Faking My Way 2 the Top

Thanks so much for your backing and I am happy that you enjoyed what you had the opportunity to read!

Rejected by her parents, Rain has to make a decision about which lover she wants Linda or Mona. Can she face rejection again, Rain takes more drastic steps to bear the pain.
A modern parable about life, death, love, fulfilment and the richness of ones heart. The language is the dialogue, tangible with regard identity and character, so for that reason 'Faking My Way 2 The Top' has my backing
Well Done.
Daniel Manning
No Compatibility.

Rejected by her parents, Rain has to make a decision about which lover she wants Linda or Mona. Can she face rejection again, Rain takes more drastic steps to bear the pain.
A modern parable about life, death, love, fulfilment and the richness of ones heart. The language is the dialogue, tangible with regard identity and character, so for that reason 'Faking My Way 2 The Top' has my backing
Well Done.
Daniel Manning
No Compatibility.

Rejected by her parents, Rain has to make a decision about which lover she wants Linda or Mona. Can she face rejection again, Rain takes more drastic steps to bear the pain.
A modern parable about life, death, love, fulfilment and the richness of ones heart. Thae language is the dialogue, tangible with regard identity and character, so for that reason 'Faking My Way 2 The Top' has my backing
Well Done.
Daniel Manning
No Compatibility.

Hi Chance

I like the way you start right in with Rain sorting through Lorraine's things - I like people to cut to the chase! The story initially sounded a bit banal, but the thing that woke it right up was when Rain and Storey start talking - the dialogue is just great! So alive and full of character. There's various technical things - punctuation, tenses, contractions etc that could be improved - but your MC is terrific. Backed.

Nicole
Chosen

Thank you very much!

Rain, my heart's in my throat reading how you endured the unendurable.

Chance, all best wishes for your work in progress.

Faking My Way 2 the Top (the title) sounds like an ascent to #1 on authonomy--only kidding, folks, only kidding.

Backed.

GK Stritch
CBGB Was My High School

Rain, my heart's in my throat reading how you endured the unendurable.

Chance, all best wishes for your work in progress.

Faking My Way 2 the Top (the title) sounds like an ascent to #1 on authonomy--only kidding, folks, only kidding.

Backed.

GK Stritch
CBGB Was My High School

Rain is a very believable MC, though I didn''t like the overload of swearing, especially in the dialogue. You have written this mostly in present tense, which I always find awkward and unnatural, and maybe it's not easy for you to do, as sometimes the tense wanders to past tense and then back again. I think you should consider simply writing in past tense, (unless it would be inconsistent with your first book.)
I liked the wisdom in one of the character's words, 'Everyone has layers that are often ignored or not seen by others' and I didn't like the assumption that an unwanted pregnancy is automatically by design rather than accident. (That is what a man tends to think, that he's been 'trapped,' when any woman should know that contraception is not foolproof.) You say this is a work in progress. I look forward to reading it once complete and polished. I wish you luck with it. Marj.

Backed

Ferdi
A Bed of Thorns

Very well done. Best wishes for success. I'll do my part and back it for you. Dave

I really like your use of the first person narrative voice. It allows you, and you do it well by the way, to fully explore Rain's feelings, thoughts and emmotions and how she deals with her inner angst. You have crafted a most unique and compelling MC in Rain. Your crisp, realistic dialogue helps to keep the pace of your story flowing nicely and your descriptive writing makes your work a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

Brilliant saga in the making here
Backed
Abel Kane
The Alchemists' Cookbook
Chances
Something Elven

Your dialogue carries this brilliantly!
Great characters and a great story developing. Thought the opening was very good and set the story up very well. Hope this does well, it’s got a great edge to it!

Wow!

Totally stunning! I'm not sure if this can be improved - so good!

Backed with utmost pleasure.

Johanna Kern
Master and the Green-Eyed Hope

Backed.
Eveleen

That whole scene in the wake (no pun intended) of death and the clearout is quite an emotive piece- strunbg through with meaning and is masterfully done.

Those letters are very obviously not a harbinger of good news; these things ultimately cause confusion, distress and curiosity that is the best pathway to upset. Well timed and placed.

I could feel the bubbling emotions and raw lust coming through very effectively.

BACKED with extra pleasure. Good luck with it and cheers.

I really like reading the work. It moves well with a great easy to follow storyline developing smoothly. The premise is presented well in the long pitch. Backed. Chuck

may be interesting if you like erotica

Good pitch and story line.
Good luck.
Dawn,
My Friends and Me

Hi Chance, I'm afraid this didn't ring any bells for me. Your writing is good, I liked the first part of chapter 1 but then lost empathy with the mc. I might come back and give it another try but at the moment it is too 'in your face' for me. Maybe I am just too old to appreciate it. Good luck anyway.
Kristen Stone -
Kianda Mala - The Monkey Man
The Penhaligan File

The joint deaths are perhaps what you need to put in that all important first sentence/ Backed you.
Lara
Good for Him

Sorry... I was writing in text! lol.. it means thank you for the critique.

I'm sorry...what do you mean by 'Ty for the critique'?

I'm sorry...what do you mean by 'Ty for the critique'?

I wonder if you could rearrange chapter 1 so that the narrative ansd dialogue are integrated more effectively ie. the second part reads a bit like a transcript...you know how to get your characters across but remember to use contrations consistently in speech
Good luck
Stewart

Hi Chance, your story sounds great from your pitch. I have backed it with pleasure, and will return with further comments. Please bare with me, I have a mountain of reading, but I will get to it.
Helen

You certainly have something going for you, this is an excellent book.
Couldn't see any problems anywhere, its just a very good read.
I back it.SHELVED.

Neville (The Secrets Of The Forest)

Very strong beginning. Excellent writing too. Shelved, with pleasure.

Carol

Wow, Rain's got herself in some tangled web...I hope she keeps notes on Tameka, Mona, Linda, etc. The description of her feelings at her mom's death is quite true and precise for this kind of situation. This is an interesting story, with great potential, an original lesbian story with important themes that need to be explored, I am happy to back it!

Wonderfully creative and poignant story with universal themes of love, death, and identity. Very nicely written too! BACKED -Elizabeth Wolfe (Memories of Glory)

Dear Chance, I just discovered your 2nd book, wil back it, too. :) "blazing a trail across the world" sounds fun. :) Love, Susie :) Thanks again for backing my 2 memoir books.

To Be, or Not To Be... Is that a question?

There is definitely no question that you have a fantastic writing flair that is almost poetic in its fluency.

This makes for a fantastic fable, and your literary intelligence displays that in your prose.

Your written concept will dictate that you will have a massive fan-base following.

What else can I say..? Oh yes, one more thing - BACKED!

stevew
The Ultimate/The Authors Cut

You have an interesting style and a firm grasp on storytelling through the writte word. I like th confident touch. No problem backing this one.

Sincerely,

Will

[return backing ☼☼☼☼☼☼]

This deserves to do better. you're working at it... go girl! it's moving up and still on my shelf!

Now that’s impressive. I wouldn’t have thought you could do that with “packing up gran’s house after she died”. You get all the back story neatly in and then the discovery of the letters. WHAM! Dad isn’t her real dad and he doesn’t know. Unspecified objects to be given by a solicitor, who knows Rain’s solicitor but they’ve lost touch. Nice idea, plenty of scope. Then WHAM! “I’m feeling so horny” immediately makes me suspect, but not know that Rain’s lesbian. And also the dialogue and names make me suspect black, but not until near the end do you confirm and NEVER tell me directly. And the dialogue is excellent. I’m backing this.