Wolf and the Riddle

Kasie,

Oh man, I'm enjoying this. You weave this tale with an imaginative ease, and you've got some great characters to play with in this sandbox you've created. Wolf and the Riddle reads like a winner! I normally offer some kind of critique, but I've got none here.

Nice work! Backed! Looking forward to your thoughts on Head Games!

Kevin Alex Baker
Head Games

Kasie, I stayed up til 4:30 am to read this amazing novel. What unbelievable surprises...So much more then gold and trinkets...This is the true treasure. Your Mc's are so well developed as is your storyline...so many unexpected twists.

This is a voyage that takes us on an imaginative, intense, intrigueing, romantic, magical journey. Your pace is perfect, your tension building is superb and this just has something for everyone.

I was truly swept away..I loved all your cast of characters, each were endearing and I found myself equally attached and interested in their storylines. You should be very proud of yourself this is a WINNER...Backed without a doubt Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart P.S Great pitch thank you for not giving away to much, and letting us find the surprise in the middle on our own

Dear Kasie --

There's something inherently romantic and compelling about pirate adventures, and you have captured that spirit well. Your characterization is strong, easily defining your primary heroes so that the reader never becomes confused in what is for many of us a strange world. Your female characters are especially well-drawn; it's nice to see a change from the typical, bodice-ripping, chest-heaving empty-headed girl to women that have brains & don't just pretty up the story.

Thanks for the chance to read your adventure, and happy to back you on your way! -- Delhui, The Long Black Veil

She be a night creature. What a fascinating addition to a pirate yarn. Ne'er-do-wells and blaack'earts on the vasty sea. To my shelf with an aaargh, matey.

Kasie,

You have a rather interesting premise here and a great, descriptive, writing style. I'm gladly rating this book six stars. Thanks for the enjoyable read!

Have a great day!

Scott, The Ark of Humanity

I read your first chapter a month ago. I read your second chapter today.

General comments: A compelling, emotionally rich chapter. An endearing main character ... well fleshed out in this chapter. Good visuals. Good tension. Good pacing.

Specific comments on the second chapter:
1) Readers seldom read a book straight through. When they pause, they normally stop at the end of a chapter. As a result, at the beginning of each chapter we must assume that the reader has been away for a while (sometimes for a long while) and must quickly reorient the reader. We must tell them 'who' the narrator is and 'where' and 'when' the current scene is taking place. You have 'who' covered. It's Bianca. Now we need to quickly learn 'where' and 'when' the scene is occuring.
2) 'His feelings ran to deep to be faked.' The first 'to' should be 'too.'
3) 'Caressing it like a lover' is cliche. Consider writing the same action, but in a more unique way.
4) 'She felt herself go pale ... ' Try to avoid using the word 'felt.' Just describe the feeling so the reader can experience it along with the character. When you do this, the reader will be drawn deeper into your story and 'she felt' will be implied.
5) 'Causing pain to another made her feel sick ... ' Try to avoid using the word 'feel.' Just describe the feeling so the reader can experience the sickness along with the character. When you do this, the reader will be more closely involved in your story and character. There are more cases where you use 'feel.'
6) 'Hand picked' is one word.
7) 'Marching up to Rowan, the blonde sailor gave his companion a dirty look ... ' Blonde = female. Blond = male.
8) 'Soft as butter' is cliche. Consider writing the same idea, but in a fresh way.
9) 'Like slop before pigs' is cliche. Consider using a more unique similie.

I hope this critique helps. These are just my opinions. Use what works for you and discard the rest.

Please consider "Savannah Fire" when you reshuffle your bookshelf at the end of the month.

Have a sensational day.

Al

Not my normal read, but an excellent story never-the-less.

I read your first chapter.

General comments: A gripping start to what appears to be an exciting adventure. Interesting, quirky main characters. Good world building. Clever wit. Vivid descriptions Atmospheric. Good tension. Good pacing.

Specific comments on the first chapter:
1) Hyphenate 'sharp toothed.'
2) You alternate between Nicolas and Nick. I would prefer that you only use one name for the young man.
3) Hyphenate 'well armed.'
4) "Listen, luv, I don't think ye realize who yer dealing with," Liam sneered with his usual easy arrogance. Period after 'with.' The only time the last sentence of dialogue is punctuated with a comma is when it is followed by a dialogue tag (tells who said something). 'Liam sneered' is clearly not a dialogue tag, so the last sentence of dialogue should be punctuated with a period.
5) Are you aware that the chapter repeats itself?

I hope this critique will help you further polish your all important first chapter. These are just my opinions. Use what works for you and discard the rest.

Would you please take a look at "Savannah Fire?"

Have a splendid day.

Al

The Wolf and the Riddle
Fiction, 3rd person

A pirate story!

The premise is exciting, adventure with a mystery in a swashbuckling pirate tale! Wide readership guarenteed!

Mechanics, excellent. I didn't see any issues at all. Very professional as far as I could tell.

The pacing, IMO, a bit slow for this genre'. I read the first half of Ch 1, and while it is good, there is a lot of telling as opposed to showing. Lots of back story here that pulled me out of the flow. Never felt the breeze in my face or heard the flapping of sails. The focus was on the recollections of how the characters came to be where they are and what the characters seemed to be. Show me with actions, not words. I think this story has an awesome plot. It just needs to get out of port and sail!

There is some good dialog.

I like the twist to the plot at the end of Ch 1, "the very man who'd gotten her into this mess." Good hook.

I think with some polish this novel will be top-notch. The author demonstrates some terrific skill, good imagination for a nice tight plot. It certainly shows promise.
Raechel
Echo

Hi Kasie,

I finally managed to get time to look at your book. Sorry it took a few days. :(

I'll comment as I read since I find that the easiest way to keep track. Please don't be offended by any suggestions. After all, they will just be my thoughts. You can always ignore me if you think I'm wrong or stupid. ;)

(Sorry in advance for any typos, but my keyboard’s a bit knackered:()

Chapter 1: Hmmm I wonder what Nicholas is staring at so hard. He seems absorbed by something. Curious.

I've a tiny suggestion here. I think, occasionally, you don't need to explain so much. eg in "Rubbing his forehead irritably, Liam cursed..." the reader can figure out he's irritable from the action alone. So I think "Rubbing his forehead, Liam cursed..." works better.

Reading on... Hmmm there are hints Liam's caught up in some venture he wants no part of. Intriguing. And he really doesn't want Nicholas along, so why did he bring the boy? Oho now I see why. They're out to rescue Nicholas's wife. And it seems she hates Liam. There are so many things that can go wrong here. Good. ;)

Looks like there's more to Nicholas than meets the eyes. Despite his unimpressive appearance, he's faced an ogre of a father in law + tracked down Liam in a dangerous place. And it seems Liam likes the young couple. I think he might even think of Nicholas almost as a son. I think that, more than the gold, might be what drives Liam to try this rescue.

A tiny suggestion here. I think it's best to stick to "said" as a speech tag. eg in " "we can't just leave her," he protested..." we know he's protesting from the dialogue, so the word "protested" isn't needed. "said" is a simpler and more transparent word the reader won't even notice. As such, I think it's a better option, and will make for quicker dialogue.

Reading on... I liked the short argument between Nick and Liam. It was fun and really brought out their respective characteristics. Liam's sarcastic and Nick's resolute. In some ways, I think Nick might be even stronger than Liam. Ooh it was a risk calling Liam a coward, though. I'm amazed that didn't prick Liam more. Liam seems to have restraint. Rare for a man in his position.

I've another small suggestion here. I think 90% of the time a strong verb does the job better than a weaker verb-adverb pair. eg I think "Glaring..." would work better than "Staring furiously...". I'd only use adverbs if there isn't a verb that quite fits what you need to describe. Increasingly, I think that picking the best verbs is a large part of writing. ;)

Reading on... Poor Nick. Sounds like they took his wife while he was there and there was nothing he could do about it. Probably sensible he didn't resist, but it may show he's a coward.

I've a tiny suggestion here. Once you've given a name for a character, I think it's easier and clearer to always refer to them by that name. eg after a good amount of time, you mentioned Captain Magnus. It took me a moment to realise who you meant. That moment of confusion could pull the reader a little out of the story. Best to keep them engrossed in your adventure. ;)

Reading on... Looks like they're planning. I wonder what they'll come up with. But wait, who's this strange woman? Is she friend or foe? Aha seems she's a friend. Shock news: the kidnappers want the Riddle. The plot thickens. This woman's brother's the kidnapper, and he's obsessed with the Riddle. Bianca was only a pawn he took to get what he really wants.

I like that you hint of bad blood between the strange woman and her brother without explicitly explaining the history behind it. This makes my imagination race. I wonder what on Earth this man can have done to anger his sister so much.

Uh oh. the clock's ticking. They need to get in or Bianca's dead. Looks like they'll have to accept the strange woman's help. There's no other way they can get in. Now Liam's got motivation too. No pirate would ever let another take his ship without putting up a hell of a fight.

Aha they go in by grappling hook. Quiet and unseen. Neat. And what strange substance does Rowan use to blow the door open? A silent explosive. Interesting.

The scene of Bianca's kidnap's vivid and well done. I especially liked the kidnapper's odd eyes. Good to get inside her head a bit too. It seems she's no weakling. She’s filled with fire and character. I almost laughed at her reaction when Liam turned up. She seemed v unimpressed to see him, even while rescuing her. ;)

There's 1 last thing I should mention here. Your 1st chapter has uploaded twice for some reason. It repeats itself within the authonomy chapter 1. Dunno how that happened. Weird.

OK I've just seen how big this comment's getting. Sorry, I guess I got a bit carried away by your story. I'll sum up now, and then shut up. :)

I enjoyed your story a lot. I think it's filled with adventure and excitement. The characters are all well drawn and interesting, and the dialogue feels real and reads well. I want to see what happens to Nick and Bianca. And I want to learn of this mysterious plan to capture the Riddle. And why is Rowan so at odds with her brother? I think all these questions and many more are what will really draw readers into your book, and keep them reading far too late into the night. ;)

I've rated your book v highly, and hope you find an agent soon. I think there's a real market out there for your book. :)

Best of luck,

Pete x

Kasie,

I started reading your Opus and thought I would give you my cent and half:

The first thing that jumps here is the style. Is a moment by moment perception where every moment is a dangling act promising the next to have the same urgency....

..... and that you deliver.

The jewel of the narrative however is the delicious descriptions you make

"toothsome example of feminine youth"

"delicious curves'

"barbed as a porcupine"

"raked over him"

"rising like heat waves"

All delivered with gusto throughout your narrative....

.....this mind candy creates a cola-like effect in the reader...

...re freshing him time after time

....for we read not only for the plot...

...we read to re -discover language...

...or better said...

...to let language....

...rediscover us

.....and that you do

Some Minor/Minorest/Minormost points:

"obviously wasn't happy" "masterfully crafted" blended perfectly"
I would cut a bit on the emotional labeling
Why?
Because when the writer labels an emotion, the reader reads ...the label
when he uses body language to describe...the reader feels

Let me know if that helps,

Overall, wonderful

david

Wolf and the Riddle. - A great pirate adventure!!!
It has wonderful characters with engaging dialogue.
A great read, I will add to my WL
Ruth x

Wolf and the Riddle. - A great pirate adventure!!!
It has wonderful characters with engaging dialogue.
A great read, I will add to my WL
Ruth x

Kasie -

Wolf and the Riddle - A highly enjoyable read. I met Liam, Nick and Rowan so far, all impressive and well drawn characters with peppered dialogues between them. The rich descriptions engage and there's a lovely cadence to the writing. Back her to refresh my comment from months ago and rate the book with a handful of stars :) Pia

Wolf and the Riddle - The is more than a touch of 'Cap'n Jack Sparrow' in descriptions of Liam Magnus, his manner and dialogue. Pressed by friendship into a mission he would much rather not be involved in, Liam is hampered by kidnapped Bianca's young husband, Nicholas. We met the unlikely pair scoping out a fortress and pondering the possible outcome of rescue. Rowan Harrington is introduced at this point, leaving the reader in no doubt as to her courage, resourcefulness and the hint of mystery that surrounds her. The author has a swashbuckling story to tell. The characters backstories are developed nicely with some good writing that has a wonderfully lyrical feel in places.

Child - Atramentus Speaks

Added Wolf and the Riddle to our watchlist. The pitch caught our attention...what does the moon have to do with it? We must read this to find the answer.
CC Brown
Dark Side

This is very nicely constructed, with some excellent narrative. I love the metaphore with the cliff face, for example. You make it easy to associate with your characters, and the story has good pace. Backed. Colin

Nobility turned boatbuilder had refused to hand the Sphinxs Riddle over, king James saw it has treason, and Rowan Harringtons brother kidnapped the daughter of a wealthy English nobleman, hoping to capture the Sphinx when it was sent to carry out the rescue. Captain Liam Magnus doesn't see the trap, so Rowan herself has to betray her own brother, but thats enough to get her passage on the ship that her Grandfather built.
Great story, a kidnapping becomes a complex issue, revealing that the gift that was once bestowed on Liam Magnus the captaincy of the Sphinx, may not be as straight forward as he first thought.
Backed with pleasure
Daniel Manning
No Compatibility.

First of all 'for goodness sake' doesn't sound very much like a pirate, I'd expect something like 'by satan's blood' or the like. I had to get that off my chest. Chapters 2 & 3 (3 was as far as I read) were very good and the narative moved the story along. It was well crafted and structured, but beware of starting a sentence with a word that ends ing. It weakens the statement.
But overall I liked what I saw and I will back it. But I do feel you need to lose the prologue. I think you have a better story if you start at what is now 2. Look at what is in the prologue, decide what information is essential, and feed it gently in with the narative. I really think you will end up with a stronger book .
Best of luck.
John

Kasie-




I know you are a good writer.
I do not mind much about grammatical errors or a miss of using punctuations like any other writers do here as they are making comments. I want to comment on the general impression of the story, your way of writing and the perfect message that you want to share to your readers because after all literature is sharing all the different colours of life. I believe you, as a writer, have got all the good elements to be called a good writer. The truth is, I haven't finished reading the entire chapters but I did manage to read chapters 1-5 and those chapters were enough to convince me that you deserve to get a good publisher one day and for sure it is going to be soon.The twists and the thrill are really sensible and clear. I believed that your book just deserves the praise and the claps it earned. I appreciate reading a high quality product of literature. Good luck to your writing career.
Take care.

FLETCH

A well written fantasy adventure. Original and quirky characters. Snappy dialogue that evokes the era. Well imagined settings. Tense narrative. Poignant scenes. Brisk plot. Superb writing. An immensely enjoyable read. Backed.

Kasie

I read from the start to the first break in the story and I must say that you set this up well. You jump stright in describing your two main characters, Liam and Nick, and hook the reader with what could possibly be a love triangle , with the missing Bianca.

Your descriptive paragraphs work well as they are not too indepth and serve to inform the reader of what's happening and what has gone before. This works well as too many novels get caught up in trying to tell the reader everything.

I know that there will indefinetly be more to this story and the mention of Port Royal invokes a sense of Pirates and the high seas of the Carribean. Giving the story a Treasure Island/Master and Commander feel.

Backed with pleasure.

Chris Yates

Wolf and the Riddle is outstanding. It is so unusual for me to find a book on here where the author outshines most of their favourite published authors, but I have to say I think this is the case here. If this gets the right sort of support from the publisher, it will be on the best-seller lists, it's that good. Well done indeed, and thank you for sharing it with us. KA.

Dear Kasie, What a wonderful yard with a good sprinkling of healthy humour. I absolutely loved it! You are a natural writer: good flow, pace and character development. Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid

Hi, sure I backed this a while ago - a remember the pirates and thought what fun :-) It romps straight into the action - no messing. Just the way I like my books! But as I am far too disorganised to keep records :-) I will back it now just in case.

Kasie,

Oh man, I'm enjoying this. You weave this tale with an imaginative ease, and you've got some great characters to play with in this sandbox you've created. Wolf and the Riddle reads like a winner! I normally offer some kind of critique, but I've got none here.

Nice work! Backed! Looking forward to your thoughts on Head Games!

Kevin Alex Baker
Head Games

14 August 2010
Wolf and The Riddle is written with a light deft touch and is pleasingly visual. Characters are introduced with gradual, minimal detail allowing (nice device) the reader to form his own completed imagery. The opening skilfully takes us into an ongoing action and the plot moves on without undue deviation. One minor reservation, and I admit this leans towards the subjective, is the occasional redundancy, such as 'privateer ship' where the sense of the sentence clearly indicates a vessel and not a person therefore 'privateer' would suffice. However, this does not detract from the efficacy of the work which has an overall believable feel of the intended time and genre. BACKED. Robert Davidson. The Tuzla Run

'Wolf in the Riddle' has some really solid writing and captivating pace, pleased to back this one.

read all of it, and i loved it. the werewolf twist on a pirate tale is an excellent twist.

the only thing is that i could see part one as a whole book by itself as does part two. they have a great potential for an even more expansive work.

i can see this it having graphic novel potential as well.

great as it is, but can become excellent.

me

Dear Kasie,
I suggest you take the last 2 paragraphs off your pitch. This info could be placed on your profile, but the pitch should be dedicated to explaining your story. The rest of the pitch is quite good. It draws the reader in for more.

BACKED
Elizabeth Wolfe (MEMORIES OF GLORY)

Here is your chance to get a double backing. My friend, homewriter, and I have similar taste in writing and trust each other's judgment. Back my book and leave it on your bookshelf. Then do the same for his, "The Harpist of Madrid." Once the backings register, he will give you a return backing guaranteed. Just let him know in an email that you've backed my book as well as his. You might have to be a bit patient as we're 6 time zones apart. But you'll have two backings guaranteed on your excellent book. Of course, comments are always welcome too!

You have crafted a most interesting storyline and your use of short paragraphs and crisp dialogue keeps the pace of your story flowing well. You did an excellent job in building the characters of Liam and Rowan and your descriptive and imaginative writing makes your fantasy a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

This is great, rollicking writing, carrying us along on a tide (pardon the nautical references) of action and instantly memorable and sympathetic characters. Watchlisting as my eyes are tired, will read on tomorrow.

backed :)

'There's no bit of warrior in yer ink-filled veins', vibrant, rich language weaves this fantasy which has the spicy flavours of Pirates of the Caribbean mixed with a mysterious supernatural element. There's a nice touch of humour too, 'Well, then, one can do it as easy as two'. Liam, the 'tatter-souled pirate', is misunderstood, if not underestimated, by lanky Nick, and while they are distracted, a new character turns up with some interesting information... Fantastic action during the escape scene, 'He'd left the gold!', and then the bullet wound ... ouch. Even injured, Rowan can stand up for herself, and we're set for an epic adventure ... backed.

Possible nits: consider the following rewording to keep the point of view firmly with Liam in this section, 'but Nick appeared oblivious to it all, his mind no doubt lost to...'. To avoid confusion here, 'He [Liam] aimed a frown'. 'Nick spat through clenched teeth', sounds slightly contradictory ... 'hissed' might be better. There is perhaps a little too much description of Liam and Nick, some of it feeling like a repeat - perhaps trim slightly.

Brilliant. Backed
Helen
The Last Dream

Pirates. What's not to like.

A great tale of salty sea dogs. Your descriptive powers are excellent, as is the plot. Good dialogue, and some phrases thrown in that made me smile and kept the story moving. "Pampered upper arms",and "ink-filled veins" to name a few. Loved it. Backed with pleasure!

Craig Ellis
The Sun and the Saber

Kasie, I stayed up til 4:30 am to read this amazing novel. What unbelievable surprises...So much more then gold and trinkets...This is the true treasure. Your Mc's are so well developed as is your storyline...so many unexpected twists.

This is a voyage that takes us on an imaginative, intense, intrigueing, romantic, magical journey. Your pace is perfect, your tension building is superb and this just has something for everyone.

I was truly swept away..I loved all your cast of characters, each were endearing and I found myself equally attached and interested in their storylines. You should be very proud of yourself this is a WINNER...Backed without a doubt Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart P.S Great pitch thank you for not giving away to much, and letting us find the surprise in the middle on our own

The setting and locale hooked me instantly, I think my reaction was due to reading almost everything in the Hornblower series when I was much younger. This work is a gem of writing craftmanship. Backed and good luck with you work and passion for being an author. Chuck (Paperboy Adventures---Literary Agent Blues---Uboat Officer)

You are like totally fantastic, Kasie! :) How can I ever thank you for backing my 2 memoir books? :)
God bless you. :) Love, Susie :)
p.s. I saw that you have a 2nd book, so will back it. :)

Dear Kasie, I got so excited when I saw that you had backed, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not." :) Thanks so very much. :) Since I have already "backed" your book, I will put your book on my "watchlist." Could you please take a moment to "back" my completed unedited memoir version? "Tell Me True Love Stories," which at the end tells of my illness now & 6th abusive marriage. I'd be ever so grateful. :) Thank you. :) Love, Susie :)
authonomy quotes: "Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs.
When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved...authonomy

This story is one great, fun adventure. You have managed to create two very good characters and the reader is keen to know what happens between them. Your writing is filled with humor and wit and the end result is pure entertainment.
Backed earlier and glad to have read more to comment.
Rakhi (Sir William...)

It reads very well, you give the characters srrong, distinct personalities and the general vibe is full of adventure. i think it has a lot going for it but to be honest this has too many similarities to another Pirate adventure. A cocky pirate, an earnest young man, a feisty young woman, a ship that's desired by various parties, a possible love triangle in the offing. While the story I'm sure goes off in a completely different direction theses similarities to PotC are very striking in the first couple of chapters.

Even though the writing is very good I found it very hard to separate this from that other story and I feel you need to do that if you want to get this story read. Sorry, but I couldn't get past those similarities, to the point their voices started in my head.

This is just my opinion of course but I try to be honest as I would want somedone else to be with me, i hope you take it in the spirit it is meant.

regards
mood

I have always been fond of pirate adventures, so your book certainly interested me. Your characters are strong and the descriptions good. This is perfectly paced and is a real page turner. Wishing you every success - Paula (Cuthbert: how mean is my valley?)

Dear Sassie, I love your happy ending - that's how I wish my life was. Before I began to read your book, I was prepared by your pitch,which was very well done. :) Your story is good because you create interest by having short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, which makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm "backing" your book: When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved...authonomy. :) Please "back" my TWO memoir books, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" & my completed memoir unedited version? "Tell Me True Love Stories," which tells at the end, my illness now & 6th abusive marriage." Thanks, Susie :)
p.s. Remember: Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs. :)

Most enjoyable. Like GMF's "The Pyrates" its not the way it was, but it most certainly is the the way it should have been:-))

You paint a good picture with your descriptions. Well written. Remember to have your typos spayed or nuetered. That helps with the breeding problem!

Mandi Oyster
Dacia Wolf & the Prophecy

WOLF and the Riddle: Love this! You have set up quite the intrigue with the pitch and the first chapter. Your descriptions are lovely. Nick the pasty husband. Liam the captain. Bianca the prize. Incidentally, I agree that that's breed. :) Well done!

Heidi
Pearl Edda

Wolf and the Riddle
Kasie Stadig

Inventive plot, engrossing portraits of your characters with adventure and romance ingredients added to the mix to charm and overwhelm. Enjoyed this immensely and happy to have backed it.

Dear Kasie --

There's something inherently romantic and compelling about pirate adventures, and you have captured that spirit well. Your characterization is strong, easily defining your primary heroes so that the reader never becomes confused in what is for many of us a strange world. Your female characters are especially well-drawn; it's nice to see a change from the typical, bodice-ripping, chest-heaving empty-headed girl to women that have brains & don't just pretty up the story.

Thanks for the chance to read your adventure, and happy to back you on your way! -- Delhui, The Long Black Veil

I love your descriptions and characters. Backed it with pleasure.

Jenny
Hailey Graham and the Secrets of the Cobalt Eye

Hi Kasie. You paint the story well in the prologue. Captain Liam's character comes across well. This is a great fantasy that its genre will enjoy. Backed with pleasure! mariecapri

The polished prose pulled me in, and the further I went, the more intrigued I was by the premise. It's entertaining right from the start - a fast-paced, intense read. Wonderful!

Backed with pleasure.
Abi xxx

This is a great tale. Liam is a wonderful character and your descriptions are rich and vivid. I found nothing to nitpick in the three chapters I read so I'm thinking your edits must have worked. Backed with joy.
Carl
The Time Hunters