The Skye is Falling for Me

Dear Summer, I love romance stories - puppy love, & whatever else a teenager experiences - ah, youth! :) Your pitch is excellent, so set the hook for me to read your book. :) When you use short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, it makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm backing your book. :)
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The Skye is Falling for Me

I find there is always something that stands out in most books, and the thing that impressed me in this is the dialogue, I think it is so engaging you could imagine this wasn’t fiction.

Summer, , I love your cover art, it is a brilliant choice, and I enjoyed your interesting writing style. You have a very strong opening; your descriptive writing is exciting and it was very easy to be caught up and drawn into the story I thought your strength is in your MC, which is well developed, displaying insecurities, hopes, and dreams.
Great storytelling
Best wishes
Scott
The Esrevinu Chronicles/Secrets of the Elephant Rocks

Hi Sommer,
Quite simply this is perfect for the YA market and I have little doubt it will do well - Shelved.
Good luck,
James (The Lycetta Legacy).

I love some of these lines: "Don't be a hoebag," and "Isn't he hot when he's pissed?" Sounds like young people talking. Certainly, the plot is a new take on the complaint that your daughter's boyfriend is from another world.
Backed. Marianne (Saint Paddy and the Sundial)

The story flows well, backed, hope you'll read mine.

The lady with two Authonomy personaes. Stopped to check out your work. Your writing captures your YA genre correctly. What is holding you back are the pitches. The short pitch is a bit generic; doesn't stick out like it needs to. The long pitch should end with "You want to know?" Break it up into smaller paragraphs so the reader can glean it in a glance. These are your sales tools. Sell the casual reader as to why they need to read you. Welcome aboard. SHELVED!

I can use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key
Authonomy's #1 rated commentator

Backed with pleasure! Joss E. Morris (A Bore No More)

The dialogue is excellent, but more than that you've captured the tone of YA perfectly. This is a very well-written book and I suspect very commercial. Best for it. Backed. Lynn

Things can only get better for you. This is a well written book which has all the elements of a good read. It's descriptive, fast moving and interesting. I found your dialogue to be spot on almost as if I was there, so well done.
BACKED
Mark
ANOTHER DAY IN PARADISE

"Ella, pull yourself together. Don't be a hoe bag!" Seems like Ella Collins has it "all together," until she meets the "perfect" guy! Classic line from this coming-of-age novel! Nice job, Summer, on crafting this romantic and dramatic novel! Your manuscript, itself, is professionally formated, and you make good use of the dialogue- keeping the conversations plausible with your use of terminology.

If I may bring out a constructive point- In Chapter One, one sentence reads: "And the lather jacket is a nice touch." Would 'lather" be referencing "leather?" I'm not meaning to be nit-picky, Summer. You have a terrific storyline here- professionally constructed and well-honed. I just happened to notice a single, possible typo.

Great job, intriguing read... kudos and backed!

Teric Darken

(K - I - L - L FM 100 / U-TURN KiLLuR)

Nothing like battling (literally) teenagers. I often thing high school would've been more enjoyable had I donned armor and weapons. I like the easy voice and smooth read you've got here. Just once, I'd like the supermodel fall for the geek (from the beginning, not after a long soul-search)... but i'll have to read on to find out how yours turns out :)
Shelved.

Dan,
Demons and Other Inconveniences

Hi Summer,
this isn't my usual kind of read but I think you have a good style and voice and apart from a few typos, it reads well.
As I read, I wondered if, as in other species, the female desires the male she thinks (sub-consciously) is the one most likely to spread her genes (or jeans)? The aggressive, brash baboon with the crazy hairstyle, giant fangs and a big red bottom, is usually the one the female babe-boos really fancy. Funny that.

Backed with pleasure, Barry

Little Krisna and the Bihar Boys

Why do girls fall in love with bad boys? This book doesn't exactly answer that question but it does provide an interesting read for adolescents who will quickly identify with Ella and the choice she has to make between boyfriends. A small thing but first impressions count and your pitch has a couple spelling errors in it. "I guess when your in love . . ." should be "I guess when you're in love . . .", "a best friend that's in love with her" should be "a best friend who's in love with her", "has been in love with her sense as long as . . ." should be "has been in love with her since as long as . . ." and "their in love" should be "they're in love." Shaping those up would help assure readers that you're a conscientious author. BAcked. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

ATTENTION READERS:
Ok, so, Notice my name. Summer Morris #2. Yea, it's the sad truth. I can't log back into my account so I had to start a new one. I appreciate all of the publicity this has gotten. I means a lot. But, I need to ask one more thing of you fabulous readers. Come to my new profile and check out the updated version, please? It pains me to know this work of mine has gotten so many reviews, and I can't even thank you guys. So, if your going to read this, go to my new profile, please?
THANKS SO MUCH,
Summer Morris

At the risk of sounding trite, this story is like a West Coast setting of a classic play, similar to the Leonardo diCaprio Romeo and Juliet. Interested in seeing how this pans out. Jim Darcy The Firelord's Crown

Young Adult audiences will love this book! As has been commented on already - there are a few minor, easily fixed misspellings but I find your writing smooth and I enjoy your style in the story proper. Well done! BACKED with pleasure.

Liz
The Cheech Room

"I guess when YOU'RE in love..."

Break up the pitch into smaller paragraphs so it reads easier. And watch your spelling.

"...but it has, and THEY'RE in love."
"...time to explain to Ella."

I'd rewrite some of this. "Brenan finally decides it is time to reveal to Ella his true nature.

Brenan isn't normal. He has a secret, a deep, dark secret."

Leave out the rest from "You want to know?..." Editors, agents and publishers don't like secrets. If they're going to publish the book, they have to know what is in it. I'd also add more about Brenan's secret in the pitch. Hide nothing or the editor/agent/publisher won't buy it at all. This is great for back cover or dust jacket teasers, but not for a pitch. Be professional. Reveal all.

J M Cornwell

If you can write this well now, how good are you going to get!?