A Circumstantial Case

BACKED for an easy whodunit read with an interesting theme.

Stephan Zimmermann (panaxus)
NO RAPTURE

This is a well crafted story, and well written too, backed, hope you'll read mine.

A Circumstantial Case by D. J. McKechnie
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I really liked this, it goes along with a with an aim, and allows the suspense to build. This is very good

Backed 100%
Clair
Left Behind

I read your first four chapters and really enjoyed the story and the writing style. Compelling is the word that describes it. Backed with pleasure and best wishes,
M (Weekend Chimney Sweep)

DJ, I read your first two chapters. This has the makings of a smooth, entertaining story. Nothing to nitpick in these two chapters.

Happy to back your work.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

You told a great story. I read all of it and the ending is superb. Mike pulled it off without regret. How chilling. Thank you for writing A Circumstantial Case. I hope you keep writing.

What a fantastic premise and your writing does not disappoint. You have a genuine pace to your prose and the characters are both real and drive the story along nicely. This is precisely the kind of summer read I like to have lying by a pool with a beer. I wish you all the best with this.
Carl
The Time Hunters

DJ, nice opening, intriguing, measured, and very cool; I particularly enjoyed the quietness. Not my normal kind of thing but got pulled in anyway, and I'll probably read some more in due course.
Good luck with it,
Rob

Hi Dj, I am hear to return the read and support you gave me during my plight for the desk. I like the intrigue and set up in this, it really had me hooked and I wanted to read on. What is going on here, why was he deceiving his wife all weekend, why did he come back when she wasn't there, what was the email to his lawyer about, the need for an alibi? This is a really good set up and the writing is strong. Just a few little things such as in the paragraph when he gets out of the shower you say that twenty minutes later he is downstairs but then you go back to the bedroom and his thoughts after the shower, I found the jump back a little confusing, also there is some repetition of "he". Really good beginning and a strong premise. On my shelf. Helena (A Load of Rubbish)

I would like to thank everybody who has read, commented, and backed 'A Circumstantial Case'. However it seems that to raise the awareness of this book one has to start at the beginning of the member list and promise to back everyones submission to have the slightest chance of climbing the ranks to reach the elusive editors desk. Call me niave but When I was told of this site I thought I would have found a community of fellow writers who would support each other unconditionally. Any books I have backed and placed on my bookshelf are ones that I, as a reader, would happily have spent money on to buy. If you wish to comment on this book please do so but I would prefer if you didn't offer to back it as part of a 'deal'. Thank you.

This is my kind of story. BACKed easily! Thank you for uploading entire book so I can return for more of this gem!

Liz
The Cheech Room

Being Authonomy's #1 common potato, I would suggest that you spend a good deal of time on your SPAM. I cannot overemphasize just how important it is for you to master this basic Authonomy technique. SPAM the would-be author and the casual reader. SPAM your auntie's cat.
Also, say “SHELVED!” or “BACKED!” as often as is humanly possible. That's how you climb in ranking and gather more exposure for your novel.

I can use your shelving of my book when you get the chance. Bottoms up!

Jeremiah Corns
Hell's Angel
Authonomy's #1 rated anti-religion novel.

Today's pieces of #1 advice are: BEWARE OF PITCH INVASIONS and PUSH YOUR SOOTY TO THE MAX!”

Being Authonomy's #1 commentator. Spend some time on your pitches I cannot overemphasize how you need to master this basic sales technique to grab the casual reader. That's how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments to better your novel. SHELVED!

I can use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key
Authonomy's #1 rated commentator

A great pitch and an intreuging read. You lost me a couple of times in the detail but the story itself is strong and this makes for a compelling read.

Sue Mackender
Knowing Liam Riley

Hands down one of my favorite reads so far on this site! You have a book steeped in reality that doesn't rely upon the supernatural to drive the plot ! You draw the reader right into your story and don't let go - thank you for uploading this entire book because i will be back for more of this chilling story and what happened to Mark!!

Easily BACKED with chills!

Liz
The Cheech Room

I love this, and I could quite easily
pass the morning reading it. Classice stuff
and professionally done
shelved with best wishes.........mikegilli The Free

D.J. this is so much my sort of thriller that I must beg you to get it published at once so I can buy it, then waste no time in writing hunderds more. Brilliant. Backed. Lynn

I love the first chapter as we follow Mark around the house. I feel like I am right behind him. It's kind of creepy and thrilling at the same time.
You've set up great suspense for turning pages.
I would maybe trim down some sentences. Just looking up from my comments, I see the last sentence in the second to last paragraph of ch 1. It starts with "Several minutes of typing...". That's easily two sentences. Stop at "forgotten", start the next: Once he had shut down the laptop, he confidently strolled to the side door and exited the house."
Good luck.
Backed,
Ellen (Thoughts of a Teenage Girl)

Greetings, DJ!

Too much mystery betwixt Mark and Lisa in chapter one. The intrigue was killing me (no pun intended); I had to move on to chapter two. Good job baiting the reader with suspense! And so the web is spun: Mark's car is found with bullet holes and blood- but no Mark! And Lisa seems rather nonchalant about the whole affair, until traces of blood are found in her car and shoes. The investigation is underway. Good job building the mystery, DJ! A Circumstantial Case is brilliantly executed! Backed.

Teric Darken

(K - I - L - L FM 100: "Music to Die For!")

I do like the central mystery of this, a bloody car, a missing man. His wife having an affair - is he setting them up? Or did they do him in?
I think you could cut down the first chapter though with Mark, there is almost too much detail from him exiting his car to his every action hereafter. It could be made into a much punchier beginning I think with us being introduced to Mark, his boiling rage at his wife and then he gets into his car.
Next chapter into the discovery of the car. Then you can pick up all the details from the interview with his wife as to why he isn't at the conference as she expected. It would just make it a little punchier.
Also sometimes you have too many descriptions in the dialogue, e.g in chapter five Detective Nesbitt respondes, tells, explains and pauses all in one paragraph. I think you can let the dialogue speak for itself sometimes.
These are just comments from a reader so please feel free to ignore.
You've got an intriguing story here and I think with a bit of polishing and tightening up it'll be very good. Backed.

This is just my cup of tea/coffee, love a good murder mystery novel and that's exactly what we have here.

This has great pace and hooks that grab the reader.

Happily shelved be foolish not too.

Melxx

It is unfortunate that mystery thrillers are not my preferred genre, because I can easily see people curled up in a cozy spot during inclement weather letting you take their emotions on an adrenaline ride. Your writing is smooth and professionally polished. You keep a steady flow of need to know information and tantalize with what is yet to come. Good work
Dawn De Remer (Golden Moon)

This is a good mystery. Peter has his job cut out for him to solve this. Your writing style adds a lot to the story. You give a reader enough information to know there are bad things going on here. Not so much it blocks out the suspense. It's a good read. Burgio (Grain of Salt).