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rank 5335
word count 73818
date submitted 17.12.2009
date updated 29.01.2010
genres: Literary Fiction, Science Fiction, ...
classification: adult
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The Year of the Blue Snow

Kevin Walter

After a plague takes all adults, the child survivors rebuild a society adrift from the past, beholden to the fate of an unseen hand.

 

The Year of the Blue Snow follows a group of child survivors in the wake of a plague that takes all adults. Thrown together by fate’s whimsy, they endeavor to resurrect a new civilization at the edge of the wilderness. They must quickly learn to bring in the fall harvest to ensure their survival through winter by rediscovering the myriad skills lost to them through the neglect of modern society, while simultaneously defending the land on which they have come to live, support, and depend from a band of feral, violent nihilists. Through the course of four seasons, plotted and expected since antiquity, the children gain adulthood as they cope with the first death in the camp amidst the earth darkening into winter. Spring and the birth of their first new member follow, even as events seem to foretell an outside hand at work in their movements. Each event purposefully lays the ground for the next, charting a course foretelling the city’s soldiers’ arrival in summer and the climactic showdown for control of a fate seemingly held by a higher power, illustrating duality’s paradox: from all things flow both good and evil.

 
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donnaburgess wrote 590 days ago

Strong in mood and well written. Your pitch hooked me. There's a huge market for this currently, but I'm sure you're aware. Backed.

Donna Burgess (Darklands)

Owen Quinn wrote 610 days ago

Love it, love it, love it, By the ay, love it! Get backing this one people.

lizjrnm wrote 696 days ago

I love this book! You have such a vivid imagination and a true gift for being able to put it in writing! I think with soem decent cover art this book will start to move quickly up the ranks - just a suggestion really anything is better than those prototypes and this book needs to stand apart because there is nothing typical about this book! So glad to see it is all uploaded! What a treat I will definitely come back to! BACKED with pleasure!

Liz
The Cheech Room

Bob Steele wrote 709 days ago

The Year of the Blue Snow is a classic sci-fi scenario of plague survivors battling to find a new world from the wreckage of the old. You paint your opening scenarios and characters vividly, and the pitch shows that there are dramatic events ahead to make this story distinctive in a competitive genre. Backed.

Betsy wrote 711 days ago

This beautifully written story is atmospheric, visual. The burning houses alert us to the fact that something is terribly wrong here. All is confusion and uncertainty. But the children take action: they leave. The last paragraph of the second chapter. where the children party, and bond as a group, is very moving. It is a privilege to have a book like this on my shelf. Jacqui Christensen (William's Revenge)

soutexmex wrote 713 days ago

BACKING you. I can use your comments on my book if you can spare the time. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

zan wrote 717 days ago

The Year of the Blue Snow
Kevin Walter

Kevin,

When I read your short pitch, I immediately thought of William Golding’s “Lord of the Flies” where these young boys were shipwrecked on an island, forming a new society on their own, and ultimately degenerated into savages. Your child survivors rebuilding a society is therefore not an original idea – and that last line of your long pitch, “from all things flow both good and evil” is also reminiscent of Golding, at least to me. However, I think that’s where the similarities intersect, and end, because your setting through which your cast of characters emerge and your style of writing make this a very special piece with stimulating ideas and sensitivities which I think make this a powerful piece.

Best wishes for success,
Zan

Margaret Anthony wrote 718 days ago

I'm commenting on this as a reader, others more competent will doubtless offer more constructive advice.
The first chapter is haphazard, chaotic, exactly as the scene you create which the children are fleeing from and you certainly painted a visual picture. It's a nightmare scenario both original and fascinating.
I think you have thought up a clever story and your writing supports it well. I'm going to read on to see where this tale is going but meanwhile happy to shelve. Margaret.

Becca wrote 722 days ago

"..the forseeable fate of the adjactent houses." might read smoother.
Also, if you plit up some of the longer paragraphs it will give the illusion of a quicker pace and might be easier to read. However, keep in mind that is totally a sylistic preference.
It was hard to keep track of who was speaking in dialogue with the format you used.
I had a hard time connecting to the story, and I can't tell if it was because of the format or something else. The sentences were a bit monotonous, imo, so that may have been part of it. Consider adding more emotion and maybe following a character through the experience.
I hope this helps. I'm happy to give this another read if you edit. Just let me know. Feel free to ignore anything and everything I say if you don't agree.
xBeccaX
The First Phoenix

LittleDevil wrote 722 days ago

This really sucked me in. Not something I would usually pick up off the shelf, but that's the good thing about authonomy, you are forced to read things outside your genre and I have to say, I'm glad I did. You paint a perfect picture with your words. I was there with these kids. I think this is one of the most original stories I've read. Hey, I reckon kids would make pretty good rulers. We can't get much worse than the crap that we have now.
Shelved with pleasure
Sue
A Boy Called George

bonalibro wrote 725 days ago

I think I was mistaken in my copy and paste comment to you but I thank you for having a look at my book.

I'm having trouble following your story because there are too many people speaking at once and I don't know who is saying what. There are many ways of identifying characters in dialogue. Not just names but speech patterns and accents and verbal tics. Some characterization might also help in distinguishing the players from the hangers on. You've got a long way to go with this still.

bonalibro wrote 726 days ago

Hi,

I notice you have backed my good friend Dan McKinnis's book.
I wonder if you might have a look at mine, and let me know
which book here you primarily support.

Tim Chambers
Moonbeam Highway: With Apologies to Miguel de Cervantes.

Ariom Dahl wrote 727 days ago

hey, I liked the beginning of this; it put me in mind of George Stewart's book Earth Abides. I confess to being a grammar freak and the lack of quote marks temporarily irritated me until I adjusted. All the best.

Freeman wrote 732 days ago

I like reading sci-fi so I was keen to read your book especially since it has a society where modern technology becomes useless. When you read my book you will understand my comment.

This is a terrifying future with all the adults dead and children left to their own devices. Although you don’t have an MC, the narratives works well as we can feel the MC is the group of children and it doesn’t matter who says what, just that they are talking. With the comments of freezers with meat that has just defrosted, I guess this is taking place within a week or so of the big-death. This is well written and moves at a fast pace. I enjoyed reading it and I will back it with pleasure.

Tony
Life Bringer

Jared wrote 732 days ago

Cormac McCarthy doesn't use quotation marks, one of my favourite writers, so I'll not even mention their absence in your book. In fairness, after the initial surprise I didn't see their absence as a problem. An editor may not necessarily agree, of course. It's a wonderful premise, wildly imaginative, and I've certainly enjoyed the chapters I've read to date.
I'd really like this to be successful. There's so much that is remarkable about the idea and the clever construction of the story-line. Backed.
Jared.

Jennifer Powick wrote 733 days ago

This is a very original and distinctive story well written. Not normally my sort of book but I actually found it a "must" to read. I will have to read on to find out what happens. I find it a little bit scary but guess I am supposed to. Some superb imagery. Well done! Backed.
Jennifer Powick
The Shrawley Rabbit

Lorri wrote 733 days ago

This is a great premise, and on reading it I found it had a haunted quality.

Happy to back it.

Lorrii
(Euphoria)

paxie wrote 735 days ago

Kevin
I made a few notes:-
You open :- In the town.......I think you should give us the name of the town , why not? Give the reader a feeling of time and place.....is this present day for instance ?

I'd delete the word 'up' on the two instances you use it in your opening line....I saw no need for it.

her lack of concern kept her routed to the spot.....mmm...that sounded conflicting to me........fear would keep you rooted to the spot, not lack of concern...

I'm sure you have a reason for not using speech punctuation, but if you are considering publication, agents will insist on it.....You'll have a hell of a job on your hands....

This is an amazing premise.....There was a rather contravential programme about a gang of kids being left on an island to fend for themselves......It caused all sorts of 'ban the bomb' 'save the whale' arguments......For the life of me I cant remember what it was called......But it would have been a good case study for subject matter for you........If it tweeks my mind I'll let you know......

Shelved with good wishes....best of luck with this.

Jo Ellis wrote 735 days ago

Your writing flows with beautiful ease and there are many wonderful lines to love such as they smelled of neglect.

Your narrative is great, something I wish I could do so well and though lit fic isn't my usual choice, I can recognise excellent writing.

Jo xx

Spoilt

ellen911 wrote 735 days ago

I like the mix of long detailed sentences with short to-the-point lines. ("It was as if everyone was stuck in rush hour traffic, on their way to the appointed destination, which happened to be the morgue. Some of the cars were empty.")
However, I find unquoted or unmarked dialogue confusing. An easy fix, and worth it. This is well done.
Backed,
Ellen
(Thoughts of a Teenage Girl)

hot lips wrote 736 days ago

This is very inventive and filled with dramatic tension. The ruthless unpredictability of children, what will happen next? What does happen next seems entirely reasonable, slightly Day of the Trifids. Excellent, backed with pleasure.
BADD

Ccastle wrote 736 days ago

I found your use of language in the first paragraph a little peculiar. Your second sentence, for instance, I didn't quite understand. Also - 'flame' - this should be plural, surely? I also agree with everyone below - I know the ommission of speech marks is very trendy and literary but it is very difficult to read.

I do think you paint beautiful pictures though - your imagery is great. The body in the road for instance - and a simple sentence 'not a light was lit' struck me. There is some lovely work in here, but I feel it could do with a little work.

Best of luck with it,
Cx

Francis Albert McGrath wrote 738 days ago

A terrifying post-apocalyptic scenario, a worthy grandchild to "Lord of the Flies" and "The Road." I agree with the comment below that you need to use speech-quotes - it looks amateurish otherwise.
There is a tendency to over-poeticise, i.e., use six words when one will do, e.g., "Staged death in vehicles ever increasingly rushed past them in the opposite direction as they made their way toward the cooling crush of the mountains so far distant, adorned now with burgeoning colors, just coming back as the day began to brighten and open." What does "staged death" mean?
I think it's not specific enough... charred corpses would be specific...
Shelved for the potential
Frank

Thetinman wrote 738 days ago

Original and well written Kevin. Not sure about the lack of speech quotations. Do know it's so much easier to write without them, but I'm sure that's not the reason why you didn't :)
I'd like to come back and read it more in depth as soon as I'm done editing and listing my book as an e-book
Backed
Paul
We've Seen the Enemy

J&M JENSEN wrote 739 days ago

THE YEAR OF THE BLUE SNOW

Dear Kevin,

It was the 'J' of J&M that looked at this first time round, so this is new to me. Like J, I'm uncomfortable with the lack of speech marks, but you do get used to it after a while. There is a great atmosphere throughout the story and some very lovely descriptions: "...the van trundling on into the slow wash of darkness, the truth vast and unavoidable as the route they travelled."
"Each possession requires another possession on which to rest."
I can see this doing well and I wish you luck on your climb to the ed's desk. Backed for sure.

J&M Jensen
(Graemor)

PS: I noticed what I think must be a mistake in chapter thirteen, "funerary rights" should that be " funeral rites"?

StephanieSauvinet wrote 739 days ago

A good story prospect in my opinion and some good decaying images. However, you do nee to add quotations to the dialogues, it is very hard to decipher narrative from dialogue otherwise.
Backed for an interesting concept and some great imagery.

SRFire wrote 740 days ago

Kevin, you sketch an interesting vista of turmoil. Backed for potential... however, I feel that it needs strong editing to make it easier on the eye. I wish you every success with this. Best, Sana

John Adamson wrote 740 days ago

I can see by all the duck egs that you have a lot to lern, and with a few months comments to look at you should inprove your book only then will you get some books on your shelf, plus, how can you comment if, your own book needs so much doing to it. My advice is before you to send a comment send a message first, it's the done thing,
John

John Booth wrote 741 days ago

Hi Kevin
Put in quotation marks. They are part of the written English language for a very good reason and this was a pain to read without them. In fact, I gave up trying to read this halfway through chapter one for this very reason.

Some good descriptive passages in this, but some very awkward phrasing as well. As example 'She clung to the older one, and her lack of concern to the approaching din kept them rooted to the spot' There's a switch of subject from 'she' to the 'older girl' in the second half of the sentence. Is 'lack of concern' the right phrase? To me she lacked will power to commit to do something, not a lack of concern about the outcome

I would name the two girl up front. The narration does not have to wait for someone to name them out loud.

Hope that helps

John

J&M JENSEN wrote 745 days ago

Some gorgeous imagery in this - like your houses sagging in the rain, points of light flung across the heavens...
this is a great post-apocalyptic theme, just the sort of thing I'd pick in a bookstore. One thing that does put me off however is the lack of speech marks, call me old-fashioned but they do make it easy-sailing.
Anyway - other than that, loved it!

M&J
GRAEMOR

bookjunky wrote 752 days ago

Kevin,

I loved the pitch for your book, "The Year of the Blue Snow". In some ways, especially the style of your writing (i.e. the lack of quotations), it reminds me of Cormac Mccarthy's "The Road". Very stylish, well done and backed.
If you get a chance, would you mind checking out my book, "The Wild, Wild Quest"? Much appreciated.

Best of luck,
J. A. Johnson
(The Wild, Wild Quest)
http://www.authonomy.com/ViewBook.aspx?bookid=13246

mikegilli wrote 753 days ago

Brilliant story. fantastic imagination...On my shelf.
Hope to read more later...And hope this
is a big success!........................Mikey The Free

Jim Darcy wrote 755 days ago

The BBC are just about to put a remake of the classic 70's Sci-Fi show Survivors on, showing that these kind of tales never lose their appeal. Some good writing here, believable dialogue and scene setting. Great pitch. Ditto re. the speech marks but its your baby. Jim D Serpent's Blood

Suzanne Adams wrote 776 days ago

I'm a sucker for cataclysmic disaster stories so your pitch really hooked. Unusual title.
The devastation in the opening sequence is easy to imagine which says a lot about the quality of the writing - high!

Leigh Fallon wrote 781 days ago

Oooh I loved this. I think I'd buy this on pitch alone. It really does promise a thrilling read. I don't critique so I'll say nothing on grammer or punctuation, just that this has bags of promise.
Enjoyed and backed.
Leigh Fallon
The Carrier of the Mark

Kevin Walter wrote 781 days ago

Thanks for your note. I'm always moving forward with it, hope you guys can read more soon.

The Year of Blue Snow

Hi Kevin,

This is a powerful and interesting idea for the YA market. I have just finished reading Gone by Michael Grant, a similar idea in that all adults have Gone. You have a wonderful descriptive ability, your first line was genuinely inventive, parceling up the light, nice touch. The descriptions are generally pacy, but I did find your paragraphs a little block-like and you might want to consider increasing the amount of white-space in your manuscript.

The decision not to go for the conventional speech marks is interesting particularly when your dialogue is so strong. My personal opinion is that you should put them into as there absence detracted for me from the general excellence of your dialogue. Short sentences, developing action, a great way of orientating us to this apocalyptic world, this has buckets of potential, it will be really interesting to see how you manage the whole Lord of the Flies scenario. But I have to stop now, the day job calls, but best of luck with this.

Andrew W
(Sanctuary’s Loss)

Kevin Walter wrote 781 days ago

Thanks for the thoughts. Always moving forward with the work, so I'm sure you'll see me a bit.

Thanks

Hey Kevin,

After reading your pitches and looking at your chapters, I'm happy to back you.

I hope you're not gonna be one of the new members her who only checks in once a month.

Rodney

Andrew W. wrote 782 days ago


The Year of Blue Snow

Hi Kevin,

This is a powerful and interesting idea for the YA market. I have just finished reading Gone by Michael Grant, a similar idea in that all adults have Gone. You have a wonderful descriptive ability, your first line was genuinely inventive, parceling up the light, nice touch. The descriptions are generally pacy, but I did find your paragraphs a little block-like and you might want to consider increasing the amount of white-space in your manuscript.

The decision not to go for the conventional speech marks is interesting particularly when your dialogue is so strong. My personal opinion is that you should put them into as there absence detracted for me from the general excellence of your dialogue. Short sentences, developing action, a great way of orientating us to this apocalyptic world, this has buckets of potential, it will be really interesting to see how you manage the whole Lord of the Flies scenario. But I have to stop now, the day job calls, but best of luck with this.

Andrew W
(Sanctuary’s Loss)

R.A. Battles wrote 783 days ago

Hey Kevin,

After reading your pitches and looking at your chapters, I'm happy to back you.

I hope you're not gonna be one of the new members her who only checks in once a month.

Rodney

KevRogers wrote 783 days ago

Your pitch drew me in - the idea behind the story is a good one and I found the content very readable - your lack of speech marks done my head in a bit though
backed

kev

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