Murder at Tiffany's

Hi G F,
I think this is such a great idea for a story and your pitch was good enough to make me want to read the book. I read three chapters and enjoyed them. Nick Hornby tells me I can't just write "I enjoyed it", even when that's all there is to say. But, like most things he says, I choose to ignore him.

Backed for a very entertaining read.

Best wishes,
Barry
LITTLE KRISNA AND THE BIHAR BOYS

Whew!
Have been out of circulation for a while, but back! Can't wait to see what comments I drew while I was "out"! Also need to get back to writing again! So many ideas - so little time!

Too many !!!!!!! of these. Your words need to do the talking, not the punctuation. Take the foreward out of italics, it's too long a passage and the reader's eyes will tire or they will skip it all together. You need a better balance in your paragraphs of short and long sentences. So many sentences have so many prepositional phrases that the reader gets lost.

I'll put on watch.

Hi G. F., The arch humor and alternative reality set this into the magic zone at once. Bertie’s experiment is really a pull in, using magic theory like a science and with the large weight. The railroad car and the truck being displaced with this rule-oriented magic launches the book well. Great dialogue and I love the bewilderment. Strong stuff! Easily shelved – Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

Backed with pleasure! Good Luck!!
A look at Sicilian Shadows would be greatly appreciated.
Frank.
If you back my work, you may also want to approach BJD (a big supporter of Sicilian Shadows) for a further read and possible backing of your book.

Backed with pleasure! Joss E. Morris (A Bore No More)

This is a clever story. I like the way you begin by explaining how magic sometimes happens. Makes all of this plausible. Enjoy your writing style as well. It's a fun read. Backed. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

This is a fantastic start, so well thought up, with a slight humorous edge.

I so enjoyed the characters and there reactions to what developed (or not in one case). The interaction is so well written. This is very well plotted and skilfully written – Good luck.

Hi, G.F.-

Alternate reality jumping as a means to get away from the scene of the crime? Love it!

Happy to back Murder at Tiffany's. And I was wondering if you could take a look at my book.

Best of luck here.

Thanks.

- Jeff Lee
THE LADIES TEMPERANCE CLUB'S FAREWELL TOUR

You've got such a unique story here, didn't quite know what to expect but it was very interesting! Great writing style that keeps the story moving along and also some really realistic characters. Enjoyed what I read, it was a nice surprise!

Missy

Brilliant and fun.
Shelved to delve some more!
I can sense you enjoyed writing it and that's infectious.
Cool characters, fine settings and an original idea.
No errors found.
Best of luck with it......mikegilli The Free

An original piece of writing. I think this has the promise of a very good read. The long pitch could do with a bit more white space and that might help you get a leg up the charts.
Best of luck

Sue Mackender
Ps hope you like Knowing Liam Riley

Hi GF
A really great start and an original idea. If I were you, I'd split up your pitch a bit into paragraphs which might hook more people in. Good luck with this.
Backed
DP Walker
Five Dares

Brilliant idea. The first chapter or prologue is a little dry, and there's the notorious it's for its in the fifth paragraph. The British railway terminology is absolutrly right. I'm notsure whether any American would be named Dougie, though, even in an alternate reality. Backed

Steve Wylder
See You in Chicago

What a romp! Not quite sure you've nailed the American speech (it's obvious to me that a Brit is writing this - or is it the other way round?) but apart from that, it's amusing. Would it be better to spell out 'British' boxcar in the pitch? Backed for verve.

This is such an original idea! Very well crafted and polished! BACKED with pleasure!

Liz
The Cheech Room