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rank  Editors Pick
word count 17887
date submitted 12.09.2008
date updated 14.04.2011
genres: Science Fiction, Comedy
classification: moderate
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EVIL UNLTD: THE ROOT OF ALL EVIL

Simon A Forward

The Farce Of The Dark Side: Villains Are The New Heroes In This Epic Sci Fi Adventure

 

Evil UnLtd: on a mission of indefinite duration, to seek out new evil schemes and boldly go to depths and extremes where no super-villain has gone before.

Sinister supreme genius and super-villain, Dexter Snide, has floated Evil on the stock market and has gathered together a band of fellow villains, whose key challenge now is to ensure that Evil shows a consistent profit.

But Evil has its (some would say unfair) share of enemies: Heroes in all sorts of nauseating shapes and sizes, up to and including muscle-headed action man, Rolph Stengun; and, because Evil is a highly competitive field, rivals, such as the mysterious figure who has his Visigoyle minions shadowing their every move.

What begins as a heist to steal the greatest prize in the galaxy, draws Evil UnLtd into a devious plot to crash their enterprise before it's reached a fraction of its warped potential.

Full Novel now available on Kindle and in Paperback: see www.simonforward.co.uk for details!

 
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Prologue

1.1    Pilot: Error

Prologue

“You - ” A couple of hundred profanities strained to burst out of him. Eventually one of the trusted veterans forced its way through the bottleneck: “Bastard!”

As brickbats went it lacked his characteristic pith, but at least it ricocheted around the confines of the chamber with some satisfactory volume. Besides he was fresh out of pith, confronted as he was with the sight of his would-be nemesis coming in to bugger things up. Especially now.

There was never a good time, but to think he had only just taken a pause to savour the deliciousness of the moment. Here, in the left nostril of Grand Pontifex Maximus Gorfideon the Third lay the culmination of his latest schemes.

Put like that, it sounded rather less than grand, but the bare fact was qualified by the truth that this was no ordinary nostril, and the Grand Pontifex of the Holy Thygon Empire was no ordinary ruler. And what was more, Dexter Snide was a man of no ordinary ambition.

But now - after months of planning, preparation, bribery, blackmail and lots of activities with uglier names just to get him here - this muscle-bound hero-type comes poking his head in to piss on his fireworks with the immortal words, “Hold it right there, Snide.”

Well, pith or no, Dexter Snide wasn’t bloody standing for it. And as luck would have it, the hairless simian was vulnerable, still hauling himself up through the cavern entrance. Sporting a smile you could grate cheese on, he stamped on the intruder’s hand. Hard.

Barely an answering grimace from the hardman. So there was nothing for it but to stamp harder. Again and again. Until Dexter was jumping up and down on the man’s paw like it was a meaty trampoline.

The man’s hide must have been every bit as thick as his skull.

Just as Dexter prepared to test that hypothesis with a kick, his foe grabbed hold of his ankle. One muscular yank flipped Dexter onto his back.

“Ow!” It felt like he’d cracked his spine on the cold cavern floor. (Ordinarily the chamber would have been plushly carpeted, but they had just started refurbishing the place in preparation for the ordination of the new Pontifex – Maximus Gorfideon the Fourth.) It left Dexter stunned for all of a second – long enough for the tanned gorilla, Stengun, to heave himself upright and launch himself at his prone opponent.

Which was how Dexter Snide ended up in a mortal struggle with his not particularly arch nemesis in the nose of a presidential statue high above the imperial grandeur of the Thygon capital.

Well, that was the short story. The longer version was something Dexter tried not to think about as he wondered whether to knee his enemy in the groin, or whether biting the blond brute’s ear might leave a nasty aftertaste.

In any case, he’d done all his thinking about the longer story in the always-crucial planning stage.

*    *    *

It was a monstrosity. It was perfect.

When the original colonists arrived on Thygos, they unearthed a fascinating discovery, and the founding father of this Gotho-Roman metropolis made of it exactly what Dexter Snide would have done: he carved a huge chunk of it into a mile-high statue of himself.

Geologists found to their amazement that some seventy percent of the planet’s crust was patholithic. In other words, the rock resonated in response to emotional wavelengths. A discovery only fully realised after one especially sensitive planetary survey specialist, jilted by her boyfriend, reduced the entire colony to tears and provoked the widespread burning of photo albums and CD collections. Thus, once all the tears had been dried and the bonfires extinguished, they built with masonry the perfect mechanism for controlling their populace; a mechanism that had the added advantage of being a city.

Originally, Dexter had ventured here - far from the clutches of the all-powerful, well-meaning and supremely inefficient System - with a view to obtaining a chunk of this patholithic stone for his own purposes. He had seen it from above, of course: a mighty lichen-stained figure, just one of many structures amid the sprawl of spires and grim stone. But only after he had smuggled his weapons and other personal effects through local customs and stepped outside the spaceport, did the full impact of the colossus, lording it far and wide over this architectural inferno, stir the serpent inside him and inspire him to higher aims.

And there and then he felt compelled to do the touristy bit and take a closer look.

Only to be reassured by the Thygorian Guard patrolling the high-security perimeter at the base of the idol that a closer look was out of the question. Apparently it was a common enough question and the guards had to do a lot of that kind of reassuring, often with the aid of guns and neurotruncheons, for the benefit of every fresh shipload of tourists.

The extreme levels to which the authorities went to safeguard their heritage merely confirmed to Dexter that a closer look was something very worth having.

Stalking the mosaic-spangled streets and the shadowed archways, mixing with the hoi polloi, he cajoled and extorted whatever information he could out of them; and occasionally indulged in some petty but curiously satisfying vandalism, damaging selected mosaic tiles with a few delightfully malicious taps of his cane. Most of the general public swore to the fact that the information he sought was freely available in the municipal libraries, but he abhorred bureaucracy - like he abhorred so many things - with a passion; in addition to which a library membership might have left too strong a lead for law enforcement agencies in the wake of his new masterplan. After that, it was a matter of insinuating himself into the higher echelons of Thygon society – although of course they were all hoi polloi to Dexter – to bruise a few official shoulders, and dedicate himself to a halfway enjoyable programme of seduction, extortion, blackmail, bribery and all the customary methods in his repertoire to get him everything he needed to know and, ultimately, where he wanted to be. In this case, up the nostril of some long-dead politician.

The really clever twist about the statue had been executed by subsequent generations, proud descendants of the august founder of the colony. Apparently they weren’t so proud of their glorious ancestor as to be overly happy with a big statue of him watching over their own efforts to govern. But, rather than run to the prohibitive expense of replacing an entire mile-high statue, they coated its noble features with a mask of electropliable plastic and hollowed out a chamber in its head, wherein a special inaugural ceremony could be held with each succession.

As each old Pontifex ascended to heaven and an Empire mourned, so a new Pontifex would ascend the steps, cleverly concealed in the carved folds of the statue’s robes, from the high collar across to the lips and up the philtrum, ultimately entering the hallowed chamber via the left nostril. Inside, he would take to his throne and allow the machinery of state to scan and map his likeness onto the exterior. And so into the hearts and minds of every native.

Idol worship was so much more literal here.

And within a few short months, Dexter would find himself in that very chamber, surveying the veined marble interior, the fine mesh of lumowire embedded into the stone, the brass-like ornamental plaques that made up the scanner surrounding the sculpted obsidian throne.

Propping his sword-cane beside the entrance, where a chill draught was blowing in through the gaping nostril and nipping at his trouser legs like one of those loud and intensely irritating small dogs, Dexter edged towards his goal. There was a shallow ramp before the throne, acting, he supposed, as a speed bump for each incoming Pontifex in their race to take up the reins of power; and it was with quiet satisfaction he took his first step up this small but significant rise.

A few subtle adjustments here and there, a spot of dexterous sabotage, and he would be ready to hardwire his own masterful physiognomy into the apparatus and make his permanent mark on an unsuspecting Thygon populace. Indelibly imprinting his image into the psyche of an entire world. Yes, he could taste the power in here. Such a delicious moment.

But also, sadly, a moment when his laughter and his next footsteps were interrupted by the words, “Hold it right there, Snide.” Each of them delivered like ill-fitting planks in a flat-pack assembly kit.

Turn around, and there he was: Rolph Stengun. The Muscles From Nova Stockholm. One of the most depressing sights to have ever crossed Dexter Snide’s path: the man was all physique and ego, topped off with a special forces crew cut, each golden hair standing fiercely to attention, and the whole sorry package parcelled up in neatly-pressed combat pants and designer-label camo vest. (Did the man go into battle with a travel-iron and styling gel?) Michelangelo’s Goliath meets Imperial Marine recruitment poster. Ugh.

One mile up, and it was incredible the sort of crap that came floating in on the breeze.

And the bastard even had the temerity to show no sign of feeling the cold in that vest. Which was, on reflection, probably a good thing: if he had, his goosebumps might have been about the size of Dexter’s biceps.

*    *    *

Dexter rarely sullied his knuckles with anything so crude as fisticuffs. He preferred the cut-and-thrust finesse of fencing or the ergonomics of shooting someone – or delegating the actual shooting to an underling. Martial arts were, to his mind, like cave-painting with a finer brush.

And here was the caveman.

Alas that his sword-cane remained propped against the wall near the entrance. Alas, also, that the only gun he had brought with him had been disassembled to bypass the weapons detection array surrounding the base of the statue. Of course the sophisticated but compact weapon was designed with speed of assembly in mind, but when a macho action hero throws himself at you there is scant time even for a few simple snaps and clicks. No, the malodorous lunkasaurus wasn’t even going to give him time to deal carefully considered blows. So Dexter found himself seizing any opportune opening for whatever vicious punch, kick or lower-down trick sprang to mind.

Whereas his foe was probably skilled in boxing, wrestling, rugger scrums and three kinds of martial art. Yes, Stengun definitely struck Dexter as the sporting type.

Just for which, Dexter issued him with the most unsportsmanlike poke in the eye at the earliest opportunity.

As the man’s eye smarted, Dexter rolled, trying to shove the sack of muscle off of him. Stengun switched from landing blows to a grab for the neck, a grit-teeth grimace as he did his best to squeeze the life out of Snide.

“You’re – finished – Snide!”

“Not – nearly.” Dexter was aggravated that his retort should emerge as such an impotent croak. Clearly Stengun’s best was more than adequate in the life-squeezing department.

Dexter clamped a hand over Stengun’s ugly mug, as though clawing his face off. Ideally he’d want to ram his spare fist down the guy’s throat, and with that aim in mind he strived to tug the lower lip down to meet his Adam’s Apple. But given that the man’s lips were as thick as bicycle tyres, well, chances of success looked slim. Instead, in a fit of pique and inspiration, Dexter chopped at the aforementioned lump in Stengun’s throat and made him choke on that.

At last, Stengun fell back – enough for Snide to scramble clear.

Dexter had very much had it up to here – where here referred to a space somewhere between his head’s current altitude and the planet’s poxy little sand-speck of a moon – so without even a pause to straighten his coat and smooth his lapels, he lunged for his sword-cane.

Smile primed and ready, he drew the blade and spun round with a flourish, already phrasing some suitable epitaph for the bastard. But Stengun wasn’t where he should have been.

The gormless goliath was lunging at Dexter’s knees in a depressingly rugby-like tackle. Before Dexter could execute either Stengun or an evasive manoeuvre, the ‘hero’ had locked his arms around Dexter’s legs, pulling hard and butting his head deep into Dexter’s midriff like a blond battering ram.

For a moment, Dexter worried that the man’s vicious bristles of hair might have pierced skin. But he needn’t have concerned himself and all too soon the fact that he was toppling and falling through the yawning opening that was Gorfideon the Third’s nostril took precedence.

Despite himself, Dexter yelped. He wanted to spit at his foe, but doubted he could make it count against the tug of gravity.

Falling, stomach leaping upwards, Dexter lashed out with both arms. Then every part of him sagged with relief as his hands struck slippery stone – and held.

Triumphant, he was not.

He was dangling by a few tenacious fingers from the nose of a mile-high statue like a – well, he didn’t want to think what it looked like. His coat tails flapped noisily and he focused on trying to stop his legs from flailing in the wind. And looked up warily to see what Stengun was doing.

Hands on hips – rather effeminately, Snide thought with a mental scoff – muscles and ego bulging, the man was scowling down at him with an oh-so-superior dominant-male bearing.

“Bastard,” Snide repeated. It was the best anyone could do under the circumstances.

“My turn,” said Stengun flatly. But then, he said and did most things flatly. Like the way he brought his size 16 combat boot down on Dexter’s fingers.

Dexter yelped and swore. He had definitely heard crunching. And now he could feel his hands giving way. All that empty air below him, waiting to gulp him down.

“That’s the last time you get up anyone’s nose,” Stengun assured him.

Who would have thought irony could have sounded so wooden? As farewell quips went though, it wasn’t bad – for Stengun. Not that Dexter was about to admit that.

Dexter lost his grip and slipped into gravity’s longing embrace.

Like Moriarty at Reichenbach Falls. Except he’d taken that smug, self-righteous deerstalking junkie with him. Well, at least halfway. Not to mention he’d had Sherlock Bloody Holmes as his nemesis. But who does Dexter Snide get? Rolph Bastard Stengun. Wonderful.

Finally, there was the modest consolation that he had some time to assemble his compact little blaster and shoot the smirk off Stengun’s rapidly receding face. This he promptly did – but missed, damn it.

Although a fraction of a second later, he fancied he could see part of the stonework crumbling loose, and the mighty Stengun tumbling, suitably horrified, from the Pontifex’s nose. Well, that was something at least.

All the same, he couldn’t help feeling this was a very bad day for Evil.

Each bump and scrape against the Pontifex’s chest served as a brutal reminder that his latest schemes had taken a severe setback. A sharp downward turn, one might say.

Dexter could easily imagine the tipping of some universal scales: Good versus Evil. Even more vividly, he could picture the bottom dropping out of an Evil market.

That was when the idea came to him.

Although, in retrospect, he could never quite recall which had struck him first.

The idea…

…or the ground.

 

 

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HarperCollins Wrote

Evil UnLtd is well-written, sharp, witty, and absolutely succeeds in transporting the reader to a curious and lush unknown world. The book avoids much of the self-importance that ruins a lot of science-fiction, and I found your ‘Dr. Evil’ antagonist Dexter Snide and his bumbling antics to be refreshingly comic.
The plot is strong and coupled with your very accessible and extremely clean prose the reader is quickly pulled along by your story. That said, there are definitely things you could improve. It sometimes moves a little too fast – in a few scenes I felt that I was tossed into a situation without quite enough information to properly discern my surroundings. Take the dinner scene in Act One, as one example – the Hatchling is a great character, but why does the waiter ask who has ordered it? Is he bringing the egg over to the table, or is it already there? In truth, we don’t know, and it’s a little disconcerting – take care with this kind of small issue if you want your writing to be perfect.
I definitely enjoyed the way that you use the (supposed) antagonist’s point of view as the main voice of the narrative and made the story of Rolph Stegnun – the more classic kind of protagonist – of secondary importance. I found that device unexpected and interesting, and it’s exactly this kind of hook that will make your book stand out to a reader, professional or otherwise.
It’s clear that you’ve written a well paced, witty, well-constructed book. But, for me at least, there’s still one central concern – you need to write with a market in mind. On the one hand, science fiction is actually a very small and targeted niche, and general readers, even those who love comedy, are unlikely to pick up a book in this genre. And on the other hand, I worry that your humor and your farcical tone might also alienate the core science fiction readership who would indeed give it a go. Yes, there are some very popular writers who’ve had success with this kind of book – Douglas Adams, of course, and to a lesser extent Terry Pratchett (though his fantasy world is more accessible to general readers than a sci-fi setting) – but these are notable exceptions, definitely not rules. As a publisher I worry that the market for this would be too small to make it a viable proposal for me.

Hope this input is helpful - thank you for sharing this with us and I wish you the best of luck!

24/11/08



Rob O wrote 1239 days ago

Ha! your monicker caught my eye on the self publishing thread and I decided to have a look as anyone calling themsleves 4dprefect must be writing to entertain . It is a great idea, you relly feel for Dexter who has obviously been on the end of one thwarting too many. I've only read one chapter but will read the rest when I have some time at the weekend.

Rob.

Richard P-S wrote 1240 days ago

We need a successor to the late Douglas Adams and the, alas, fading Terry Pratchett (although I hope he may be long preserved for us and his Alzheimer's progress slowly or cease). This looks like it could be a good bet, after the 2 chapters I've read. You're onto my watchlist. R

SusieGulick wrote 461 days ago

Dear Simon, I love that when your told your plot in your pitch, that I immediately thought of Star Wars & the dark side. :) When I got to the creatures, I pictured the bar scene where all the creatures were with Hans Solo & Luke. :) "warp speed" & "the enterprise" even made my eyes sparkle, as I smiled. :) I got so excited because I loved that movie & you have brought to life again. :) "The exact oppost of progress," was a nice ending & made me stop & think. :) Maybe your can write more books, like the one when Data got feelings/emotions :) - I loved that one, too. :) I've now read, commented on, backed & ****** 'd your book :) - could you please back & ****** my memoirs book? :) Thank you from the bottom of my heart, because I'm 14 from the editor's desk & so envy you that you have already arrived. :) CONGRATS ON ALL OF YOUR HARD WORK TO GET THERE!!! :)

Su Dan wrote 461 days ago

a somewhat unusual book, written in a distinct style. original title and premise which, from my brief read appears to work well. on my watchlst...
read SEASONS...

JanB wrote 839 days ago

A very well written and well thought out book.
Easy to read and paints a picture of some strange world.
Characterizations are brilliant, the idea of the book is well supported by the writing style.
Found myself thinking of a cross between hitch hikers guide and Austin Powers.

I hope the book has success, it deserves it.
Backed

CJMcKee wrote 1132 days ago

How fun and well written! I could see this as a continuing series very easily. Your writing is quick-witted, descriptive and visual. I can see the characters and hear the inflections. Looking forward to reading more!!

tadhgfan wrote 1167 days ago

you took chapter down! and I wanted to read MORE!! :-P

CarolinaAl wrote 1179 days ago

Simon,

The opening page of a book is critical to it's success. It's a preview of the kind of writing to come. It's the first thing an acquiring editor sees. It's what a person in a book store reads before trying a new author. As a result it deserves close attention.

Some long, multiphrased sentences bogged me down on your first page. I had to reread the first six paragraphs to understand what was being conveyed.

Your seventh paragraph was excellent. The writing was tight, evocative and vivid.

Al

Julie Elizabeth Powell wrote 1184 days ago

Thank you very much for your comments on 'Gone'. It was indeed a difficult book to write, inspired as it was by a true event. It is a story like no other.

As a matter of interest - the switch of POV was deliberate to highlight the fact that something was going to happen to the main character. Though actually, with my second novel ('The Star Realm', which is the first of a trilogy) POV changes all the time to consider all five of the main characters, as they are equally important - and I believe it works.

Good writing, now I must get back to my current work.

Thanks again

Julie

TobyC wrote 1185 days ago

Thanks so much for looking at the Dreams Bound in Black excerpt. What you read is an experiment. The story is written from a different perspective, but I wanted to see if this approach worked better. So, I am extremely grateful for your feedback. Thanks for the heads up about the dialogue. I'll go back and give it another look with your comments in mind. I see you have a second book dealing with airplanes with a very different feel than Kip. I've book marked it. Sounds interesting.
TobyC

4dprefect wrote 1186 days ago

Stef, don't worry about making sense - this is authonomy ;-) Hope you enjoy Kip when you get some time and be sure and let me know when you do upload something.

4dprefect wrote 1186 days ago

Hi Stef - huge thanks, glad you enjoyed it. Would also *really* love to hear your thoughts on Kip Doodle, my children's book - when you have a chance. Only a shame you haven't a book uploaded so I could return the favour.

Julie Elizabeth Powell wrote 1186 days ago

HI there. Thanks for your offer - 'Gone', please.

Good writing.

Julie

Julie Elizabeth Powell wrote 1187 days ago

Great line, "...he could picture the bottom dropping out of an Evil market." Straight onto my bookshelf, of course.

Fab idea!

Julie

Thomas Dowler wrote 1190 days ago

Simon

Just realised I never thanked you for your comments on TNOOT (and for reading any of it in the first place). Most remiss of me.

I wasn't going to bother reading Evil Unltd what with it being already on the editor's desk and that. I will, however, take a sneaky peek at Kip Doodle.

PP1 wrote 1190 days ago

Great characterisation. This could run and run. Big fun to read :-)

Showgirl wrote 1191 days ago

Hello SAF, Glad you enjoyed my book, Achilles 42, encouragement from writers like you has prompted to continue the book, which I hadn't worked on is two months. I hit 30,000 words today and I figure I'm about 40% there. Thanks for your comments. I'll definitely listen to your suggestions.

Cheers

trendy wrote 1191 days ago

Thanks for having a look at my story. I'm currently tweaking chapters 1 & 2 but am finding myself very self conscious on Authonomy which is hampering creativity. You are romping up the charts again I see.
Best
Mark

Debbie wrote 1192 days ago

Sorry, Simon. Only just saw the message you left on my book. I confess I haven't commented on Evil as yet - not that you needed my vote! I skimmed the opening, and sf comedy isn't really my thing to be honest, so I wasn't sure I could give you a fair reading. Though from what I have looked at, I do like your writing style and I think you're subtly funnier than Terry Pratchett (he's a bit too in-your-face for my liking). Does that help?

yaasehshalom wrote 1193 days ago

congrats on making the editors desk :) xxx

K. Kylyra wrote 1193 days ago

Thanks for taking a look at To Hell in a Handbasket, and glad you enjoyed the stories despite the footnotes. Your book has been on my shelf for quite a while; I see you have another MS out here I'll need to read!

ClareHill wrote 1194 days ago

Just finished chapter 3, this is staying on my shelf! As well as being an extremely funny story it also pulses with vibrant language and descriptions. I particularly like, 'the patience of a cliff waiting for erosion,' and 'as fake as an aphid's orgasm.'
Now for nitpicks - the sentence beginning 'Alabaster complexion...' has an extra space between the first two words, and the sentence is rather long, as is the sentence beginning, 'The desk-monkey...'
I'm not sure about the sentence, 'The population of Lucre Centris had layered their innards...' it just doesn't seem to work in the way that your other descriptions do.
I'll be back for more.

Miranda Dickinson wrote 1194 days ago

Wow, well done- you reached the heady heights of Editorial Pickdom!

Congratulations, mate, you deserve your hallowed position. As a prize, you have won a year's supply of fresh decaf, courtesy of Kowalski's Florists, Upper West Side, New York. Feel free to pop in any time!

One more thing: will the book be out in time for Christmas, as I'm writing my letter to Santa right now..? :o)

Kipper wrote 1194 days ago

Congratulations on making it to the desk.
SarahK

Siobhán wrote 1194 days ago

Hi Simon - just wanted to say congraulations. And thanks for all the entertainment on the forums.
Siobhán

JAK wrote 1194 days ago

Congratulations- totally merited. Go wallow in the glory for a while. jak

Nix wrote 1194 days ago

Simon, thanks for all your support over the last month, and I'm DELIGHTED you made it. Congratulations! I'm backing off Authonomy, just clearing my watch list and stuff, and am heartily glad I don't have to do any more plugging. I expect you are, too!
Hope to see you in print.
Nicky xx

4dprefect wrote 1194 days ago

Cheers guys, you are all stars. Thanks for the support and making me laugh :-) Fair to say I started my relaxing last night, but it was a hard-work month so my sigh of relief will now continue for, well, much of November I expect :-) And I know I woked up early for a Saturday - again! - but it's great to wake up to your comments this morning.

David Floyd wrote 1194 days ago

Hey Simon –

Congrats.

Anything other than a happy ending to the tale of blossoming man-love would have been heartbreaking. Imagine if one of you made the ED and the other hadn’t? Would the love have survived such a seismic rift? Thankfully we’ll never have to find out! Right, now I’ve said that, I promise never to use the phrase “blossoming man-love” in relation to you and you-know-who again.* You’ll notice I haven’t used a name – thus any protests doth fall on deaf ears!

I’m very pleased for you, for – quite aside from the quality of your work – I think you played the ‘game’ to perfection, with humour and integrity and sheer slog, and you deserve it for that. And ta for the laughs – you are a plugging god.

david
*Promise excludes the almost identical congrats to you-know-who

Fenton wrote 1195 days ago

Hi Simon,

And ... breathe. Congratulations. Certainly a well-deserved reward for what must seem an eternity of work. And work it was. I think it's Harper Perennial that has the little 'PS' sections at the back, like extras on a DVD (about the author, interviews etc) - that would be a good spot for some of the material from your plugs.

Hope to see you around the forum - just not *quite* so much. Not that you're not wanted, but you know what I mean.

Cheers, Paul.

(If you thought you were stressed yesterday, just think how you'll be near the end of November. See if you can get a Valium prescription, or start taking St John's Wort now.)

Richie C wrote 1195 days ago

Gold star. Not seen one of them since my school days. Congrats on the top spot and the coveted editors desk. Time for a rest. Well done, congratulations and good luck with the HC verdict. Well deserved (imo).

Lexi wrote 1195 days ago

Did you think I’d forgotten? Mwah ha ha ha – I forget nothing!

‘Sporting a smile you could grate cheese on’ – I like it. And Professor Doomladen, ‘A small, crumpled package of a man, wired and dangerous, like a letter bomb with a nervous tic.’ Very nice. I did start to wonder whether there were any females in your world. It’s not quite my sort of book – Terry Pratchett doesn’t work for me either – but there’s a lot to like here.

So I’ve given it that long-anticipated flip. Like you need it.

[I think you could lose a few adjectives, fond though you clearly are of them, never using one where you can shove in two. And I did worry about the similarity with the Arthur Dent statue episode – I feel an HC editor is certain to make reference to it.]

Stefani140 wrote 1195 days ago

Shelved. Absolutely hilarious Simon. I couldn't stop reading it. Dexter is a great villain and I love the idea of Evil being a marketable enterprise. Congrats on the chart position, its well deserved.

gaturner wrote 1195 days ago
Tom777 wrote 1195 days ago

I just came back to read a bit of this a second time - still a joy. I hope it is published - I'll certainly add it to my real bookshelves.

dsquared wrote 1196 days ago
readingdiva wrote 1196 days ago

Reads as if you have some real talent. Looking forward to more!

silver sister9 wrote 1196 days ago

Wow, I love this,really takes me back to that whip-cracking sense of humour usually that goes along with reading a Douglas Adams book. Good Luck Simon. A fantastic fun read just waiting to be made into a movie, I know some people.....

K_Menozzi wrote 1196 days ago

I've said it before, and I'm saying it again (after reading more):

Dangit! I'd buy it!

How's that sound, eh? If either one of us gets our work from here published, the cappuccino's on me, okay? ;)
Ciao!
Kimberly

gregmce wrote 1196 days ago

This is a heck of a lot of fun -- so glad that a site like this was able to introduce me to the book. Good luck!

ttswismis wrote 1196 days ago

Your sister sent me in this direction, she is shamelessly plugging for you! I am in the process of reading, but so far I am very much enjoying your writting.

Martin Stemp wrote 1196 days ago

Dear Simon, just skimmed through a few chapters so far but I was totally engaged for the hour I was allowed to read. Good luck with this, it's certainly on my watch list and I'll finish it just as soon as the Gods allow. Martin

Gillian wrote 1196 days ago

I'm glad you reminded me to bookshelve it as I hadn't - doh!
G

Gillian wrote 1196 days ago

Hi Simon!
I've been meaning to read this for quite some time now but I've been shying away from it as sci-fi is not my thing at all! However, I'm so glad I forced myself to read an excerpt (congrats by the way for being at the top of the charts!) as I was so wrong!!
The first thing that caught my attention was your flawless writing. There are so many chapters hovering around on Authonomy that need a good edit and proofing, but this is flawless. You have a great way with words, almost as if they have filtered onto the page quite effortlessly.
This is a fun read and I found it very easy to follow as the events unfolded. It's humorous which is always a good ingredient to add to sci-fi (I'm thinking Blackadder here!) and I didn't have a problem visualising the characters.
It's clear to see why this is at the top of the charts - it feels original with fresh ideas. Even though I'm not a sci-fi reader (heck, I've never even watched the whole of Star Wars!) I'd definitely buy this if I saw it in a bookshop.
I'll come back and read from where I left off!
Good luck with it Simon!
Gillian

lennyzer0 wrote 1196 days ago

Seems to be a deserved number one. I really look forward to buying this in the shops...

Nix wrote 1196 days ago

Hello Simon,
You are a gentleman, and I thank you! I'm sure you are home and dry on the Ed's Desk and you have my full support.
Nicky

Stefani140 wrote 1196 days ago

Hi Simon,

Adding this to my watchlist, I will try and get to it by the weekend. The pitch made me laugh, I look forward to reading it. Take care!

Stef

anthonysaunders wrote 1197 days ago

I agree with what you say. I had already decided to make some changes to the first part of the chapter, based on comments here and elsewhere. However, I can't upload the amended chapter just yet because it takes the word count below 10k and I have yet to finish working on the next chapters. Normally, I would not go back and revise until I had got to the end, otherwise I take ten times longer to finish.

anthonysaunders wrote 1197 days ago

Thanks for the comments. I take the points you make about the odd words and using them with care. Perhaps, I need to avoid setting myself up for the reader to scan for the errors; the error of the day phrase is perhaps a hostage to fortune. I will give it some thought. I appreciate the critique. And the shelving.

heatherjacobs wrote 1197 days ago

Hi Simon, Thanks for the message you left. Glad my timing was good. Sorry to hear about that shit news! But you are still number one on authonomy so you can skip the agent and go straight to the mighty source. Cheers, Heather

shuzzbatt wrote 1197 days ago

Thoroughly enjoyed Evil - all of the characters are very much alive in my head already, and yes, I'm rooting for Dexter & the gang.... And many a laugh out loud was produced - can't wait to be able to read the book in full. Excellent work that man!!

Noirscribe357 wrote 1197 days ago

Thanks, Simon.

Nice to get a vote of confidence from "Da Champ." Yeah, Elroy has been a sorce of reading joy, and an influence. While you are a truely shameless plugger, yours are always inovative and highly entertaining. Class will out, even while plugging.

Best to you, and "Evil."

Thanks again, NS