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rank 5253
word count 41452
date submitted 10.02.2010
date updated 14.03.2010
genres: Fiction, Historical Fiction, Erotic...
classification: adult
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Cheyenne Honor

D. W. Livelsberger

A fictionalized historical novel about three Menominee warriors who are forced to begin new lives after becoming stranded in grounds claimed by their enemies.

 

Native Americans were not always the solid, stoic, unemotional warriors that some authors would portray. Fishing Bird and his cousins Moose and Laughing Heart were often afraid, angry, depressed, and constantly second-guessed themselves after making that idiotic decision to accompany the foul-smelling Frenchmen into the lands of tribes to the west. How could three supposedly intelligent warriors be talked into doing something so foolish? Now alone with no chance of returning to their tribe on the shores of the big lake they call Mi-cho-gon, do they fall into the trap of killing others simply because they are of another people? To do this would mean they are no better than those fur-faced people they have come to loathe. In my book, I will show Native Americans as real, flawed, ignorant and clever, heroic and barbaric, maybe even frightened sometimes, but always loyal to their own.

There are few societies on the planet that will continue to fight a losing batle against desperately overwhelming odds. In my opinion, one of our most precious national treasures is the legacy they have left behind. It is to the spirits of these people that I dedicate my book.

 
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cheyenne, erotica, hate, indian, love, lust, sex, sioux, war, warrior

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RichardBard wrote 277 days ago

Hi D. W.!

Since you haven’t been to Authonomy for a while, I hope it’s okay that I’m sending this through your book comment:

I’d like to thank you for backing BRAINRUSH (a Thriller) last year. Because of you it hit the Authonomy Number-1 slot, attracted an agent, and landed a film option. Now that’s a brain-rush! The formal book launch is September 1st and the sequel will be released in December. None of this would have been possible without your help. So, thank you, thank you, THANK YOU!

Sincerely,
Richard Bard, BRAINRUSH

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strachan gordon wrote 333 days ago

Hello,you have really entered imaginatively into the life of the NA,but two questions?When in history is this taking place?And why is it called 'Cheyenne Honor'?(great title,by the way).I'm very much disposed to like this book as I'm very interested in everything to do with NA,also I like to boost a fellow historical author.Would you be kind enough to take a look at my novel 'A buccaneer',which is a\bout Pirates in the 17th c entury and includes the attack on Panama 1671,Sir Henry Morgan ,Spanish Ladies,The Great Plague of London amuch more,best wishes,Strachan Gordon

viento wrote 335 days ago

There seems to have been a glich with your support so this is back on my shelf. I can't believe I'm the only other person to do so, however? The comments say that there are lots of backers. Sadly you're also a victim of the less than 10,00 word edit I think.

(And I think chapter 1 and chapter 11 are now the same...)

lionel25 wrote 796 days ago

DW, your chapter 11 shows that your story is well-researched. Good job. I choose not to nitpick anything.

Happy to back this.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

catseatcheese wrote 808 days ago

Yes, during the American revolution, a british Colonel at detroit was paying their Indian allies for the heads of their enemies, then they decided that just the hair would be enough (and less messy). Donald Clayton Porter had his Indians scalp others before the appearance of the white men, so I hope the audience won't mind if I copy his literary license.

Thanks very much.

TobyC wrote 811 days ago

You've set a compeling premise for a novel. From the subtle humor of cracking sounds to vivid descriptions, like eating a raw liver, your book comes to life. The story shares a wealth of background information about the tribe and the main characters.
The only wish is that the story slowed down, developed the characters into well-rounded beings and allowed the reader to linger on one scene until it's a movie-within-the-mind. If we accept the notion that one chapter is one scene, then chapter one could focus on the hunt allowing us to get cold as the hunters stood in snow, get us shivering while watching over their shoulders as they set up for the kill.
Did you know Native Americans never scalped anyone until it was used on them by whites?
We need good books about minority cultures that challenge stereotypes. Please, keep writing and best wishes!

Beval wrote 812 days ago

A fascinating and unvarnished story of Native Americans.
Backed.

Debra wrote 813 days ago

What a great premise. Best wishes!

John Adamson wrote 815 days ago

This is a very nice story, that's the main thing in any book, there are lot's of litttle nit-picks but, when you keep on polishing the book then give it a good edit, it will be a great book, that's why it's a pleasure to have on my shelf.
Backed. Good luck

John-- Foxley Manor

John Adamson wrote 815 days ago

This is a very nice story, that's the main thing in any book, there are lot's of litttle nit-picks but, when you keep on polishing the book then give it a good edit, it will be a great book, that's why it's a pleasure to have on my shelf.
Backed. Good luck

John-- Foxley Manor

John Adamson wrote 815 days ago

This is a very nice story, that's the main thing in any book, there are lot's of litttle nit-picks but, when you keep on polishing the book then give it a good edit, it will be a great book, that's why it's a pleasure to have on my shelf.
Backed. Good luck

John-- Foxley Manor

John Adamson wrote 815 days ago

This is a very nice story, that's the main thing in any book, there are lot's of litttle nit-picks but, when you keep on polishing the book then give it a good edit, it will be a great book, that's why it's a pleasure to have on my shelf.
Backed. Good luck

John-- Foxley Manor

John Adamson wrote 815 days ago

This is a very nice story, that's the main thing in any book, there are lot's of litttle nit-picks but, when you keep on polishing the book then give it a good edit, it will be a great book, that's why it's a pleasure to have on my shelf.
Backed. Good luck

John-- Foxley Manor

SRFire wrote 818 days ago

This is spectacular. Backed with pleasure, Sana x

AlanMarling wrote 820 days ago

Dear D. W. Livelsberger,

Thank you for sharing your story with us. I like how you portray the multidimensionality of the Native Americans. A great idea, and you deliver immediately, impressing the reader with your research and no-holds approach. I especially loved the phrase about her not liking the taste of dogs. You do, however, walk a fine line with wanting to depict the real while still avoiding the gratuitous. In my fallible opinion, you cross that line when referring to Doe Running’s cunt in the first paragraph from her perspective. The problem here is first and foremost that you’re describing her butt and figure from third person while attached to her perspective. If you were following the perspective of a warrior, the acknowledgement of her backside would be more than appropriate.

You could make your pitch even better by cutting “idiotic” and the following sentence, “How could three supposedly intelligent warriors be talked into doing something so foolish?” You don’t need this, and the problem is, I followed your advice and did start thinking why, instead of reading onward in your pitch.

These small matters aside, I enjoyed your story. Bravo! Backed.

Best wishes,
Alan Marling

catseatcheese wrote 823 days ago

Thank you so much for your very helpful comments-I appreciate you taking the time to comment. Yes, unfortunately the Native Americans could be a cruel, barbaric people(I'm afraid as cruel as the Europeans). Allan Eckert related a horrifingly accurate account of the torture death of Colonel William Crawford (a personal friend of George Washington) by Indians. It was witnessed by the army physician-who later escaped and was able to tell his story. Any conceived account pales to the real thing, and it is true that torture was an art form(?)that was designed to last up to 3 days-depending on the physical stamina of the captive.

Melcom wrote 823 days ago

I used to always write about the native red indians at school, such a fascinating topic.

Great storytelling, you certainly know how to grip a reader and carry them along through your tale.

Terrific

Happily shelved

Melxx
Impeding Justice

Isabel Lopez wrote 825 days ago

I remember as a young girl reading Anna Lee Waldo's epic novel "Sacajawea (Lewis & Clark Expedition)" and feeling wholly consumed by her beautifully crafted prose through all 1400+ pages. Although fictionalized, it was my initial introduction to the ways of the Native American people. Your story captivated me in the same way.

I liked the honesty in your pitch and was especially touched by your dedication in the last paragraph. Your book cover is a treasure; I can just see it with its perfect title on a bookstore display.

This book is written with a distinctive voice; I can almost hear a Native American elder recounting the story in my mind as I read. The story of how stars came into being was exquisite. I was a bit put off by the barbaric acts you described in an almost matter-of- fact way, as if it is part of their way of life, but I am sqeamish with these kinds of details, so maybe it's just me. From what I've read, Native Americans are a spiritual, peace-loving people, so these details were jarring. It certainly did not detract from your sublime prose and gift for storytelling.

This is a wonderfully vivid book with sensory elements rendered so realistically, that I felt like I was there. While the context of the story provides its substance, it is the well-defined characters that provide its vibrancy.
Fraught with adventure and tense scenes, it promises to be a page-turner to the very end.

Good luck!
Isabel

klouholmes wrote 825 days ago

Hi D. W., Strong storytelling! You've brought the narration through many interior concepts that might be in Doe Running's mind before and during her capture. One thing I wonder about: I read a French priest's account when living with a native tribe in the midwest - rape was frowned upon and older women had clout in tribes. But the tribal conflicts seem very realistic and the scenes with the captor and Doe Running also were very absorbing. Good handling of point of view and the setting! Shelved - Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

chvolkoff wrote 825 days ago

Reading about Native Americans, and their way of life, thoughts and point of view is always fascinating...we too often forget the tragedies brought by the Westerners to indigenous people of many countries...this story is well written, imbued with naturalistic eroticism - by the way, I doubt that Running Doe can reach her own breast with her mouth, but that's only a detail - and full of information that I didn't know. Shelved.

paxie wrote 825 days ago

DW

A warrior’s status would multiply immensely if he could capture a slender woman to be housed in the tipi of the prostitutes.......(really, I didn't know that)....

The People hayed the ....typo.......hated....

Chapter Break: She walked carefully,.........I think it would be better to open with........ Doe Running walked carefully, as opposed to 'she'

had no actual experience ....I'd delete the word 'actual' makes the sentence passive....she had no experience at all of how to please a man,,

but desperation gave wings to her feet......(great line, I liked that alot)

but a gut-wrenching noise started to pass her lips ...........can you 'start' to make a noise....? I'd just say...
she gave an ear splitting sceam....

OK...I loved this.....In one chapter you've gave us enough backdrop for make us feel 'grounded' in the period and customs, profiled the main character and advanced the plot enough for me to want to turn the page....
Great stuff.

Shelved with best wishes....

Manolya wrote 827 days ago

I love books on Native American Indians and I have a deep respect for them.

Nothing else to add apart from I love it and would gladly buy it; thank you so much for this book- Backed!

Take care,
Manolya-Love in No-Man's Land

Francesco wrote 827 days ago

A quick look at my profile will give you a clue as to why I loved this.
Backed!
A look at mine would be appreciated.
Frank, Sicilian Shadows

Philip Carlton wrote 828 days ago

I have always been fascinated by anything to do with the American West, especially those stories that are based on fact, so I backed this as soon as I found it, after a very quick read.
Good luck with this and best wishes.
Phil. (Hallam's Ghosts)

Thomas J. Winton wrote 828 days ago

DW, this is an extemely well-crafted depiction of the American Indians. A wonderful, informative look at their culture, past, and at times barbaric rituals. This should do very well with its targeted audience. Backed because it is an outstanding work bt a true wordsmith.
Thomas J Winton
"Beyond Nostalgia"

J&M JENSEN wrote 830 days ago

CHEYENNE HONOR

I'm always fascinated by NA culture and history, so this book was a must for me. Well written an dinformative. Backed.

J&M Jensen
(Graemor)

daydreaming wrote 830 days ago

DW Knowing very little of Native American Indians it was really out of curiosity that I read this, and I’m glad I did. The writing I found good and it held my attention, and interest, and deserves to do well on this site. However two suggestions: The current synopsis tells the potential reader nothing about the book, just mainly about you and why you wrote the book. Put all that under ‘about me’ on your page. There are so many books on this site readers will open a book if the pitch and synopsis grabs them. I doubt if yours does at the moment. Next, I did struggle through the first chapter. I’m not sure as to whether it’s the way it’s been loaded, but the paragraphs seem far too long and the single spacing makes reading difficult on a screen. Ch 2 appears much better but then it returns on Ch3. Again, if readers struggle viewing the typeset they may tend to skip onto another book. There are also a few typos but nothing of importance at this stage. Only my views but hope it helps.

Jim Darcy wrote 831 days ago

You clearly love your subject and your passion shines through, involving your reader. Excellent 3 chapters providing a desire to read more. I like books like this which respect their subject without looking through rose-tinted glasses. Happy to back, Jim D Serpent's Blood

R.A. Battles wrote 832 days ago

Welcome to my shelf !

Rodney

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