Acacia - Three Beginnings

Ruby - Acacia Three Beginnnings - unusual, well written (some editing still required though) and most enjoyable - backed with enthusiasm by Balepy (Freckles the Fawn)

This is a really intriguing premise. I think children would have a lot of fun with this, and you have a great hook at the end of the first chapter. Happy to back. Just a couple of suggestions. Opening with the line, The new born baby... is a little impersonal, particularly for children. If you were to call her by her name as well, it wouldn’t detract from the twist. Also, check your punctuation within speech as there are a number of full stops which should be commas etc.

Wow, what an opening. This is original stuff. The first time I read it, I missed all the details and so had to reread again. Maybe you could add some more description to this. Backed with pleasure, Sana x

Imaginative, descriptive and great. Backed. E.Loraine Royal Blood Chronicles book one

I like this story it flows. In Chapter 1 second paragraph there are too many 'her's. I'd limit the ing's the next edit around. But the narrative is there pulling me along.
It in on my shelf.
A Zoomer
Going out in Style

The description throughout Chapter 1 gave the setting immediacy and drew me into your storyline. I liked the
'tickling tendrils of a briny breeze brushed against her skin' and then the sentence which begins, 'Her eyes opened speckled with browns, greens and blues...'
Clear and easily readable prose advances the story with a gentle rhythm, ideal for the subject, a gentle infant.
When the Gekko makes the infant start bawling and the Chief monk, Chen Tao, is startled by the appearance of the infant clinging to the wall, your storytelling comes into its own and I wanted to keep reading.

Shelved.
Ray
(A Child from the Wishing Well)

An intriguing idea, and I really like gekkos! You have some dialogue endings with a full stop when it should be a comma. eg. "Acacia," he called... Anyway, very readable. Backed.

A - TB - Backed

I am Buddhist. When your pitch mentioned that the baby Acacia was born into a loving human Buddhist family, it intrigued me. I want to put this book in my shelf right away before I start reading more.

Backed,
Bamboo Promise

Acacia – The Three Beginnings:

What a delightful story, and I love your writing (just need to check punctuation in dialogue). My granddaughter would love your opening, too. :)

I’m thinking Taigen is Irish, like Taegan?

Wonderful read.

All the best, and this will go on my shelf for a spin. :)

Cáit ~ Muckers ~

Ruby: I can go with the short pitch. The long pitch needs to be broken up so it reads faster. Perfecting your pitches is how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments to better your novel. The writing is good so I am SHELVING you.

Though I have been a very active member for over a year, I can still use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Every little bit helps. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

This is an imaginative story. You have a good character in Acacia; she's likable and sympathetic because she's been cast out by humans. As well as because of her unique power. Your writing style adds a lot to this; it's engaging and kept me turning pages. I’m adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

This is a very unusual story, but in fantasy anything goes. It has a great gentleness and kindness - it is quite charming and I think children will like it. Backed with pleasure.
BADD

Hello Ruby. This opens so well and your use of descriptive words is lovely. It's an unusual concept and I'm sure it would be loved by its genre. Chapte two is great and makes you like Acacia even more. Best of luck!
Oh, and whatever happens, don't give up writing. A book about the hazards of dog walking would go down a storm. My worst experience: My black and tan Yorshire rolled in runny fox pooh, and pooh it did. I just didn't realise til I got her home. She sat on my lap! I ran her into the bath and ... You guessed it, she shook! Say no more.
mariecapri (Cosmic Linx)

This is an unusual and very interesting book you've got going here. I love reading about Buddhism so I was sold right away. I like your writing style, it's easy to read and moves at a good pace. You bring up some interesting subjects in your writing and it's exactly the kind of thing I normally read. I don't know what else to say other than I found this to be just awesome!

Missy
Mark of Eternity

You have a very unusual pitch for an interesting, appealing story. Your first chapter, where Acacia, only a few hours old, sees the geeko, is interested in it, talks to it, and develops claws so that she can climb the wall after it to carry on the conversation, is both entertaining and fascinating; especially when she turns round to see her parents staring at her, and speaks to them. I loved the start of the next chapter, 'Hut number four creaked and groaned as it struggled to accommodate all seventeen members of the...colony...' You hit a note of laid back comedy with the reactions of the others; and you introduce Acacia's powers in a way which grounds them in the very real life in Hut 4 and the rest of the community. Chen Tao tells them that they will look after Acacia and keep her abilities a secret; and this is accepted. You give us some marvellous, lyrical descriptions of the relationships Acacia has with various insects and animals, and her ability to change in order to relate to them. Acacia's development and the things she finds out are beautifully handled, and her discovery that some humans are not good people is very moving. You write well, and your descriptions are vivid and gripping. Backed.
Gerry McCullough,
Belfast Girls.

Dear Ruby, I love your book cover - it is so darling - the cutest ever! :) Your blurb is good because it prepared me to read your book. Your story is good because you create interest by having short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, which makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm backing/commenting on your book to help it advance. Could you please return the favor by taking a moment to back/comment on my TWO books, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" & the unedited version? "Tell Me True Love Stories." Thanks, Susie :)

Acacia - Three Beginnings:

Ruby,

This is a fascinating premise; a child born of loving parents and having the gift to transform in order to deliver others from catastophe - and you deliver on this by installing the foundation of your plot through a good balance of narration and dialogue in Chapter 1.
The idea of a new born baby suddenly standing up on its 'chubby feet' then relying on 'all fours' to pursue the Gecko immediately arouses a sense of wonder and we are returned to a precarious reality as the mother wakes up and - at this stage - realises she has been dreaming.
But I sense the dream carries premonitiion and that reality and fantasy will move together in harmony through your book as you explore the intriguing storyline already set out in your synopsis.

Backed.
Ray,
(A Child from the Wishing Well)

This is really great writing, clear concise and full of energy, I know I said i was going to drop by later to read this but after reading your first paragraph I left the book I was reading and decided to read something that promised so much more. (I won't tell you what I was reading though).

You have wonderfull description and a fascinating premise, loved the bit with the baby suspended above the mother.

All round great read that I intend to read more of.

On my shelf for sure.

Melxx