Sweet Cheeks (甜美的臉頰)

Thanks for your story, Cliff. Hope you'll read mine, He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not & my unedited version, Tell Me True Love Stories of He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not.
Please back my TWO books.Thanks, Susie :)

Of course I had to stop at this book! My late husband used to call me "sweet cheeks" when I first met him in college - after reading the first three chapters I must say that you have something very special here - well written and candid and it is evident you put much time and passion into this! BACKED with pleasure

Liz
The Cheech Room

One thing I thought of was 2000 cellphones were uncommon...I'm not sure that's true. I believe they were already pretty widespread though cards were of more use when calling for long time or long distance. You have a very fresh and clean delivery. Nobody is going to read this and go "wow what remarkable phrasing", but neither are they going to say, "what? i don't get it" I thought it read a lot like a screenplay, with voiceover followed by scene with dialogue. So I'm guessing this is either what you are going for or the bare bones of the story which you will flesh out at a later date? It's got some nice touches, i liked the story why you got the earing etc... In short this has got some great potential but you're going to have to put some serious work into polishing it. Still it's definitely worth the time. Shelved.
David
Bailey of the Saints

Actually it was somewhat rare then and expensive. I remember there was this thing called "roaming charge" where if u leave ur cell block, you get mega charged! lol

thanks so much for your comments. actually i think you are right, it does sound like a screenplay, haha but that wasn't my intent. i actually never written anything other than theology and biblical papers, so this is my first attempt at writing for entertainment purpose since... highschool. right now i'm just trying to jot down as much of the story as possible, hence the simplicity of the descriptions and ideas. then later examine more of other's styles and try to understand more about the difference in novel writing and academical writing.

One thing I thought of was 2000 cellphones were uncommon...I'm not sure that's true. I believe they were already pretty widespread though cards were of more use when calling for long time or long distance. You have a very fresh and clean delivery. Nobody is going to read this and go "wow what remarkable phrasing", but neither are they going to say, "what? i don't get it" I thought it read a lot like a screenplay, with voiceover followed by scene with dialogue. So I'm guessing this is either what you are going for or the bare bones of the story which you will flesh out at a later date? It's got some nice touches, i liked the story why you got the earing etc... In short this has got some great potential but you're going to have to put some serious work into polishing it. Still it's definitely worth the time. Shelved.
David
Bailey of the Saints

Person placed it in the wrong book. :(
transferred here.

klouholmes wrote 1 day ago [send message] [reply]
Hi Cliff, I enjoyed reading this for its cultural references and its telling about sensitive moments that most people have - and some "hang out" without getting to the point, the barrier Cliff expresses. Your narrative shows that Cliff coming across coolly to other people, and he finds out he's too cute at church. Before, it was noticeable that Angie chose to sit near him. I can see that you'll want to go over some of the narrative again for consistency. The dialogue is good! I also liked the interior italic sections for their revealing the issues men have these days. Shelved - Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

To fall in love with your best friend... Makes me think of my own story. This is a fun and enjoyable read. I'm a sucker for these types of stories - since their so similar to my own. You do well telling it. Beautiful! Backed!

Kristin
Demon in the Knight