The Earth's Knob

A great concept and blend of genres here. There is a sense of immediacy to the story, but you may want to cut into the heart of it a little sooner without any preface. Be careful with the caplocks and exclamation points. These are small things on the whole. Love the character--who feel very alive--and the premise, which shines from the first chapter.

xBeccaX
The Forever Girl

You have a good read here with plenty of original touches and ideas to interest the reader. :)

Another gem that uses fantasy well and in a reader gripping way. I like the writing, the visuals and the story structure.

There have been plenty of alternate timeline books done before but yours felt fresh to me. You have a great sense of action, you choreograph your scenes well and know where your characters are in that scene. The writing is good, easy to read and engaging. You execute your premise well and where it's one that could get confusing, it didn't feel it. It felt possible, a huge selling point for me when it comes to science fiction. I read a couple chapters and I think you're off to a heck of a beginning! I didn't see anything I didn't like, but then again, I'm usually involved in the story!

Missy
Mark of Eternity

This is a great opening account of a new world society and how it came about. The depth and intricacies that you describe this society with are amazing. I really enjoyed what I read.
Backed with pleasure
Best of luck
Rachael
Dreamscape

WOW!

BACKED

This is awesome! a fantastic theme and a solid plot. Good, stirring writing makes it a page turner.

I expect much to come from this.

Best
THE MIND SETTER

YouR book is backed!!! Thank so very much for your comment!!! it means a lo to me!

Dear Alan
I truly wish I had half your talent. I loved your short and long pitch both really sell your book which they are meant too so CONGRATS, and love the way you write. Your ability with words to craft an orginal read is amazing.Animated and quite addictive really. I feel strongly to back your book now. I do wish to be part of your climb to the top on this site. CONGRATS and I will comment more as I read more
Please take a moment to look, COMMENT which is important to me, and BACK my book. if not that is OK also
The VERY best of luck to you

BACKED BY ME FOR SURE.
Denise
The Letter

Dear Alan
I truly wish I had half your talent. I loved your short and long pitch both really sell your book which they are meant too so CONGRATS, and love the way you write. Your ability with words to craft an orginal read is amazing.Animated and quite addictive really. I feel strongly to back your book now. I do wish to be part of your climb to the top on this site. CONGRATS and I will comment more as I read more
Please take a moment to look, COMMENT which is important to me, and BACK my book. if not that is OK also
The VERY best of luck to you

BACKED BY ME FOR SURE.
Denise
The Letter

You are totally fantastic, Alan! :) How can I ever thank you enough for backing my memoirs book? :)
God bless you. :) Love, Susie :)

You have written a very interesting and unique storyline, which I do like, and created a most memorable main character in Tholan. I also really like how you use the first person narrative voice and the pace of your story flows well. All of this along with your descriptive writing makes your science fiction thriller a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

'...earth is RAISING the question...' Mother Nature

'In the beginning of the 25th century, scientist...'
"...ponder to a new offspring"? that doesn't really make sense. Consider breaking this up a bit and keep it simple. tell the story in a few words and leave the meat of the writing to the book.

JMC
Among Women

Thanks Barry!!! Well sadly i can't fix anything in the book right now because my old laptop crashed... :( and I had my chapters written there...hopefully I'll get it fix as soon as I recover the files.

But what i meant in the line was,

"The majority of the countries (established governments) of the world in favor of the new constitution were signing it to become federal countries, while the anti-federalist countries; (the countries who refused to become part of the world's federation) weren't very happy that these countries were signing this new world's constitution".

I'm gonna fix it as soon as i can! it is a big bloomer!

Hi Alan, Brilliant.
I've just read your first chapter and really liked it. The part about even your old friends being part of the 'sophisticated' world because money is success is excellent, as is the idea of re-purposing money.
I though this sentence wasn't quite right:-
'The majority of governments were signing the new constitution in which the opposed governments the Anti-Federalist weren't happy about.'
You need to give it a quick edit but I backed it with pleasure. Well done.
Best wishes,
Barry
LITTLE KRISNA AND THE BIHAR BOYS

Thank you Suzie!! i'm backing up your book! Thanks again for your comment I certainly appreciate it! Thank you again!

Dear Alan, I love that you started out with your hero's 3 life rules :) - that was great! :) Your pitch was concise, preparing me for my read :) - 500 years in the future was impressive, too. :) Tight paragraphs & dialogue moved me right along through your story. :) I've backed you book :) - could you please take a moment to back my memoirs book? :) Thanks so very much. :) Love, Susie :)

"When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved"
"Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs."

:) comment to follow - read & commented on shortly thereafter :)