Apocalypse, Mon Amour.

sovietski wrote 8 hours ago [reply] [delete]
a beautiful tale des. More than happy to back you!

I do hope you can return the favour by backing a good friend of mine...http://www.authonomy.com/ViewBook.aspx?bookid=12044
thanks if you can.


Des ses: The Ruskie obviously knows quality when he reads it; or "IF".

Francine Saint Marie wrote recently [reply] [delete]
I'm a top ranked Talent Spotter, Des, and if you can give MARS a spin on your shelf now you'll get three return-backings as my thanks for it.

Des ses: Who are the other two and what are their TSR ranks?

Dishy Des replied via the messaging system: "I would prefer 3 honest critiques rather than three blind mice".

Saw your wonderful review on the forums, guessed from that that your writing would be pretty darn smart, and so I came for a butcher's. Oh what a hoot! And what a writer. And what the hell are you doing here?
Putting you on my shelf to gleam. Well done, sir.

Quirky with laugh out loud moments galore. Different and very readable. Backed easily.

Angus Shoor Caan
Violet Hiccup.

Yunis - Eunice - Hey that's my name. I better take a look at this book,.....I thought. I can see an element of quirkiness in your writing, and great dialogue. Happy to back. Eunice - The Temple Dancer.

Beautifully written. Your dialogue and descriptions are excellent and made we want to read on. Lots of humour here too. I was interested to see your use of the name Goodfellow. It's my mother's maiden name and you don't here it very often. No nits, Des, I enjoyed it. Backed, Lynne, Brooklyn Bridge.

Steve, I read up to Three Blind Mice. You definitely seem to have an ear for dialogue, which I particularly enjoyed reading. Good job.

Happy to back this.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

This is so funny. A blend of good old fashilned irony and straight out humour! Love is not dead, even though so much else is! I enjoyed your brisk start and your use of language as well as your excellent character development. Well done. Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid

Dear Des
Well I dont know how this book got by me the first time but it sis not the second.
love the book cover and as i read on i realize that the long pitch reflects well your book.
you have particular way of using dialogue which is so talented and i wish i had half of your skill. I have not read it all but will continue for sure, so
BACKED FOR SURE
I will carry on reading and comment further on as I would like to get this book of yours backed to assist it on the climb to the top.
Backed for sure my me. ..I would really appreciate it if your would look at my book, COMMENT , and back it. If not that is OK also
The VERY best of luck with your book

Denise
The Letter

Nice work. I looked at this a while ago and liked it back then. Superb dialogue.
Backed with pleasure,
Barry
LITTLE KRISNA AND THE BIHAR BOYS

This is Prasat Ta Proum, in Cambodia.
Please take a look at Bamboo Promise. I hope you can return a favor to a friend of mine on this site. I will look at it later.
Backed,

not entirely sure what to say really. Typos: studded should be studied.

I'm not entirely sure if you are playing with us but if you are the line "Why would a neo-nazi comspire to save Her Majesty" is a class line, wasted.

I like the way you start your story with dialogue, it's crisp and that coupled with your use of short paragraphs keeps the pace flowing well. I like your touch of humour in the play scenes - naked people entering stage left. Your descriptive writing makes your work a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

Hi Des, a lovely story. Faultless writing. I say no more. Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid

Oh, I like this. Clever, unusual and intriguing.
Katy Christie
No Man No Cry

In chapter 1 you're lecturing about punctuation and yet you've missed an inverted comma after 'What troubles you so?' And 'three' in German is DREI. Now that I've got out of the way, I'll say that if this isn't serious you should stop wasting your talent and start being so.
It's wonderfully written, a successful travesty of so much in English literature and much else that we supposedly hold dear. The verse about Princess Diana in ch 3, for example, says everything that the anti-princess Diana camp could want it to. Whether you meant it or no, the reference to the little girl in Vietnam was moving because of the totally inappropriate context.
Is it commercial? I doubt it. Do you mean it to be? I doubt that too. Shall I back it? I'm going to whether you like it or not. Lynn

This is a MUST read!
Backed with pleasure! Good Luck!!
A look at Sicilian Shadows would be greatly appreciated.
Frank.
If you back my work, you may also want to approach BJD (a big supporter of Sicilian Shadows) for a further possible backing of your book

This is - the word that springs to mind is "delightful", and it really is. I was drawn in from the start by this unusual attempt. Clearly the dialogue makes it. Rose and Ernest have wit and style as they dissect the world and its events amidst their banter, interjected with gorgeously (and to the right mind risque) interjections. "I'm famished. Cunnilingus?" Fantastic.

I WANTED to be helpful, but got too lost in the joys of this to offer any suggestions. I only noticed one typo. "It's distant south bank" (I don't think there should be an apostrophe in that "its") but was otherwise too busy losing myself in this.

I'm going to have to say it again. Delightful and backed.

Abi xxx

Your opening chapter is very well written and I enjoyed the fantastic description.
Backed without a doubt!
Aimee
His Pride, Her Prejudice

15 May 2010
Apocalypse is the epitome of zanity. (I know there is no such word but there has not been a wonderful depiction of chuckle inspiring, calculated controlled mayhem and comedic doom such as this kind on the site before either, so suck it up!) Using imagery that is pythonic (there he goes again!) without a trace of plagiarism the world according to Des Topia begins - or ends - and superbly entertaining it is! .Backed. Robert Davidson. The Tuzla Run.

Love the word play and the banter. I'm getting all kinds of visuals upon reading this, and that's a good thing! Shelved with pleasure.

Amy
Love Match

I think that this id an honest and a proper peice of work. I have only read a little, and will indeed, be dipping back into it. Well done on this and I would like to back it with pleasure.

Hope you get a little time to peek at mine.

Sincerly
Brendan Doherty
The Russian Hat

The opening dialogue between Rose and Ernest is lively and vibrant. As early as the end of the first scene I have the impression that the two live harmoniously.
The two-paragraph painting of setting at the beginning of your second scene concisely captures the location and doesn't allow itself to hang around long enough to prevent continuity of pace; the latter again picked up by renewed dialogue.
The dialogue here has its own very punchy rhythm, very fitting when the topic is the composer, Haydn.
To the end of the first chapter I found the quirky exchanges thoroughly entertaining and mirroring the personalities of Rose and Ernest as their dialogue takes us through a kaleidescope of events terminating in the Thames and the ruins of Westminster.

Shelved.
Ray
(A Child from the Wishing Well)

Touching, poignant voice and tone. Not my usual genre but I liked it enough to back it.

I hope you will take the time to read mine and if you like it back it.
Best,
Robert
Golden Conspiracy

MICES AND MENZIES
This book is a wonderful read: crazy and out of the mainstream – but that’s its charm. It’s the type of book you want to clear an afternoon free of other distractions to read because you don’t want to miss a word. Dialogue is very clever. I’m adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

Mices is okay for me, as its obviously meant to be wrong
and points to the double or treble meanings rife in this ridiculous,
superb,entertaining writing.
Shelved with best wishes
mikegilli The free

Ch. 1 offers a nice little tongue-in-cheek tour of the best humanity had to offer. Terrific aristocratic dialogue. I would like to know more about the destruction surrounding Ernest and Rose as they banter. It would accentuate the surrealistic irony of juxtaposing their upper-crust aloofness against the utter hopelessness of their ruined world. For me, the extreme detachment of E & R compels me to be intrigued as to how they will fare in post-civilization. A good read.
SC
(Viene La Tormenta)

Dear Topia
Please don't be annoyed by my suggestion with regard to your titlle. You are right -i don't know what it should be but mices sound funny.
Still a literally genuis at work

best

Love it, I wish you the very best with this. Backed with pleasure. E.Loraine Royal Blood Chronicles book one

Welcome aboard, Des. This website will improve your writing craft, if you allow it. You have to think of your pitches as your sales tool to grab the casual reader's eyes. The short pitch works. With the long pitch, expand on the story arch and then break it down into smaller paragraphs so it reads faster. End it with one succinct question to pique interest. Perfecting your pitches is how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments to better your novel. The writing is good so I am SHELVING you.

Though I have been a very active member for over a year, I can still use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Every little bit helps. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

Dishy Des replied via the messaging system: "I would prefer 3 honest critiques rather than three blind mice".

Francine Saint Marie wrote recently [reply] [delete]
I'm a top ranked Talent Spotter, Des, and if you can give MARS a spin on your shelf now you'll get three return-backings as my thanks for it.

Des ses: Who are the other two and what are their TSR ranks?

sovietski wrote 8 hours ago [reply] [delete]
a beautiful tale des. More than happy to back you!

I do hope you can return the favour by backing a good friend of mine...http://www.authonomy.com/ViewBook.aspx?bookid=12044
thanks if you can.


Des ses: The Ruskie obviously knows quality when he reads it; or "IF".

lynn clayton wrote 12 hours ago [reply] [delete]
brilliant book, cover and title. Backed. Lynn

Des ses: BUT what about the story.

yasmin esack wrote 16 hours ago [reply] [delete]
DES tOPIA
Your title should be of of mice and menzies.
Backed it and will comment later

best to you and hope you will support mine


Des ses: How can you possibly know what my title "should" be? It is what it is; what I decide it is..

I must admit I enjoyed the first conversation, it all has a strange sense of the absurd about it and intrigued me to go further. Very unusual writing, I wish you well.

Jacqui
Once Upon a Blue Moon

I don't usually read this genre, but your pitch was so intriguing that I thought I would give it half a chance. Boy am I blah blah blah blah blah, blah blah blah blah blah. Blah, blah blah bhal. Blah !

Hi there,

If I have given you my backing I have read the pitch, loved it and then at least two chapters of your very fine work.

Then, if you do not help me with my Psychiatric Evaluation it will be partly your fault that I am stressed out and can no longer spend time on this site.

Lots of writers may than suffer breakdowns because of this!!!
RB

I think I would leave out the first conversation. People on here will skim the start to see if they can be hooked and this comes across as very hard to read. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

Dear Des, I got so excited when I saw that you had backed, "He Loves Me." Thanks so very much. :) Since I have already "backed" your book, I will also put your book on my "watchlist." Could you please take a moment to "back" my completed unedited memoir version? "Tell Me True Love Stories," which at the end tells of my illness now & 6th abusive marriage. I'd be ever so grateful. :) Thank you. :) Love, Susie :)
p.s. Remember: Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs. :)

What can I say, Des? Your work speaks to me again and again and again. Good to see it doing so well.

Dear Des, I love your love conversation between 2 lovers on literature & the times :) - so precious. :) Before I began to read your book, I was prepared by your recap/pitch,which was very well done. Your story is good because you create interest by having short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, which makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm "backing" your book to help it advance - this will help it move up on the charts. :) Could you please return the favor by taking a moment to "back" my TWO memoir books, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" & my completed memoir unedited version? "Tell Me True Love Stories," which tells at the end, my illness now & 6th abusive marriage." Thanks, Susie :)
p.s. Remember: Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs. :)

Like an English Gilligan's Island I think??

Liz
The Cheech Room