Bonds of Silver, Bonds of Gold

Kris: I read only the intro chapter and this struck me as a mature piece of work covering a serious topic. My only niggle is to break up that long chapter so it reads faster. BACKED!

I can use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

BONDS OF SILVER
This is an interesting story. The idea of a young guy having to sell himself as a slave to support his family is good plotting. You have a good writing style for this; you have a lot of back story you need to explain so your reader can understand what is happening and you do that well; you give enough detail settings and character actions are clear; not so much you bog down your story. I’m adding this to my shelf. If you have a moment, would you look at mine (Grain of Salt)? I’m in 3th place but only holding on by my teeth. Burgio

Kristina,

I truly enjoy the descriptivness of your writing style. I felt pulled in from the start and will enjoy reading more later. I am always intrigued by historical documentations in novel form. It gives my brain a picture to grab onto and you have done that well.

I did feel that your long pitch was crammed together. Perhaps breaking it down into a few different paragraphs would help the flow and appearance of your first impression?

Best wishes on your success - Kat (EMBRACED)

Dear Kristina, I love that you are covering this part of history that I knew nothing about. Thank you. :) Your pitch is excellent, so set the hook for me to read your book. :) When you use short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, it makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm backing your book. :)
Could you please take a moment to back my TWO memoir books? Thanks, Susie :)

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This is fine writing - not at all what I expected when I started, I found it to be much, much more. I lover your smooth flowing prose and the steady pace at which you write. Would love to read the rest of the novel if you would post it here.

tyler (Almost Straight)

Watership Down meets The Lustful Turk.
The writing is fine, but I felt the boy was very accepting of his new sexual slave role, for this sort of stuff to work well you need a bit more reluctance before the discovery of pleasure.
However, it was different, so backed.

BONDS OF SILVER, BONDS OF GOLD:

Kristy,

Your pitch is intriguing, and poses interesting questions. Good dialogue and description, and an opening to a world I know nothing about. This alone makes me want to read more.

Backed.

Sheila (Pinpoint)

Well, Watership Down it ain't! This is an unusual story from an unusual angle but you write well and your characters seem very 3-D. They are certainly not cutesy. Interesting to see where this leads and how much your story hangs on the sex. Even 'mainstream' books like Anne Bishop's are based on the sex-slave angle so there is a market for it somewhere. Good luck with this, the writing is certainly good. Jim D Serpent's Blood

Sessha,

First off, thanks for the backing! His life seems easy for the moment, but that's because I'm trying to hit the highlights of his predicament. I have a long way to go in the story, and I was more afraid that my readers would become bogged down in detail. I definitely will keep this in mind, though, as I develop further. There's a balance to be struck between depth and breadth of a tale, and I'm willing to accept I have some adjustments to make on where I put that line.

Kristina -

An intriguing twist on slave-boy erotica. The dialogue was relaxed and natural, although, at this point, Stannis' life as a new slave is awfully easy. I would have liked to see a bit more of his early interactions and training, he doesn't seem anywhere near uncomfortable enough in the brief glimpse we're given. Backed.

Sessha (Shinobi)

I was entranced by the perspective with which you open your first chapter, as the door opens on to the narrator to show wolf, racoon and others in an office setting, doing things that humans do. What a novel way to combine reality and fantasy - and in such a matter-of-fact style which seems to say... ' but where have you been? Didn't you know things have always been like this?'
As the dialogue leads us into the little deal that is struck, I felt as if I was living in a fantasy world and being led into a real one. Ingenious and intriguing. Shelved.
Ray
(A Child from the Wishing Well)