HAKTAW HEART

I love this, I read every chapter and I'm desperate for more.

Speechless

Hi Bill,

Stumbled across your book out of the thousands on this site and got hooked on your short pitch! So I started reading, and the next thing you know, its way past my bedtime... This is very good stuff - written with a hand in control of the pen. The sentences blend, your story is riviting and it's page turning (metaphorically speaking!).
I'm hooked. I want more. Either upload the rest of it or get it published now - I need to know what happens... :)

Kari
Stirring up Magic

I’m speechless, but I’ll try to write the review. Once in awhile I come across someone on this site who is so talented, I know they are going to be successful. You’re one of them; and honestly, there aren’t that many. I even selfishly want to stand next to you so the glow of your star shines onto me! That’s how serious I am.

Finally someone not only shows how to do first person POV correctly, but your MC’s voice in this is amazing. Reading this was like going down a water slide. Perhaps it was because I could hear you actually reading this out loud to me as I read it and your impeccable Southern tone is so alluring, but it’s more than that. You utterly nailed the voice in this piece. The voice never falters; it fits the story so very well and you write with this matter o’ fact way that shows how your MC has learned not to accept his fate necessarily, but to use consider it malleable.

This is a dirty, sweaty read. I kept finding myself on edge, wondering what would happen next, but all of my guesses were wrong. For me, one of the hallmarks of well-written fantasy is when enough of it is true that I’m left wondering if it is really true. Your story had me questioning the homeless people who stopped to talk to me, second-guessing the strange drifters I’ve met in restaurants and carefully considering the amount of blood that might have been scrubbed out of my hotel carpeting.

One of the other things that I adore about your writing is the clever phrases you put in…preacher burrito; her skirt is in a puddle; and so many more. Beyond that is the fact that you don’t stifle or morph your humor in this. It exists as an entity in this book, but blends seamlessly so that even in the darkest moments, it is a crack of light twinkling in your story.

I’m completely interested in where this story goes. It is has been so unpredictable so far, I’d like to learn more about the characters and figure out where things lead. Adson has a fresh introspective view on his situation and you’ve written him in a way that he reveals information to the reader, but keeps enough secrets that we are left wondering what else there is to know about him. Since I’ve only read the four chapters you have posted, there is a lot of opportunity for Adson to develop further. So far he has retained his humanistic nature and displayed other-worldly attributes which make me wonder if he will be able to keep this skewed ying-yang of a persona, or if he’ll flip to one of the sides more completely. No matter what you do with the character, I feel like the voice you’re writing him in will successfully carry the reader through this journey with him.

I’m usually disappointed in how men write female characters, but you’ve impressed me with Jennifer. She acts and talks exactly like a girl you’d meet in anytown, America. You aren’t over thinking her or overwriting her, you’ve allowed her to just be. I’d honestly be disappointed if she disappears from the story. I hope she carries on because she has already begun to show an inner strength that I think could handle a character like Adson.

When I read a book on this site, once I get past a certain point, if I haven’t found any blaring grammar, tense, or POV problems, I continue reading just for story, plot and characterization. If you’d like me to go back and do a line by line edit for you, I’d be glad to. Also, if you’d like me to read your full MS, I’d be very happy to. What I’ve read so far, I’ve found to be highly re-readable. It’s one of those books I’d read over and over again and if I lent it out to a friend, I’d get antsy and purchase another copy before they returned my original. I’d give this more than six stars if I could. Thanks for writing something I enjoyed reading.

Lucia
Vein Fire

This piece is compelling. Yes, some minor editing here and there, but that's not the point. This story is strong enough to hold our attention. The first chapter worked slow, but we saw what you we're doing. Building. We don't need a full history on this man, you stick right to the point and let events happen. The threesome for example, it's not tough to see Adson isn't a perfect man but he is not completely jaded at the same time. Then along comes the old woman, with the 'relic'. The description was spot on, as you could not say what it was quite yet and you make the reader wonder. We get a small break, relaxing around with friends and learning about Gelpie. Great twist, you have caused us to have a form of sympathy later in the story because of it.

After Adson places on the necklace, a whirlwind of events occur. You have placed the Haktaw explanation in just the right point. Many authors may choose this spot because it lifts it off the ground, but that wouldn't have made the story work as well. You have paced this well.

Our only qualm is Gelpie when you try to move back into time to try and explain why he was in the room. When you do this, you have to explain after when we are caught back up to the present. You may find it easier to slip him coming in during his time with Jennifer. When Adson heads back, the reader will be more anxious to know what will happen, since they know Gelpie is waiting in that room.

The MC you cannot completely root for and Magdala you can't completely hate. This is a winning piece, and we wish you all the luck with it.

We have placed this upon our shelf with our top promising manuscripts and do not plan on bringing it down for some time.

DG Publishing

well done to you and really hope harper or their contarctor will offer you a contract...
sorry for the delayed though but so the feedback...i was bit lost but as you keep reading...it is interesting as you keep reading... well deserved to be published the sooner the better...i think lots people who have bought and read it will say the same..once again well done amd sorry for the late reply... x

Hi Bill,

Wow. Congratulations on this evaluation of your book. It is one of the more positive assessments I've seen from HC.

Susie Parker, Foul Player

Strong writing, a good pace, and grabbed my interest early. Can't wait to read on.

If you could get a chance and read "The Devil Of Black Bayou" it would be appreciated. It has elements of the "sympathetic monster" in it as well with an examination of humanity as well.

Congrats on the medal and I liked the read. First Person POV alternating with third person and then the way you unfold the story with Adson coming to realise he's the bad guy really - yet there remains some sympathy for him. Interesting premise to have "It" merge into his heart, giving him power but at a price of control. It would be interesting to see how the story plays out in the end. Is there a way to end it? I seem to remember Stephen King treating a curse (such as this is) in Thinner (which I still haven't gotten round to reading!) in some way detrimental to the MC.

Q

Bill,

When I read your story and added your book to my bookshelf, I didn't realize how high you were ranked! I don't know what I can say that will help you at this point, so all I really have is that after reading this, you certainly deserve the rank you have as your writing has earned it! It was a total page-turner, and everything was done so well that I found myself literally on the edge of my seat as I read it.

Great job & congratulations!

-Lexx (Mrs_Gresh)
Soothsayer

I'm loving this book. It was the first one I read when I joined this site. Good Luck to you. Kelly
(The Rise of The New Bloods)

ONLY FOUR MORE HOURS TO GO!!!
This was well deserved! Such a good story!

Courtney
The Echoes

Great Pitch! Sounds like it'd make a good movie!

Beth Davis
I Never Saw It Coming

I was transported to Taos over the Christmas break - such is the power of your writing. What is about lone car journeys and an overactive imagination? What makes this one so creepy is that this is all happening in daylight. Powerful and atmospheric. The reason I think that this book has been so successful is that the characterisation, particularly of Adson is so compelling. Only glad that I didn't read this sentence late night:
'I grip his clavicle and flesh comes off the bone like boiled chicken from the bone.' Highly starred and all the very best for the HC review.
Lambert Nagle - Revolution Earth

Fast moving exciting story pulls me in an instant in its weird world. Opening is so nice. Adson is driving towards Tao fearfully
Magdala is running after him. Really exciting.
Well drawn characters and a smooth style that's your own. You deserve a 6 . But i'm not happy with ending. I got a feeling the story is not over yet.

The opening chapter of this book sets the bar for writing in the first person, captivating my interest from the very outset. The dialogue in the car, in the first chapter was genius, generating an atmosphere of edginess and fear. You can really connect with the main character as he questions his sanity. For me, this is easily worthy of the 6 stars I have given it.
Well Done!

Wow, awesome read....I couldn't stop reading.....which is something I reader craves to hear. I found a couple of comma errors, but was so engrossed in the reading, I didn't stop to take note of them. GREAT JOB!!!

I hope you are working on finishing this great piece of work?! You were actually getting to me. I felt like I was there with him. You descriptions are fabulous, and I saw what he saw, smelled what he saw. I am putting you on my watchlist, and when there is room, I am putting you on my shelf. I am sure you will get a nod from the editor this month!!!

Sincerely,

D. S. Hale
Jessup and the Teleporter

Wow, awesome read....I couldn't stop reading.....which is something I reader craves to hear. I found a couple of comma errors, but was so engrossed in the reading, I didn't stop to take note of them. GREAT JOB!!!

I hope you are working on finishing this great piece of work?! You were actually getting to me. I felt like I was there with him. You descriptions are fabulous, and I saw what he saw, smelled what he saw. I am putting you on my watchlist, and when there is room, I am putting you on my shelf. I am sure you will get a nod from the editor this month!!!

Sincerely,

D. S. Hale
Jessup and the Teleporter

I love the narration style and the vast amount of imagination put into this project. Very well done.

Good concise writing servicing an intriguing story. I liked what i read.

Hi Bill,

Read the first chapter and your writing seems effortless and
polished. Gave you a 5 star. Good luck!

Kady Colter
Shakespeare's Pink Cadillac

Very nice read. Love the suspense and the scene development.

HAKTAW HEART
Bill Scott
hullo Bill. This is very interesting how you have inter-worked your characters and actions. Payback is a -itch, huh? Have already starred your work and placed on my shelf. Please take a look at mine, it is horror of a different kind. Wish you all the best. LLL

Hi Bill
Still enjoying this and still little to crit beyond a few simple grammaticals. after the thought "he's out of arrows" - "Magdalat vulnerable" I'm assuming its just meant to be "Magdala"
Also "when we were done she lie naked on the ground" - should be "lay"
"but their was still a faint connection" - should be "there"
"Heard of people being paralyzed by feat" - I'm guessing "fear"
Like a coathanger through a marshmallow - nice one.
Excellent stuff again Bill.
Derek

HAKTAW HEART

Hi Bill,

Your pitch drew me in, and you delivered! There's a good reason why your book is number one: Fabulous use of descriptive language, twists and turns, and surprises around every corner. So much fun to read. I finished all seventeen chapters and hope that you'll post more! Only one nit pick: The beginning of the backflash to Coronado searching for the seven cities of gold sounded more like a documentary. I humbly suggest kicking up the action to match your wonderful, quick writing style.

I feel sure that HC will love your book; here's hoping they offer you a contract!

Jan
Fringe of Darkness

Saw your pitch and checked out the book. It's really good. It drew me in instantly. The tension building works well, not too fast, not too slow. Strong characters and the horror aspect comes through from page one. The only thing that struck me was the use of short sentences. It felt a little clipped at times and made the flow of the story a little faster than I wanted. Love this! Shelved.

Marla
AFTER

Wow! Strong opening chapter and I love the disappointment when the traditional complement to any road movie, a burger and a coke, ends with a healthy eating diner, great twist! The sighting of the girl at the roadside creates an air of mystery we want to know more about. The first-person PoV works very well in this story, as does the use of present tense. The descriptions are detailed and create good sense of atmosphere and the plot is so intriguing that you just have to find out more. One thing that did confuse me though was the opening line with Edgar, Jennifer and Emily. "They're all three staring at me". Other than that, this is a faultless piece of work; engaging and engrossing and building slowly as all good fiction should. Deserving of a place on anyone's shelf!

Best of luck with this one Bill, I hope it does well.

Jack Hughes

Hi Bill
Still loving your book Cant really drit the writing but thought I'd give you a heads up in chapter 13 the sentence "they knew a larger group was coming but they'd..." has no ending.

If you get a chance - i know you've prob got a lot on your plate - but I'd respect your opinion on even a couple of pages of my book The Angel Chord. All the best to you Bill.
Derek

Hi Bill
Still loving your book Cant really drit the writing but thought I'd give you a heads up in chapter 13 the sentence "they knew a larger group was coming but they'd..." has no ending.

If you get a chance - i know you've prob got a lot on your plate - but I'd respect your opinion on even a couple of pages of my book The Angel Chord. All the best to you Bill.
Derek

Hi Bill - still loving your book. Nothing to crit re the style. Just a heads up - in chapter 13 the following sentence has no ending.
"They knew a large group was waiting but the had no fear. But they'd..."

If you have time, I know you prob got a lot on your plate - but I'd respect your opinion on even a few pages of my book The Angel Chord whenever you get a chance.
cheers Bill.
Derek

That was an intense start to a book. I'm not a massive fan of reading stuff on the computer (call me old fashioned) but I had to keep scrolling down.
I'm going to read more - so far it would make a great opening to a movie, which to me is great as it means I can visualize very easily what I'm reading.
If you get the chance have a look at, and rate my book - The List.

David J Baron - The List

There's a great nightmarish but oddly seductive vibe to the opener - it reminds me a little of Brett Easton Ellis' Lunar Park. I'm going to read on... I need to know if the rest is this good.

Fascinating, and with the page-turning factor of a well-crafted book. My only regret is that I hadn't discovered Haktaw Heart early enough to have helped it to its deserved position on the Desk.

Backed with pleasure. Better late than never.

Hi Bill
I'm new to this reviewing lark - just joined site today so just finding my way around - but your book makes it easy. A compelling read - first six chapter breezed by. I enjoyed your voice and use of first person POV. No problems with the nuts and bones of grammar etc - all good and flowed well - no clunky sections that slowed me down anyhoo. Some excellent descriptions - I personally loved the butcher meat reference - I see some others did and some didnt - for me it's def a keeper. I like the old woman coming in at perfect times to crank up the tension. Overall very atmospheric and pacey and I will definately be reading more and will let you know what I reckon to the rest as I go. If you get a chance - read a few pages of my book The Angel Chord - also a supernatural thriler. Cheers Derek

Hi Bill
I'm new to this reviewing lark - just joined site today so just finding my way around - but your book makes it easy. A compelling read - first six chapter breezed by. I enjoyed your voice and use of first person POV. No problems with the nuts and bones of grammar etc - all good and flowed well - no clunky sections that slowed me down anyhoo. Some excellent descriptions - I personally loved the butcher meat reference - I see some others did and some didnt - for me it's def a keeper. I like the old woman coming in at perfect times to crank up the tension. Overall very atmospheric and pacey and I will definately be reading more and will let you know what I reckon to the rest as I go. If you get a chance - read a few pages of my book The Angel Chord - also a supernatural thriler. Cheers Derek

HAKTAW HEART
I like the eerie feeling this story has right from the start. And the way that continues as your character explores this strange Inn and especially when he finds the crow in his bed. It’s a good warning there are still more strange things to come. Taos is a great background for the story. I’m adding this to my shelf. Wannabeawriter. Who Killed the President?

Hi Bill

Just started to read this today and I am already hooked. This is like a well set 80's creep film, but with more depth than the slasher fayre usually served up; I am hazarding a guess that you are a fan of David Lynch?

I am presuming that the girl the MC keeps encountering is an echo of his past crimes, though as you say it is likely that this is not the case. A bizarre and compelling tale within 2 paragraphs. I will be reading on with relish.

Perhaps you would take a look at Marking Time, a satire about the British Education system. Also a little bizarre.

Good luck
Crispy

Well, I can see why this book is on its way to the top of authonomy.
Pacy, interesting prose. An MC's voice that comes across natural and strong. Well written dialogue and a story that fascinates.
Excellent stuff.
Backed.

Love it. Very creepy. I'll gladly back.

WA

Creepy start to a book! It absolutely hooked me.
Good, strong writing skills carry this story well and the flow feels very comfortable.

One niggle, I'm not sure if anyone's mentioned it, but publishing these days uses single letter space at the end of each sentence. It's an easy fix in Word - just replace double space with single on all and it'll do it automatically. Sorry to be pedantic but it can make the reader stumble a little.

Anyway, best of luck with this - I'm sure it will do well.

Diana
Pascual's Birthday

HI,
Thanks for reading a bit of The Pig War. Haktaw Heart has some nice moments and I enjoyed the voice. I thought the scene with him sitting with the odd threesome was interesting. It moved me along well and the fact that he's going to "have sushi" with them later is another useful technique for making me read. There is a nice tone to the whole thing, I agree with comments below, but one image that threw me was the hamburger meat beneath the white butcher paper. I didn't follow that one at all. In all nice work. You're obviously been at this site for a while. Thanks again for checking mine out. Go Seattle!
Mark

Haktaw Heart

I've read quite deeply into this now and think I can comment constructively. No doubt at all that you can write, some delicious metaphors here and so sparky dialogue, particularly liked the hamburger meat inside a white, paper glove description of the hoteliers hand. But that's just one example of the sassy, zany and wonderful way your writing fizzes.

The plot here seems a bit Neil Gaiman, fused with bits of Stephen King. The journey into town and the flashed image of the injured girl was reminiscent for me of the Hotel Overlook ghostly moments in the shining, there or not there. My constructive comment is around the pacing of your plot and that your chapters could still be hit hard to get rid of extraneous sentences that explain what was earlier implied. There is a particular moment when he asks that wonderfully quirky qualifier about the hotelier, before he's met him, of the threesome in the diner. Unorthodox ax-murder or toe-nail clipper on the front porch, lovely live, spoilt for me by the sentence afterwards where the narrator explains to the reader why it was an important question for him to ask. Don't need that, I know there's some obscure horror film reference running there which is probably important later, but still didn't need it. While I think of it, there's definitely some Clive Barker in here too.

As to pacing, I wanted more intrigue and action earlier, chapter one could be chopped down a bit, the spooky drive in was great, great opener too, but I thought it could have been over quicker. Chapter Two introduces us to the quirky three and I'm sure they are totally important, but not a great deal happened, I wonder if this encounter can be crunched down to join the bit in Chapter 3. Also, not sure why the room choice is so key, if it key to later plot developments, but it slowed things down for me. The crow under the pillow dream moment is well done, as is the angry storming into the kitchen moment.

As I said, great writing, but in my humble opinion we need plot earlier Bill, perhaps some of the character stuff can flow in later. This is of course only one view on a small portion of a greater story, but hoping there may be something of use in there. I will be supporting you very soon in the forums, a week or so.

Best wishes
Andrew W
(Benevolence)

A repeat backing pls 6 stars. Hoping to see you on the desk
Lara
A RELATIVE INVASION (Good for Him)

I like the visuals I get when I'm reading your book. Very descriptive and not in a boring way.

Your style of writing is unusual, but it works well with the concept. I like the obvious neurotic tendencies of this character, the overall and omnipresent sense that everything is NOt ok, even if you take out the appearances of the strange woman, it's still there. The three strangers, the weird rooms, the crow (I actually cackled at the stuffed rooster lamp - nice touch) - all of this points to a lot of complication and makes me curious. This is obviously not a beach-side read, but I like that, it's challenging in its own way - the strangeness is in everything. The only thing I'm not sure about is the presence of fantasy elements in the story. After reading the beginning part, I'm not even sure I want it there, not the speculative, of course, but actual fantasy in the rest of the story. I am, however curious about what you'll do with this. The story reads as rough draft, which it probably is, and I feel that you still have to make some decisions on where this is heading as a story, but this is definitely something special and could work either with or without strong speculative elements.

Elena ("Oko")

I love this, I read every chapter and I'm desperate for more.

Speechless

I'm backing this for two reasons.
One - It's fantastic.
Two - It's creepy.

The only thing that jarred me out of the story, was the 'floorboard' description of the flapping paper. I don't associate floorboards with vehicles, so at first it jarred, and then I was thinking, well is this a truck with boards.. but then you refer to the vechicle as a car. For the longest time, (even now), I'm trying to figure out where a floorboard would be in a car.

That's it, my only nit. Floorboard.

Lorrii

HAKTAW HEART / Bill Scott

The very first thing I notice about this writer is discipline. Short, precise sentences that move the flow of his story dictate every single word in this manuscript. One of the most efficient stewards of word usage I've read in a while.

The story has a great plot about a guy who has lived many times before. He's made a few enemies along the way and it appears those relationships are coming back to haunt him. especially, a particular thing or two he's done. Very clever story idea. Using present day is clever too.

The flow, as mentioned, is crisp. There is a well balanced ingrdient of FP narrative and dialogue, strong characters that drive the story along at a great pace and smoothly. Each chapter fulfills it responsibility of beginning well, getting another plot level acheived and ending in a way that insists the reader has no choice but to turn the page. I sure did. (Luckily there were multiple chapters in each)

This is simply a well-written story that I think will impress the HC folks come review time. I'm curious to see what happens in that regard to that.

Cool metaphors too. (An antique roadshow kind of way) ? Freaking great!

6 stars for this one. Could be published right now! Well done. Wish I would have read it sooner.


Emmett

I can't stop laughing. Good one!

Can't wait to read your YA piece - still laughing...

Arlene

This is just excellent. The story reeks with excitement and I was carried through it open mouthed.
You just never know what is going to happen next.
There is a haunting feel to your writing. I could sense every emotion through the characters.
The way you use language in the story is unique and the short sharp sentences are very effective at showing exactly what is going on.
The story itself is a masterpiece in weaving a tale that is both historical and also fantasy, with a paranormal element. The reincarnation aspect is especially interesting to me, as it is close to my own novel.
Reading this was a delight. It's rare to find such marvellous storytelling talent.
I wonder if you would like to list your book, along with 26 others, on a forum thread called "Paranormal Themed Books"
We are gathering together all the paranormal themed stories, so as they are easily accessable to the group and others who want to read this type of story. We read each others books and comment.
If you want to, you could post your link on the thread and I will add to the OP.
Well, that's all I can think of to say, other than you have a great talent.
Best wishes, from Orma.

[Haktaw Heart]

First of all thank you for reading my book. I know it is hard and it includes a lot of emotions. If you don't feel like continuing to read, don't. It will turn out for the better in the end, but I don't want to hurt people.one I can't possibly put my finger on. It's a great story, mind you, and well written. And you keep me reading, which always is a good sign.

If there is anything I have to say about this, then it's that it doesn't seem to have a purpose. By the time I reached chapter 6, I still wasn't sure what this was all about. I think you have to give the reader a purpose to continue reading and you do that by telling him what your leading character is about to meet. Give him a task, or a situation, or something else that may change him one way or the other.

A good story, though, with obvious writing skills.

Good luck with it.

Your book is quite the opposite. You give me a very uneasy feeling;

Bill, your pitches are as good as I've seen in quite a while; well presented, well judged for potency and effect and a perfect complement to the strong cover. You're very accomplished, strong dialogue and a remarkable ease of flow to the narrative - so much so that I didn't even think to look for typos!
You've certainly not taken the easy option with your structure, yet the voice is both constant and engaging without a hint of awkwardness and no POV issues at all.
I've read all you posted to date. If the book continues in this vein, as I have every confidence it will, you have a real winner here. One of the most enjoyable and well written projects on the site from the viewpoint of a reader who's read many hundreds of books on Authonomy. Congratulations and very best wishes, this deserves success. Already backed, with admiration.
Jake

I read this before, last year sometime and probably commented on it then, but I took a look at the first chapter again and got sucked in just like last time. It's a quick read, and I'm already on your third section. You are great with description and your writing is strong and easy to follow. The only reason I'm writing this, though, is that one tiny part of it jarred me. When the group is sitting around drinking, you have first a homeless man walk up to them and then a short time later you have the old woman do the same. Do you really need both of those? Having both made that section feel a tad contrived to me, and I couldn't help feeling that it would feel more realistic if it were just one or the other there. I understand that you need both characters for the plot, but I think it would feel more authentic if you spaced the meetings out a bit more than you do.

Edit to add more:
Great way to end the chapter where it seems he will murder his new girlfriend. When it resumes, the line 'My hands renounce her neck' doesn't work for me. 'renounce' just doesn't fit there.

Hmm, the first troublesome chapter for me is the backstory for Magdala. It rips me right out of the immediacy of the rest of the story with too much exposition. Not sure how you deal with that except perhaps to take out the most blatant exposition. I don't think you need to relate to us the tribe's history of esp, as I think it's fine to hint at the mystery of it.

The chapter where he reveals he is Coronado is almost all exposition and takes me further out of the story. There must be a better way for him to relate this information to the reader at some later point and in a more natural way. Must it be here now? If it is about him having a flood of images pouring through his mind as he recalls everything, wouldn't it be better to relate it in such a manner, i.e., we see him 'remembering' all of this detail in his own thoughts rather than as a purely expositional telling?

Absolutely superb, superlative writing. Chapter one escorts elements of the pitch to the reader nicely. Accounts of the atmosphere are rendered with colorful combinations of adjectives and similes. Obviously you have a full understanding of the dislike among Authonomites for long chapters and you keep yours concise and relevant while cramming as much action as possible within. Good technical fundamentals. I'm attempting to climb to such a level in my own writing and I commend you on that.

I caught myself wondering how Adson made a living once or twice but the plot was so captivating that it seemed inconsequential. It could possibly be divulged in following chapters anyway. This piece makes a masterful amalgamation of reality and fantasy. Not once did the plot ever seem far-fetched and absurd like some of what I've read.

Gelpie's quirks and the underlying backstory made a perfect example of well executed character development. I'm curious, Rod and company say the vagrant who later manifested himself as Preacherman had been on the fritz for quite some time, wandering around Taos. Interesting question arises from that but I figure I can wait until this is Published to find that out. I'd definitely buy this.

Rod's character is so catty and obnoxious that I wanted to write myself in so I could throw him from a speeding car. Or beat him with a raw turkey leg. All of the characters ooze authenticity.

I'm ready to read the rest of this. All the best. Starred. Backed.

Accomplished. The sort of writing that should be making the desk. Well done Bill.