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Sarajevo Walls of Fate

Marija F.Sullivan



‘Architectural fairy tale’, a hundred-year journey through war and peace, until a mystery is resolved and broken walls stop screaming.

 

'Reporters dodged bullets to get to work' is the title of Nic Robertson of CNN's report comparing life in Sarajevo today and twenty years ago. One of the two recently interviewed reporters was the author of Sarajevo Walls of Fate.

You may want to take a look and see where some of the inspiration for this novel came from.

In this fast-paced romance, elements of mystery and ghostly encounters combine as young journalist Jasna becomes a reluctant witness to the processes of history in the 1990s.

Only a great love can bring her from the despair of war to a land of plenty, from Sarajevo to Singapore and back to her home town via Granada, Rome and New York.

Hers is an exciting journey, brimming with authentic observations as she and those around her search their souls for answers to the important questions of our time.

Is there hope for the ruined facades of Sarajevo, and the city’s shattered dreams of peaceful cohabitation?

Is there a place for sincerity and chivalry in such a turbulent time?


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Chapter 1

 

 

March 2010

 

 

A woman in a long, grey dress stopped me as I strolled beside the River Miljacka in the centre of Sarajevo. There was a hole the size of a clenched fist in her chest.

 

The afternoon sun gave an orange tint to the hundred-year-old building where the woman with half-opened eyes was depicted on its facade. The branches of a tree provided shade from the sun's rays, which were reflected on her forehead, on her long hair and on the hole in her chest.

 

That frightful hollowness, in the place on the bosom normally reserved for a pendant, prevented me from noticing at first that this pretty, voluptuous figure of a lady was holding a spear. The spear didn’t look threatening in the least. Moreover, it seemed to be keeping her upright.

 

The door of the three-storey house was slightly open. Waiting, I hesitated for a while, and then entered. The solid, sturdy, wide stairs with elegant wooden banisters, built in the old Austrian style, rose to the top floor, which was where I wanted to go. Closer to the agony of the mysterious woman.

 

What’s going on in there? What kind of people live in this place with a wounded creature on their wall?

 

‘No, no one lives in the attic,’ said a dark-haired, middle-aged man with soft features. He was the only tenant of the huge house, and he lived on the first floor.

 

‘And there?’ I glanced up the flight of stairs, towards the door in which some of the glass had been broken. There were unused pots for plants, filled with some dusty old clothes, and a broom stood near the doormat. The man shook his head.

 

‘There’s another empty apartment next to mine,’ he said.

 

I learned that he had lived in that house since he was a toddler, which was almost half a century. Now I felt comfortable enough to introduce myself.

 

‘Jasna,’ I said, holding out my hand.

 

‘Mensud,’ he replied, and shook my hand briefly. I told him I wrote books, and that I had been astonished by the lady with the hole in her chest. Oh, and that depiction of the man in armour and a helmet! Obviously a knight. The one on the other side of the window, holding a shield.

 

‘Surely, you noticed that the knight also has a hole below his shoulder. Maybe in his heart? Small, but who knows how deep the hole is,’ I mused.

 

Mensud nodded as though everything made sense to him. I was a tad disappointed that he was not looking surprised. People give much better answers if they are not prepared in advance. My visit was, apparently, expected.

 

Well, no wonder. Two days earlier, when I first spotted the beauty on the wall, I asked a friendly looking policeman about the facade.

 

‘Wow!’ he exclaimed with a smile, ‘I've been walking up and down this street for a couple of years and I never noticed it till now.’ I took his advice to simply ask the tenants.

 

*

 

My first editor used to say, ‘Once you learn how to ask your questions, and pitch your voice the right way, you can get any answers you need’. Consequently, my sometimes-difficult questions came across like a grand favour to the interviewee, rather than an investigation whose answers I was greatly interested in. On many an occasion, this approach proved to be rewarding. No one noticed how shy I really was, but I often repeated to myself like a mantra, ‘simply ask, simply ask...’.

 

‘Why did you kill them?’ I asked an incarcerated, frail-looking Serb prisoner-of-war.

 

‘Can I have a cigarette?’ the young man asked back, endless pleading in his eyes.

 

**

 

This man now standing at the door of his apartment in the old Sarajevo house was waiting, with patient benevolence, for the end of my curiosity.

 

‘Why has this exquisite facade not been repaired fifteen years after the war? How come the shrapnel only landed on those particular points?’ I enquired.

 

Mensud shrugged, and told me what he knew. In one bombardment a whole family had been killed in a large house across the river. Only the grandfather survived; he had been in the bathroom at the time. But the madness of shrapnel spread everywhere and some of the deadly shards bounced off the sides of the river bank. It was the ricochet that pierced the bosom of the lady and her knight.

 

‘You mean you stayed in this house during the whole four years of the war?’ Unintentionally, I raised the tone of my voice. It seemed to me unbelievable that someone would persist in staying in such a house, completely exposed to the shelling from the surrounding hills.

 

Mensud nodded, with a weak smile. ‘Yeah. My family and I lived in these several square metres, and never dared enter the rooms overlooking the river.’

 

He glanced over his shoulder, indicating a long, narrow corridor in his elegant high-ceilinged apartment. There was a modest, threadbare Bosnian carpet on the floor where he was standing.

 

I learned from Mensud that the building was erected in 1918, and his house had changed hands 17 times. Some of its owners had been bakers, some exiled Jews, and yet others businessmen. The present owners went abroad and no one knew if they would ever come back. The story of the mysterious lady and her knight was only known to the original residents, and all trace of them had been lost, Mensud concluded.

 

I hesitated at his threshold. I was hoping that he would invite me in for a cup of coffee and a chat, at least for the sake of traditional Bosnian hospitality. He seemed reluctant, so I decided to call it a day.

 

*

 

All trace of the first owners had been lost, he was confident. Yet I had a tingling sensation in the back of my head that there must be a trace left somewhere.

 

Back at home I carefully examined the photos I had taken of the facade. The hole in the lady’s chest looked pretty damn horrifying, even in the photograph. I noticed for the first time that the knight was holding a shield depicting a bird. ‘Yes, now we’re talking, the clue is becoming apparent,’ I thought. ‘But...Is this an eagle? A vulture? A raven?’ The image was not quite clear. And the dilapidated condition of the walls didn't help.

 

Hmm, one thing was for sure, the knight-like man of the house was of noble origin. For only noblemen had family coats of arms, and could be depicted as knights. That much I knew. Once I figured out the type of bird on his shield I would get closer to the owner's family origin, and maybe even their family saga, for the sake of my novel.

 

I had an idea who to ask.

 

April 1992

 

***

 

Dan was left in a basket just before the war started. The nurse who found him at the entrance to the Sarajevo Maternity Hospital cried inconsolably when her husband refused to apply to adopt the dark-haired baby.

 

Alarmed at her proposal, he came to Dzana's office in the hospital and stormed in.

 

‘Are you out of your mind?!’ he was furious. ‘And what with our three daughters!’

 

‘You can never have too many children or too much money,’ Dzana recalled an old folk saying.

 

‘Just look at him.’ She lifted the baby slightly in her arms. ‘Look at his eyes. Dark green, almost brown. They’re a bit like yours. Dejan, I love him.’ She held the baby closer to her chest, and he smiled.

 

‘And what will you feed him? Especially now. Everyone is talking about war. And when carsija*[1] talks about something, it's already happening or it's about to happen.’

 

‘Carsija is nuts. Do you read the newspapers, my dear? Would all these clever people just sit around and let a war happen?’

 

‘Whatever. I hope you’re right,’ Dejan muttered. ‘In any case, the baby is going to the orphanage.’

 

‘No!’ she almost yelled.

 

‘Now, look here’, he glowered, ‘I’ve had enough of birds with broken wings, cats with three legs, beggars knocking at our door all the time. And now this. I won't have it any more.’

 

Seeing her husband more agitated than ever, Dzana fell silent. She held the baby to her chest protectively. Her little orphan! The baby started to fidget and Dzana attempted a lullaby. As she carried the baby tenderly around the room, something on his neck shone, and the little one smiled again. She gently took the baby's necklace out and observed a pendant with a sparkling green stone in it.

 

She turned it over, and on the other side of the gold pendant the name ‘DAN’ was engraved.

 

‘His name is Dan,’ she said gently.

 

‘You see, he's not just a baby. He's somebody’s baby,” Dejan said, feeling vindicated.

 

**** *

 

Eldin was a leading Sarajevan and Bosnian authority on heraldry, family crests and ancient insignia. The young professor assured me that the coat of arms on the shield didn't belong to any particular family in Sarajevo or anywhere in the Balkans. A dark eagle with outstretched wings on a light background was a common symbol of strength and courage in Mediaeval and Roman times, he said.

 

‘Having said that, we can't exclude the possibility that the knight and the lady painted on the facade were inspired by traditional Balkan heroic folk poetry. The painting of a Herzegovinian girl by Djordje Krstic comes to mind. It shows a lady in a long dress, a little bit like this one.’ Eldin tapped on the photo in front of him, as though keeping time with some silent music, 'But somehow I don't think so,' he said. ‘The lady on the facade is more ethereal, her face is radiant. Yes, artists from all over the world have gladly used characters from Greek and Roman mythology. Sarajevo is no exception. At the start of the 20th century there was still a vogue for the neo-Romantic Secessionist style. It made use of Classical motifs, sometimes presenting Hercules, for example, as a mediaeval knight.’

 

‘So you reckon the knight on the facade could be Hercules?’

 

‘It could just as easily be Achilles, or Odysseus. It could be a knight from German mythology. Hard to know.’

 

‘How about a knight from Bosnia?’

 

‘If he were a figure from mediaeval Bosnia, his clothes would be heavier. In the 15th century, for example, each knight wore multiple pieces of armour, which made mobility very difficult. Also, some of the basic rules of heraldry don't seem to apply to this fresco. The type of shield doesn't correspond to the type of helmet, and the helmet doesn't correspond to the knight's light outfit. In fact, the helmet looks like a ceremonial helmet from the 19th century, and the longish, heart shaped shield would be more at home in the early Middle Ages. Only the spear suits every era.’

 

Eldin stopped tapping on the photo and straightened up in his chair, like a judge ready to deliver a verdict.

 

‘So my guess is that the artist did the painting according to his own vision of a knight. The lady...well....I hope you'll get the photo enlarged. I can't see clearly. There may be important details on her dress, especially around the hem. Now I can only guess things, as the facade is old and the paint is peeling. But what I find most puzzling is the detailed depiction of the faces.’

 

‘Oh, now we're talking!’ I said, delighted to hear what I was hoping for.

 

Eldin smiled wryly and said, ‘Well, it could be the case that members of the family were presented in an idealised form, dressed as a mediaeval lady and her knight. Maybe you should take new photos, showing all the details?’

Oh, I'll do that,’ I promised. ‘Still, do you think this could really be the case? That these could be the faces of family members, simply rendered as ancient gods or noblemen?’

 

 

‘From what I understand, artists all over the world were sometimes asked to paint wealthy family members in that vein, and the portraits came to be regarded from one generation to the next as sort of family protectors, or even ghosts.’

 

‘Get away. A family ghost with a hole in the chest! How dead can someone be?’

 

Eldin looked at me quizzically for a second, and then he chuckled. ‘That's the question, isn't it?’ Then a cloud covered his face. ‘Frankly, the lady in the fresco looks to me as though she's been badly pierced in the chest,’ he said quietly.

 

‘Oh, you mean by the spear?’

 

'Well, she's holding the spear, isn't she?’

 

‘She certainly is.’

 

‘And she might be leaning on the spear for support?’

 

‘Ah, we’re on the same page there. But why do you say she was pierced?’

 

‘That's just my own impression, not a scientific opinion, so don't quote me on that,' Eldin looked at me, a little guiltily.

‘Don't worry, professor’, I said, ‘I understand. But as a matter of fact I happen to know the cause of that wound’

 

I shared what I had learned about shrapnel bouncing off the embankment and ruining the harmony of the ancient gods. What I couldn't share with him, or anyone else for that matter, not yet anyway, was that the lady in the fresco looked strikingly like my seventeen-year-old son. My beloved stepson.

 

The next step, we agreed, was to find out who the architect of the building was – and who painted the fresco.

 

*

 

What was most intriguing in the appearance of the lady on the facade was the fact that she had not been shot in the heart, like her knight. Instead, the shrapnel had entered the place where Indians believe the chakra to be, the place where the soul resides. The fine looking lady with gentle curls resting on her shoulders appeared to me like someone asking, ‘But my soul? What will become of it?’

 

I remembered a friend in Singapore who wore a necklace with a large seashell pendant on it. When I asked about the pendant, she told me she had received it while travelling around Thailand, ‘to keep her soul in its place’. As though the soul can decide one day, for no particular reason, to take leave of the body. Maybe it can. I would now understand if a soul, after such a horrific shrapnel wound, decided to take a pretty long walk, far, far from here. Much as I had done.

 

Singapore had been far enough: further than India, my mother would tell our neighbours when she was describing where I lived from 1993 to 1996. There are no Bosniaks, Croats or Serbs, or not so many of us – she would wink meaningfully at that – in Singapore. Instead, there are Chinese, Indians, Malays...

 

And Mark, my sweet Australian knight, who had taken me there. In 1993 Bosnia and Herzegovina seemed to me a synonym for chaos, and Singapore was exactly the opposite. Everything was arranged, settled.

 

Apart from me.

 

I was madly in love. My Mark was handsome, witty, soft-spoken. Incredibly clever. Why else would I have left everything and gone with him?

 

‘And why not? Isn't it better to be alive and in love on the other side of the globe than to be a noted, but dead, journalist in Sarajevo? And you are well on your way down that second track,’ my worried friends would say.

 

Several foreign television crews came to record my supposedly brave journey on foot from the daily press conference at UN headquarters in the PTT building to my workplace in the basement shelter of the demolished daily newspaper building. In front of the cameras I appeared very young, very thin, yet convinced that I was doing the right thing.

 

‘We want to live together,’I said in English with a strong Bosnian accent. It would be such an ordinary and unimportant thing to say in other circumstances. Now, when lots of people were at each other's throats, simply because of different names, someone wanting them all to live together was news.

 

By the spring of 1993 everyone had made their own choice. There were those who ran away at the beginning of the war, and for a long time I had felt a slight repulsion towards them. There were those who joined the other side, and I was not sure if I should start being afraid of them. And there were those who hung on, like me, believing that simply by staying we would make those hillbillies think twice before they decide to fire a gun. They can't shoot at such an incredibly mixed Sarajevo crowd, I believed.

 

The cameras then recorded my colleague Semir, a photo reporter, and me, hurrying to work and dodging sniper-fire together. Me, a Christian, and he, a Muslim, running for our lives together.

 

‘Could you hold hands?’ one of the crew shouted. We looked at each other, puzzled.

 

‘I beg your pardon?’ I said.

 

The man behind the camera cleared his throat and said it would make a much more interesting story if we held hands. We burst out laughing.

 

‘Let's just imagine he is helping you run faster, and that's why he is holding your hand,’ the cameraman offered.

 

‘OK. What do we have to lose? If that’s going to help stop the war?!’ my colleague giggled.

 

‘Ah, what the heck!’ I sighed and held my colleague’s hand. But the cameras couldn't be fooled. We didn't really look like a romantic couple. We were more like a brother and sister, Hansel and Gretel, escaping from the witch's house.

 

*

 

Is it brave when you dodge sniper-fire out of boredom?

 

After an initial feeling of dread at the beginning of the war, I knew I simply could not survive sitting in the basement and waiting for the war to end. Will the shelling finish me today or not? Or will it knock me down a bit later when I go out to collect wood or water? In all the threatening unpredictability, moving meant living. And I did harbor the dubious hope that my journalistic questions, my modest writing would be read or heard by someone important enough to stop the unbelievable turmoil in my country. Whoever he or she might be.

 

 [1] Carsija (from Turkish) normally means market place, but in this context it refers to (town) rumor.

 

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Lisa Scullard wrote 664 days ago

This is the first book I've read on here (since joining a few weeks ago!) that immediately lives up to its category of Literary Fiction - I would call it 'contemporary literary fiction'. I felt confident from the opening lines that this was an author with an interesting, unique tale to tell.

Congratulations and best wishes, Lisa (Death And The City - sorry for the delay in responding to your most original book!)

Benjamin Dancer wrote 565 days ago

Well that’s a hell of an opener, isn’t it. Got my attention.

I appreciated the way you kept coming back to the hole, using it to expand the story.

The details 1918, 17 occupants—give your narrative authority.

By now—just prior to April 1992—I’m in a mystery. I didn’t expect that, but am interested in the quest.
I was ready for and ate up the scene with Eldin. You’ve got me.

Wow! Why hasn’t this seen the light of day. This is as good as any I’ve read in the genre. You bring a perspective that is larger than the war—battles, key figures, politics, etc. You’ve really zeroed in on something more intriguing.

Elements of the da Vinci Code and other thrillers.

Kaychristina wrote 694 days ago

Marija, this is a fine work, told with heart and soul - one that has been protected well, I think! The opening stuns, even more so when later we find out the symbolism of where the hole in the lady's chest lies, and wonder at the fate of her soul.

The characterizations, as we dip into each episode of Jasna's life, are superb, even those we meet only briefly. It's an interesting style, if that's the right word, as the story goes back and forth in time. It's something that rarely works, but I believe you have it down to a fine art. I wasn't sure, at first, about the episode with the baby in the middle of it all, but now feel it is either a slice of that war-torn place, or of course an important thread to the story Jasna feels compelled to research. Singapore steams, as does Jasna's time with Mark. Her feelings, soft as well as practicality borne of the life she has led, shine so true. The episodes with her friend and the fortune tellers bring a depth to be pondered for a long time, as well as great humor. New York and the stranger... a strange slice of NY life! Back in time we go, and a well-observed profundity that again, will be pondered by both Jasna and the reader for a long time as in *history repeats itself*. And now we are in Sarajevo again, with a heart-breaking letter for Jasna to deliver. And we wonder, too, what will become of Jasna now.

A truly stunning work, Marija, and the imagination you showed in your *Chimney Sweep* play, shows with this book just where such imagination comes from. Backed with heartfelt wishes for your success, sure that you SHALL have that million dollars, just as Jasna says she will......!

Kay
(Waystation to Prosperity Street)

Brian Bandell wrote 739 days ago

The opening fantastic. It's a vivid setting, strong characters and a great hook to keep me interested. It's an adventurous lifestyle in a dangerous place. And the romance works as well.

I think your pitch needs a little bit of work, as it's not specific enough. I hope you have a strong query letter because agents should really give this a shot.

I'll gladly back this.

Brian
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Marija F.Sullivan wrote 12 days ago

What a lovely surprise to receive such a substantial review! Thank you so much! I hope to be able to reciprocate in a couple of days.
Regarding your question, indeed, it was my intention to humanize the lady presented in the fresco.
Later on, in the final chapters (alas, not uploaded here), there is a reason for that.
Huge thanks for all of your suggestions. Will consider them most carefully.
Very best wishes and best regards,
Marija




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Hi Marija,

Sorry it's taken me so long to comment and thanks so much for backing me.

You have a very impressive book here. A great topic with some skilful execution which I think could be helped by a little tightening up of the prose in places.

As many have mentioned, your opening image is breathtaking and the slow piecing together of the plot is very impressively handled. You manage to jump between chronologies very successfully whilst still taking the reader along with you and without leaving us confused.

A very worthwhile effort, you are clearly a writer with something to say.

Here are my close comments.

A woman in a long, grey dress stopped me as I strolled beside the River Miljacka in the centre of Sarajevo. There was a hole IN HER CHEST the size of a clenched fist .
-Also when you say "stopped me" it sounds like she is alive and trying to get your attention. Was this your intention? I found it a little confusing later when you are talking about the painting.

The door of the three-storey house was A LITTLE WAY open.

I told him I wrote books, and that I had been SURPRISED by the lady with the hole in her chest.
-astonished is too strong

My family and I lived in these FEW square metres,

I hesitated at THE threshold.

trace of the first owners had been lost, he was confident. Yet I had a tingling sensation in the back of my head that there must be a trace left somewhere.
-As readers we don't know yet why she is so interested in the painting and such strong language as this feels strange before we realise she's has a connection to it. Perhaps have her express her need for information earlier - even without revealing the connection to her son.

‘And what ABOUT our three daughters!’


Now I can only GUESS, as the facade is old and the paint is peeling.

I happen to know the cause of that wound.’
-punctuation = .

decided to take a LONG walk, far, far from here.

would tell our neighbours when she was describing where I HAD LIVED. There are no
-years aren't necessary in this sentence, it makes it too technical.

This is a fascinating opening to your book. I'd love to read more when I one day get more time.

Well done and best of luck,

best wishes

Benedict
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benedict wrote 12 days ago

Hi Marija,

Sorry it's taken me so long to comment and thanks so much for backing me.

You have a very impressive book here. A great topic with some skilful execution which I think could be helped by a little tightening up of the prose in places.

As many have mentioned, your opening image is breathtaking and the slow piecing together of the plot is very impressively handled. You manage to jump between chronologies very successfully whilst still taking the reader along with you and without leaving us confused.

A very worthwhile effort, you are clearly a writer with something to say.

Here are my close comments.

A woman in a long, grey dress stopped me as I strolled beside the River Miljacka in the centre of Sarajevo. There was a hole IN HER CHEST the size of a clenched fist .
-Also when you say "stopped me" it sounds like she is alive and trying to get your attention. Was this your intention? I found it a little confusing later when you are talking about the painting.

The door of the three-storey house was A LITTLE WAY open.

I told him I wrote books, and that I had been SURPRISED by the lady with the hole in her chest.
-astonished is too strong

My family and I lived in these FEW square metres,

I hesitated at THE threshold.

trace of the first owners had been lost, he was confident. Yet I had a tingling sensation in the back of my head that there must be a trace left somewhere.
-As readers we don't know yet why she is so interested in the painting and such strong language as this feels strange before we realise she's has a connection to it. Perhaps have her express her need for information earlier - even without revealing the connection to her son.

‘And what ABOUT our three daughters!’


Now I can only GUESS, as the facade is old and the paint is peeling.

I happen to know the cause of that wound.’
-punctuation = .

decided to take a LONG walk, far, far from here.

would tell our neighbours when she was describing where I HAD LIVED. There are no
-years aren't necessary in this sentence, it makes it too technical.

This is a fascinating opening to your book. I'd love to read more when I one day get more time.

Well done and best of luck,

best wishes

Benedict
puppyface25@hotmail.com (2012-05-02). Authonomy 8 (Kindle Locations 657-658). Unknown. Kindle Edition.
puppyface25@hotmail.com (2012-05-02). Authonomy 8 (Kindle Locations 654-655). Unknown. Kindle Edition.
puppyface25@hotmail.com (2012-05-02). Authonomy 8 (Kindle Location 638). Unknown. Kindle Edition.
puppyface25@hotmail.com (2012-05-02). Authonomy 8 (Kindle Locations 606-607). Unknown. Kindle Edition.
puppyface25@hotmail.com (2012-05-02). Authonomy 8 (Kindle Locations 547-548). Unknown. Kindle Edition.



puppyface25@hotmail.com (2012-05-02). Authonomy 8 (Kindle Locations 525-526). Unknown. Kindle Edition.

puppyface25@hotmail.com (2012-05-02). Authonomy 8 (Kindle Location 521). Unknown. Kindle Edition.
puppyface25@hotmail.com (2012-05-02). Authonomy 8 (Kindle Location 511). Unknown. Kindle Edition.
puppyface25@hotmail.com (2012-05-02). Authonomy 8 (Kindle Location 471). Unknown. Kindle Edition.


puppyface25@hotmail.com (2012-05-02). Authonomy 8 (Kindle Location 452). Unknown. Kindle Edition.


puppyface25@hotmail.com (2012-05-02). Authonomy 8 (Kindle Locations 442-443). Unknown. Kindle Edition.

Adeel wrote 31 days ago

A very fantastic and imaginative read. Your style of telling story is quite lucid and writing is polished and crispy. Highly rated.

GCleare wrote 109 days ago

Marija - I confess I know next to nothing about Sarajevo and thought I would have a hard time reading this...but in fact, it flows beautifully and your English is flawless. The story line is intriguing as well, and the image of the woman with a hole in her heart is stunning. This book is way under-rated on this website and you are obviously a very talented, professional writer. Wondering if the title sounds daunting to Authonomy readers? I envy your flexibility with language. I am going to put your book into the rotation on my shelf and recommend it to my mother in law, who is a former teacher and would love it. High stars! ~Gail SECRETS WE KEEP

sensual elle wrote 112 days ago

By coincidence I interviewed a woman from Sarajevo this afternoon and we spoke briefly of a few of these things. Literary fiction, backed!

faith rose wrote 160 days ago

This is a beautiful piece of literature! I read the first 3 chapters, and I'm completely amazed by your compelling style and gift for storytelling. Although the "hole in the chest" has received many positive comments here already, I must whole-heartedly agree with its profound effect. Amazing. You are truly a talented writer. Starring highly and on my WL.
All the very best,
Faith Rose
Now To Him

Marija F.Sullivan wrote 202 days ago

Thank you so much for your lovely support, Harriet.

I've read this several times now, on Authonomy and off, and, as ever, it's the image in the opening paragraph that draws me back to the book. It is, quite literally, arresting, and I am pleased to say its impact loses nothing with familiarity. I am so pleased the whole text is now available elsewhere. I wish you all the best with it. Harriet

HarrietG wrote 202 days ago

I've read this several times now, on Authonomy and off, and, as ever, it's the image in the opening paragraph that draws me back to the book. It is, quite literally, arresting, and I am pleased to say its impact loses nothing with familiarity. I am so pleased the whole text is now available elsewhere. I wish you all the best with it. Harriet

Marija F.Sullivan wrote 208 days ago

I very much appreciate your comment and I'm well aware that I can't please all tastes, especially those readers who take things literally.
Regards, M

This is perhaps a bit unfair, as your work is obviously intended to build on itself, but your style and word choices make it rough going for me. I am what might be described as a 'concrete' thinker and tend to take my reading material in it's most natural and literate sense. With that in mind there is much in your opening sequence that bogs down my absorbing your tale as I puzzle over your details and word choices.

"A woman... stopped me" this is a very strong phrase with a compelling verb that implies forceful action by an external force. In your context 'I was stopped by the figure of a woman' would lead the reader in a more true direction. If your intent was to be ambiguous, 'I was stopped by the sight of a woman' perhaps.

'hundred-year-old' or 'hundred year old' but not "hundred-year old"

The structure of the next sentence left me wondering who was being shaded, the viewer or fresco.

"The figure... was holding a spear" ("of a lady" is un-necessary).

The third paragraph (again) is much too familiar in terms, suitable for a living woman, but causing confusion in regards to a 'drawing'.

In the forth paragraph "solid" and "sturdy" mean essentially the same thing.


Well, you can see how your style affects a reader who has a mindset for 'concrete' images. You could bring these consideration well into the rest of your storyline to some benefit. These insights are just that - insights from the mind of a single reader; like all critique to be weighed and accepted or discarded as suits your style and intent.

Good luck in getting published.

RLKirkland wrote 209 days ago

This is perhaps a bit unfair, as your work is obviously intended to build on itself, but your style and word choices make it rough going for me. I am what might be described as a 'concrete' thinker and tend to take my reading material in it's most natural and literate sense. With that in mind there is much in your opening sequence that bogs down my absorbing your tale as I puzzle over your details and word choices.

"A woman... stopped me" this is a very strong phrase with a compelling verb that implies forceful action by an external force. In your context 'I was stopped by the figure of a woman' would lead the reader in a more true direction. If your intent was to be ambiguous, 'I was stopped by the sight of a woman' perhaps.

'hundred-year-old' or 'hundred year old' but not "hundred-year old"

The structure of the next sentence left me wondering who was being shaded, the viewer or fresco.

"The figure... was holding a spear" ("of a lady" is un-necessary).

The third paragraph (again) is much too familiar in terms, suitable for a living woman, but causing confusion in regards to a 'drawing'.

In the forth paragraph "solid" and "sturdy" mean essentially the same thing.

Well, you can see how your style affects a reader who has a mindset for 'concrete' images. You could bring these consideration well into the rest of your storyline to some benefit. These insights are just that - insights from the mind of a single reader; like all critique to be weighed and accepted or discarded as suits your style and intent.

Good luck in getting published.

Dianna Lanser wrote 215 days ago

Marija,

Your book Sarajevo, Walls of Fate is like a geography book. It allows the reader to experience different places and people through the eyes of journalist, Jasna. It makes us hope for peace for war-torn Yugoslavia and a lasting love for this trusting, young woman. You took me on such a journey, that I found I had to read very carefully, the scenes changed very quickly and my mind had to continually adjust to a new cultures, situations, and characters. But I kept reading, trusting that all the pieces would come together. Your writing is flawless and a tribute to the beauty, strength, and giftedness of the people of Sarajevo. Highly starred.

Dianna Lanser
Nothing But The Blood

a.morrison712 wrote 235 days ago

Okay, I read through your first chapter. I'm going to start by saying that I do not comment on grammar as I do not feel that I am strong enough in that area to do so. If you wish for me to read more than the first chapter just let me know. Also, I am a new writer so take my advice with a grain of salt. Here is where my impressions of your story:

Characterization was good. I specifically enjoyed Jasna. My one concern was when she was introduced. At first I didn't know if she was greeting someone and saying their name or if she was introducing herself. I read on though and it was made clear. Just something to be aware of. Anyways, her dialogue was authentic and I enjoyed it. She had a voice of her own and I really like your descriptions of how off put she is by the hole in the chest of statue.

I enjoyed the POV, thought it was executed well and did justice to the story. Paced well and that your target audience will stay right with you through the narrative. Good luck with this and I predict this will be at the ED before too long! On my WL for now(and unofficial one) and given five stars.

Best,

Ashley
"Maddy Hatfield and the Magic Locket"

Ana Lua wrote 279 days ago

It is the first time, out of all the books that I have read so far here, that when I reached the end of the second chapter I felt disapp
ointed. I wanted to read more. Unfortunately at the moment, two chapters is my limit since I have so many people waiting for exchanging comments.
I have to say, these first two chapters have been a pleasure to read and I feel incredibly honoured that you have backed my book.
Everything in them flows. The dialogue is superb. I love how the snippets of information are intertwined. I love the atmosphere that you create leaving so much unsaid. I hate too much information.
But what I love more is that, I don't know how you manage it, but, somehow, if feels deeply sad, poignant.
I did not notice any typos either.
The first two chapters are just BEAUTIFUL.
Best of luck with it!

strachan gordon wrote 304 days ago

Hello Marija , I've just been looking at your book and was interested in the Sarajevo setting , a place most people in the UK have heard of , but know very little about , though the image that always abides is that of ordinary people trying to get to work under sniper fire. So you have chosen a very dramatic place to set a novel and a most suitable one. The tone and structure of the book is clever and ,of course, you started with an effective hook , with the lady and the hole in her chest and the introduction of the abandoned baby heightens tension at once , because the reader immediately starts to worry about the baby. I wonder if you you would have time (if you have nothing more constructive to do ) to look at the first chapter of my novel 'A Buccaneer' which is an historical , adventure romance set in the 17th c entury and includes lost love, the Great Plague of London, Cambridge University , Sir Henry Morgan , the attack on Panama 1671, a five handed duel, , Spanish Ladies and much more ,with best wishes, Strachan Gordon

Andy M. Potter wrote 308 days ago

hi Marija, fine writing. enticing start. starred and shelved.
i'm captured. i'm also a picky sort when i like something. will read on to see if i have any very minor edits to offer.
very best wishes, andy

Kenneth Edward Lim wrote 315 days ago

Marija,
"Sarajevo Walls of Fate" offering vignettes in the life of Jasna, your erstwhile journalist turned seeker of love in unusual places, war-torn Bosnia, straitlaced Singapore, feckless New York, is absolutely fascinating. Like studying depictions on rare tapestry. The straightforward style of your narrative worded simply and vividly brought to light the introspective thoughts of your main character, expalining the reason why she would flee the love professed by a spineless, flighty man masquerading as Prince Charming. Thank you so much.

Kenneth Edward Lim
The North Korean

Nigel Fields wrote 317 days ago

I am very, very impressed with Sarajevo Walls of Fate. Told with honesty and craft, it's a pleasure to read. Quality. Atmospheric and detailed where it should be, while sparsity of prose is utilized to great effect when appropriate. Jasna's story resounds with meaning. A six-star read.
Best,
John Campbell

zrinka wrote 362 days ago

Zdravo, kako ide? Super ti je knjiga.

Lindsey J wrote 381 days ago

Fabulous start, Marija.... Why does the woman have a hole in her chest? What is the woman? Think this has teased me to read on and check this one out. Suggest you maybe add a few breathing spaces as paragraph 2 and 3 are hard to read out loud, if you try it, you'll see. Just needs a few comma's and a bit of a tidy up. Lindsey J
To Paint A White Horse.

M. A. McRae. wrote 391 days ago

A wandering narrative, a musing tone, polished and well written. A minor typo I noticed in the first chapter, 'etherial' should be 'ethereal,' (unless it's a quite different word you had in mind.)
Well done, and to be backed, Marj.

NannyReilly wrote 471 days ago

Marija,

"Chim chiminy, chim chiminy, chim chim cheroo,
Good luck will rub off when I shake hands with you.
Chim chiminy, chim chiminy, chim chim cheroo,
Blow me a kiss, and that's lucky too."
..............From Mary Poppins

That song came right into my head as your chimney sweep was relaying his encounters. I enjoyed the first two acts of your play. It's also a pantomime or possibly a musical with the right songs. It's good enough to be in the Gaiety Theater in Dublin, and if it's good enough for Dublin, it's good enough for the rest of the world.

Looking forward to the rest,
Annette

Fifi Bergere wrote 539 days ago

This important book put me in mind of "The Bookseller of Kabul". The confident, simple style is a joy to read. There's a heart felt honesty to this book. It tackles a very important question - how do you recover from having witnessed the very worst humanity has to offer?

Florrie C wrote 554 days ago

Interesting first page and the pace went well. I will read more when I have better time available for concentration. Good so far.

Marija F.Sullivan wrote 557 days ago

Thank you so much, Carolina Al.
Your comments made me work harder and hopefully better. And I will make sure to fix other little bits, too.
Very best wishes to you,
M
- Weekend Chimney Sweep or Happy New Year
- Sarajevo Walls of Fate



I reread your first chapter.

General comments: I like your revisions. Whatever you did, the story seems to flow faster. The dialogue seems more engaging. This is an appealing story with a believable main character.

Specific comments on chapter 1:
1) "Whatever. I hope you are right." Dejan muttered. Comma after 'right.'
2) There are still several instances where the close quote mark is missing from the end of dialogue. Here are some example (but there are more cases than these examples):
a) "... and now this. I won't have it any more.
b) 'It made use of classical motifs, for example Hercules sometimes as a mediaeval knight (also note that a period is missing from the end of this sentence)
c) 'Hard to know.
3) "He's SOMEBODY's baby." No need to write in all capitals. If you want to emphasize a word, the normal way is to italicize the word. Readers undertand that italicized words are emphasis words.

As you can see, my list of suggestions is minimal which is testament to your revision skill. Thanks for supporting "Savannah Passion" in the past. Should "Savannah Passion" make it into the top five books next month, I hope that you will return it to your shelf and keep it there until it is selected for the editor's desk.

Have a fine day.

CarolinaAl wrote 557 days ago

I reread your first chapter.

General comments: I like your revisions. Whatever you did, the story seems to flow faster. The dialogue seems more engaging. This is an appealing story with a believable main character.

Specific comments on chapter 1:
1) "Whatever. I hope you are right." Dejan muttered. Comma after 'right.'
2) There are still several instances where the close quote mark is missing from the end of dialogue. Here are some example (but there are more cases than these examples):
a) "... and now this. I won't have it any more.
b) 'It made use of classical motifs, for example Hercules sometimes as a mediaeval knight (also note that a period is missing from the end of this sentence)
c) 'Hard to know.
3) "He's SOMEBODY's baby." No need to write in all capitals. If you want to emphasize a word, the normal way is to italicize the word. Readers undertand that italicized words are emphasis words.

As you can see, my list of suggestions is minimal which is testament to your revision skill. Thanks for supporting "Savannah Passion" in the past. Should "Savannah Passion" make it into the top five books next month, I hope that you will return it to your shelf and keep it there until it is selected for the editor's desk.

Have a fine day.

Benjamin Dancer wrote 565 days ago

Well that’s a hell of an opener, isn’t it. Got my attention.

I appreciated the way you kept coming back to the hole, using it to expand the story.

The details 1918, 17 occupants—give your narrative authority.

By now—just prior to April 1992—I’m in a mystery. I didn’t expect that, but am interested in the quest.
I was ready for and ate up the scene with Eldin. You’ve got me.

Wow! Why hasn’t this seen the light of day. This is as good as any I’ve read in the genre. You bring a perspective that is larger than the war—battles, key figures, politics, etc. You’ve really zeroed in on something more intriguing.

Elements of the da Vinci Code and other thrillers.

Marija F.Sullivan wrote 565 days ago

During the updating process I lost all my backings.

Suzanne Adams wrote 570 days ago

Captured in the first sentence - brilliant.

Marija F.Sullivan wrote 572 days ago

Thank you, CarolinaAl for your time and dissecting Ch.1. Revamp will take place soon.

CarolinaAl wrote 572 days ago

I read your first chapter. Due the number of errors, I didn't read further.

General impressions: You've given us an appealing story with a believable main character. Well described settings. The dialogue is natural, but not very interesting. You're not making full use of narrative. I'd like to see more of the point of view character's thoughts and reactions. The story develops very slowly in the first chapter. Too slowly for my taste. Perhaps too slowly for the thriller market.

Specifics:
1) Your opening paragraph hooked me.
2) 'Built in the Austrian style' doesn't bring an image to my mind because I don't know what Austrian stairs look like.
3) 'Why did you kill them?' I asked an incarcerated, frail looking Serb prisoner-of-war. 'Can I have a cigarette?' the young man answered back, endless pleading in his eyes. This one paragraph should be two. Each time a new person speaks, start a new paragraph.
4) The present owners live abroad and who knows if they will ever come back. Either write all in present tense or all in past tense. Whatever you do, don't write in both. Since most of this chapter is in past tense, shift this sentence and the one after it to past tense. There are many more cases of switching in to and out of present tense. This is huge. You need to correct this. If you don't correct anything else, correct this problem for sure.
5) The dialogue that begins 'It could just as easily be Achiles ...' needs a closed quote. There are many more cases of this type of problem.
6) Nice use of similies. For example, 'like a judge ready to deliver a verdict.'
7) The lady ... well .... When using ellipses ( ... ), only use three dots. Using four dots is unusual and pulls the reader out of your story while they try to decide what you mean with four dots. You don't want that.
8) 'Oh, I'll do that as soon as tomorrow' I promised. Comma after 'tomorrow.' When a dialogue tag (ie: I promised) follows dialogue, the last sentence of dialogue is punctuated with a comma.
9) Eldin said a little guiltily. 'Mind you ...' Comma after 'guiltily.' When a dialogue tag (ie: Eldin said a little guiltily) preceeds dialogue, the dialogue tag is punctuated with a comma. There are more cases of this type of problem.
10) SOMEBODY'S No need to write in all capitals. Writing in all capitals is unusual and pulls the reader out of your story while they try to determine what you mean by all capitals. You don't want that to happen.

That's all I have for you. I hope it helps. Remember, this critique is just my opinion. Take what you find helpful and discard the rest.

SusieGulick wrote 577 days ago

Dear Marija, I had forgotten you had a 2nd book, so re-read it because I wasn't sure which one you had added to. :) This is so touching. :) A Persian cat :) - what a wonderful gift. :) Would that anyone would be so gracious to me! :) You have put me right there with you in the traumatic story to see what really was happening during this war & your love story really set it off, especially the letters printed out. :) Both of your books are so well written. :) Love, Susie :)

DMHeadley wrote 580 days ago

Just as brill as your other book :)

Dawn
Sammy and the Wise Willow

Marija F.Sullivan wrote 582 days ago

I will upload it soon, Orlando. Cheers, M

You have my curiosity. I went looking for Ch 4.

Orlando Furioso wrote 583 days ago

You have my curiosity. I went looking for Ch 4.

Orlando Furioso wrote 583 days ago

I can see why the disappointment of being let down in love in Singapore might not feel so bad after witnessing far worse things. Of course after being caught up in a civil war in one's own town, one might be desperate for love as a sort of consolation. But life is cruel and snatches away the consolation even. And the old bombardment tireness returns.

Orlando Furioso wrote 583 days ago

Ch 3
"Go and never come back" ............ you have me. I am fully attuned now. The NY lightness serves as a supurb contrast to that ominous statement and the words immediately following it.
I love history.
Ach, I have three children and I can see my youngest who is 13 raising his hand. I also ruffle his hair for good luck. "Comrade" ach, we don't hear that word too often now. 'The words sat in my stomach like bad ice-cream' I like that. I also ate too much cheese cake late last night. Like the father, this Englishman has often reflected that his grandather fought in France and his father in India and I have fought nowhere. But I have two boys. We are ... nearly ... there ...
"On may 24 1992 ..." not May 23 or May 25 ... I can see the sweeping taking place. Can this be our city? We must clean it up. Away with this! But history, o history! the history I love, repeats itself. The letter is full of dumbfoundment at the consequences of being caught up in said repeating history... Tis a beautiful piece of writing because it is from the heart of a dying man who is telling certain truths he was not able to say in life. He is consoling himself as the pain is driving him insane by focusing on the hopes and dreams of a better time. There are several outstanding lines in the letter 'I have several pieces of shrapnel in my legs.' 'More shelling. No more knocking.' Are you going to make me weep Marija F. Sullivan? '...your brown eyes painted with golden spots.' '...we learnt how to build things, not this.' Ach, he is going. '...I am the four-year old I once was.' He is writing. We write. But not like him. Ach ... I am an editor ... and he dropped a word, he dropped a word ... the dying man dropped a word ... And the irony of wanting to be a war corro and dreaming of doing a great job. But here? No.

Orlando Furioso wrote 583 days ago

Ch 3
Every reader brings emotion to a story, to a greater or lesser degree.
Here is mine.
Another city! I am ambivalent towards cities. They excite, but they are also made by men for men, and the misanthrope in me ... Ach! But I am travelling with you. So NY... let's see. Ach, a view from the tall building. But I get vertigo. I want to jump. As long as I can't all will be well. As to your question ... something in me wld want nothing to do with the dots. I wld neither move nor be moved by them, but wld remain removed from them. I enjoyed the crazy little insight into NY males, springing out on innocent tourists in the crazy 'can do' way. The best and the worst of the American way? But then he seemed innocent enough in his idiocy. But on other occasions his intrusion might have annoyed. And of course New York being New York, he probably risked being shot. I recall the Pulp song about common people and the line in it 'no one likes a tourist.' But we are all tourists one way or another. But cities, ach! Going to see any performance 101 times is insane! So ... I am reading. (more)

Orlando Furioso wrote 583 days ago

Ch 2.
Sarajevo and Singapore? Hmm. Odd at first glance. But an interesting pairing, one fractious and broken by war, the other efficient and prosperous. I have never been to either, but that is my impression of them. Sing seems a bit souless by all accounts, but efficient. I was puzzled that the story should pull so far away from the wounded statue, literally. But I suppose Sarjevo was a place to flee and life is far more unpredictable in its twists than any novel, so why not S >S. I then got into the romance. I like the '...frantic obervation of th elush plant-pots in the window.' (pot-plants better?) Hmm, a bit shifty? No matter. I loved the cannaries detail, far better than shells and sniper rounds. But what is this? 'All gone'? What kind of man is this? He saves his love and then deserts her? And what odd behaviour, crashing around at night...the plates and the ants... And then 'You see, that's why I didn't wake you up...' A very odd man. I liked the job interview, esp how the gentlemen became very serious on the subject of money, a far more important subject to them than Sarajevo (and the reason all the money is heading out of our pocket and their way). Ach, and now the man's been gone 11 days and I hate him! I didn't follow the Khalwat angle, but then I am a western bloke and... The shocking break up, worse, desertion, in a far off place is taken stoically, with a woman's strength. But what else was to be done? The is again wry wit in the fortune tellers and I can see the 'mouthful of rotten teeth.' And then you remind me of Sarajevo and how you have taken it with you. 'I suddenly felt very sleepy, the same feeling I had during the biggest bombardments of Sarajevo.' So I read on.

Orlando Furioso wrote 583 days ago

Criticism of ch 1. I didn't immediately follow the orphan issue. I liked the wounded statue at the start and the 1993 insight at the end, but the baby foxed me a little. I suppose many children were hurt in the war in different ways and children symbolise peace. But the 1993 graph was paydirt for me. I suppose I am interested in human conflict.

Orlando Furioso wrote 583 days ago

I've read to the end of Ch 1 now.
i thought this graph very significant .. 'By the spring of 1993 everyone had made their choice. etc etc.' Very strong and it appeals to my initial reason for reading a Sarajevo story I confess, for the conflict. A preceding graph, 'Everything was arranged, settled.' fits in with the 1993 graph on a personal, romancit level. I really like 'Is it brave when yo dodge sniper-fire out of boredom?' and the wryness of the preciding image of 'Hansel and Gretel, escaping from the witche's house.' The ref to a old European tale roots the Balken tragedy in the broader European folklore and context. It made me think of Europe as the witche's house. Never again, people said in 1945 and 1918, etc.

Orlando Furioso wrote 584 days ago

'Why did you kill them?'
'...waiting, with patient benevolence, for the end of my curiosity...'
'...the madness of shrapnel...'

You have my attention. I am there. I am seeing through your eyes and mind. I have a strange relationship with the Balkans, where i have never been. I see lots of stories about economics from the region and I am both puzzled by it and curious about it. I have a little map in a file to try and get some idea of the new patchwork. I was recently thinking of reading a book about the breakup of Yugoslavia, in part because I have never really been sure about the Blair desire to get on with intervention. Essentially I am ignornant about the region. i know about the faultline between the Ottoman Empire and old Europe of course and 1914 and that Tito was not Moscow's favourite and that he had a holiday home on an island. So I am curious about the region. I have just read THE TUZLA RUN on the site also, a cracking thriller about an aid convoy. Your opening lines make me want to learn more ... I will happily back you and read on... because you have won my curiosity.

Silver_Eyes wrote 584 days ago

I am so glad I took a look at this book. I was blown away by the pitch alone. And after reading the first chapter, all I can think of is reading more. I rarely give such exuberant praise, but it really caught my attention and kept pulling me in deeply. I look forward to reading more and familiarizing myself with your fantastic characters, each of whom are written so well. Good luck to you in this and every other work you write. You are a fantastic writer.

Backed without another thought.


Laura
"Jhevalia"

Silver_Eyes wrote 584 days ago

I am so glad I took a look at this book. I was blown away by the pitch alone. And after reading the first chapter, all I can think of is reading more. I rarely give such exuberant praise, but it really caught my attention and kept pulling me in deeply. I look forward to reading more and familiarizing myself with your fantastic characters, each of whom are written so well. Good luck to you in this and every other work you write. You are a fantastic writer.

Backed without another thought.


Laura
"Jhevalia"

fletcherkovich wrote 589 days ago

Marija-

This is a very intriguing story of how bad things turn to be a good blessing in disguise. The plot is interesting and likeable in so many ways. I commend your clean and creative prose since the highlight is really spotlighted. Your characterization is very convincing to the way that you really make them interactive and realistic. I hope to see your work on the bookshelves in the bookstores. Good luck to your writing endeavours.

FLETCH

Marija F.Sullivan wrote 592 days ago

Thank you so much. Your comment made me think I should write some sort of introduction numbering the true events in this novel. Cheers, M

- Sarajevo Walls of Fate

This is a good story, because for many adults the conflict in and around Sarajevo is still remembered; that makes it different from, say, the Second World War which very few book-buyers today recall at first-hand. Also, it's stated that it is a true story, and these are al ways very interesting. Backed.

Hampstead wrote 592 days ago

This is a good story, because for many adults the conflict in and around Sarajevo is still remembered; that makes it different from, say, the Second World War which very few book-buyers today recall at first-hand. Also, it's stated that it is a true story, and these are always very interesting. Backed.

celticwriter wrote 595 days ago

Me again. Let me know if it doesn't register! :-)

jim

Eunice Attwood wrote 596 days ago

Another wonderful story Marija.Your talent for writing knows no bounds. Well done once again., I am happy to back you. Eunice - The Temple Dancer.

Diana Shelton wrote 600 days ago

--I tend to jot down impressions as I read, may look a bit disjointed but it gives my first, and honest, impression)

Ouch, way to cut a woman's heart Mark.. What a yutz, I can't believe he did that too her. I imagine they had been through a lot together during the war, and now he up's and dumps here. What was the deal with the ants? My first thought was that he had a drug problem and was having some kind of flash back. I hope by little snake he wasn't talking about a baby. Hrm, raises more questions than it answers, good beginning. :)

Rachaelet wrote 601 days ago

I only read the first two chapters, but I'm a fan. I had to reread the first two lines a few times because it caught me so off guard...I love when that happens haha I hope you update more, after I finish the other two chapters you've posted, I'll want to read more. Good luck and happy writing :)

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