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rank 5466
word count 102975
date submitted 19.02.2010
date updated 20.04.2012
genres: Fiction, Thriller, Young Adult, Bio...
classification: universal
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The Second American Revolution - The Building of an Empire

Kenneth R. Szulczyk

Jerrick Ray Davis takes over the U.S. government. He rebuilds the U.S. economy and then invades the surrounding countries, creating the American Empire.

 

As a child, Jerrick Ray Davis dreams, he delivers powerful speeches to the people. He also dreams he builds an Empire that spans across the North and South Americas. These are not simple day dreams, but ideas that map out Jerrick’s destiny. Jerrick rises up out of the wreckage and devastation of the Michigan economy and turns his dreams into reality. Jerrick Davis and his political party, the National Workers’ Party, take over the United States government and then the rest of the Americas.

Jerrick Ray Davis becomes the most powerful man in the 21st century, and the world trembles at his sight. Jerrick Ray Davis also makes a promise to the people. After the 2008 Financial Crisis, he will put all Americans back to work. Good-paying jobs will be plentiful again. Of course, Jerrick Davis puts everyone back to work, building his Empire. This story is about Jerrick Ray Davis’ life from his early childhood to his rise in power. Please read this story with caution, we may be all toiling hard on Jerrick Ray Davis’ Empire. As Jerrick Ray Davis says, “All Americans will be united under one flag.”

 
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arhuda wrote 727 days ago

Dear Kenneth,

I can see you have great ideas for this book, and I sincerely love the direction of this, but this is too fast pace for my liking, although it does help with the building of the story. Less telling and more showing are good as well, but you have great ideas, so I'm backing this.

Hypo99 wrote 728 days ago

Hi Kenneth. I just want to sat that I have been enjoying this book. I have oly read a little but I shall indeed, be reading more. It looks as thoug you have talent.

BACKED 100%

Hope you get the chance to take a little peek inside The Russian Hat

Sincerly
Brendan Doherty
The Russian Hat

Famlavan wrote 775 days ago

The Second American Revolution

Dehumanising systems eh!
Often when a piece is written in first person the descriptive narrative can be missing descriptive sound, which to me deadens the overall effect of the scene, but hey that could just be me!

lionel25 wrote 781 days ago

"transformed into a giant lawnmower" I like that expression. Your Introduction is an overall good read. Yes, you need to check your verb tenses. For instance, [Why did people lose faith in their democracy, their leaders, and allowed one man to seize all the power?] It should be "allow" and not "allowed."

Happy to back the potential of your work.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

SusieGulick wrote 785 days ago

Dear Kenneth, What an amazing story with fantasy, fiction, & thriller. :) I love that. Your story is a good read because you create interest by having short paragraphs & lots of dialogue which makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm BACKING/COMMENTING on your book to help advance it. :) PLEASE take a moment to BACK/COMMENT on my TWO Books, ... "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" ... and the UNEDITED version? ... "Tell Me True Love Stories"
Thanks, Susie :)

lizjrnm wrote 791 days ago

It is evident after reading the first few chapters that you have spent much time, effort and research into this wonderful novel! BACKED with pleasure!

Liz
The Cheech Room

Joss64 wrote 792 days ago

Backed with pleasure! Jocelyn E. Morris (A Bore No More)

lynn clayton wrote 792 days ago

Very interesting, the separate episodes of individuals at the beginning which make up a larger, worrying picture. I noticed in ch2 you tell us twice in quick succession that Jerrick rarely cries. But really, it's shaping up to be a monumental piece of work, and deserves to do well. Brilliant. backed. Lynn

Burgio wrote 802 days ago

Just browsing through stories that are far back in the listings. Thought you might like a boost forward. Backed. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

K.Z. Freeman wrote 806 days ago

loved the short pitch, didn't even need to read the long one to get me to read this bastard. I really liked it. No bullshit.

Mandi Stone wrote 807 days ago

Poles apart from my own work, but seriously compelling reading. The kind of thing which might have been spawned of a marriage of the talents of Clancy and Archer! This is a real gem and deserves to rocket up the rankings. Backed.

The Radical Professor wrote 808 days ago

Dear Readers

I am updating the tense. I completed a third of the book and should have the tense switched to the past by March 10.

The Radical Professor

Jim Darcy wrote 812 days ago

Chapter 13. I am sure you are fed up of people commenting on the tense but it does take a bit of getting used to. The scenarios you create are as fantastic to me any fantasy world but with the added edge of being so close to our reality. You do have quite a few 'dead quiet's in this chapter - you might want to trim a few. Other than that you are creating a story which is at a tangent to most on the site. Jim Darcy Serpent's Blood

Mr. Nom de Plume wrote 818 days ago

The premise shows a grasp of current events within which the plights of characters are presented in a realistic manner. An expansion of physical descriptions for characters in direct association with the protagonist might be considered, but the lack of personal descriptions in the stories of persons being presented seems appropriate because, for example, newspaper accounts don't go into detail regarding the physcial descriptions of persons in the news. An interesting well written work. Backed Chuck (Paperboy Adventures)

MiniMePom wrote 819 days ago

The use of the ppresent tense put me off a little at first, but I got used to it and got absorbed in the story. Backed.

Melcom wrote 820 days ago

Ok I like the writing it flows very well, felt Mike's name was overused where sometimes He could replace it.

Be careful of dialogue tags too, usually when two people are talking you don't need to say Mike said or he said etc, it should be obvious who is saying what during the dialogue.

Mike Obediently obeys??? Why not just Mike obeys!!

Not sure about the kidnapping charge, is that realistic??

Good story, just needs a bit of tweaking.

hope you found this helpful, of course it is only one perons view.

Melxx
Would love to hear your thoughts on Impeding Justice, it has a spunky female MC and is a crime/thriller. xx

soutexmex wrote 820 days ago

SHELVING you because Tim did. I can use your comments on my book when you can get a chance. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

William Holt wrote 820 days ago

I have backed this, but I'd like to see more "showing" and less "telling" here. A challenging task, always, but worth the work involved. I want a novel to unfold before me in a series of smoothly connected images, so that the words become like panes of clear glass through which I observe the story.

Bill

udasmaan wrote 823 days ago

BACKED

shah

bonalibro wrote 824 days ago

I should have read this first.

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