Zombie Night in Canada

I am I the only one worried that this might happen someday for all I know is right now everything is alright then a week later we got limping infected zombies trying to kill us

sorry jamie it's just when i read these stories i begin to freak out but never the less it's a great story and i look forward to reading the rest

Thanks, glad you liked it. I am almost finished the book and recently added a few chapters.

I am I the only one worried that this might happen someday for all I know is right now everything is alright then a week later we got limping infected zombies trying to kill us

sorry jamie it's just when i read these stories i begin to freak out but never the less it's a great story and i look forward to reading the rest

enjoyed reading and added to my watchlist to read at a later date. wondered if you would peek at my book and give me some feedback r/t us being in similiar genres. thanks.
kendra ziems/autumn lullaby

Very very good. I loved theline "Fancy a bite?" Never a good idea in a zombie story. The beginnings of the plague is well handled like a shadow out of the corner of your eye. Great imagery laden with a potent dread of smething not right. Excellent.

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Jamie, your first two chapters read well. Good mix of narrative and dialogue. Nothing to nitpick in these two sections.

Happy to back your work.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

Thank you!

Hi
I thought another zombie book... hmmm. But then I began to read. I like your style and the first couple of chapters are solid.
There's a lot of promise here.
Well done.
Happy to back your book.
Stay Alive
Neil

Thanks!

This is a thrilling, exciting book, and your pitch tells us just what to expect. Your first scene introduces Johnny and Zander, the ice hockey stars, and their less likable friends, Rick and Mark, throwing their bottle at the man staggering along. The man is described as infected, and his growling response is an indication that the action is about to take off. Then Teller and Simpson are called into the clinic, where one of the nurses, Winnie, after being bitten, is going berserk and biting others This is gripping and full of well portrayed action. A particularly horrific part of the story is that Betty, the nurse who first tells the policemen about what 's been happening, is, at the end of the chapter, shown biting and killing others herself, and having to be shot in the head. You have a book here with a compelling plot and lots of great action, and undoubtedly it will be popular with the many fans of this particular genre. Backed.
Gerry McCullough,
Belfast Girls.

Thanks for the kind comments!

Hi
I thought another zombie book... hmmm. But then I began to read. I like your style and the first couple of chapters are solid.
There's a lot of promise here.
Well done.
Happy to back your book.
Stay Alive
Neil

Hi Jamie, I liked how the horror crept up and how the normal people, unsuspecting, went about their ordinary routine. The writing is firm and it depicts the hockey players and policeman as individuals. The strong men dealing with Winnie and then seeing the nurse acting like her – a creepy contrast. The hospitals being the first see the zombies also made sense – sense and horror. The combination kept me reading. Shelved – Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

Very very good. I loved theline "Fancy a bite?" Never a good idea in a zombie story. The beginnings of the plague is well handled like a shadow out of the corner of your eye. Great imagery laden with a potent dread of smething not right. Excellent.

Jamie, your first two chapters read well. Good mix of narrative and dialogue. Nothing to nitpick in these two sections.

Happy to back your work.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

Loads of potential here. Will be interesting how zombies in the far north will act and how the soft spoken and polite Canucks handle them.

Always a sucker for a zombie tale.

Your writing style is easy to read, though some tightening needed. The police seemed very dispassionate about shooting the two women, I would have thought they would be more conflicted. Because the characters came across as emotionless they fear wasn't there from the zombies.

Honestly, I started speed reading, the zombie genre is established, and I know what is going on here. I skipped to chapter 6, that was more like it! Action, speed, aggression.

I am backing this anyway, as zombie genres should be backed, and you are easy to read, which is a good thing. However, if I was your editor I would get you to jump straight into the action, have the zombie plague already kicking in, we know how these things start. Take advantage of your writing, and get to the 'meat' as soon as possible :)

But it's your book, so good luck however you go for it!

This is nicely written, understated and an intriguing read. I can see you have really thoght about the premise and it looks as if this will make people want to read more of your great story.

A real page turner of genuine quality.

Happily shelved

Melxx

Dear Jamie, I love intigue! What will happen next? Your story is a good read because you create interest by having short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, which makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm backing/commenting on your book to help it advance. Could you please return the favor by taking a moment to back/comment on my TWO books, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" & the unedited version? "Tell Me True Love Stories." Thanks, Susie :)

This is a thrilling, exciting book, and your pitch tells us just what to expect. Your first scene introduces Johnny and Zander, the ice hockey stars, and their less likable friends, Rick and Mark, throwing their bottle at the man staggering along. The man is described as infected, and his growling response is an indication that the action is about to take off. Then Teller and Simpson are called into the clinic, where one of the nurses, Winnie, after being bitten, is going berserk and biting others This is gripping and full of well portrayed action. A particularly horrific part of the story is that Betty, the nurse who first tells the policemen about what 's been happening, is, at the end of the chapter, shown biting and killing others herself, and having to be shot in the head. You have a book here with a compelling plot and lots of great action, and undoubtedly it will be popular with the many fans of this particular genre. Backed.
Gerry McCullough,
Belfast Girls.

Backed with pleasure! Good Luck!!
A look at Sicilian Shadows would be greatly appreciated.
Frank.
If you back my work, you may also want to approach BJD (a big supporter of Sicilian Shadows) for a further read and possible backing of your book.

The woman advancing on Teller and his colleagues, and her ensuing death is chilling, and all the more so for being narrated in dead-pan prose - saves it from becoming melodramatic. You write so well and eloquently, I wondered why you left the mistakes in the first para. of the pitch, where you mention the plague. It doesn't do this great book justice. Backed. Lynn

Hi Jamie,

I already backed the book and have returned to comment.

Loved the pitch; it’s what made me want to read the book. I did notice some grammatical and punctuation errors.

“More like Johnny saved your ass again(,)” Rick chimed in. I replaced the period with a comma because you follow the dialogue with a dialogue tag. This happens throughout the entire chapter.

It’s an interesting story, it just needs polishing.

Shinzy :)

Thanks, editing is something I'm still working on. I know this is nowhere near finished product, but I'd rather let people see what I have right know than wait.

Hi Jamie -- dark and foreboding, your descriptions set the scene perfectly.
Backed with best wishes, Barry
Little Krisna and the Bihar Boys

Thanks!

Brilliant short pitch. That long pitch? HHmmmmm - still debating it. Being Authonomy's #1 commentator, trust me, always spend some time on your pitches I cannot overemphasize how you need to master this basic sales technique to grab the casual reader. That's how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments to better your novel. SHELVED!

I can use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key
Authonomy's #1 rated commentator

Thanks for the tips on pitches. I'll take a gander your book soon!

This is a good story. Setting it in Canada was inspired. I didn't hear many people saying, "eh?" the way Canadians are typically portrayed as speaking, but okay. Your characters are good. It's a good read. I'm adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

LOL! Some Canadians do use 'EH' a lot, but we don't hear it ourselves. It's kind of like how many American think we say a-boot instead of about or the way some Americans say roof - which to us sounds like a dog bark (ruf not rooof). Glad you like it so far. I've got somewhere in the vicinity of 50,000 words already written, it's just a matter of tying it all together.

This is awesome - I am imagining a movie! BACKED

Liz
The Cheech Room

A movie would be great! Thanks for the vote of confidence!

LOVE THE PITCH AND CANT WAIT TO READ MORE! BACKED!!!

CHANCE

Thanks for the support!

Hi Jamie,

I already backed the book and have returned to comment.

Loved the pitch; it’s what made me want to read the book. I did notice some grammatical and punctuation errors.

“More like Johnny saved your ass again(,)” Rick chimed in. I replaced the period with a comma because you follow the dialogue with a dialogue tag. This happens throughout the entire chapter.

It’s an interesting story, it just needs polishing.

Shinzy :)

Hi Jamie -- dark and foreboding, your descriptions set the scene perfectly.
Backed with best wishes, Barry
Little Krisna and the Bihar Boys

Brilliant short pitch. That long pitch? HHmmmmm - still debating it. Being Authonomy's #1 commentator, trust me, always spend some time on your pitches I cannot overemphasize how you need to master this basic sales technique to grab the casual reader. That's how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments to better your novel. SHELVED!

I can use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key
Authonomy's #1 rated commentator

This is a good story. Setting it in Canada was inspired. I didn't hear many people saying, "eh?" the way Canadians are typically portrayed as speaking, but okay. Your characters are good. It's a good read. I'm adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

This is awesome - I am imagining a movie! BACKED

Liz
The Cheech Room

LOVE THE PITCH AND CANT WAIT TO READ MORE! BACKED!!!

CHANCE