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rank 3232
word count 19273
date submitted 22.04.2010
date updated 14.07.2010
genres: Science Fiction
classification: moderate
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The Alpha Generation

Joel D'Prospero

The Alpha Generation drifted from Earth to colonise the planet Agnar Grath. 300 Years into deep space Earth courier ship the Hyperion discover their fate.

 

Planet earth is beginning to strain, its ultimatum stands on the threshold of collapse while her successor, Mars is perpetually victimised in endless civil War. All these horrors perpetuate a need for technological leaps, to leave Sol in search of her early cosmic refugees to see what salvation may lie in their knowledge, to resurrect a dying world.


The Alpha Generation, the first Generation Nest to leave Earth for this deep space planet, accommodated the greatest thinkers of its time, with a multitude of gardens unspoiled by the finest botanists. Josephine Sutcliffe, second in command of the Hyperion, had nothing to leave behind. 300 years into deep space, frozen in time, meant that like the rest of her crew, she would be returning to a world quite probably on the edge of destruction.


Their priority, to establish the Aperture Bridge and open a gateway home so colonies could populate the new world, Agnar Grath. But something about the Alpha Generation is causing concern. Great danger lurks in orbit of this new world, something breeding in the gardens of Orchid Plutos. Something close to the human race, invoking fear and feeding on the remains.

 
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Jim Darcy wrote 541 days ago

Hello, I am writing to you as someone who has been kind enough to support the Firelord’s Crown in the recent past. Now I need your help once more. I have been on site for nearly 2 years and worked my way up through reading and commenting on books. I have always been uncomfortable with ‘spamming’ and tit-for-tat backings but I do feel able to ask if you could please support Firelord by shelving it for a while over the next month. Under the new system I cannot offer you anything but an immediate * star rating and the promise of whatever support you feel you need; a second reading or comment etc. if you do not feel able to put Firelord back on your shelf, please could you still *rate it for me?
Many, many thanks!
Regards,
Jim Darcy
The Firelord’s Crown

lynn clayton wrote 678 days ago

I'm afraid I've time to read only the first chapter but it's more than enough to realise your talent. This is too frightening for me but there will be a wide audience for it. I was with Luther every step of the way. Brilliant evocation of terror. Backed with best wishes, Lynn

Ysabetwordsmith wrote 678 days ago

Good title. Interesting premise. It certainly starts off with a bang. The flavor is closer to horror than SF though.

name falied moderation wrote 691 days ago

Dear Joel,
I must say you have an amazing mind CONGRATS on a well crafted book here....And congrats on an amazing book cover which is the first thing to attract your potential reader. Your pitch both short and long really prompted me to read your work and I am so glad I did as it did not disappoint. So well crafted with characters that just popped into my head and did not want to leave.

BACKED by me for sure.....My book is a different genre but crossing over gave me the opportunity to comment and back your talent. Please take the time to comment on mine so I may improve my skill, and if you feel so back it.

Best of luck
Denise
The Letter

SusieGulick wrote 691 days ago

Dear Joel, I love the 300 years from now concept - imagine. :) Your pitch is excellent, so set the hook for me to read your book. :) When you use short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, it makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm backing your book. :) Could you please take a moment to back my TWO memoir books? Thanks. :) Love, Susie :)

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"Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs."

Andrew Burans wrote 718 days ago

What you have posted so far is well written and well paced. Your use of imagery is excellent, your vivid imagination has created an intriguing storyline and this coupled with your descriptive writing style makes your finely crafted story a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

missyfleming_22 wrote 719 days ago

Your pitch really tempted me to read this, I'm not a big sci-fi reader but you're a great writer and you have a way with description. It didn't read so much like sci-fi, at least I enjoyed what I read a lot. Interesting concept and I actually could feel myself there along on the ship!

Missy

Gauis wrote 720 days ago

Interesting pitch
backed
surely - with earth ´suffering´?

lionel25 wrote 751 days ago

Joel, I read your prologue and first chapter. This is a smooth read. A few of your paragraphs in the first chapter seem a tad long. This doesn't bother me, but a few readers might take issue with that.

Good job overall. Backed with pleasure.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

Rusty Bernard wrote 755 days ago

Shelved because of the pitch and will read more ASAP.
Welcome.
MM

Micheal O'Durcain wrote 758 days ago

Brilliant beginning.
spore infestation must be the ultimate invader
you get the massiveness of the ship and the powers of the computers across very effectively
Backed and well done
Micheal O'Durcain
Murder on the Menu

Bill Carrigan wrote 760 days ago

Greetings Joel,

It's been a long time since I read the great sci-fi magazines and novels that may have led to my choosing science writing as a career. Though it turned out to be a career of interpreting actual science at research institutes, I owe much to those stories for the information and inspiration they provided. So I read your first chapters with a sense of nostalgia and gratitude as well as fresh interest in your theme and characters.

I like the way you start at a high point in the action, filling in the ambiance and background as you go. The overall atmosphere fits a well-established genre, the haunting sense of travel and menace in the outer reaches of space. I hope you can sustain that sense as you continue to spin this fascinating tale.

If time permits, I'll return with more specific comments. For now, though, I'll back your novel and wish you every success. Meanwhile, I think you'd enjoy my novel "The Doctor of Summitville," also based on pseudoscience, but of a different sort--a looking back to the practice of medicine in a country town before modern drugs and tools became available. I'd welcome your comments.

Best of luck, Bill

Barry Wenlock wrote 761 days ago

Hi Joel, I think your work had considerable promise. I read chapter one and thought it was mostly well-written and had plenty of tension and a grim and rather poetic ending. I couldn't help but think of 'Alien' but that's just me.
A few phrases could be tightened --in the low air, the terrible air that stunk (stank).... causing his skull great pain...and a few others. Worth a polish to get a better flow.
Backed for an impressive and enjoyable opening chapter.
Best wishes, Barry
Little Krisna and the Bihar Boys

Burgio wrote 762 days ago

I know I commented on this once but I don't see my comment below. Did they get erased when you updated this? Either way, let me comment again. It's a well thought out story. Your fantasy world seems real. Makes this a good read. I'll add it to my shelf again. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

soutexmex wrote 762 days ago

I saw your profile info so I'll just cut-n-paste my previous comment:

Welcome to this website, Joel. I'm usually not for this genre but you know, both pitches actually worked for me. My only niggle is that with the long pitch, you should break it up into smaller paragraphs so it reads faster. Perfecting your pitches is how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments to better your novel. The writing is good so I am SHELVING you.

Though I have been a very active member for over a year, I can still use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Every little bit helps. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

PATRICK BARRETT wrote 762 days ago

I could have sworn that I had already commented on this book but there is no record of it. An exciting start and the tension mounts, just the thing for a reader scanning in a bookstore, well done. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

blueboy wrote 762 days ago

ok, Joel, this is good but could be better. i like your story line. you have a very interesting story here, but you narrative is bogged down and bit with awkward phrasing, which makes your voice sound forced. i would editing for flow so that it hums along a little easier. as a in said though, the story is compelling and you do have a knack for hooking the reader into the world you have created, and that is one sign of a true writer. I have not read enough to comment on your plot structure but based on the pitch and the first couple of chapters I will back you and wish you well. Please read some of my book, The Age of Rhinestone, when you have time and let me know what you think. Feedback is always welcome. Take care and goodluck with your manuscript.


blueboy

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