Do You Believe In Angels?

Well crafted, engaging and original. Backed with absolute pleasure, very well written, heads and shoulders above most on this site.

Brian - The Brotherhood

Do You Believe in Angels

It doesn’t happen often, but it did with this, I read it all with out making notes. What a very engaging story. I think its because it had such an authentic feel to it and the characters felt very lifelike. A very impressive read!

Hi Jennifer - do you believe in angels'

this is and will be a very good read for the young adult readers.
cover will, indication a sexual premise will have it flying off the racks,
will make a good holiday; read for them.
having read through the chapters posted last night; i found in very interesting and
sort on intriguing in a way,
short snappy chapters in a modern style of writing, suitable to first person style.
found the dialogue fast and crisp with no wastage of words., certainley not a literary style.
however enjoyed what i read
good luck
tom bye '
from hugs to kisses'
glance at mine please, although different genre as in chalk and cheese
thanks

Always capitalize 'internet.' Other than that, this is a keenly written paranormal. Thought provoking plot. Very believable characters and vivid scenes. Sharp descriptions. Convincing dialogue. Spot on wit. Awesome world building. Confident writing. A first rate read. Backed.

I love the original beginning! Like the Facebook reference throughout and Cody just makes you want to slap her. Good humor and sarcasm.

Great story and happily backed
Denise

Would you mind having a peek at my story "Road to Redemption: From Cop's Daughter to Convicted Felon?"

Jennifer,

Interesting with a different style. I like it I fel the Edward/Cate dynamics really came together in Chapter 11.
Excellent characters Edward is so completely perfect....effective.
Backing!
Great Job!
Sammy Sutton
King Solomon's '13'

I love books like this. Backed.

I enjoyed the humour and the funky prologue but I found the following chapter a bit slow to get going. Ed's mental wisecracking about British pubs was entertaining but I would have liked to get an idea who Ed is and what this story is about a little earlier. I think you need a hook at the beginning of Ed's chapter to make the reader keep turning pages.

Enjoyed and backed

A.P. Constantin

The Crystal Butterfly Club

Brilliant pitch and a book to match. When characters are as good as this it hardly matters what the plot's about, though I'm not complaining. Love the separate POV's. Backed. Lynn

Dear Jennifer

Good realism and rhythm, nice and pacy.

Some friendly suggestions, if I may.
In Chapter 2, par. 2 consider the following changes for clarity:
Thankfully though, John does. It appears that he actually enjoys being knee deep in youths, all jostling for space.
Also, there's a "to" missing in the second last line: "...I need TO come up with a plan..."

Third paragraph:
Since you've used "run" in the previous sentence, consider changing "running into John" to "BUMPing into John" to avoid repetition.
I'll add more shortly.
G R

Dear Jennifer

Good realism and rhythm, nice and pacy.

Some friendly suggestions, if I may.
In Chapter 2, par. 2 consider the following changes for clarity:
Thankfully though, John does. It appears that he actually enjoys being knee deep in youths, all jostling for space.
Also, there's a "to" missing in the second last line: "...I need TO come up with a plan..."

Third paragraph:
Since you've used "run" in the previous sentence, consider changing "running into John" to "BUMPing into John" to avoid repetition.
I'll add more shortly.
G R

I can't believe the incredible talent on this web-site, and I not talking about writing talent. Have you seen the photo of Jennifer - she is stunning (and blonde). It would not surprise me if the legs on the cover of her book were hers.

I do struggle a little with this great book. Every time I try to say "Chthonic" I seem to end up spitting over my computer screen. I'm already onto my second box of screen wipes.

The thing that really jumps out of you about this book, other than the sexy legs on the cover, is the great dialogue. It seems natural and real-world speech, that you can really envisage the characters saying to one-another.

If I were to make one criticism of the book, which would only be a very minor one, then it would be the MSN on-line stuff, which can seem a little heavy going.

Otherwise, a great read and a front-cover that I’d love to have taped to my bathroom wall. Is the back cover a continuation of the front-cover?

Best wishes,
Trevor McDingle

The title caught my eye then a read showed what an engaging tale this is. Just one question... does it have a happy ending? :)
Jim Darcy
the Firelord's Crown

Original and engaging - I really like this. It is indeed 'quirky' and that is its strength. I read from paragraph to paragraph without having a clue as to what was coming next (which may sound trite, but so many narratives are predictable). Now that each chapter has a different POV it gets even more interesting. I will definitely come back and read more.
Backed with pleasure.
Anna (Black Damask)

Very engaging characters, great dialogue, and a witty, easily readable narrative - I'm hooked! Backed with pleasure, and I wish you every success.

Best wishes
Gail
NEW BEGINNINGS

An unusual novel, 'quirky' as you said in the pitch. It's written in a 'stream of consciousness' manner, with different POVs in different chapters. It's a long way from a typical narrative.
There is still a need for editing as I came across several errors. The only one that you might not pick up for yourself is 'ladish brawl.' I can only think that by 'ladish' you mean like a lad, in which case it should be 'laddish.'
I wish you luck with this unconventional style. Marj.

Two distinct and very well portrayed characters in Hecate and Edward, and the use of two first persons give us a clear insight into both of them. The pitch promises and the writing delivers.
One typo in ch 4: Yes, about to send (the) in the Trojan Horse. - but that's minor. This is very good!

Yes, yes, YES!...now that was enjoyable.
Backed with pleasure! Good Luck!!
A look at Sicilian Shadows would be greatly appreciated.
Frank.
If you back my work, you may also want to approach BJD (a big supporter of Sicilian Shadows) for a further possible backing of your book
Could you also have a read (if you haven't done so) of 'Moonbeam Highway' by Tim Chambers, a wonderful book that at present sits on the Ed's desk.

To be honest, I'm not sure what to make of this. The idea's clever, the writing's sharp, - dialogue, characterisation, description, it's all there. But I found it pretty confusing in some places.... on the basis of the general quality of the writing, I'll put that down to a very original structure, which I'm perhaps too conventional to relate to! And I did like the insightful analysis of Facebook - so I'll back it anyway.

Great beginning!! Beautiful description and imagery. Skillfully written and backed.

Backed with pleasure. I noticed that some of your paragraphs are very long. If you cut them down it will be more pleasing to the eye and enable faster reading and comprehension by the reader. All the best, Sana x

Hiya Sana, thanks so much for checking out my book.
You are right, it is a brilliant story but because some paragraphs are longer it's not for the weak of mind!! happily it will always tell the truth though x

Backed with pleasure. I noticed that some of your paragraphs are very long. If you cut them down it will be more pleasing to the eye and enable faster reading and comprehension by the reader. All the best, Sana x

Yes i do believe and your book is timely, fascinating and sure to please.
best

'It can't be good for you, all this screwing with your head...'
Ed's question reflects a vulnerability in him; the suggestion that he knows his internet flirtation may be ultimately self defeating or even emotionally damaging and yet he needs the fantasy. Don't we all? Yet in the cyber fantasy, once the delusion is fully recognised, perhaps there is that feeling of guilt; a shame over commiting to the tawdry.
This is reflected in Ed's self admonishment that 'Ive got to get out there and meet some real people'. Yet they, too, can be an illusion in romance; for a 'real person' romance might be still more hurtful when the bubble of delusion is burst and the individual needs of each intrude starkly, ending that fantasy too.
On giving his telephone number to Cate, perhaps we inch closer to a 'real life friendship', perhaps not, but the hook is there.
I find an overwhelming sadness, at Chapter 9, that Ed's real life relationships have proved so fleeting and that both he and Cate have to rely upon the cyber for growing together as something more than companions.
Yet the synopsis offers other hopes and twists and, in any case, a cyber relationship has in common with an embodied one that common factor - fantasy, and how lovely is that!

Shelved.
Ray
(A Child from the Wishing Well)

Strong, engaging and it makes the reader think. What more could anyone ask for. This stands out on the site as something unique and extraordinary. I don't have anything helpful to say, except you've got my support.

Abi xxx

Backed with confidence! Tom Ryerson (Carnal Wreckage)

Well, my first week on Authonomy and it aint over yet, I’ve read a lot of fantastic work and my watchlist is building but The Cheech Room, I want this to take on holiday, don’t know why but it hooked me. Do You Believe In Angels- What I’ve read so far just keeps me laughing and to keep me sane, it has to be Carnal Wreckage. Superb.

As for Dr Pain Jnr, I had to drag him off BADD earlier, it was the only way I could get back on it.

Hope no one minds me mentioning other books on their comments, but those are my highlights for the week-so far.

Dr P .

Funny, very very funny. Just wish I could get a copy in print and read at my leisure. I think Mrs Dr Pain would love this.

All the best, Dr P

Change that book cover and publish!,l put it on our shelves and cll me all the bad names in the world if you do not sell a million copies!

Change that book cover and publish!,l put it on our shelves and cll me all the bad names in the world if you do not sell a million copies!

Jennifer, you either have it or you don't. You, my friend, can definitely write. The first two chapters are a smooth read. I like your first-person, narrative voice.

Happy to back this.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

Very good content and the characters are interesting, but not really quite enough structure to it yet ... perhaps that begins to come in the part we haven't seen yet. Remarkably naturalistic for a book called "Do you Believe in Angels?" I look forward to reading more of this - when available.
Roger

Hi Jennifer, A goddess going to the internet is hilarious and really stirs interest. John’s portrayal at the pub gives a good picture of his personality in real life and then his internet conversation with Cody is an appetizer. The real and internet conversations are entertaining and it works well as story. Happy to shelve - Katherine

A novel idea for a book, it's a great storyline, with a very unique openning chapter which I think sets the tone for your book perfectly. Excellent use of imagery with solid character development and I especially liked your exploration of inner angst. Backed with pleasure.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

DO YOU BELEIVE IN ANGELS: Very smart, well written and unique piece of writing. It has a very individual, non-production line feel about it. Keep it as it is and never loose your freshness. Backed
Raven Scott (love is a colour too)

It's good and I can see beyond the punctuation faults, best of luck with i. Backed with pleasure. E.Loraine Royal Blood Chronicles book one.

Jennifer,

In this age of technology, readers can appreciate where you're going with this story. However, I think I have to tell you that lovers of technology are pretty quick and to the point. Some of your paragraphs are very long, and you write with not much dialogue. You also have quite a few grammatical errors. Punctuation is important. So is spelling. If you don't want this book to be presented as "text-speak", be careful of writing words the way they sound, and not the way they're spelled. It takes away from your story, which is refreshing and different--especially since it's told from a male POV.

Good luck with this book,
Lu-Lu :)

I liked the premise, though I think there are areas for improvement in the diction. The opening seems a little too much like rambling.

You might also want to check out Writer’s Diet, since it seemed like you had a bit of an excess of waste words. (Mostly “that”... I pulled probably had a thousand in my manuscript alone.)

Gave this to my eldest to look over and she said it is way better than the book she is reading now! Jim Darcy The Firelord's Crown

Jennifer-
You already have a big fan. I think your writiing is very clever, fun and intelligent and there is something about it I am magnetized to. I feel very comfortable in the company of your characters and have had your book lingering on my bookshelf all week.
Then I was most disappointmented to be cut off at chapter 8! I hope you will have more coming soon. Please keep writing.

Christa

Ch 1 "Look me up' as in the internet? i like ch. 1 I am engaged, however you are telling in long paragraphs with no action. I can do it, I am not sure others will.
I'll do this chapter by chapter.
a zoomer

Ch 1 "Look me up' as in the internet? i like ch. 1 I am engaged, however you are telling in long paragraphs with no action. I can do it, I am not sure others will.
I'll do this chapter by chapter.

You are an angel. I have put you on my WL so when I have time this weekend I will comment and read. Oh I mean read and comment!
Thx for your support for Going Out In style.
A Zoomer

Jen, This is fun and refreshing....well written great pace good pitch and th mc's are intriguing to say the least.It was very easy to read the whole thing wish there was more.... :) Unique approach to the internet and very contemporary. This will do well and deserves too.

Thank you for sharing your talent and style Backed with a smile Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart

Love the contrast between the title and your cover art. I think your pitch is great and definitely pulls the reader in. The story is well written and I think will find its place within its genre. Great job! Backed!

Tawn Anderson (Providence)

Such a refreshingly original work. Love the premise, voices of the MC's, the pace, the intrigue, the details - all well-handled. It immediately commands the reader's attention, and piques interest and curiosity. Well done. Backed with pleasure .

Very engrossing and unique!! Backed.

Very engrossing and unique!! Backed.

Well, look, I am going to back you, because we all deserve a chance. There IS a story in here, but there are so many errors in the text it is distracting from the body of work.

It really needs tidying up before presenting, but do so because it will be worth it.

Philip.

I'm sure a lot of people will relate to the Facebook addiction and friendship via internet etc. I enjoyed your internet "conversations". Cody was great fun!!!!!! All the exclamation marks etc lol And poor Ed trying to make some sort of meaningful contact with her. If I had to choose one quote from your story, it would be"...grown women undestand better than most the bitterness of time" very apt and it helps reader truly understand Sara. Your style is light and relaxed, almost like thoughts flowings from the MCs
There are just a few nit pics, very minor ones::.
You've missed punctuation out of dialogue a few times. Eg with Ed and Jonny in pub: "Now I see" he sniggered ...need comma after see and full stop after sniggered. and fullstop missing when Ed says"She lives with her boyfriend"
In Chapter 4: In the Trojan Horse sentence, y ou've got an extra "the".. In same chaptert , the sentence "I'm painting a bloody miserable picture..." there is an "I" that I think should be "I'm". Then at end of Chapter 5, you've got weights instead of weighs.
All very small and didn't prevent me from enjoying this. I will BACK tonight.
Cherry G. The Girl From Ithaca

Jennifer--
In an age of internet and virtual relationships (authonomy a perfect example) and the heighten interest in a supernatural world--this is bound to be a winner. I know my YA readers (my kids) are right in to angels--I don't know about adult readers.

I think 60000 is rather short for an adult book but there is room for you to expand I am sure.

Your chapters from different view points fits well.

Did you mean the j in your name to be a small letter?
Well done.
Backed
Barbara
The Sea Pillow

Jaunty and intruiging, Do you Believe in Angels has that special magic which makes the reader feel immediately immersed in the story.. I love Cate (Hecate) as she introduces herself in chapter 1, promising fun & high jinx,.. then we progress to Edward and Sara; we get inside their heads to truly begin to understand who they are as people, what drives them, what they are really yearning for.. love the black humour and deft writing - Backed and best wishes!