A Day in the Life of a Philanderer

Hi Stephanie
Great idea for a novel. I like the timeline perspective.You have a great writing style and descriptive pattern that I do not see too often on this site. I am a reader and not a writer. My partner Craig Ellis who has a book on this account and site called "The Sun and the Saber". Pls check it out. I will get him to back your book when he comes back from the store. I had to hurry and get on the net while he was away. We have only one computer.

Keep up the good work. Keep writing!
Vi

Backed with pleasure
Eveleen
Hope you'll read mine

An intersting read. The charcters are well developed as is the diolouge that keeps us engaged. C W

Hi Stephanie!

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I really like your writing style--short yet descriptive sentences and few superfluous words keep the story moving along very well. You do need some editing, which shouldn't be too hard. I'm not a fan of the formatting, especially when the times only interrupt a continuous scene, but I think it's great that you're trying it out. The general "plot" of each story is interesting, as are the characters, and the stories themselves offer some nice tidbits of wisdom. The biggest flaw to me is the lack of unique voices in your MCs. As I read the chapters, it seemed as if you simply took one person and stuck him into different scenarios. It's difficult to create so many voices, especially in first person, but doing so would definitely make your stories more realistic and appealing to readers. You have a great work in progress, so good luck!

~Cheesecake

Hi Stephanie, “Would You Like a Throat Lozenge” is a powerful story. So many personality characteristics in the POV lead up to the man’s misery and suppressed urges. And you’ve shown he’s not careful about his reputation at the school. The POV takes us swiftly to the fact that he’s actually innocent but fathomed. Excellent turns in this and easily shelved – Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

First these are great!!!
I very much like how you take us inside characters minds and give us a sense of values and beliefs around their maps of their world, very, very well executed.
You have also developed some real depth to the stories buy what’s not said allowing the reader some ownership. Great stories, well written!

Hi Stephanie,
I read 'Would you like a throat Lozenge. i was intrigued from the start by you saying, the lozenge was tantalising him like a prick. The format is good and moves the story along at a brisk rate. The dialogue is gritty, coarse andf realistic. I liked, "I finally got over that my existence was pointless..."
The breakdown in the classroom is well done and there's a nice circle compleaterd when he's offered a lozenge at the end.
Very good writing. Backed with pleasure,
Barry
LITTLE KRISNA AND THE BIHAR BOYS

Loved Chapter 4, Forever is Just Another Word for Temporary (even love the title). That's my favorite of these short stories, though all of them are good.

This is a an unusual offering, but quite compelling and interesting. Backed.

Amy
Love Match

Welcome aboard, Stephanie. This website will improve your writing craft, if you allow it. I'm a bit of a pitch doctor, having read thousands of pitches in my time on this website, so I want to share my insight here with you. You have to think of your pitches as your sales tool to grab the casual reader's eyes. The short pitch works. The long pitch needs to be broken down into smaller paragraphs so it reads faster. Maybe end it with a question. Perfecting your pitches is how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments to better your novel. The writing is good so I am SHELVING you.

Though I have been a very active member for over a year and have the most commented book on the website, I can still use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Every little bit helps. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

Before I forget, is there a typo in the first para of 6.45am - '.. I try to turn it off BY randomly ..'?
It's a fascinating format, almost like reading a diary and we all know how irresistible that is. You give us an introduction to the characters then let them speak for themselves. They do it colourfully and with great immediacy and wit in their comments on other characters. Impressive. Backed. Lynn

DAY IN THE LIFE OF A PHILANDERER
This is an unusual and a unique collection of short stories. I like the way you give each story a time line; the changing ties push each story forward. I read the first one and last one. Both good. An easy read. I’m adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

Dear Stephanie, I got so excited when I saw that you had backed, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not." :) Thanks so very much. :) Since I have already "backed" your book, I will put your book on my "watchlist." Could you please take a moment to "back" my completed unedited memoir version? "Tell Me True Love Stories," which at the end tells of my illness now & 6th abusive marriage. I'd be ever so grateful. :) Thank you. :) Love, Susie :)
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When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved...authonomy

When a tickle in the throat is a harbinger of disaster . . . and a metaphor for the annoying impulse that he doesn't want to acknowledge . . . well done. Backed. Marianne (Saint Paddy and the Sundial)

Dear Stephanie, I love your listing the times - puts me right there in your story of thoughts & actions. :) Your pitch is excellent, so set the hook for me to read your book. :) When you use short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, it makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm backing your book. :)
Could you please take a moment to back my TWO memoir books? Thanks, Susie :)

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"When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved"...authonomy quote.
"Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs.
backed :)
Love, Susie :)