Lupus

Dear Stephen, I love your showing your story from the boy/werewof point of view & his feelings. Before I began to read your book, I was prepared by your pitch, which was very well done. :) Your story is good because you create interest by having short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, which makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm "backing" your book. :) "When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved"...authonomy quote. :) Please "back" my TWO memoir books, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" & my completed memoir unedited version? "Tell Me True Love Stories," which tells at the end, my illness now & 6th abusive marriage." Thanks, Susie :)
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Nick Poole2 (formerly known as NickP)

I usually avoid the werewolf (and vampire) worlds. but I took this one for a spin because I was drawn to it, not too sure why, maybe it was the name Lupus, which reminded me of Harry Potter and how Lupus was a werewolf in it. i am sure this is a coincidence but this is waht first caught my attention. this is a fun novel and one i think without a doubt would be very popular in the YA crowd.
Do me a favor and work on your pitch. it's too cut and dry. I think you should spice it up and if you do more people will be drawn to read this.
T.L Tyson-Seeking Eleanor

Hi Steffan. Outstanding accomplishment with remaining in character by keeping the Voice within the earlier dialect and sentence structures. Smooth transitions between scenes and clearly reveal elements of story without creating any confusion with digesting the information. Aside from the first chapter, the characters seemed to have the same tone of Voice, including the narrator. I would be interested in your comments regarding my excerpt. I must for my watchlist. Janet Marie

Finishd chapter 9 now. Enjoyed it all very much. I hope you will put the rest up some time.

Chapter 6 - 'dear' instead of 'deer'

Read to chapter 4 now, still enjoying it a lot...

chapter 4 - wondering = wandering

This is gripping. I shall certainly be back to read the rest.

Just one bit of critical feedback, it was a bit jarring in chapter one swinging from 'good christian' to 'NOT turning the other cheek' back to 'man of peace'.

But i'm very much looking forward to reading on.

Steffan,
I shelved this a week ago because it struck as me as skillful and unlike anything else I'd read on the site.
Your sense of the seventeenth century and setting stands. And that really is quite an achievement plus there's a werewolf in it. But like your narrator, I, too, must be quick. When it comes down to it, do you really need to read all of something to see that someone can write?