to be YA, especially at the lower end of the scale, although I do think it is a book adults would read, so you do not lose out there. As much as I didn't enjoy reading what happens to Colleen, I oddly could not stop reading either and in fact, I have read more of your book than any other book on this site. This can only be a good thing!

I have given this six stars, mostly for your immense grip on the reader. You force the reader to experience something they do not want to, which is exactly how Colleen must feel. In this way, you manage to transport the reader into the distressing world Colleen experiences everyday.

Best of luck with this!

Laura Bailey
Beneath The Blossom Tree

Laura Bailey wrote 371 days ago

This is fantastically well written, although I must say, it is a little too much for me. You are in a very brave and dark territory and you do very well to write so beautifully around such a subject. I think that it is perhaps too graphic to be YA, especially at the lower end of the scale, although I do think it is a book adults would read, so you do not lose out there. As much as I didn't enjoy reading what happens to Colleen, I oddly could not stop reading either and in fact, I have read more of your book than any other book on this site. This can only be a good thing!

I have given this six stars, mostly for your immense grip on the reader, forcing the reader to experience something they do not want to, which is exactly how Colleen must feel. In this way, you manage to transport the reader into the distressing world Colleen experiences everyday.

Best of luck with this!

Laura Bailey

Laura Bailey wrote 371 days ago

This is fantastically well written, although I must say, it is a little too much for me. You are in a very brave and dark territory and you do very well to write so beautifully around such a subject. I think that it is perhaps too graphic to be YA, especially at the lower end of the scale, although I do think it is a book adults would read, so you do not lose out there. As much as I didn't enjoy reading what happens to Colleen, I oddly could not stop reading either and in fact, I have read more of your book than any other book on this site. This can only be a good thing!

I have given this six stars, mostly for your immense grip on the reader, forcing the reader to experience something they do not want to, which is exactly how Colleen must feel. In this way, you manage to transport the reader into the distressing world Colleen experiences everyday.

Best of luck with this!

Laura Bailey

Tom Balderston wrote 538 days ago

Having faith is the most difficult task there is when God allows Satan to reign. He, along with his demons, is the ruler of this world as we await to be in His world. Finding the truth is confronted with daily obstacles of doubt. Thank you for taking on such a bold look at believing.
Tom Balderston
The Wonder of Terra

Duncan Watt wrote 582 days ago

Hi Callaghan ...

I find it really hard to believe the amount of child abuse that is still evident in the world today, and it appears to be getting worse.

I think you have told your story with great sensitivity of what is, after all, one of the worst crimes. Your story is well written and should be told and published, to help others in thius situation. The secrecy that these people place on children, praying on impressionable young minds, is despicable. I wish you all the best with this. Backed. Regards ... Duncan.

lavery51 wrote 599 days ago

Hi Colleen, I was drawn to your book because I love the idea of redemption and forgiveness.Your book through chapter 1 is well written and passionate. I know it is the kind of book I will read to the end once I have the time.THE world is sorely in need of uplifting books, honoring the potential in mankind once we let go of the pride. good job, Lynne ps could you look at Your turn? thanks

memphisgirl wrote 620 days ago

Literary, accessible, genuine. The only disappointment is the word "incomplete."

Memphisgirl
Ashes By Now

Sharon.v.o. wrote 620 days ago

Dear Callaghan,
I just read the first chapter. My heart is breaking for Colleen. Very well written.
Sharon Van Orman
Eve, an Eden's Exiles Novel

Roger Thurling wrote 621 days ago

Exceptional. Poetic. Entirely believable. Harrowing.
'True Life' it might be, but I don't think that it is YA - surely this is a book for adults. 'Christian' might have been central for the author, (even for some of the characters), but this is an excellent book irrespective of the religion (or non-religion) of the reader.
Backed with conviction.
RT

PATRICK BARRETT wrote 621 days ago

Works like this make us question our own problems and complaints and they will be priceless to anyone trying to come to terms with a similar background. I would have thought this was exactly the book Harper Collins would appreciate. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

Jedda wrote 630 days ago

I started to read this but couldn't get very far. Coleen is such a real character that it makes the reader feel such sympathy for her that it makes one feel impotent to help. I shall put it on my WL until I can spend more time with the poor child. Regards, Anne

Eunice Attwood wrote 650 days ago

I love the way you use words. Beautifully written, I am more than happy to back your book. Congratulations. Eunice - The Temple Dancer.

Laurence Howard wrote 654 days ago

A great read that has it all. Senesatively written by a person who knows their craft. Well done! Backed.
Laurence Winchester, The Cross of Goa.

eurodan49 wrote 656 days ago

I want to start by saying that this isn’t my genre. That out of the way let’s talk your work.
Ch 1 is a great combination of narration and internal dialogue…helps the reader get into your character’s head and make up for lack of dialogue.
Ch 2 keeps up with the pace of the story. In small bits you manage to convey knowledge about Colleen.
Also read Ch 3 and 4. While 3 is similar to the previous ones, 4 starts to develop tension and that’s good…keeps the reader hooked. It’s also a chapter that brings dialogue into play and that moves the story at a brisker pace.
The writing is clear and just the right wordsmithing.
Great job, you’ve got my vote.

Kevin Alex Baker wrote 671 days ago

Callaghan,

Oooh, this is sharp. You've got not only carefully pointed prose that's very exact, but I love that you're creative with your presentation and that helps this story to really move. Intense!

Nice work! Backed! Looking forward to your thoughts on Head Games!

Kevin Alex Baker
Head Games

Cariad wrote 682 days ago

How lovely this first chapter is - despite the subject matter. Do you really think someone or something watches over such things? I do, sometimes. You write with fluidity and feeling without tipping into melodrama. Chapter one draws the reader in so easily, up in the tree with this poor child. There are so many 'misery memoirs' about these days, but this story doesn't ring like so many of those - like something written just to jump on a bandwagon - the feeling you have for this shines through each word. Just putting you on my watchlist to read chapter two.

Owen Quinn wrote 685 days ago

A tale that inspires and solidifies for me, the notion that there is always light after the dark and the worst things in life can be gripped and turned to help us, rather than letting them drag us to black pits. No matter what happens, there is always someone or something to help us. Complete affirmation of life. Brilliant.

SusieGulick wrote 716 days ago

Dear Callaghn, I got so excited when I saw that you had backed, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not." :) Thanks so very much. :) Since I have already "backed" your book, I will put your book on my "watchlist." Could you please take a moment to "back" my completed unedited memoir version? "Tell Me True Love Stories," which at the end tells of my illness now & 6th abusive marriage. I'd be ever so grateful. :) Thank you. :) Love, Susie :)
authonomy quotes: "Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs.
When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved...authonomy.

SusieGulick wrote 716 days ago

Dear Callaghn, I love that you used scripture verses before chapters - God's Word will not return void. :) May God bless you for sharing your trials & triumphs. :) Like my memoir, God sharpens us like iron to be shiney for Him. :) Thank you for sharing your story that others can know "He give His angels charge over us to keep us in all of our way" Psalm 91:11/"The angel of the Lord encamps round about them who fear Him" Ps. 34:7/ "Are not they ministering spirits, sent forth for them who shall be heirs of salvation?" Hebrews 1:14. Before I began to read your book, I was prepared by your pitch, which was very well done. :) Your story is good because you create interest by having short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, which makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm "backing" your book. :) "When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved"...authonomy quote. :) Please "back" my TWO memoir books, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" & my completed memoir unedited version? "Tell Me True Love Stories," which tells at the end, my illness now & 6th abusive marriage." Thanks, Susie :)
additional authonomy quote: "Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs." :)

Gregory James wrote 725 days ago

You have a very lovely writing style; it makes what I compose look like chicken-scratch... Furthermore you have an very endearing story to tell. It made for a great read. I hope you finish it. Backed.

Gregory James

Simon Law wrote 728 days ago

Come on your book deserves better - you must be slacking. Or bored with playing the game?
I have been away for a week - and not sure I missed any of this.
But, as I said you deserve better. (Certainly compared to mush of what I have looked at today.)
Simon Law

Katriel1985 wrote 732 days ago

Hi Callaghan,
Your story evoked all sorts of emotions in me and I just wanted to weep for Colleen as she struggled to understand the abuse she suffered. So many children grow up in a world like that and it was refreshing to to see the redemption and love of Christ throughout your story. It was beautifully written and you portray the characters so honestly. Your descriptions are vivid but not overwhelming. I have happily backed this book.

Joyanna Winn
The Prince and The Sorcerer

crazy mama wrote 738 days ago

I backed your book on the pitch. I know how it feels to only want to be safe. So that sentence pulled me in. Unfortunately with that opening line, I think it may be too true life for me...but sounds as if it's doing perfectly fine without my help. Good luck!

Simon Law wrote 747 days ago

Sorry I do not understand why HC - or others - have not picked this up.
It is better by far than anything that I have read in hard or soft covers.
It is hard to read on line - but I did.
SL

A. Zoomer wrote 749 days ago

I love in the sentence in the pitch. "It is not about Colleen."
You have aroused this reader, by the story and your judicious use of figures of speech, that is your writing style.
Backed unequivocally.
A zoomer
GOING OUT IN STYLE

Elizabeth Wolfe wrote 757 days ago

Dear Callaghan,
I backed your book. I enjoy coming of age stories, especially those that investigate those universal questions of spirituality and place in the world. Good luck in the rankings.
Sincerely, Elizabeth Wolfe

nakiacap wrote 757 days ago

Very well written, there is no reason why you should not have agent. I loved it and for it to be true, remarkable.
Good luck

Anna Pescardot wrote 758 days ago

This is very well written. You manage to create an uneasy atmosphere immediately which keeps the reader interested. I am happy to back it.

Best Wishes

Anna

Sunflick wrote 760 days ago

Hi Callaghan

This is truly poetically written, the words ebb and flow with a rhythm that reminds me of the tide.

Backed, Lucy

Andrew Burans wrote 765 days ago

You have an excellent command of the English Language and you paint your story very well. You portray the inner angst of your MC, Colleen, superbly and your use of imagery makes your book happen. A powerful book. Backed with pleasure.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

Balepy wrote 770 days ago

Callaghan - fortunately I am unable to relate to the abuse this girl suffers and the subject matter is not my genre, but your writing is fluent, sensitive and well worth backing - so I have done just this. Best of luck. Balepy (Freckles the Fawn)

gerry01 wrote 770 days ago

Hi Callaghan, This is well written and almost poetic at times. I wish you all the best with it. Gerry

Richard Allen wrote 770 days ago

There is no denying this is a beautiful piece of literature, subject matter aside. Your prose is almost lyrical at times and your voice is unwavering, objective, sophisticated and yet unassuming. Truly brilliant!

LGW wrote 770 days ago

The Shouting Tree

Callaghan (a man's name), From the personal introduction in your profile I deduce that your book is auto-biographical in nature. Being written from the girl's perspective I would therefore have classed it as Historical Fiction, but you class it as True Life. Obviously the boundaries are not absolute.

I found your writing to be of a consistently high quality and steadily involving. You have some important things to communicate, and have found a pertinent way to do it. I think its great that you have a broad religous base (evident from your booklist) to draw from and so reach a broad audience, though it's all very zen. I read chapters 1, 5, 7 and 9 of the book; in ch5 I found need of some chronological reference, which was offered in ch7 ( ... I was 13 yrs old ...'). For the likes of me, age-titling the chapters would be very helpful - I'm sure you could find a way of wrapping it up artfully.

The Little Voice: Well, we all have one, or two, offering us counsels for better or worse. I was surprised to find in later chapters that you also use the small font for quiet (or meanuingful?) speech between father and child, and further for certain siginificant words in narrative. I feel that it would be better reserved completely for the Little Voice. Italics serve amply for emphasis, and there are other means for portraying quiet speech.

What otherwise concerned me about the Little Voice, was the maturity of rhetoric with which it spoke, even when the girl was small. Our inner voices talk to us in words of our own familiar vocabulary. Even by the end of ch1 you present a discussion on betrayal which I wouldn't associate with a 5yr old reckoning. A way to rectify this would go with my suggestion below to expand on ch9 - shift some of your discussions into a later stage of your life; it doesn't all have to complete by the age of 21?

In ch9, I found your very apt paragraph describing my own weary condition:
'Everyone was lost in their own delusions - their self validating modes of seeing and thinking. Their perspectives and values ... had trapped them all in torments of their own making ... sleep walkers, dreaming without lucidity ... without awareness ... that they are in fact, their own worst enemies...'

The problem we are all left with, after discovering and knowing a little - is the conviction to take appropriate action which will retain lasting peace and joy. Western man doesn't live in cave or monastery; we're subject to so many stressful inputs. It seems to me that you've packed more into ch9 than the earlier ones; perhaps the topics could be divided and expanded to include a discussion of this 'lasting peace'. Spiritual survival in the real world.

And oh yes, I like your accusation of men being guilty of 'thinking with their little heads'. Spot on!

This writing has great potential. Backed.

Lee
Trekking the Pyrenees Coast to Coast

Mike Lynch wrote 770 days ago

Hi Callaghan,

I think your writing is top notch. It has a poetic quality about it that makes the subject matter almost bearable. The way you handle the narrative is very distinctive (With the cutaway voices) and i like that. If i had to make one small suggestion it would be perhaps to stick to just one font as it can be a bit offputting.
That aside, i think that you have the makings of a very touching and thought provoking novel here. Good luck.

Mike
(Calloway Blood)

Patrick Fox wrote 770 days ago

I found the first chapter to be quite hard to read, not because of the writing which is excellent, but because of the subject matter. That it is a true story made it all the more harrowing, but the quality of the writing kept me reading. Chapter two was an easier read and allowed me to enjoy the almost lyrical quality of some of your sentences. Chapter three had me reading through my fingers again, in a metaphorical sense. I know what I'd like to do to grand-uncle Alfred, and it isn't pleasant. This is a brave and important book, and if I wasn't such a wuss, I would probably read all the uploaded chapters. I wish you all the luck in the world with it.

Patrick

Paddy Tyrrell wrote 770 days ago

Beautiful writing, which is important since you are showing how there is a beauty out there for all of us, even for a young, vulnerable, and abused child who is frightened of the life ahead of her. Particularly moving as it is a true story. A pleasure to back this. Paddy

marywood18 wrote 770 days ago

Wow, chapter nine is something else. It really drew me in. I wish I could read a lot on the screen as I would tackle the whole book, but I can't, I suffer headaches after a while and have to give in.

Not having read any inbetween the first and this, it seems to me the crux of the story is really coming alive now and the profound message of the little voice is about to be heard. Though, I may be wrong and it may have happened earlier. Whichever, the message is getting where it is meant to go and that can open up a new world of understanding for Colleen.

Great stuff.

Just one mistake spotted. It should be herd the stallion, not heard the stallion in.

Take care, love, Mary

David Holt wrote 770 days ago

Callaghan,

This is not the type of book that I would read but it is very well written and I enjoyed what I read of it.

All the best.
Dave

ILA Golden wrote 770 days ago

I like the way you use a smaller point font for the ‘little voice’ it creates a nice visual impact on the page which draws the reader in with curiosity. The way you’ve dramatised the chase in the opening chapter works well. Her thoughts are fast and the information comes out in time with those thoughts. It makes the reader want to read on.

This is a very well written piece. Well done.

~ ILA ~
Zero Conformity

Corrine Grace Coleman wrote 771 days ago

So far very touching...moving. I've only read the first chapter for lack of time, but it definately grabbed me. My only constructive thought would be in the way the words are written. I got only a little confused with who was speaking...I had to go back a few times. Something you definately don't want readers to do...for it interrupts them. But, besides that...I felt empathy for the child and have the urge to read further. I will comment again soon. :)

Bamboo Promise wrote 771 days ago

The true story should be honored. You have received many powerful comments already. All you need from me is to let you know that your real life story needs to be picked up by HC. Your book is well done and ready to be on the market.
Backed
Bamboo Promise

Cyndi Tefft wrote 771 days ago

You have a captivating prose that kept me reading much longer than I planned to. If I have one piece of advice, it would be to cut down on the changing fonts. Your words are so elonquently composed that the emphasis is unnecessary and distracting.

Best of luck to you!

Cyndi
Between

Owen Quinn wrote 771 days ago

Powerful stuff here aligned with strong imagery and flowing writing excellent.

marywood18 wrote 772 days ago

There is a sadness in this first chapter that touches the soul. It is hard to think such a little child could have profound thoughts of the nature she does, but not incomprehensable, because in her situation, living so close to fear and degredation, then her innerself would cry out and seek help she cannot get from those in her real world who should be protecting her.

I did just feel that there was author intrusion (getting your own opinion across) at the end of the first chapter when you talk of shame, because this is the first time I felt these thoughts and feelings were too much for such a young child and were yours as a grown up who had had a deep encounter with the spiritual world.

Having said that, they are beautiful words and sentiments, but maybe they should come later when the little girl has matured more. I know you acknowledge this as your last paragraph tries to qualify it by having the little girl thinking these thoughts had been given to her by a higher being she calls 'Little Voice'.

I know you like more of your story read, but my time is so limited I cannot oblige, but I do want to read more as you have one of the essential qualities built into this - page turning, what will happen next - tension in your reader.

I am backing for its great potential and publishable qualities and will keep on my watch list to dip into again when I have more time to do so. Thank you for sharing this with us and good luck with it. Hope you can keep your promise and do a swap read, love Mary
You also have a great command of the craft of writing and use your skills so your writing is a joy to read. As a Creative Writing Editor, other than what I have mentioned already, I didn't see anything that needed attention.

Thunderbird wrote 772 days ago

Dear Callaghan

For me the strength of this book is not just the way it deals with abuse, but more importantly the awakening of spirituality in the MC. This is an incredibly difficult task and you take it on in a comprehensive way.I particulaly liked the dealing with the death of the grandfather.

Sometimes I feel like you have your foot on the pedal to hard and I would prefer for the journey to be a little less rushed. I felt this about the second and fifth chapters. I think that sime people might be put off when this is a book well worth reading.

John
Call of the thunderbird

ridinaround wrote 773 days ago

Poignant, touching and important. Having a foster child in my life who has suffered similar horrifying experiences, I can now envision and aspire to be her "little voice" and help lead her the right way. Well done. An editor might find fault with the amount of 'she's', but the storyline flows fine regardless. Also, I believe the graphic description of rape was difficult to put in words, but it creates the picture in the reader's mind of the terror and reality of the abuse. Keep up the good work. Elaine - The Perfect Place.