FOREVER ANDREW

Living forever. It's an enjoyable, and incredible, read, backed. Eveleen, Turning s new leaf

Robert, there's a good mix of narrative and dialogue in the first two chapters I looked at. I aso like your first-person narrative voice. Good job overall.

Happy to back your work.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

Original idea, nicely written. The typeface is a little difficult to see, but maybe that's just me. Happily shelved.

Good luck,
Amy
Love Match

This is a story that asks a good question: What would it be like to live forever? Andrew is a good character in that he demonstrates a long life may not be the gift it seems to be at first. And can be very confusing. It's a good read. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

Good potential...nice pace. Might want to check a couple of places for accurate usage such as "...skin popped..." Wishing you the best on Authonomy. Shelved.

Catherine (The Golden Thread) Wouldn't mind hearing your opinion on my opening chapters when you get a few moments...

I like the pacing of this story. However I do not like these pitches. May wanna edit them and give us a real reason to read your work. Capturing the casual reader's eye is exceeding important. I do like the originality so I will SHELVE!

I can use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key
Authonomy's #1 rated commentator

Hello Robert, I back your book.
There are a few sentences which need attention, I will not point them out to you, if you read through the chapters yourself, slowly word for word, you will see what I mean. This is not a criticism, just a point to help you make the book a lot more easy to read and much more readable. You have a great talent, don't waste it, this is a great story.
I wish you good luck. Backed.
Norman.

The way you write of the 'high points of existance' in Andrew's life are full of perfectly-expressed feeling. It gives the reader a good idea of how you will unfold the story of a man who comes to value love over long life. Easily one of the best books I've read on this site. backed. Lynn

Hi this is very well written, with good characters and a fast pace. Most enjoyable. I'm still reading. Best wishes, Barry (Little Krisna and the Bihar Boys)

Robert
This is a good premise, written well. Longevity/immortality always appeals to readers. When you get a chance take a second look at your pitch, try to avoid repitition and split it into two or three chunks. On the shelf, good luck with it
Charlie

Well done opening, Robert. Will comment more later this evening...backed. Cynthia Drew, Tabernacle

Great story with a great premise. The pitch is a little repetitive though. I enjoyed reading and look forward to finding more time to set aside. Good job with this one. I noticed a few editing issues, like:

“I pulled raised myself up…”
Pick a verb.

“was a different”
Take ‘a’ out.

But that is all. Backed.

Weston Kincade
Invisible Dawn

My dad is 94 and still runs marathons although I doubt he will make it to 325 - he does have what science refers to as "the super gene" according to his doctor! Anyway - this is such a great premise and so timely as recently TIME magazine had an entire series on why some live longer than others and it has been in Newsweek as well - all the latest research which seems to be the focus of science and research over the past year! Perfect timing for this book!

This is a book I would buy for it's great pitch and the first four chapters so far and the characters are wonderful!

BACKED with pleasure and I will return later for more- can't wait to see how this ends!

Liz
The Cheech Room

Robert;

You start out with a sea scene on a full masted sailing ship...Automatic back from me :-)

I kept reading of course, And I don't regret the back at all.

It's the small comments that hook me in...

"scratched his head at the sight of so many ships-these setting sail toward the land from which we had just come, America"

This is the finest way to define a setting. One sentence which gives detail, but at the same time hints that things won't be as fine as they had imagined in their new world. Some background information, but only enough to make us wonder why would they take such a chance, and at such a great personal cost? What was it about America that made them want to move?

I find phrases like this peppered throughout the book. That's what I call Craft.

Enough commenting...back to reading your book.

Great job Robert!

This manuscript is complete but I've elected to download just five chapters at this time. Balance available anytime.