Drops of Crimson

got to three, still like it, there's a small typo when she's in the club and just meets Adrian. She reaches for her 'hear' to show she can't hear. needs to be ear =]
~Zero

the pitch set things up to make me think the avatars were the good guys, but the first chapter threw me for a loop XD i'll probably read more later since you did such a good job of making me want answers to questions.
there are a few places where commas should be, but I am not really in a tear things apart with nitpicking mood. If you want someone that could give you a hand with commas, than djinnia is a good bet =]
besides the commas, it was very well written, your fight scenes had a nice fast pace to them, and your descriptions were good. =]
backed
~Zero

Hooked by the pitch and the story did not disapoint, good luck with it. E.Loraine Royal Blood Chronicles book one

Dark, you have a great story going on here. Your characterisation is fabulous, and with just a few paragraphs we have an excellent idea of who we're dealing with. As a character-focused reader (and writer!), I find this great!

I'm three chapters in as I write this (I'd rather write the comment before it gets even later, and my ability to type properly vanishes), and I find myself rooting for more than one character already. This is fun. All glory to Andre!

And since the more I love something, the more nitpicky I become, I found two (small) repetitions in the first Chapter. They are nearly one after the other, which is likely the reason I picked it up. Here goes:

[...] Rayne had LOOKED for some place that LOOKED appealing. After ABOUT an hour, she was ABOUT to turn around.

Otherwise, you have an excellent writing, with captivating attention to details. This is backed and shelved with great pleasure! Good luck,

Annalia

Good pitch and uite a good battle scene beginnings. There is nothing wrong with your imagery or description, it's very good. Just one niggle, if the Rakshasas are immortal with supernatural powers, how can they die? I understand from the pitch the Avatars have been asked by the gods to kill them but there is no explanation for this and exactly why have their extinction been ordered? Have the Avatars been given the ability to kill immortals? How? Otherwise it is well written but no matter how many times I read it this keeps popping into my head.

Excellent beginning. Immediately, the reader is grasped and pulled in to this premise and intrigued by the potential. Your attention to detail increases the believability, and your characterisation is incredibly realistic. This is a fabulous addition to the fantasy genre.

Backed with pleasure.
Abi xxx

Backed with confidence! Tom Ryerson (Carnal Wreckage)

Dear Dark, I love the suspense in your story, but I'm sure glad I'm not there - the stress would be too much for me. :) Before I began to read your book, I was prepared by your recap/pitch,which was very well done. Your story is good because you create interest by having short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, which makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm "backing" your book to help it advance - this will help yours & mine move up on the charts. :) Could you please return the favor by taking a moment to "back" my TWO memoir books, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" & my completed memoir unedited version? "Tell Me True Love Stories," which tells at the end, my illness now & 6th abusive marriage." Thanks, Susie :)
p.s. Remember: Every "backing" you do gives your book points & the other person's book. :)

You have such a talented imagination and the gift for putting it into words. BACKED with pleasure.

Liz
The Cheech Room