Who Stole My Body?

Very entertainig first chapter, definately makes me want to read more, and very original. Your writing is perfect and I think older kids will love this. It may be a little scary for the young kids. I am putting your book on my watch list, shelf is full at the time. Lots of stars!!

Susan
The Adventures of Sohi: Mystery of Moon Island

I am loving this so far! Unique and humorous and shelved for a few days. The soccer ball on the cover will be a big draw to young readers!

Skater

Like this so far. Its clever and witty!! I'll keep reading.

HI Deborah
Loved it! Really cleverly written. Perfect for the genre and a great cover as well.
DP Walker
Five Dares

Deborah, well the pitch is great. When I read the short pitch I was laughing, and I know this is not a comdy, but too funny. Anyways I think this book is more for young adults and of course older gits like me, great. You do have a flair for humor, whether you are ware of it. Well crafted and animated characters CONGRATS. did not read it all yet obviously. BACKED for sure.......If you would review 'The Letter' and give your 'comments' and 'backing', I would appreciate it. and BEST of luck.

Denise
The Letter

Backed.

-Jeff Lee
TH LADIES TEMPERANCE CLUB'S FAREWELL TOUR

WHO STOLE MY BODY
This is a super imaginative children’s story. From the title I was worried this was going to be too frightening for young children (you don’t want your readers waking up at night afterward screaming in terror) but Zachary reacts so calmly to no longer having a body, it’s an interesting rather than a scary story. I think schoolagers will enjoy reading this. I’m adding it to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

Absolutely terrorific.

Hi Deborah, children (and others) will love this book. Thank you and the best of luck with it.
Best wishes, Barry
Little Krisna and the Bihar Boys

Disturbing, but kind of funny at the same time! Very well written, I can't find any flaw in your writing. Your dialgue is beliveable as far as the story goes and you give detail without bogging the reader down.
This will make a great book, I'm sure.

BACKED WITH PLEASURE
Aimee

Great read. I absolutely loved it.

I absolutely loved the way this was written. I will be recommending this to my friends. The way the character is speaking through it all is amzing. I was intrigued and my attention captured the whole way through.
While I would appreciate any feedback you may have on my book-must say this deserves my whole hearted backing. Simply loved it.

Brilliant - love it. Nothing more to say!! BACKED

Jane Holyoake (The Spiral Pendant)

This is so unfair. I have read the WHOLE THING...I just finished eight...and I can't have his school experience? I think that this is worse than Zack's head missing. I love it. I told my son your story and read parts, he's sick this evening and you had him smiling. It was soooo funny...I loved the little jokes here and there. I do adore the relationship that he has with his younger sister. Oftentimes in books and tv, it portrays siblings at war - hatred - jealousy...this was so refreshing and I give you huge praise for taking this approach, and having the younger sister the scientist, and giving her chapters...didn't expect it, but loved it. You just opened this wide up for a wonderful read for boys and girls (and adults)...teachers would also love this (so, I'd watch the use of some language...even though I found it funny, it could very well be marketable for school libraries and inclass whole group reads. You did oftentimes reuse words from one sentence or paragraph to the next, I would look for those in an edit and try to change them up. Read it back for them, maybe you'll agree. I can see why you are doing so well on this site, you do have a wonderful book. If you decide to put more up, please message me, I'll be right on it! Sincerely, Solo

Hi Solo,
I haven't had much time in the last week to respond to anyone yet... thanks for the compliments on the novel... I did bring it to three schools and the kids were crazy about it and sent me fan letters, so I am hoping to get an agent like everyone else here. There is so much talent at this site... however I only had time to briefly check it out. Thanks for telling me about the missing "I"... I don't know how it got removed from the original! Deborah

This is so unfair. I have read the WHOLE THING...I just finished eight...and I can't have his school experience? I think that this is worse than Zack's head missing. I love it. I told my son your story and read parts, he's sick this evening and you had him smiling. It was soooo funny...I loved the little jokes here and there. I do adore the relationship that he has with his younger sister. Oftentimes in books and tv, it portrays siblings at war - hatred - jealousy...this was so refreshing and I give you huge praise for taking this approach, and having the younger sister the scientist, and giving her chapters...didn't expect it, but loved it. You just opened this wide up for a wonderful read for boys and girls (and adults)...teachers would also love this (so, I'd watch the use of some language...even though I found it funny, it could very well be marketable for school libraries and inclass whole group reads. You did oftentimes reuse words from one sentence or paragraph to the next, I would look for those in an edit and try to change them up. Read it back for them, maybe you'll agree. I can see why you are doing so well on this site, you do have a wonderful book. If you decide to put more up, please message me, I'll be right on it! Sincerely, Solo

Hey,
I have just started with chapter one...I have to chapter by chapter read and comment because I have the short term memory issue and get caught up and can't remember...whatever...Suggestion: 2nd paragraph, add "I" wasn't in my bed...this is so funny, crazy...I don't get it but I guess that I am not supposed to get it at this point. I am on to chapter two. Words stand out to me sometimes, and I got terror a lot in this first go...maybe the use of other words...I liked how you described the encounter with Chico...definately what a dog would do. Great...on to chapter two- I won't keep boring you with my comments, unless something stands out at me...don't mean to take up your page...Solo

Hey,
I have just started with chapter one...I have to chapter by chapter read and comment because I have the short term memory issue and get caught up and can't remember...whatever...Suggestion: 2nd paragraph, add "I" wasn't in my bed...this is so funny, crazy...I don't get it but I guess that I am not supposed to get it at this point. I am on to chapter two. Words stand out to me sometimes, and I got terror a lot in this first go...maybe the use of other words...I liked how you described the encounter with Chico...definately what a dog would do. Great...on to chapter two- I won't keep boring you with my comments, unless something stands out at me...don't mean to take up your page...Solo

This is fun, silly and horrifying, all the things a good children's book should be. Backed.

Ruby Jo

Hi Deborah. This is well written and really funny and its genre will love it. I liked the raction of Chico. Zachary is a great MC. Backed! mariecapri (Cosmic Linx)

Great story for YA. Imaginative and truly entralling. You have the reader pinned.
best

Really good, what an imagination, good luck with it. Backed E.Loraine Royal Blood Chronicles book one

Funny start as dad finds his son's head and the startled screams that form the cliffhanger were brilliantly funny. The writing flows here and makes you want to continue. Wonderful.

Welcome aboard, Deb. This website will improve your writing craft, if you allow it. You have to think of your pitches as your sales tool to grab the casual reader's eyes. The short pitch works brilliantly. With the long pitch, expand on the story arch. End it with one succinct question to pique interest. Perfecting your pitches is how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments to better your novel. The writing is good so I am SHELVING you.

Though I have been a very active member for over a year, I can still use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Every little bit helps. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

Strong writing and easily one of the most engaging reads I've read on the site. You use details without bogging down the reader and keep the action fast-paced without losing that thoughtful edge. First person works briliantly, and light touches of humour help to lighten the tone.

Backed with pleasure,
Abi xxx

Excellent writing and really funny. Very clever indeed.
You certainly know how to entertain the reader and leave them wanting more with the great hooks you use.

Superb.

Melxx
Impeding Justice

This is pretty funny stuff. Backed!

Awesome! I can see the movie already! My kind of book an dthe kind of imagination I love to share with my kids when I read with them. This will do very well indeed!

BACKED

Liz
The Cheech Room

What a brilliantly funny introduction
you've managed to maintain the joke right through chapterstwoand three
thats some achievement
Backed withn a laugh
Micheal O'Durcain
Murder on the Menu

Hi there,

could you help me with my Psychiatrc Evaluation or I will go nuts!!!

RB

Backed with confidence! Tom Ryerson (Carnal Wreckage)

Very clever use of language and very funny. Brilliant. Backed. Lynn

This is good and very well expressed. There is huge potential in your writing and you will do very well. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

Dear Deborah, I love the fantasy & the sister helping out to solve the dilema. :) Before I began to read your book, I was prepared by your recap/pitch,which was very well done. Your story is good because you create interest by having short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, which makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm "backing" your book to help it advance - this will help it move up on the charts. :) Could you please return the favor by taking a moment to "back" my TWO memoir books, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" & my completed memoir unedited version? "Tell Me True Love Stories," which tells at the end, my illness now & 6th abusive marriage." Thanks, Susie :)
p.s. Remember: Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs. :)

This has got to be one of the most original premises I've come across here. AAGHHHH! is right! I've only read the first chapter so far, but I must admit I was both entertained and intrigued, And, after all, that's what it's all about, right? Little did he know that a monster in the bed would have been far better than what ultimately happened. (And I'm not talking about Chico's peeing!) Great job. I've got to read more. Backed with pleasure!

Richard Bard
BRAINRUSH (2010 ABNA Semi-Finalist)