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rank 5336
word count 63434
date submitted 28.02.2010
date updated 11.03.2010
genres: Fiction
classification: adult
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My Brother the Doctor

F. Wayne van Saun, MD

This novel features a twist on an old story, identical twins switching places, this time it's a US Senator and a country family doctor.

 

John Harper, a US Senator from Missouri, and his identical twin JIm, a family doctor who practices in rural Missouri, decide to switch places when Jim is diagnosed with a bone marrow condition for which a life-saving stem cell transplant, donated by his twin is needed. John, frustrated by lack of progress in getting a liberal agenda passed in Washington, offers to take Jim's place so his practice can continue, since Jim cannot see patients for at least 6 months. Since John had gone to medical school before switching to law, and was still licensed to practice in the state, all that's required is a brushing up and real time help through the Internet and instant messaging with his brother. JIm once able to be in public places after the transplant is to play US Senator, a challenge perhaps more difficult than his brother's. Office romances with the imposter twin develop for both forcing a real dilemma when the planned switch back is to occur. A nosy reporter gets close to figuring out the ruse. There is a dramatic political change that begins to sweep across the coutnry as the twins prepare to switch back.

 
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Melcom wrote 644 days ago

What a terrific read this is, I'm frankly gobsmacked that it isn't being read more.
It has all the elements of a cracking book, a great premise with the brothers switching identities is an original plot.
Fluid writing makes this an entertaining and engaging read.

Great work
Happily shelved
Melxx
Impeding Justice

Eveleen wrote 647 days ago

Backed.

Burgio wrote 652 days ago

This is a good story. You have good characters in both John and Jim. The fact that John went to medical school before he became a politician seems a little convenient, but ok. Could have happened. The way they’re able to change places is intriguing. Makes this a good read. If I had a suggestion, it would be to make the twins’ names a little more distinctive. I confused their names a couple times because Jim and John are so similar, especially because Jim is John and John is Jim. I’m adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

lionel25 wrote 670 days ago

Doc, your first chapter is an enjoyable read. I would reword one particular line Change: [... and only when the plane began its descent to land at Lambert-St. Louis airport] to: [............when the plane began its descent into Lambert-St. Louis Airport]

Happy to back the potential of your work.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

Francesco wrote 694 days ago

Backed with pleasure! Good Luck!!
A look at Sicilian Shadows would be greatly appreciated.
Frank.
If you back my work, you may also want to approach BJD (a big supporter of my work) for a further read and possible backing of your book.

Michael Croucher wrote 694 days ago

An interesting premise and an enjoyable and informative read. Well written. I'm happy to give it some time on my shelf.
Michael Croucher (Bravo's Veil)

JoeDPalermo wrote 694 days ago

Wayne.

I can back this based on your writing ability. However, I really feel the concept of the story has been used in many, many ways before - novels, movies, TV. I just do not feel another version of switching lives can be very popular. In order for a story like this to fly, something very, very different has to be inserted. I don't know what that could be because even having one of the two die after the switch has been used before.

I suggest that you use your excellent writing ability to create a truly unique story. Try it.

I hate to ask, but could you read, comment on, and back Jamie 7?

Thank you
Keep Smiling
Joseph D Palermo

JoeDPalermo wrote 694 days ago

Wayne.

I can back this based on your writing ability. However, I really feel the concept of the story has been used in many, many ways before - novels, movies, TV. I just do not feel another version of switching lives can be very popular. In order for a story like this to fly, something very, very different has to be inserted. I don't know what that could be because even having one of the two die after the switch has been used before.

I suggest that you use your excellent writing ability to create a truly unique story. Try it.

I hate to ask, but could you read, comment on, and back Jamie 7?

Thank you
Keep Smiling
Joseph D Palermo

Phyllis Burton wrote 700 days ago

Hello F.Wayne, This is good. I like medical novels and this does not disappoint. Have read the first two chapters and will definitely read more, but in the meantime, it is going on my SHELF. Good luck with this.

Phyllis
A Passing Storm (I would be grateful if you would have a look at this please)

lizjrnm wrote 703 days ago

This is an excellent premise as I told you before - just returned to read some more political and medical novels accroding to Publisher's Weekly are very popular right now so you have a wonderful opportunity with what you have crafted here to have this published! Great pacing and a thoroughly engrossing read! If I haven't already done so - BACKED with pleasure!

Liz
The Cheech Room

david brett wrote 704 days ago

I got onto reading this being myself an identical twin, was not expecting too much, but found a well crafted, rather oldfashioned ( in the good sense) political, character novel in what seems to me a good U.S. tradition. Some of the detail very good. Sometimes the pace was a bit muffled. Nothing an editor couldn't help to put right. Well worth a backing. DB ALL THESE ARE MEMORIES OF MY VOYAGE

Telegraph wrote 705 days ago

This is a brilliant read. The charcters an diolouge are polished and create a stong voice. C W

soutexmex wrote 705 days ago

Not a fan of the pitches which do not match your ability to write which I read in the first chapter. Throw both pitches into the forum and have people help you out with it. I am SHELVING in advance. I can use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

Colin Normanshaw wrote 706 days ago

You set the context of your story really well within your opening paragraphs. I like the dialogue too, and the story has real pace. I would suggest a detailed edit to check on the use of punctuation - especially within some of your longer sentences. Backed with pleasure. Colin

Mr. Nom de Plume wrote 707 days ago

The premise of identity switch is wonderfully developed in the plot. The realism of locales is exact down to the Interstate road numbers. The Washington locales are exact as they exist in reality. A wonderful novel. Backed. Chuck (Paperboy Adventures)

updike wrote 708 days ago

Just got started on this. The medical realism, including detailed descriptions of medical procedures, is fascinating. This could be exploited further.
Backed.

beegirl wrote 708 days ago

Wonderful plot concept. Couldn't help but think that this could be strenghtened by starting with some action. All the information at the beginning weighs what is going to be a good story down. Just a thought. But already backed this and glad I did to encouarge you to keep thinking about it
Barbara
The Sea Pillow

lynn clayton wrote 708 days ago

A bit like a modern and realistic 'Prisoner of Zenda'. The politics are fascinating, but I agree with an earlier comment that they could be incorporated later when Jim really gets going. But it's an informing book, beautifully characterised, and the perfect set-up for an excellent thriller. Romance too, come to that. Backed. lynn

glenn1862 wrote 709 days ago

Can't really add anymore to what has already been said, so I will just say I enjoyed reading it.

DKTD1 wrote 709 days ago

The first chapter is quite a bit to digest, but well written. Country mouse and city mouse with power, huh?
Good twist on the concept, but I'm not sure I would spell that out in the pitch. No complaints! Well written and backed.

Dan-
Eunice Stubbins, among others...

Adelie High wrote 709 days ago

The writing is a little formal, but I suppose we can let that pass, given that a doctor and a lawyer are the main characters. I wish they sounded more like brothers, though. I'd like to see this loosen up a little in the edit. It's also old-fashioned in places; does anyone really say, 'A penny for your thoughts?'

The premise is tried and true, so no problems with that, except, and this really is a flaw... except that regardless of whether they swap places, they are both instantly recognisable as a rather well-known Senator. I hope that rather obvious detail doesn't come back to trip you up!

This is only just making its way up the charts, and while the prose needs some work, there is something rather nice about it. It's a little slow and perhaps a little uptight, but that might just be it's strength. I'm giving this the benefit of the doubt and we'll see how it moves through the hundreds rather than the thousands.

Backed,

Adelie (Names)

Jim Darcy wrote 709 days ago

Politics and medicine is usually a potent brew. I like the idea of the twin swap too. Read chapters 1 to 5 and then 18. Initially the political background was heavy going for a Brit. I don't need to know why he was fed up, just that he was. The medical stuff was much more interesting, to me at least. Glad the ending was happy! Jim Darcy Serpent's Blood

Bill Carrigan wrote 709 days ago

Greetings F. Wayne,

Browsing for a good read among the newcomers, I spotted this novel by an MD whose theme bears some resemblance to mine in "The Doctor of Summitville." To the extent, anyway, that they deal with the tribulations of a country doctor, though my book is essentially a love story and takes place long ago. Well, I hastened to read your first chapter and decided at once to back "My Brother the Doctor."

As a compulsive editor, I have a habit of making marginal notes. I'll copy them here in hopes that you'll find them helpful if you edit your manuscript again.

--Strong characterization of John--background in medicine, alcohol problem, altruistic.
--Should minimize political detail, lest readers think politics is the main subject. Delete second paragraph.
--Editors will see show-tell problem. Start with phone call to brother and his secret concern, introducing tension up front. Use more dialogue. Bring out John's anxieties through a running internal monologue as he meets people during his trip home. Theoretically, every line should advance the story.
--Delete the second [was] in the phrase [radius was rarely was able].
--Spell out numbers that can be expressed in one or two words. (Standard in fiction.)
--Hyphenate composite adjectives, such as [first-time] in [first time St. Louis visitors].
--Use contractions in or out of dialogue for a natural effect. In [Great, I am famished; did not have time], use [I'm] and [didn't].
--[terrorist] should be plural.
--Change [Jon] to [John].
--Stay in the past tense. Change [has] to [had] in [Missouri has a lion's share]. (Beware of "author intrusion.")
--Use comma after an interjection, such as [Well] in the phrase [Well let's get on down to the first level . . .].

The chapter is technically professional, but lacks tension and is burdened with information. Readers not intensely interested in politics will be impatient for the story to unfold. The place for politics is when the doctor takes his brother's place and becomes directly involved. Of course, these are just one person's opinions for you to think about.

I'd deeply appreciate your thoughts on Doc Martin's actions and attitudes in "The Doctor of Summitville." While hoping to hear from you, I'll shelve and continue to read "My Brother the Doctor."

All the best, Bill

Suzannah Burke wrote 709 days ago

The pitch lured me in just as it should thats one of the most difficult things to acheive on the site. Perfecting the pitch is almost half the battle to having your book read and commented on. To make it even more appealing I suggest breaking it down to 3 paragraphs and edit out references to the ending...readers like suspense to be withheld..delayed gratification if you will. The pitch is not meant to be a synopsis...a few strong key points and leave it hanging as a lure.

The writing itself is well crafted...the knowledge of politics is very clear...and the medical knowledge is of course exact.
You have a very good writers voice and the pacing is very good indeed.

The relationship between twins is as always fascinating. This should do very well.
Backed with pleasure
Suzannah Burke

udasmaan wrote 709 days ago

Dear, you talk about the gulf war, your them is American politics, and your main character is John, i suppose, you have done so well here, it is really a good and fluent read. you may want to check mine, it is also about the Amercan politics in Afghanistan. I backe your book, for the nice read.

shah

LittleDevil wrote 709 days ago

This promises to be quite a read. I like all things medical and romance is my favourite genre. I'll pop back and read some more, but in the meantime, happy to shelve it.
Best wishes
Sue
A Boy Called George (if you could take a look before midnight, that would be fantastic.)

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