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Memories of Glory: A Novel

Elizabeth Marcus Wolfe

I once imagined myself to be a great queen. But it couldn’t last. Because even queens have to watch their heads. Savages await.

 

I recall years long gone, at least I think the memories are real. I remember wanting to be someone else, anyone else. I despised my name, my nickname even more, and the oak trees, the snow, and the cow town where I lived my tedious life. I’d have been queen of all England, but Massachusetts haunted me and wouldn’t let me go.

I tell my story looking back after 40 years. I recall crying out to the gods for help with my misery and waiting for someone, anyone to notice. No one did - not Ma, not Dad, not Penny, my dear older sister. Or any of the others. Even Mother Nature, who ruled with a cruel and demanding intensity, didn’t appear to see my pain.

Of course my youth wasn’t all so dramatic. And the memories are not only of me. I recall so much more, I’ve had to let it go, let them tell it their own confused way. I remind myself, it’s been a sea of time since 1968-1969. And scars will lighten, they'll pale unless you keep rubbing at them. Wait long enough, they'll fade.

 
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The Memories and Monday Morning

 

The Memories

 

I recall years long gone, at least I think the memories are real. I remember wanting to be someone else, anyone else. I despised my name, my nickname even more, and the oak trees, the snow, and the cow town where I lived my tedious life. I’d have been queen of all England, but Massachusetts haunted me and wouldn’t let me go.

 

How can I account for those days, those seminal moments, that ancient crucible of time? Forty years later, facts get confused. 1968 and 1969 – hallmark years; years filled with Vietnam and civil rights, with changing hemlines and women’s liberation. Landing on the moon. An era of great upheaval, so it seemed, so all the papers proclaimed.

 

But of course so many things stay the same whether a teenage girl likes it or not. Mother Nature is cruel; she keeps us in our place, making us wait no matter how hard we fight her rule. Or she pushes us out, like baby birds too long in the nest. Her seasons vary – they change over and over again, but not really – they’re always coming back. Mothers and daughters, sisters and best friends, families – nothing unique, nothing that hasn’t come a hundred thousand times before.

 

How can I know what was real, what imagined; which pieces matter – what parts to discard? All I have are my twisted, broken remembrances of things past - my muddied collection of feelings, harsh and inharmonious, jubilant, mournful. They push at me; they cut through time. They come back to taunt me, they refuse to leave me alone. Over oceans of time, across that vast sea, I recall my glory days and wonder what Mother Nature could have been thinking; how savage my journey, my struggle to feel loved.

 

I didn’t ask for it, didn’t want it to be this way. Stories…memories choke my mind.

 

                                                                              - Glory the Ancient


 

 

Chapter 1 – Monday Morning

 

It was the bleakest of mornings, a fine example of Mother Nature’s often torturous cruelties. What did I do to deserve this? Beastly frigid. Christ, it’s cold. Glory trudged down the snowy street in her platform shoes to school.

 

Bad enough it’s Monday. I despise Mondays. Waking up at six a.m. on any day of the week is pitiless. But Mondays are downright abusive. It’s still dark out. What kind of farmer do people think I am? I need my sleep.

 

The north wind showed no mercy. The high school principal phoned Ma just last week. He said I called in sick seven Mondays in a row. The man is an idiot - it took him seven weeks to figure out the pattern.

 

So now, it’s goddamn six forty-five on a freezing cold Monday morning with Ma insisting on school.

 

Glory had pleaded with her mother, who got up especially early to make certain not to be fooled again. “Joyce,” Glory begged, “you know I can’t stand it.  I hate going. Let me stay home.”

 

It was the dawn of miseries. Even the goddess Aurora herself, pulling the sun through the heavens in her chariot of gold and red, couldn’t have wished for that particular daybreak. And Glory’s mother was in no mood for an argument. She gave her daughter the imperious look that meant don’t even bother, and said calmly, “I’m your mother. Call me Ma.”

 

Glory threw on her coat, wrapped her royal purple scarf around her neck, and huffed her way out the back door.

 

Joyce closed her eyes and leaned against the kitchen sink. Her daughter tried her patience more often than not, but she had to admire that spirit. You can’t make Glory do anything she doesn’t want to do, she thought.  She turned and went back to her coffee.

 

Glory’s a puzzle, Joyce continued in her mind. She may hate going to school. But she did indeed walk out the door. Hey, here’s a theory! She must like being in school, if only a little. I’ll figure the correlations. Joyce reveled in the mathematical logic of it all.

 

~~~~~~

Glory picked her way around the snow banks and ice puddles. The sidewalk across from the field hadn’t been plowed. She walked on the edge of the street in the slush.

 

Dirty lumpy piles of it frozen everywhere. Whoever said snow is pretty, obviously never saw slush.

 

Her books were heavy, and it was a whole mile to school. Well, just under a mile. If the house had been a few blocks farther away, past the mile mark, Glory could have taken the school bus – easier, though not exactly the coolest way to arrive at school. But no, they make me walk.

 

The wind picked up, and Glory’s thighs were turning red. She felt numb with chill. Her long dark hair, wild and frizzy, collected mist that froze as it clung to her curls. Her nose and eyes ran from the harsh wind, and as she wiped at her face with a frosty glove, Glory stepped squarely into a slush puddle. “Oh, crap! My shoes!” she yelped in pain as her toes hit the icy water.

 

For crying out loud. She glanced back and realized that she was out of sight of Ma and Mrs. Fournier, who lived in the house next door and was surely keeping an eye on the street for safety’s sake. Even at this ungodly hour.

 

A truck appeared down the road. Glory stood in the street with her coat undone, flying in the wind. She stuck out her thumb. Within seconds she had a ride. She climbed awkwardly into the cab, her miniskirt hiking up. Her frozen legs refused to move quickly. “Where’s a pretty girl like you goin’?” asked the trucker.

 

“Down the road a bit,” she replied. The driver didn’t know that Gloria always said exactly what she meant.

 

“Happy to take you with me, little lady,” the man said, clearly pleased with his run of good luck.  The truck pulled back into the street. The trucker glanced over and watched as Glory rubbed her bare red thighs.

 

I’m so damn cold. Will spring never come? She closed her eyes, willing Persephone, the goddess of spring, to arise from the dead. Nothing happened.

 

Should know better than to trust in the gods. Maybe I’ll thumb my way to Florida.

 

Her fingers moved up and down her frigid skin, trying to create some heat. The trucker’s hand left the steering wheel and inched across the vinyl seat toward her. “It’s like ice in here,” he said softly so as not to disturb her reverie. “I can help with that.”

 

Glory gave up on the gods for the moment and stared out the steamed up window. She counted the side streets they slowly passed – Forest Street, Chestnut Street, Spring Hill Lane. Such vernal, innocent places, green and natural. Merry and naked, nothing like winter; no snow drifts ever on Spring Hill.

 

The truck came up on Sherwood Lane as the man’s hunger searched for warmth in the girl sitting trance-like beside him.

 

I wonder if England had street names back in the days of Robin Hood and Maid Marion. That’s stupid, I suppose there were no streets at all, just paths leading to the castle. Robin lived in the forest, idiot, not the town. You can’t find your way through the forest, that’s the whole point. You can disappear and only be found if you want to be.

 

Glory’s intense violet eyes strained to see through the foggy glass. Robin stopped hiding in Sherwood just long enough to save Maid Marion from being forced to marry the evil Sheriff of Nottingham. Where is Nottingham, anyway?

 

And where was good King Richard when you needed him? Off to fight the silly Crusades. That’s a man for you. You can’t count on good winning out. You can’t count on men being good. And you couldn’t count on any man, not even a lionhearted king, to protect you from the slime bags of the world. No man but Robin, of course, and he isn’t real. You can’t keep a real man from forcing his way on you.

 

Several centuries and half a mile went by. Glory ended her day dream in time to spot Birchwood Street and told the driver, “Okay, you can stop now.”

 

His excitement had built and he didn’t want to let her go. “What are you talkin’ about, honey? We’re just gettin’ started – I ain’t stoppin’ now.”

 

“I have to get out. School’s that way.” She pointed left. “Can’t be late, I’ll get detention again.”

 

He said, “I ain’t lettin’ you out. This is my truck. You’ll play by my rules.” He winked at her with an ugly slyness, his mouth curled up in a grin.

 

Disgusting creep. Her violet eyes lit the dawn and called the royalty within her to account. Like Aurora herself, she controlled the morn. She turned to him with the calm of an ancient queen. “No one tells me what to do. Certainly not a savage like you. Now let me out or Zeus may strike you dead.”

 

The man’s eyes widened in surprise and not a little regret. But he pulled over to the curb, and as he stopped, let out a belly whopper of a laugh. “You sure have spunk. You’re a magnet for trouble,” he said admiringly.

 

~~~~~~

Glory didn’t have to hitch a ride the rest of the way. Mike drove by and picked her up. One of the few kids in school with a car, Mike was rich and owned a Mustang. But he seemed nice, not snobby, and didn’t hold it against her that she was poor. The radio was playing, and Glory sang along. “I wanna hold your hand! I wanna hold your hand! I wanna hold your hand!” She looked over at Mike, who seemed amused and a little embarrassed. Hmmm, he doesn’t like the Beatles? Glory wondered. Who doesn’t like the Beatles?

 

They made it to school by 7:10, fully ten minutes early. To date, this was Glory’s best time for getting to school – one for the books. But she didn’t stay in the parking lot with Mike. Instead, she hurried into school, waving to the principal as she rushed past him and into the nearest girls’ room to check the damage to her mascara and lip gloss. Must warm up. Winter is the pits.

 

The principal shook his head as she flew by. “Gloria is impulsive – always in a rush,” he told his assistant. “But at least I can count her present and on time today – and it’s a Monday!”

 

~~~~~~

Glory didn’t have much homework that night. The peewees were in bed. Dad always went to sleep early. And Penny and Sammy were in the dining room with their books spread out everywhere. Exams tomorrow. She waited up for her mother to come home from her shift.

 

Ma walked in the house and lit a cigarette. She stood at the kitchen table and wearily scrambled eggs for her late night supper. “Ma,” Glory wondered, “why don’t you ever check up on me? I kind of thought you’d call the school to make sure I didn’t skip today.”

 

“It’s been a long day, my dear,” Ma said, remembering her six o’clock wake up. “And, no news is good news,” she explained with a knowing look on her tired face.

 

Gloria didn’t consider hitchhiking newsworthy. “I made record time,” she responded proudly.

 

“That’s my girl,” Ma answered as she turned up the heat on her eggs.

 

Glory looked around the dirty kitchen. She saw dishes piled high in the sink, and a stovetop that no one ever cleaned encrusted with weeks’ worth of cooking. God, Sunday’s papers, dumped in a corner on the linoleum floor.

 

“Ma?” she wondered. “Have you ever wanted to be rich and famous, like a movie star? Have you ever wanted to be someone besides yourself?”

 

“Why do you ask?” Joyce answered.

 

“I hate my life.”

 

Joyce chuckled. “That’s a tad dramatic, don’t you think?”

 

“Being me is so boring. A movie star has adoring fans. Everyone knows she’s gorgeous, in the spotlight in Hollywood and Times Square. She might climb the Eiffel Tower or visit Stonehenge at the summer solstice. Or sail the Atlantic first class passage.” Glory had never seen a real passenger ship. “A movie star plays lots of roles; she can pretend to be whoever she wants. I’ll bet a movie star’s life is always exciting.”

 

Joyce wasn’t so sure. She sighed. “Gloria my dear, life is unfair. What can I say? I suppose you’ll just have to live with being you. It’s not really so bad being you, is it?”

 

Glory answered without having to think. “I’d much rather be someone else. I don’t even like my name. Gloria – it’s such a stupid name, and “Glory” makes me sound like a baby. The only thing I like about me is my eyes. Everything else on the list - get rid of it, chop it off!” Glory laughed a deep Pooh-bah laugh.

 

“But maybe a queen is a better choice than a movie star. Because a queen is real, not just pretty. She has power. And she can come and go as she pleases, and has loyal followers to do her bidding.” Glory glanced around her filthy house. Cobwebs up at the ceiling.

 

“A queen doesn’t have to live in a messy house. She could discover new worlds. Someday she might even fly to the moon on a rocket ship. If you could be a queen, Ma, who would you be?”

 

Glory’s mother considered the exhausting day she had just finished. “I suppose Cleopatra,” she replied. “Why? Cleopatra floated down the Nile on her own barge. She could be alone anytime she wanted. She made rules to suit herself.”

 

Ma took a drag on her Chesterfield and flicked the ashes into the kitchen sink. “Oh, and she drank lovely coconut milk and ate figs dipped in honey. Egypt is hot but not ungodly humid like here in summer. She had the gentle breezes of the Nile to keep her cool. Yes, I’d be Cleopatra if I had a chance.”

 

She scraped her scrambled eggs onto a plate and took a last drag of her cigarette. She looked for an empty ashtray. Every one of them overflowed. She dropped the butt into a coffee cup left on the table from breakfast. Joyce closed her eyes for a moment and luxuriated in the notion of being all alone. “Who would you be, Glory?”

 

“I know it’s dumb, but I’ve got to get a new name, and I want the coolest name in the world. The best by far is Elizabeth, don’t you think?

 

I want to be rich and famous, and powerful beyond all reason. And wicked beautiful, of course, and have cool clothes, something different to wear for every season of the year. I want to do good deeds for the people of my country. I must travel the world and see every corner of the British Isles. Search for Sherwood Forest and Camelot and the Hundred Acre Wood.”

 

And attract handsome followers, naturally. Glory blushed.

 

“I’ll be the great Queen Elizabeth, the First among all queens.”

 

She smiled. It was an excellent choice, the choice of a lifetime. It all makes sense. Though how I’ll get myself to the moon, I’m not sure.

 

Only the vast sea of time held that answer.

 

 

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HarperCollins Wrote

It is very difficult to approach a ‘coming of age’ story, and write in such a way as to not appear clichéd, but Elizabeth Marcus Wolfe has made a remarkably strong case. In ‘Memories and Glory’, the journey from childhood to adulthood is dealt with in a unique way; the six children in Glory’s family are used to explore various different facets of growing up. The reader is also able to understand more about the pasts of Glory’s parents and their families, allowing adult tensions to be explored too. A compelling feminist take on life dominates, but the feelings of the important men in Glory’s life are not left uncovered. The memories she recalls do not depict a clear straightforward story, rather each is a part of a puzzle which in the end paints an often brutal but fair conclusion on life.

The first few chapters are a little slow (a point which I will return to shortly); character development is highlighted rather than plot progression, but Glory is set up well as a whimsical day-dreamer. She lives in an alter-world, and her intelligence and desire to be elsewhere helps build a strong picture of her imagination. Gradually it becomes clear that the world she fashions for herself is an escape from the harsh life that she has had to lead. As a protagonist she is wonderful; her suffering is a result of both her surroundings and of universal teenage trauma: I found her hugely accessible.

The use of dialogue, and the focus on different characters in each recollection, allows the reader to build a strong concept of each family member, and their relationships with one another. This is a vibrant read, and no connection is left unexplored. Friendship, as well as sibling rivalry, is beautifully drawn out, and each character is individual, with no adolescent being allowed to become ‘archetypal’. The characterisation could be tidied, however. The author should be careful to avoid ‘unnatural’ human behaviour, particularly in relation to speech and contemplation. For instance, in the first chapter, Joyce directs a coherent monologue at her coffee mug. However, in reality, when people talk to themselves it tends to be broken and brief – indeed, when people engage in conversation with each other, it often follows a similarly irregular patterns.

The novel is strong but not without its issues; there is work to be done before this could be considered a truly marketable proposition. Firstly, I felt the author needed to build a stronger sense of place – both location and time – and to do so from the very first chapter. This is crucial if you want your readers to become immersed in the lives of your characters; it will also give an additional dimension to Glory’s state of detachment from this plane.
The lack of clear structure also needs to be worked on. The focus on character development, whilst valuable in its own way, does mean that little takes place, and for a commercial read, you need keep the reader engaged consistently across the narrative. This doesn’t necessarily involve high-drama, however. The author clearly has a gift for wit and charm, illustrated in the passage where the family go blueberry picking, and this could be employed earlier on to make even typical domestic scenes more captivating.

The role of “Mother Nature”, of fate and fortune, is an interesting theme and one that gives an interesting dimension to the family’s attitude. The family approach life with a ‘deal with it’ attitude and it seems that every time anybody makes a mistake, life hands out retribution. It would have been interesting for the Jewish background of the family to have been made clearer from the beginning; it is an important component to their identity, but is not broached until the storyline is well underway. It adds an extra dimension to the spiritual aspect of ‘Memories and Glory’, which is vital in forming the reader’s perception of the characters. This spirituality is engaged in the poignant and poetic observations Glory makes on the world around her. But on top of this, it will also help to construct the sense of place – this time in culture and history – I referred to earlier.

This novel would appeal to readers – predominantly female – with an interest in historical fiction, but also many who are simply looking for compelling characters and an interesting character arc. Although measured at times, it is an enjoyable and easy read. However, YA is a particularly challenging and unlucrative market. The historical and cultural elements here could help the novel garner a wider readership, but first the author needs to address the issues of dialogue, setting, and in particular, the need to immediately engage the reader.

Elizabeth Wolfe wrote 368 days ago

HarperCollins Wrote:

It is very difficult to approach a ‘coming of age’ story, and write in such a way as to not appear clichéd, but Elizabeth Marcus Wolfe has made a remarkably strong case. In ‘Memories and Glory’, the journey from childhood to adulthood is dealt with in a unique way; the six children in Glory’s family are used to explore various different facets of growing up. The reader is also able to understand more about the pasts of Glory’s parents and their families, allowing adult tensions to be explored too. A compelling feminist take on life dominates, but the feelings of the important men in Glory’s life are not left uncovered. The memories she recalls do not depict a clear straightforward story, rather each is a part of a puzzle which in the end paints an often brutal but fair conclusion on life.

The first few chapters are a little slow (a point which I will return to shortly); character development is highlighted rather than plot progression, but Glory is set up well as a whimsical day-dreamer. She lives in an alter-world, and her intelligence and desire to be elsewhere helps build a strong picture of her imagination. Gradually it becomes clear that the world she fashions for herself is an escape from the harsh life that she has had to lead. As a protagonist she is wonderful; her suffering is a result of both her surroundings and of universal teenage trauma: I found her hugely accessible.

The use of dialogue, and the focus on different characters in each recollection, allows the reader to build a strong concept of each family member, and their relationships with one another. This is a vibrant read, and no connection is left unexplored. Friendship, as well as sibling rivalry, is beautifully drawn out, and each character is individual, with no adolescent being allowed to become ‘archetypal’. The characterisation could be tidied, however. The author should be careful to avoid ‘unnatural’ human behaviour, particularly in relation to speech and contemplation. For instance, in the first chapter, Joyce directs a coherent monologue at her coffee mug. However, in reality, when people talk to themselves it tends to be broken and brief – indeed, when people engage in conversation with each other, it often follows a similarly irregular patterns.

The novel is strong but not without its issues; there is work to be done before this could be considered a truly marketable proposition. Firstly, I felt the author needed to build a stronger sense of place – both location and time – and to do so from the very first chapter. This is crucial if you want your readers to become immersed in the lives of your characters; it will also give an additional dimension to Glory’s state of detachment from this plane.
The lack of clear structure also needs to be worked on. The focus on character development, whilst valuable in its own way, does mean that little takes place, and for a commercial read, you need keep the reader engaged consistently across the narrative. This doesn’t necessarily involve high-drama, however. The author clearly has a gift for wit and charm, illustrated in the passage where the family go blueberry picking, and this could be employed earlier on to make even typical domestic scenes more captivating.

The role of “Mother Nature”, of fate and fortune, is an interesting theme and one that gives an interesting dimension to the family’s attitude. The family approach life with a ‘deal with it’ attitude and it seems that every time anybody makes a mistake, life hands out retribution. It would have been interesting for the Jewish background of the family to have been made clearer from the beginning; it is an important component to their identity, but is not broached until the storyline is well underway. It adds an extra dimension to the spiritual aspect of ‘Memories and Glory’, which is vital in forming the reader’s perception of the characters. This spirituality is engaged in the poignant and poetic observations Glory makes on the world around her. But on top of this, it will also help to construct the sense of place – this time in culture and history – I referred to earlier.

This novel would appeal to readers – predominantly female – with an interest in historical fiction, but also many who are simply looking for compelling characters and an interesting character arc. Although measured at times, it is an enjoyable and easy read. However, YA is a particularly challenging and unlucrative market. The historical and cultural elements here could help the novel garner a wider readership, but first the author needs to address the issues of dialogue, setting, and in particular, the need to immediately engage the reader.

Darkwinglord wrote 496 days ago

This is a vibrant and rich book, Elizabeth. It absorbed me right from the pitch and spat me out around chapter 14. You work with so litle and manage to achieve so much! Descriptions, setting, dialogue, they all come together in a seamless blend of storytelling.

Glory, as an MC comes across exactly as you've painted her; a period daydreamer. It's not hard to relate to her, (we see them everyday these days), and that's because you've done such a wonderful job in fleshing her out. Her interaction with the other characters is not only highly believable, it's as if one is standing right next to her.

With the cadence you have set up, and even though it's not my usual genre, I can easily become addicted into reading more.

It's a little wonder this book has promoted itself to the position it's in. Deserved so.

I wish all your dreams come true with this.

Warmest Regards
Andrew

J.Adams wrote 571 days ago

I was enthralled with Memories of Glory the first time I read it, several months before the Great Authonomy Shake Down of October 27th. The shake down has me re-reading my favorites so I can re-support the best books here, and Memories of Glory is one of the very, very best books I've ever read, on or off of Authonomy. Elizabeth, you have written an insightful, soulful masterpiece. Memories of Glory (and the double meaning of the title is brilliant) takes a hard, honest look at life and all the childhood pain that is in the mixture of what makes so many of us who we are as adults. Your writing style is magnificent -- it is nearly lyrical, poetic, in its beauty.

I wanted a happier ending for Gloria, as you know! But the world is not populated with Glinda and other good witches from out of the North, and maybe happier endings in the real world do, indeed, mean appreciating - as the song "Shady Grove" says, "peaches in the summer time, apples in the fall." You are absolutely right, there are so very many things to enjoy and appreciate that are real.

Elizabeth, I wish you so many wonderful things with this masterpiece! I really, really do!
Judy

chuckgnx wrote 581 days ago

Elizabeth, an absolutely hypnotic read, made me keep going and going, even though I am not usually a fan of "women's stories." Normally I like adventure, power, etc., but you have presented real live people here and a heroine who surely deserves a better life -- the intellectuals of this world (we writers) can feel the depths of her despair, and want things to work for her, a special woman. Best,
Backed.

Chuck -- Marshal;l Warren -- "Sunrise, Sunset" a novel of Power, Politics, Mother Earth, Sex, Money. 42 chp.

Simpko wrote 663 days ago

Fabulous. Superb writing that somehow flies straight from the page to the depths of the gut, by-passing eyes and brain. I felt like the words were speaking to me rather than me having to read them.
Superb work and deserving of great things.
Baz

leelah wrote 289 days ago

Oh this is something. I feel myselfs going back to savor words and phrases - that is good sign for a book that seems to be mesmerizing. You are painting images and landscapes, my dear Elizabeth - and since i do not like reading at the PC I look forward to the book being published.
Oh this joy of having found a true writer. exquisite feeling.

Leelah Saachi

Darwod wrote 353 days ago

Have only read the first chapter. I'm new here and thought I'd check to see what is considered good. Liked it a lot and will finish it. Glory is a realistic teen. I like how we see her as she sees herself and as others see her. So realistic for her to be critical of her Mom's housekeeing but never think to help herself. The scene with the trucker was scary, and I'm assuming gives us a hint of Glory's future problems. I wanted to tell her to be careful, not wear miniskirts when its freezing or opentoed shoes. It took me a little while to figure out that Glory was thinking about herself but once I caught on, I was fine.

CMTStibbe wrote 368 days ago

Very well done! I am really impressed. You have worked hard for this and your talent shines through. Claire ~ Chasing Pharaohs.

Elizabeth Wolfe wrote 368 days ago

HarperCollins Wrote:

It is very difficult to approach a ‘coming of age’ story, and write in such a way as to not appear clichéd, but Elizabeth Marcus Wolfe has made a remarkably strong case. In ‘Memories and Glory’, the journey from childhood to adulthood is dealt with in a unique way; the six children in Glory’s family are used to explore various different facets of growing up. The reader is also able to understand more about the pasts of Glory’s parents and their families, allowing adult tensions to be explored too. A compelling feminist take on life dominates, but the feelings of the important men in Glory’s life are not left uncovered. The memories she recalls do not depict a clear straightforward story, rather each is a part of a puzzle which in the end paints an often brutal but fair conclusion on life.

The first few chapters are a little slow (a point which I will return to shortly); character development is highlighted rather than plot progression, but Glory is set up well as a whimsical day-dreamer. She lives in an alter-world, and her intelligence and desire to be elsewhere helps build a strong picture of her imagination. Gradually it becomes clear that the world she fashions for herself is an escape from the harsh life that she has had to lead. As a protagonist she is wonderful; her suffering is a result of both her surroundings and of universal teenage trauma: I found her hugely accessible.

The use of dialogue, and the focus on different characters in each recollection, allows the reader to build a strong concept of each family member, and their relationships with one another. This is a vibrant read, and no connection is left unexplored. Friendship, as well as sibling rivalry, is beautifully drawn out, and each character is individual, with no adolescent being allowed to become ‘archetypal’. The characterisation could be tidied, however. The author should be careful to avoid ‘unnatural’ human behaviour, particularly in relation to speech and contemplation. For instance, in the first chapter, Joyce directs a coherent monologue at her coffee mug. However, in reality, when people talk to themselves it tends to be broken and brief – indeed, when people engage in conversation with each other, it often follows a similarly irregular patterns.

The novel is strong but not without its issues; there is work to be done before this could be considered a truly marketable proposition. Firstly, I felt the author needed to build a stronger sense of place – both location and time – and to do so from the very first chapter. This is crucial if you want your readers to become immersed in the lives of your characters; it will also give an additional dimension to Glory’s state of detachment from this plane.
The lack of clear structure also needs to be worked on. The focus on character development, whilst valuable in its own way, does mean that little takes place, and for a commercial read, you need keep the reader engaged consistently across the narrative. This doesn’t necessarily involve high-drama, however. The author clearly has a gift for wit and charm, illustrated in the passage where the family go blueberry picking, and this could be employed earlier on to make even typical domestic scenes more captivating.

The role of “Mother Nature”, of fate and fortune, is an interesting theme and one that gives an interesting dimension to the family’s attitude. The family approach life with a ‘deal with it’ attitude and it seems that every time anybody makes a mistake, life hands out retribution. It would have been interesting for the Jewish background of the family to have been made clearer from the beginning; it is an important component to their identity, but is not broached until the storyline is well underway. It adds an extra dimension to the spiritual aspect of ‘Memories and Glory’, which is vital in forming the reader’s perception of the characters. This spirituality is engaged in the poignant and poetic observations Glory makes on the world around her. But on top of this, it will also help to construct the sense of place – this time in culture and history – I referred to earlier.

This novel would appeal to readers – predominantly female – with an interest in historical fiction, but also many who are simply looking for compelling characters and an interesting character arc. Although measured at times, it is an enjoyable and easy read. However, YA is a particularly challenging and unlucrative market. The historical and cultural elements here could help the novel garner a wider readership, but first the author needs to address the issues of dialogue, setting, and in particular, the need to immediately engage the reader.

markwoodburn wrote 369 days ago

Well done in getting your book to the desk. An informative and enlightening review. Mark

cutley wrote 370 days ago

I keep being told that the HC review has been made public, but it's still not there. I would love to read it, but of course accept you have the right to keep it private.

Whatever happens, I do wish you the best of luck.

Charles

P.S. When I was in this position I had made a resolution to make the HC review public whatever it said. I clicked the button to make it public before I read it. That, I think, is the easiest way to approach these things.

elaine black wrote 370 days ago

Try copying the review into your comment box and then cherry pick it. It will then be at the top of the page. :)

Closet Writer wrote 370 days ago

Where did you post your HC review? I can't find it.

SC Dwinnell, "Never Let Him Go"

Frank James wrote 447 days ago

Hi Elizabeth,

I read you previously before the voting system was mucked up. I liked it then and I like it now and am BACKING you all the way. Good luck for the future.

Frank James (The Contractor)

Judge Jeffreys wrote 450 days ago

As I am new to commenting on this site, I wanted to read the books that had made it to the desk. I read up to chapter 6. I found the first couple of chapters a bit slow and hard to get into, but that's probably just me. This deserves to do well. Good luck.

Lee J. P. wrote 457 days ago

Congratulations on this wonderful work of yours Elizabeth. I wish you great success and may all your dreams come true. Please let me know if you'd be willing to back "Out Of Orleans" and it is in serious need of professional editing. Thanks in advance for your time and consideration.

Lee

Lee J. P. wrote 457 days ago

Congratulations on this wonderful work of yours Elizabeth. I wish you great success and may all your dreams come true. Please let me know if you'd be willing to back "Out Of Orleans" and it is in serious need of professional editing. Thanks in advance for your time and consideration.

Lee

Rhonda9080 wrote 468 days ago

What a powerful and moving story! Wow! Superb characterization! I just read on and on, when I'd set out to just take a peek! Vivid description without overkill! This is going on my bookshelf as soon as I get a space. I highly recommend!

celticwriter wrote 472 days ago

Hi Elizabeth. How are you doing? What's the next step in the process for you? :-)

blessings,
jim

Michael Croucher wrote 473 days ago

I love the pictures that you paint with words; vivid, compelling and rich. Your mc is someone that many can relate to and she draws us into the story very well. I've thoroughly enjoyed what I've read so far, and I look forward to reading on. In the meantime, based on what I've read, I'm rating this book highly.
Michael Croucher (Bravo's Veil)

SRWENT wrote 475 days ago

Hi Elizabeth, This chapter 9 brings back some great memoies for me

Thank you!!

Richard A. Wentworth

Walt Alexander wrote 477 days ago

Hi Elizabeth, I thought Glory was in trouble with the truck driver-narrow squeak. So she was always wanting to be someone else-we all do, I think ay some point in our lives. that was a narrow escape for Davey in the burning car. Penny did a marvellous rescue. Had me on the edge of my seat.
I'm not sure I am qualified to review your book. It's really for younger people and I'm not in that category. However I did enjoy the chapters I read. you write well and it's good writing. You hold the reader. You've had some very good reviews and your rating can't get any higher. Congratulations on being selected for review by HC. Good luck with it.
Backed & shelved. Best Walt.

Bec C Simmonds wrote 477 days ago

Well done, you got there.

Bec (Find Mark)

EmilyJean wrote 480 days ago

I just discovered your book on the editor's desk. Just reading the beginning and end, it's obvious why it's there. Beautiful, powerful prose. Memories of Glory definitely deserves to be in print!
Best wishes,
Emily VanLaeys
Burning the Bridge to Hell

Phyllis Burton wrote 481 days ago

Hello Elizabeth, Have just read some of your wonderful story. You are a great story teller. Have you ever been to Sherwood Forest or Camelot? I really love the last line of chapter 1...'Only the vast sea of time held the answer'.I wish you every success with this as you approach the ed's desk. I would buy it... I rate it highly and will place it on my SHELF, I promise you. Remind me tomorrow, if I don't...
Would you be so kind as to take a look at my story PAPER DREAMS, or A PASSING STORM? It would be really appreciated.
Best wishes and good luck

Phyllis Burton

GinoStine wrote 481 days ago

I really like the story and how well you've written the character, the dialogues and the descriptions!!
I think it is a very promising story!! You're a very good writer Elizabeth

I hope you achieved great things with this book :)

Take care,

Gino.

Intriguing Trails wrote 482 days ago

compelling

2penny wrote 483 days ago

Hello Elizabeth, I began on authonomy only recently. By luck, I started with your book. Since then, I've been cruising around and reading other authors. I might have read only a few pages or a chapter of others' books. I'm not a science fiction fan but I could see why Jim Darcy is rated number one. Jane Hersey is talented too. But, many others weren't as good. I now have a basis for comparison. Initially I rated you a five but I feel compelled to boost the rating up. I think your book is a six. Best wishes. 2penny

tomewriter wrote 484 days ago

Hi,
Will have a read as soon as I can. Best wishes.
Janell (tomewriter)
Speed Trap

Shawn Hendricks wrote 486 days ago

Not sure where you are going with "the Memories." Is it a poem?

Is "Glory the Ancient" a command like, "We must glorify the ancient one," or "Glory, the Ancient" as name and title?

If poetry, it might work as open verse. If not, then there are punctuation issues.

"I'd have been Queen of all England..." makes no sense to me in this context.

After reading, "the Memories," I am not hooked.

Jacoba wrote 486 days ago

Dear Elizabeth,
Have seen this oh so many times on the charts and I've finally had chance to read some of your story. I'm impressed by the wonderful narrative and the tone of your tale. I like the constant references Gloria makes to imagining herself a queen or movie star. What young girl didn't do that. I see that you are tettering on the brink for a review and I know what hard work it is to get there so I'm happy to support you in your efforts. I believe this is a good story that merits a professional critique, so I'm happy to back you until the end of the month. I will explain to the one I have to move off my shelf. I'm sure he won't mind, as I'll put him back up at some stage. Cheers to you, and if you ever get a moment to take a look at my book, I'd appreciate the comments, I'm not necessarily worried about the backing, but would be interested in your thoughts. Cheers Jacoba

Jacoba wrote 486 days ago

Dear Elizabeth,
Have seen this oh so many times on the charts and I've finally had chance to read some of your story. I'm impressed by the wonderful narrative and the tone of your tale. I like the constant references Gloria makes to imagining herself a queen or movie star. What young girl didn't do that. I see that you are tettering on the brink for a review and I know what hard work it is to get there so I'm happy to support you in your efforts. I believe this is a good story that merits a professional critique, so I'm happy to back you until the end of the month. I will explain to the one I have to move off my shelf. I'm sure he won't mind, as I'll put him back up at some stage. Cheers to you, and if you ever get a moment to take a look at my book, I'd appreciate the comments, I'm not necessarily worried about the backing, but would be interested in your thoughts. Cheers Jacoba

Katie_Hall wrote 486 days ago

I love how you write. Being inside Glory's head is interesting, the third person explains something and then she does it in her own way that makes it so uniquely her own thought and it drives the book. I'm excited to read more of this.
Katie

Laura A. D. wrote 487 days ago

Looks like your story is doing awesome! Congratulations! :o)

Linda Lou wrote 487 days ago

an interesting idea for when we all seek to escape life in general LLL

Linda Lou wrote 487 days ago

an interesting idea for when we all seek to escape life in general LLL

Bruki's Keeper wrote 488 days ago

This book is amazing! I have only heard tales of the 60's from my father and grandmother, but this book totally brought to color and reality the attitude, style, and hip of that era! I loved reading it! It was funny, interesting, and engulfing as well as educational (for me)! I was drawn in easily, and actually felt I was there with Glory in the story! Awesome book! I hope it gets published!
Kathryn ~The Dragon's Son~

Idea Girl Consulting wrote 489 days ago

ive backed your book ..

SusieGulick wrote 491 days ago

Dear Elizabeth, You give me happy tears. :) ;( I'm so blessed that you are helping me. :) ;( May God bless you more that your ever dreamt or imagined, a million times back. :) Love, Susie :)

2penny wrote 492 days ago

This is a 5-star book.

2penny wrote 492 days ago

This book, the characters and plot grabbed hold of me and never let go So beautifully written. I didn't want it to end. Elizabeth, you've done a superb job of making the characters come alive brilliantly. Best wishes

barrefly wrote 493 days ago

I grew up in the Sixties. Here is some advise, "Glory, toast your bread and put butter on it before you add the sugar and cinnamon." 8>)

I'm a novice writer, so no critiques other than I'm enjoying reading it.

Marie Crist wrote 494 days ago

Glory is such a great character. Her drama and personality reminds me of one of my favorite characters, Anne of Green Gables. Love her!

Marie

Neville wrote 495 days ago

Memories of Glory.
by Elizabeth Marcus Wolfe

Have backed this book a long time ago.
Pleased to come back to it again.

You have a fine character in Glory, always day dreaming and captivated by English History. Her mind is full of it.
Her mother Joyce, also comes across strongly. She knows how to put her foot down when it’s needed, even if the housework is somewhat neglected.
I rather liked ‘The Golden Slipper’ store run by Madame Helena.
You describe very vividly the contents of the store and the pleasure derived by the youngsters when making a purchase.
The reader is taken through the early teenage life of Gloria. You cleverly show the trauma of passing from child to womanhood by the use of flash back memories, a nice idea.
Your book is a compelling read once started, difficult to put down even if dinner is on the table so to speak.
I have really enjoyed your book Elizabeth, and wish you all the best on your way to the Publisher – it won’t be long, I’m sure of that.

I have given this book a High Star Rating and happy to shelve it.

Kind regards,

Neville THE SECRETS OF THE FOREST – THE TIME ZONE.

celticwriter wrote 495 days ago

Here we gooooooooooooo! (You're doing better than me! I keep slipping.)

Reverb&Rhyme wrote 496 days ago

I'm so excited that you're in the top five!!!!

Darkwinglord wrote 496 days ago

This is a vibrant and rich book, Elizabeth. It absorbed me right from the pitch and spat me out around chapter 14. You work with so litle and manage to achieve so much! Descriptions, setting, dialogue, they all come together in a seamless blend of storytelling.

Glory, as an MC comes across exactly as you've painted her; a period daydreamer. It's not hard to relate to her, (we see them everyday these days), and that's because you've done such a wonderful job in fleshing her out. Her interaction with the other characters is not only highly believable, it's as if one is standing right next to her.

With the cadence you have set up, and even though it's not my usual genre, I can easily become addicted into reading more.

It's a little wonder this book has promoted itself to the position it's in. Deserved so.

I wish all your dreams come true with this.

Warmest Regards
Andrew

Old Bob wrote 497 days ago

Hi Elizabeth. I read your first chapter and I find your writing reminds me a little of Thomas Wolfe. Your writing is great, your voice is terrific and your dialogue seems true. There seems to be so much extra description and back story, though, that it slows things down (for me). This was the way they used to write, but I think today people are looking for something more streamlined. I have the same problem and am constantly trying to tighten up my first chapter.

I'll tell you what; I'll star your book 5 stars and will watch it the rest of the month. I'm on the site every day. If you look like you're starting to slip, I'll put you on in place of BEHIND THE HOOD. Hope that works for you.

Best of luck.

Old Bob
A PLACE IN LIFE

ed_larel wrote 497 days ago

I don't much read historical fantasy, but this stood out as one of the more interesting reads I've had in a while. I appreciate your use of metaphors as well as the way in which you structured the novel.

femmylovecraft wrote 497 days ago

Elizabeth, sorry I only now come around to write a (shallow) comment on Memories of Glory after having already backed it. You are a very good writer and I really hope that your HC review will be positive and your excellent book soon published. I enjoyed reading large parts of it, you have an very personal and accessible style of writing. Great story, interesting MC, well-fitting in the period. The only thing that surprised me was that it is not ticked in the YA genre. I think this would also be book for the YA audience. Lots of success with Memories of Glory. Femmy

Debra wrote 498 days ago

Not much I can add to the comments. I'm sure it's all been said already. I do love the short pitch for this. Best of luck with this. I hope you get a fabulous review from the ED!

Debra

Charmain wrote 498 days ago

It's a wonderfully written story and certainly would help young ladies as they struggle through life seeking for something that will make them great, I give this story five stars, good luck!

SusieGulick wrote 501 days ago

Dear Elizabeth, I haven't been able to get into my profile page for over 24 hours. :( Are you able to get into yours? I wrote on your message page, but if you can't get into your profile page, you won't be able to read it, so I'm writing in your comments - could you please answer me in your comments so I'll know if it's just my profile page or everyone's that's not working? I'm so concerned about slipping out of #5 :) - this is so stressful. :( I've written to authonomy several times, but have received not answer. :) It will be amazing if I make it through January. :( I had 20 skin cancers & moles burned off with liquid nitro on Wednesday & the top of my nose is one complete raw pain. :( Love, Susie :)

Brian Bandell wrote 502 days ago

You have a charming writing style and I like your characters. I don't read a lot of literary fiction, so I'm not used to a slow developing plot like this. I can see the personalities taking shape but the conflicts don't jump out at me.

The best thing you've got going for you is your crisp writing. Good job and backed.

Brian
Mute

klouholmes wrote 503 days ago

Hi Elizabeth, This is infectious to read and something I could come back to at Chap 6. You've succeeded in showing the hazards and the conflicts of a time that young people now might think was saner and tamer. The underlying narrator voice comes in smoothly and enhances it all. Have a great month - Shelved Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)