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rank 5459
word count 32527
date submitted 16.01.2010
date updated 30.03.2010
genres: Fiction, Chick Lit, Romance, Comedy...
classification: moderate
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Breach of Faith

Andrea Hughes

Homosexual husband, erotic dreams about another man, suspect pregnancy and problems escalating out of control; the story of Kate’s life. And don’t forget the ghosts.

 

His breath was hot on her neck, his hand now running down the length of her spine, holding her close. The towel forgotten, she put her arms around him, her head tilted back, the muscles of his shoulders tense beneath her palms.

Thirty four year old Kate Robson has a nice life in Australia; nice husband, nice house, nice job. But her imagination is bored. So when she discovers her husband with another man, all hell breaks loose inside her head, creating a steamy dream-affair with a sexy baker. But when Kate confuses reality with her erotic dream world, it all begins to tumble down around her.

Follow Kate as she makes bad decision after bad decision, gets pregnant – but who’s the father? – runs away, all the way to England, and meets up with an old boyfriend; someone she hasn’t seen in almost twenty years. A man with a horrifying secret of his own.

Breach of Faith is a hilarious and tear-jerking look at one woman attempting to fight the world she lives in … and almost losing everything.

 
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7 September

PROLOGUE

 

Kate gasped and shook her head, her shaggy hair spraying water everywhere, then tugged cold fingers through the saturated tangle, striving to tame the beast. The rain bounced off the pavement, slowing traffic to a crawl, and as she sheltered in the shop entrance, she realised there was no way she was going anywhere, not unless she wanted to drown. She shook her head again and turned towards the glass door behind her, cringing as she caught sight of the hirsute cyclone on her head, mirrored in the crystal clear glass.

    Bloody hell!

    Kate jumped and swung towards the voice, one hand clutching her chest in a vain attempt to stop her heart leaping out her mouth. Her other hand automatically began a desperate, last ditch effort to calm her unruly mane.

    Um … hello.

    Hello. He looked down into Kates upturned face and stumbled backwards, obviously startled. Kate gave up calming down her heart, obviously both hands were better occupied in mollifying her hair before this poor bloke had an apoplexy.

    Its raining, she offered, gesturing vaguely towards the downpour. Maybe he hadnt noticed.

    I noticed, he replied, still gaping at her hair. At least he didnt look quite so disturbed now.

    Its really hard, she offered, talking about the rain but unable to stop her eyes travelling down his body, magically halting at his crotch. It didnt look hard but then again …

    Do you come here often? Kate bit her lip, dragging her attention back to his face; what a bloody stupid thing to say. The man blinked a couple of times and his gaze shifted from her hair to her face.

    This is my shop, he smiled, motioning towards the bakery they were sheltering outside.

    Kate knew that, she came here at least a couple of times a week. Kate also knew that he knew that she knew. Um … she really couldnt think of anything else to say.

    Youre very wet, he shoved open the shop door, come inside and Ill find you a towel.

    The bakery was large, full of mouth-watering smells and ambrosial tastes. Kate licked her lips; this shop always made her feel hungry. She trotted after his retreating back, trying not to drip on the freshly cleaned tiles.

    The man held open a door, its warm in here. Ill find you a towel and … um … a mirror, if youd like. He looked askance at her wayward locks, a small smile touching the corners of his mouth. Im Frank, by the way.

    Kate. She nodded her thanks and Frank disappeared.

    Interested, Kate scrutinised her surroundings. The office was large, surprisingly so, with a bed in the far corner. No, hang on, not a bed, a desk; that’s it. Papers and books were scattered everywhere; on the desk, the other table in the corner, even on his chair. Kate moved closer, intrigued to see what this attractive baker liked to read. Tilting her head she began to read the title.

    Its Lady Chatterleys Lover, one of my all-time favourites,’ Frank’s amused voice came from behind her and Kate whirled around, she hadnt heard him come back in and her face flushed as if she had been caught snooping.

    Frank grinned and with an elegant sweep of his arms he deposited a large, blue towel gently over her shoulders like a cape. Youre shivering, he observed, rubbing his hands energetically up and down her arms, coffee?

    Kate clutched the towel tightly around her upper body, suddenly she didnt feel quite so cold anymore. Her mouth was dry, her eyes transfixed by the indigo intensity of Franks gaze. His hands stilled as he returned her look, the hunger burning straight through her soul.

    One hand floated up, stroking her face from cheekbone to the corner of her mouth, caressing her lips, and she closed her eyes, her breath catching in her throat.

    Youre beautiful, he whispered, his teeth nibbling her ear. Ive wanted you for so long. Too long.

    His breath was hot on her neck, his hand now running down the length of her spine, holding her close. The towel forgotten, she put her arms around him, her head tilted back, the muscles of his shoulders tense beneath her palms.

    His lips found hers, gentle at first but with an urgency that flowed deep and her lips parted to admit his lightly probing tongue, the wave of sexual desire shooting its arrow directly between her thighs.

    They were naked; how’d that happen? His mouth soft and moist on her nipples, his fingers smoothly sensual on her buttocks. Kate was ready to burst as he lay her down on the floor.

    Bloody hell, shed forgotten how to say anything else; shed forgotten anything but Frank.

    Bloody hell! She could feel the immense power build up in her body as waves of satisfaction burst through every pore. It was the best sex she had ever had.

    Kate. Oh Kate.

    Bloody hell, she thrust her hips towards him, never wanting it to end.

    Kate!

    Oh …

    Kate?

    Oh …

    Kate? Wake up. Kate!

    Oh … what? Kate reluctantly opened her eyes as the fantasy faded, bloody hell.

 

 

CHAPTER ONE

 

Kate leaned back on the pillows and nodded her thanks to Will, sipping the hot milk hed brought in for her. He placed his own cup on the bedside table and quickly slid back under the sheets beside her.

    Bit nippy tonight, he observed mildly.

    Kate nodded, not trusting herself to speak.

    Bad dream was it?

    Kate glanced at Will before burying her face in the steaming mug. She nodded again.

    You were talking in your sleep, Will continued calmly, and thrashing around like you were fighting someone. Do you remember what happened?

    Kate slid her empty cup onto the bedside table. She felt weak and euphoric; drunk. The fantasy was still ultra fresh in her mind and she surreptitiously rubbed her thighs together, trying to retain the orgasmic power that had inundated her only minutes before.

    Um … no. Not really. I think there was a monster. A monster? Thats a good one.

    Hmm, Will looked thoughtful, try and get some sleep, okay?’ He leaned across and kissed her on the cheek before turning off the light. Kate threw herself onto her belly, turning her embarrassed face away from her husband.

    What the hell just happened?

    All right, bad choice of questions. She knew what had happened; it wasnt the first erotic dream shed ever had, but it had felt so real, been so vivid. Her fingers could still feel the coarseness of the short hairs on Franks inner thighs, her lips were bruised and tender as if they had just been passionately kissed.

    Why him? Why Frank?

    She couldn’t deny that he was attractive but finding a man attractive and being attracted to him were entirely different, so why was the line blurring? Why did it feel like she was attracted to sexy Frank Jones?

    She sighed heavily and rolled onto her side, stilling her frustrated movements as Will grunted in his sleep. It was all Wills fault. It had to be. Before she had found out his secret shed been happy. Wife, mother, aspiring journalist; she had everything shed ever wanted.

    Safe in the darkness of her bedroom her mind took her back, reliving the events that had changed her life forever: had it really happened just three days ago? It had been raining that night too, a steady downpour, softening her view as she peered through the side window of her car into the darkness of the shop.

    She couldnt get that conversation out of her head, the conversation shed had with Will moments before hed left that evening. Shed sounded petulant, pouting childishly, accusing Will with her eyes. She just couldnt help it, she hadnt wanted him to go.

    I thought you didnt have to work tonight.

    I dont have to work, hed repeated, speaking to the child she was obviously pretending to be. Carls finished the roster for next week so I may as well pop down and pick it up. I wont be long.

    Why cant you get it tomorrow? Youll be there anyway.

    I thought Id pick you up a bottle of wine on my way back.

    I dont want a drink, Kate was lying through her teeth but she didnt care. Right now she would happily murder someone just for a small glass of white. She was panicking.

    Will grinned, thats not like you, Kate, he gave her a peck on the cheek and she turned her head away. Out of the corner of her eye she saw the questioning look on his face before he shrugged, dismissing her gesture as unimportant. Shed listened as his car pulled out of the driveway, the panic replaced with a blind anger. One night. He couldnt even stay away from her for one night. That she was working tonight Kate had no doubts, why else would he bother, surely not for next weeks roster. She ran shaky fingers through her hair, she had to do something. Now.

    Sitting in her car, watching the raindrops snake slowly down the window and acting like a jealous wife, a spoilt brat, was that really what she meant by doing something? Did she really want to feel like this?

    No. Quietly spoken but with solid conviction.

    No! Louder now, stronger.

    NO! Now she almost believed it herself.

    Kate reached towards the dangling car keys and grasped the cold metal but before she could start the engine a sudden movement caught her eye and she turned towards it, just as her husband came into view in the dimly lit shop. Jealousy stilled her hand and she waited impatiently for Wills co-worker Lesley to follow him out. Lesley, with legs up to her armpits and sexy, sultry smile. Lesley, with come-to-bed eyes and perfect, pert breasts. The woman was a walking, talking cliché.

    Will turned back towards the door, laughing. Kate stared, gritting her teeth as Wills companion finally moved into view within the shop, her eyes widened in shock, no, please no. Youve got to be kidding.

    Tall, dark and attractive, the newcomer certainly was. Charming and sexy, even; if you liked that sort of thing. Will didnt like that sort of thing. Did he?

    Oh crap!

    Will moved closer to the other person, his hand on their shoulder, embracing.

    Kate shifted in her seat, desperate for a clearer view, contorting her body into an unnatural angle in a wretched attempt to see what was going on.

    Oh, double crap.

    Kates fingers were shaking, rattling the car keys, jerking them violently in the slot. She started the engine on the third try, threw the car into gear and lurched away from the curb. She had to get away from there. Now.

    How could she have been so blind? How could she have missed the signs? He was obviously having an affair, shed expected that. But not with Lesley. Not the sexy blonde. Kate furiously blinked hot tears away as images flashed non-stop through her mind.

    It was Carl. Her husband was having an affair with Carl.

    Whether he was homosexual or bisexual didnt matter to her. Bisexual seemed more likely considering he had sired two children and seemed to genuinely enjoy making love with a woman but, bloody hell, he did it with men too.

    Her initial reaction had been a mixture of emotions, all swirling uncontrollably in a quagmire of doubt. Angry and confused shed been determined to have it out with him that night. Throw him out of the house, launching his belongings out of the window until there was a mountain of clothes, videos, CDs and tools on the front lawn. But ten minutes after shed hurried in the front door Will had sauntered in, a bottle of wine grasped in each hand.

    I am so sorry.

    Those had been his first words: I am so sorry.

    Shed glared at him, her first accusations dying on the tip of her tongue. Surely he hadnt seen her watching him, stalking him.

    A slow smile lit his face: that smile, the smile she had fallen in love with all those years ago. I am so sorry, he repeated.

    Kate frowned, did he think all this was funny? She stepped towards him, the anger surfacing to drive all other emotion away but before she could speak he reached out and grabbed her hands. I am so sorry that I entered a competition at work. And I am so sorry that the first prize was a family holiday. And I am so very, very sorry that … I WON!

    What? Kate was confused; this is not how it was supposed to happen. Piles of belongings would not appear on the lawn unless she hurled them out the upstairs window and the way things were going not even a sock was likely to take that death-defying leap.

    Will was practically laughing, I entered a competition at work.

    Kate jerked her hands away and put them on her hips, you don’t say.

    Were going on holiday.

    Youre taking me?

    Of course. Who else?

    Kate bit her lip. Wills grin had faltered but was soon back, brighter and wider than before.

    Were going on a big, big plane to a place a long, long way away. Jetting away from our tiny corner of Australia, all expenses paid, to … drum roll, please … Great Britain.

    Now tossing and turning in bed, half hoping for another dream the same as the last, Kate replayed that fateful moment over and over in her mind. Of all the places in the world: England, Kates birthplace, the country her parents still called home. The parents shed not seen in four years and missed like crazy.

    And Will was taking her there.

    Bugger, she muttered and threw herself onto her back. How on earth could she have said anything to him after that? Thanks, Will, Id love to go to England with you and by the way, are you gay? Sure you dont want to take your boyfriend instead? No, somehow it just didnt work.

    A trip to England was too important and if that meant keeping up this charade for another few months until the trip then so be it. Kates mind was made up; she would not confront Will until after they returned. Life would have to go on as normal, whether she liked it or not.

    What about Frank?

    Kate was adamant her attraction to Frank Jones was just a passing phase, made up by her own mind to compensate for her husbands lack of attention.

    Im only human.

    One thing did have to change though, me! I have to change. Goodbye frumpy housewife, hello sex kitten, she purred. He wont be able to resist me.

    As she finally dropped back into a deep, dreamless sleep, a thought flitted into Kates mind. A seed that soon settled, ready to take root. He wont be able to resist me she had said. What she still had to clarify in her own mind was exactly who wouldnt resist. Who did she really want?

    Will … or Frank?

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RichardBard wrote 284 days ago

Hi Andrea!

Since you haven’t been to Authonomy for a while, I hope it’s okay that I’m sending this through your book comment:

I’d like to thank you for backing BRAINRUSH (a Thriller) last year. Because of you it hit the Authonomy Number-1 slot, attracted an agent, and landed a film option. Now that’s a brain-rush! The formal book launch is September 1st and the sequel will be released in December. None of this would have been possible without your help. So, thank you, thank you, THANK YOU!

Sincerely,
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Kristine Cheney wrote 684 days ago

Backed! Will you please take a quick peek at my "Spartan Heart," and if you deem it worthy, return the favor?

Thank you so much! Best wishes for all of your writing endeavors.

Kristine Cheney
Spartan Heart

Famlavan wrote 780 days ago

Breach of Faith

I think what makes this so good is it is grounded so well in a real world. You have a writing style that while perfect for the genre does actually take this to a different level.
I very much like the strength of dialogue it pushes the storyline a long while giving insight into the character – This is a good piece of writing – Good luck

Andee Hughes wrote 797 days ago

I'm Andrea! My character is Kate.

gerry01 wrote 797 days ago

Kate or Andrea?

gerry01 wrote 797 days ago

Kate, This is another chick lit that I love. I never knew them to exist until I joined this site. I have read a few now and they have all been great: amusing, fast flowing and extremely entertaining. I can always imagine myself reading this kind of thing on a beach inThailand. Easy to pick up and dabble into. I will get back to this and read it in its entirety later. Good luck with it. It seems there is a lot out there. For me though, infinitely more enjoyable than reading about dragons and wizards.

A Knight wrote 798 days ago

Kate,

You've got an engaging style here and some brilliant dialogue really brings you character to life! I really enjoyed the opening and I'll definitely be back for more.

Abi xxx
"Everyone knows the rule: Stay inside the Wall, but Tisha believes rules were made to be broken." - Relic

Sinead McNeill wrote 800 days ago

Kate
I like your style. Witty and engaging. Really good dialogue.

Best of Luck

Sinead - Make Cake Not War

lionel25 wrote 801 days ago

Kate, your prologue and first chapter read well. Good mix of narrative and true-to-life dialogue. I choose not to nitpick anything.

Happy to back your work.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

LawsonBlacklock wrote 805 days ago

It was Martha! Just double checked. L.x

LawsonBlacklock wrote 805 days ago

I've read Breach of Faith in its entirety now, and I have a few thoughts. First let it be said that I admire the work greatly- it caught my imagination and I cared about your characters enough to read the whole book. Your prose is good and you have a fabulous sense of your characters... I truly believe you know them well and have written them out beautifully. But I'm afraid I'm going to follow the old critter pattern of praise and then some criticism... but please take it the right way, because I mean it constructively and I do think you are a fine writer.

Firstly, this is not chick-lit, and nor is it hilarious. Look at your plot: dissatisfied housewife believes secretly alcoholic husband is in fact secretly gay, and turns to an affair with the local baker (who is himself terminally ill) to ease her pain and malaise. She finds herself pregnant but unsure of her child's paternity... escaping to England, she comes face to face with yet more demons. How on earth is this comedy? This is high melodrama (and great melodrama at that) but not comedy. In fact, in certain sections of the book where you have inserted humour (eg. dress in underwear gag, and I say gag, because its been done to death in other media) it feels just that, inserted, and not at all natural to the prose. It cheapens the drama of the book, which is a terrible shame, because the drama is just so deliciously done.

I'm not too keen on the structure of many of your chapters either. On occasion you fall into the 'tell' trap when you could be 'showing' (I'm sorry, I hate these terms too, but that was all that sprang to mind!). Kate 'tells' much of the book through dialogue with her friend (Martha? I'm working from my notes but forgot to write down her friends name) when you could be showing the action. Frank and Kate check into a motel and I'm expecting to see the unfolding of their illicit romance... but then you jump to Kate and Martha (Is that her name? I'm going to have to check after this!) talking about what happened and I'm not sure what happened. I want to see Frank and Kate realise their love... I don't want to be confused. The more you build up Kate and Frank's real relationship (and not through dreams) the more poignant your ending becomes.

Right. Now onto Will, and Kate's mistaken belief about his homosexuality. To be frank (no pun intended there!) it just doesn't work. I didn't buy for one second that Will was homosexual, and Kate's belief that he is from one embrace with a male friend seems contrived and unbelievable. All marriages have their problems, and Kate comes across as childish and immature when she believes she has uncovered her husband's infidelity. In fact, it appears she merely wants justification for her affair with Frank, and considering she and Will are still involved in a sexual relationship (albeit a stale one) the homosexual storyline doesn't work. Keep the secret alcoholic thread by all means, because secrets do destroy relationships, but I would cancel out the gay subplot.

I liked the ending. It was satisfactory and moving, and tied up all the loose ends of the story. I wonder now if you had a book plan you were working too or if you wrote from your head. At any rate, I was happy by the end and felt as though I had lived the story with your characters; a mark of good writing.

I know I've warbled on a little, which I hope you can forgive, but I offer these criticisms as constructive because I think you have a well plotted drama here.

All the best with this one. Am going to check my notes for Kate's friends name now! L.x

Margaret Anthony wrote 806 days ago

Whilst there are a lot of complex human issues running through this story, it certainly isn't a dark read. Far from it, you avoid that by writing with a light touch.
Kate has a lot to think about, I guess finding out your husband fancies another man, is probably the most devastating. I can see from the pitch, Kate's in for a bumpy ride but your confident story telling will handle it well, I'm sure.
It's all very contemporary and reads well for Chick.Lit. Not that I'm an expert with this genre but this hold its own with others I've read on here. Backed. Margaret.

Michael Santos wrote 807 days ago

Thanks for backing 2076 Reagan's Last Word.
I've picked up yours and will be reading it.

Onlee1Chance wrote 807 days ago

Now this is interesting! I love it and can't wait to read more! good luck!

Rosali Webb wrote 808 days ago

Andrea
Read chapters 1, 2 and 10. Ten has a different feel and has the slightly more serious edge than the first two. I think you have you target audience well within your grasp and also believe you will do well with this. Backed. Rosali
Fieldtrip to Mars

zan wrote 809 days ago

Breach of Faith
Andrea Hughes

Andrea,
This is a philosophical comedy. It sounds like the beginnings of an excellent soap opera! Great cast of characters, including the homosexual husband, and the dream baker! "Bloody hell!" Kate reluctantly opened her eyes as the fantasy faded, bloody hell! I'm buckling my seatbelt for this one! What an imaginative set of twists and turns this story promises, all for the benefit of poor Kate who has a "bored" imagination. Not so boring I think. And there's deep thought behind this too - appears as if you are experimenting with many themes here - least of all, the confusing nature of reality. Kate is a bit too hard on herself I think - what bad decision after bad decision? What about her homosexual husband? Is she really fighting the world, or just living life? I have to come back and read more just to see whether or not she loses everything. I hope not!
Best wishes in finding a publisher.
Zan

Lynne wrote 809 days ago

What a great opener. A lovely fantasy dream - amusing and erotic. The pitch promises a bumpy ride and I feel this is going to be a great story. I've only read the first chapter but I know this is a book I would like to read. You write well. Backed with pleasure, Lynne, Brooklyn Bridge.

David Fearnhead wrote 809 days ago

I must say I would never have picked this book up had you not commented on my book. It's far from my usual genre selection, yet I'm glad i took a look at it. From the pitch you seem to have so many elements, and in the genre list i read Comedy, and I thought to myself how is she going to get a laugh from this.?
I think the date idea really helps to propel the book forward. I found myself skipping through various chapters and I found the standard really held out, but most of all I was thinking, this is like the ideal womens read it seems to tick every box and i felt like i'd fallen into a female nirvana. I felt it rather like being offered a tour of Jimmy Choo design studio and as a bloke you're in the wrong place but you know how every woman you know would love to be there, this was how it was reading your book. I suspect this will do very well. It's Backed:)
David
Bailey of the Saints

Tyrson wrote 812 days ago

Well written, convincing MC. Am not sure that she would be able to hold in the rage and pain of her betrayal just for the sake of a holiday to the UK. Or that she would feel so guilty about her feelings for Frank when she knows Will is being unfaithful.

Ashley Agony wrote 813 days ago

the writing is strong. It was a very enjoyable read. I especially like Kate, she is unique and life-like.
-Backed-

trainspotter wrote 813 days ago

Hi Andrea
Am enjoying reading it so far - funny, engaging, steamy... Just a couple of things that I noticed:
I know in your summary you say it's in Australia, but in the actual book, it might be good to just put in where it's set, because when it gets to the part about winning a holiday to England, I had forgotten that they weren't living in England. Maybe in your first paragraph you could say 'the Perth rain', or whichever city.
Also, her reaction when she finds out her husband might be gay, seems a bit too laid back.
But they're only minor things. The tone and the pace of the book are fab.
Good luck
Shalini

trainspotter wrote 815 days ago

My kind of book - Intelligent chick lit. Will have a proper read, Best of luck,Sha (A Shirtful of Frogs)

blueboy wrote 815 days ago

your first parargraph seems intuitvely off. that is important to editors who want writing clear. but your voice and story telling are quite good . based on the pitch and the first chapter i'm going to back you. take care and good luck with your manuscript. if you have any constructive feedback for The Age of Rhinestone i would appreciate it. ttyl

Closet Writer wrote 815 days ago

Hi, Andee,
You certainly have all the ingredients of Chick Lit here with a dash of poignancy which easily pushes "Breach of Trust" into literary fiction. I would love to curl with a lovely book like this but because I can't and I'm the impatient sort, I read your last three chapters and a bit from the beginning as well. I think that almost any woman could identify with Kate, plus your descriptions and dialogues are very engaging as well.

If I may make a suggestion, I would probably put the bit about where Kate thinks that she has found out Will is gay in a separate chapter. It's kind of a longish flashback [or dream] right now and might be a little difficult for some of your more ADD type readers to follow.

All the best,
SC Dwinnell, "Nobody Liked to Say"

PS BTW, great cover.

egobox wrote 815 days ago

I just read the first chapter, and WOW! That's all I have to say, You must get this published ASAP! You have a strong, unique voice that literary fiction is missing. Well done :-)

Nick Poole2 wrote 816 days ago

They say never start with a dream, but this one works, I think.

You write well.

"Bad dream was it?" I laughed at her nod. A monster!

Will's affair with Carl. Good variation.

Will or Frank?

Of course I will back this. You get right in her head and we do, too.

Nick
"Mirror In The Sky" (if you would be so kind?)

MarkRTrost wrote 817 days ago

Your writing is good. You’ve got a tremendous amount of elements here. Sex, love, homosexuality, infidelity, feminism - you’ve got everything to make this marketable. I read two chapters. I liked them.

I was with the character in the car. But when she discovered her husband was unfaithful with another man - I felt her reaction wasn’t authentic. There would just be so many lies involved in his deception that I don’t feel your character has an authentic reaction. I mean, he Breached Her Faith. Right? Isn't a great deal of the plot hung on that fact?

But then I haven’t had her experience - so I don’t know her proportion. But, I think infidelity is so goddamned difficult to endure because it makes the faithful spouse live a life (at least for a bit) without trust. There are so many lies involved that one doesn’t know who to trust because the soul closest is the most deceitful. I just feel that your protagonist didn’t react in a realistic way.

So when she didn’t have an authentic reaction - she lost my empathy.

Just my thought. Hold it bound; let it loose. If nothing more - you can anticipate this reaction from a reader.

Mark R. Trost
“Post Marked.”

Jed Oliver wrote 817 days ago

This is very nicely written. Steamy! Backed . Best of luck, Jedward (Knut)

miket wrote 817 days ago

Hi Andrea.

This is very good writing, very natural, very erotic. I imagine you are something of an socio-cultural anthropologist and write, at least in part, from life? The book has risen 200 places and it won't be long before it rises another 200. Very well done. On my shelf.

Best wishes.

Michael Ashley Torrington, author, 'Kristin.'

soutexmex wrote 817 days ago

BACKING you. I can use your comments on my book if you can spare the time. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

siena wrote 818 days ago

Hiya!

Fiiiiiiiiiinally I got round to taking a look. So sorry. Am having to limit myself to one read a day after work as nothing gets done!
What a brill pitch!on lunch and reading through it. not got very far but backed it already!

Promise to come back and read more! xxx

Michael Croucher wrote 818 days ago

An enjoyable and often humorous read; compelling and engaging. I'm happy to give this a bit of time on my shelf.
Michael Croucher (Bravo's Veil)

AlanMarling wrote 819 days ago

Dear Andrea Hughes,

Thank you for sharing your story with us. I skipped to chapter seven to cover less-traveled ground and was rewarded by them investigating a palatial mansion. I appreciate your active verbs “they drifted down the hall”, as well as your apt similes “she clung to him like a leech”. I see she’s in a complicated relationship with Frank. He’s put her in awkward situation and isn’t presenting himself well. I’m not sure I’m convinced by his explanation of his actions, which may be intentional on your part. Overall you have exceptional dialog.

I enjoyed your story. Bravo! Backed.

Best wishes,
Alan Marling

Sheila Belshaw wrote 819 days ago

BREACH OF FAITH:

Andrea,

What a brilliant pitch. Pulling poor Kate through hell and back again. But the writing is laced with humour and great characterisation and we are with her all the way.

A great read.

Backed with pleasure,
Sheila (Pinpoint)

Sheila Belshaw wrote 819 days ago
Sheila Belshaw wrote 819 days ago

BREACH OF FAITH:

Andrea,

What a fantastic pitch. So well constructed, pulling poor Kate through hell and back again, it makes for compulsive reading.

Laced with humour and characters that leap off the page, this is a fresh and lively chick-lit novel to watch.

Backed with pleasure,
Sheila (Pinpoint)

lynn clayton wrote 820 days ago

Believable, touching and hysterical. Backed. Lynn

Famlavan wrote 820 days ago

I’ve had this on my list for a while and kind of savoured not reading it, the pitch and premise, well?? Now I’ve started it I’m not disappointed, the humour hooked me straight away. This is one I’m going to have to finish - good luck with it.

mokhamoli wrote 820 days ago

Backed and backed again. What a great read. Well done and good luck with this fine piece of writing. Mokha Moli

Shayne Parkinson wrote 821 days ago

I found this wickedly funny, but with a poignant undertone that gives it depth. Starting with a dream is a risky business, as it can be clumsily done, but your opening sequence is really good - I was so *relieved* to find it was a dream! But poor Kate, to find out her suspicions were both right and completely off-target. She clearly has a wild ride ahead of her, but she's in capable hands - yours.

Shelved.

SareyFairy wrote 821 days ago

Hi Andrea

Your first chapter is very funny with all the innuendo's in the dream well written; then turns when Kate finds out her husband is having an affair. Poor Kate!
This was an enjoyable read with a real mix of emotions.
Backed
Sarah. T-cup and The Dream Team Fairies

Emoo wrote 821 days ago

This is at once familiar and yet so foreign. I can relate to Kate's semi-mid-life crisis and at the same time can't imagine finding out that my husband is gay.

Will shelve based on originality and verve.

Hsiau Hsia Moo

(The Monarch Butterfly)

Raymond Nickford wrote 821 days ago

After some vivid character observation worthy of the Literary Fiction tab, I was amused by the moment when Kate lamely replies to the man in the shop alcove 'It's really hard,' she offered, talking about the rain but unable to stop her eyes travelling down his body, magically halting at his crotch.' [After this, I think I might invest in a codpiece at the first hint of heavy cloud].
You caught me by surprise as 'his teeth nibbled her ear' as there certainly wasn't any ceremony beforehand, though of course you had mentioned that they already both recognised each other and had, presumably, some prior subtleties of body language or whiff of pheremones. [I don't get MY ears nibbled at the bakers but then, having been happily married for 28 years now, I suppose I take a healthier interest in a crisp French rye baguette with raisins than in imminent ear nibbling].
Whilst I shed my rose-coloured spectacles decades ago, your opening chapter will most certainly appeal to those who like chic lit and, refreshingly, also have a love of the language. Backed.
Ray
(A Child from the Wishing Well)

Sessha Batto wrote 821 days ago

Out of the mouths of babes. Poor Kate, feeling so guilty over her dreams while her husband is having an affair with another man. Your description of her horror and frantic attempts to explain 'mommy talk to fank in bed' and 'he's mommy's fank' were utterly believable. My ex is gay, so I understand where she's coming from! Shelved.

Sessha

G. M. Atwater wrote 821 days ago

BREACH OF FAITH: Hi Andrea ~ I'm here to return your kind read of my book, "Nobody's Knight." This is not a genre I would read, usually, but it looks well written and engaging. Certainly you send your characters on one of the most convoluted rides I've ever seen in fiction! Yegads, what an imagination you have. ;-)

I'm not sure how Blake figures into the greater story, save only to prepare us for other ghostly interference, and the sheer intensity of her dreams (and her continued mix-ups in sorting reality after them) were a little off-putting, for me. But like I said, this isn't my genre, so there may be conventions of which I'm not aware.

But I can't find any many overt flaws, when I look beyond my own lack of interest in Chick Lit, and it seems an ambitious and lively narrative, with plenty of twists and turns to keep a reader going. Thus, I'm backing it with thanks for your kind support of my book. Thank you again!
Cheers ~

G. M. Atwater
Nobody's Knight

Esrevinu wrote 822 days ago

The writing is fluid

You do a great job with the descriptions

I think you made some great choices with the characters and dialogue

People will find this book very relatable

Best wishes

Scott
The Esrevinu Chronicles/Secrets of the Elephant Rocks

peonyaceg wrote 822 days ago

Andrea, I like this story. Kate is a fantastic character. I have your readers are going to learn a lot from her. She certainly has her hands full and then the pregnacy. Beautifully written, great voice. Backed happily.

Best Wishes
Peonly

Robbins wrote 822 days ago

I like the pitch, this looks like a fun read. I'll comment as I read through the first chapter.

The opening paragraph is too much. Try to tighten these sentences, cutting away at some of the unnecessary details.

The dream is fun, who doesn't like an enjoyable fantasy every once in awhile?

Interesting twist, catching the husband with another man. I wonder if he knows that she knows? Will have to keep reading to find out.

Seems like a good read! Backed with much pleasure.

~Andrea, MARIPOSA

DKTD1 wrote 822 days ago

Second time today I've read a story that started with a sexual dream and then a rude interruption. Must be a theme.
Well written and very funny in parts. No complaints here :)
Shelved.

Steve Ward wrote 822 days ago

Andrea,
Wow, excellent writing, love the fast pace and climb into the mind style with dreams, fantasies and sensual enuindo all teasing the reader along chapter to chapter. The thought dialogue is well done and the dialogue is real and crisp. Read 10 chapters before I had to move on. Who's Frank Mummy? Very funny too.Good luck with your book.
Steve Ward
Test Pilot's Daughter

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