The Blood of a Savage: Book One of the God War Cycle

Hi Joshua,

Opening the book with the slaying of an evil demon overlord - you can't really get much than that, can you? I love military fantasy, and am always very jealous of people who can write battle-scenes as eloquently as you can... I'll never tire of battles between elves and orcs, and trolls and dwarves! I liked how you start with a wide-shot of the whole crazy battle then move in to close ups of individual characters; and how the battle frenzy clears and we see Bulvyf trying to complete his mission - which he does with pananche!
Love all the weird names (where do you find them? Do they mean anything in particular, or did you just group letters together until they looked pleasing?), and the clan names - Savage Horde, Jadeclaws - great stuff! The Hand of Maul emblem recalled to me the White Hand of Saruman, which was also very sinister and very vivid.

Excellent work, backed and starred most happily.

Maria.

The Blood of a Savage: Book 1 - In the first chapter a battle is taking place. The author informs of the cause, who is fighting whom and has injected a good deal of excitement into the action which I am sure many young adults will love. The problem is there are just too many comparisons to be drawn with Lord of the Rings. The red hand on a black field mentioned in the first paragraph equates to the white hand of Saruman - and later similar characters in the form of an alliance between dwarves and elves fighting trolls under the ground, then orcs and goblins. Having said that the Bulvyf's prayer to the 'Lady' before entering the chamber of Maul was very good and descriptions of the chamber are atmospheric. But once again, Bulvyf's sword biting into Maul's leg during the fight conjures up LOTR.
The writing in the second chapter has a lyrical, philosophical quality and it is evident in the third chapter a lot of work has been done to create the world the author's story takes place in. Duke Sootheburn's character is well drawn and it is more than apparent this writer can tell a tale that will hold a young adults attention as the pace is rapid. The author has a good imagination and could easily people his world with something more original than orcs, goblins, elves and dwarves and this is what I would urge him to do, which would make his book stand out in this overcrowded genre. With a little rewriting, editing and polishing he could produce a memorable work young adults, I am sure, would treasure.

Child - Atramentus Speaks

Cracking fantasy story that feels fresh and new in an oversaurated market. Good, imaginative characters that are very vividly written, in fact the entire culture you've created is wonderful and fascinating. Very well done

This is some of the finest fantasy I've read--published or otherwise. The introduction was a feast for the imagination. Great imagery, great exposition, great narrative. The "David and Goliath" like battle between the demon god and Bulvf was worthy of an epic novel. I'm not sure if this is the first book in a planned series, but you certainly have the makings of a trilogy at least. I particularly would like to see a prequel featuring the rise of Buvf. Just a few suggestions to keep in mind when you become published--which with outstanding writing like this--I don't see any reason why you wouldn't.

The prologue sets the tone and pace for your story extremely well and I do like your use of foreshadowing. You have finely crafted a most interesting fantasy which is rich with unique characters. All of this coupled with your imaginative writing makes your work a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The beginning

Hi Joshua,
I’m here for our read swap. So sorry it’s taken me this long to get here. I’ve been getting over illness. Below are my findings/comments. They are of course my humblest opinions, so please take them for whatever they’re worth.
Chapter 1
A small thing, but you’re missing some commas here and there where commas ought to be.
This is a powerful start. You like passive voice, which is curious since this is such a grisly scene. I might suggest mixing it up with a bit more active voice. Also, there are times where you delve into over telling, I think. That said, powerful language and you’ve painted a vivid scene. Great flow and an intriguing plot.
I can see this doing very well here. Best of luck and highly starred!
Phil
(Deshay of the Woods)

I saw a comment that complained that this is too similar to Lord of the Rings, and I for one am always happy to read more stories that are Tolkeinesque. Heck, I wrote one myself! I do think that getting such stories published is nearly impossible these days, unless you go the self-publishing route.

I'm no professional author yet, so take what I suggest as only my opinion. What I've seen from so many agents lately is that, while in the old days authors could get away with loads of exposition, nowdays publishers won't allow it, at least not in the early chapters of a book. Your opening chapters packs in lots of information that is interesting to an old D&D geek like me, but it is exposition. I'd suggest an experiment, even if just for fun. Try to rewrite the opening scene while purposely trying not to tell the reader anything. Just get inside the mind of the main POV character and show the scene directly from that person's viewpoint. If you do this right, I think you will be amazed and happy with the results.

I did the same thing when I was writing The Shard. I put in lots of information I thought the readers had to know. Later I stripped it out and fed it in a little bit at a time, often during appropriate conversations. I'm not saying I'm a great writer yet, but I am much happier with my book after removing most of the exposition. Just my two cents!

Ted

The vivid description of the battle between Maul and Bulvyf is amazing. I see every move. I love those orc-things guarding the door. This first chapter is really excellent.

After reading it, I went back to your pitch. I wonder, after reading it, who your main characters will be. It may draw more readers in if your pitch talks about an individual or individuals whose story they can follow. And for me your cover doesn't do your writing justice. It's so dark and then your writing is so rich and detailed!

I will hope to come back for more (and apologies for not reading sooner. I think you backed The Licenser a while ago and I watchlisted your book but haven't read until now.)
Best,
Kate
The Licenser

Hi Joshua.

Great start to your story. I really enjoyed your action sequences, particularly the combat between Bulvyf and Maul.

I hope you don't mind me saying so, but your story could use some editing. I'd like to call your attention to a few issues. I focused only on your pitch and the first part of your prologue.


Pitch:

"Centuries after the fall of the dark god Maul the world of Telmar has degraded into a continuous struggle for control."
A comma is needed after ‘Maul’ to separate the introductory element of the sentence.

"Within the Kingdom of Uthradt political and social squabbles often erupt into civil wars."
Again, I would include a comma after ‘Uthradt’.

"In the county of Elborn a struggle over a mining city and their magic controlling metal erupts suddenly."
Include a comma after ‘Elborn’.

"South of county Yurghol strange creatures roam the swamp controlled by a hidden enemy that seeks control of city."
Include a comma after ‘Yurghol’. Your punctuation implies that the hidden enemy. I assume you mean to say that the hidden enemy controls the strange creatures, in which case you need to add a comma after ‘swamp’. Apologies if my assumption is wrong.

"Finally, in the east, the kingdom's capital of Kirkland rumors of assassination, hidden cults and revolution have begun to weaken the already failing nation."
This sentence doesn’t make sense. Condensed, you are saying ‘The kingdom rumors of assassination have begun to weaken the nation.’ I would suggest rephrasing this as ‘Finally, in the east, the kingdom's capital of Kirkland rumors of assassination, hidden cults and revolution, weakening the already failing nation’, using ‘rumors’ as a verb, or ‘Finally, in the kingdom’s eastern capital of Kirkland, rumors of assassination, hidden cults and revolution have begun to weaken the already failing nation.’

Prologue:

"While some wear their scars proudly on the outside others bear deeper, more dangerous scars."
Include a comma after ‘outside’.

"Some lived in those places still, but for chance spared by war that passed them by…"
‘But for chance spared’?

"The near innumerable army that called itself The Hand of Maul had come seemingly from nowhere sowing chaos and death wherever it went."
Include a comma after 'nowhere'.

"In the lands they conquered they raised the standard of their god-thing; an upraised hand on a field of black."
Include a comma after conquered. What is a god-thing? Semicolons should only be used to separate two closely related independent clauses that function as full sentences on their own. That is not the case here, so I would replace it with a colon.

I hope you find this helpful.

David Southam
Author of The Keeper of the Sightless Eye.

Hi Joshua. You have a unique style, your writing is really lovely, it is easy to read, and obviously very well polished. And I'm sorry I can't really put my finger on it, but it seems like you are in a lot of this, more telling than showing? For example, your first paragraph is really great as far as writing is concerned. But is it not possible to "show" us the people of Sardya being brought into a foray? Can you not show us the land in ruins? If you can't show something, then it is probably better not to start telling right away at the start of the work. I know that a lot of other books seem to be this way, you open them, and there's large paragraphs describing things, but if you look closer, there is always usually action happening right then and there in those paragrahs also, and the action is not described.. For example, don't tell us that the battle had been bought to the catacombs... You can tell us about the catacombs, but have an Orc running into them and let us see them as he does.
I hope that helps, because you're obviously a talented author, and I like the idea of your book. Thank you for sharing. :)

Joshua! Your title and book cover look scary, and I was almost to scared to read. But your first chapter here, makes it seem like you're a nice guy... So I will click submit now, and then I'll read on....

A clear talent for action/battle sequence writing is the outstanding feature of this book. The prolonged confrontation between Bulwyf and the demon god Maul was carefully and thrillingly constructed. Bulwyf is the first character to emerge from this dark tale and amongst the other warriors, dwarfs, elves, orcs and other LOTR stock characters more individuals steadily emerge. Duke Sootheburn, Nippol and Boot are a few whom we come to recognise in this authors vividly imagined world. The descriptive prose is good. The landscapes and history are well told but there is a lot to take in and probably this is targeted at true enthusiasts of this genre. The bloodlust, violence and multiple battles keep coming but perhaps there are too many characters with the action too fast and furious for us to follow the motivations at play and know who to empathise with. This is quite an achievement already but perhaps by slowing the pace, introducing some romance and humour and cutting out some of the minor characters the stylish writing would attract more backers than it currently has managed.

Well written and well imagined. You have created a world and peopled it with a cast of characters as rich and varied as one could possibly imagine. The foreward, the battle - I could just see that as a a movie, vivid with action and requiring as many special effects experts as any Star Wars movie.
Your pitch is too involved. It needs breaking up a little, and separate it into paragraphs to make it appear more inviting to read, - maybe don't try and convey so much information. Also, your book warrants its own unique book-cover, also essential for marketing.
Your writing is good, professional and almost error-free. It may appear a nitpick, but on your next edit, you should look at using more commas. There are sentences that would be made more clear with a comma or two.
Very well done, and backed without hesitation. Marj.

Hi Joshua,

Opening the book with the slaying of an evil demon overlord - you can't really get much than that, can you? I love military fantasy, and am always very jealous of people who can write battle-scenes as eloquently as you can... I'll never tire of battles between elves and orcs, and trolls and dwarves! I liked how you start with a wide-shot of the whole crazy battle then move in to close ups of individual characters; and how the battle frenzy clears and we see Bulvyf trying to complete his mission - which he does with pananche!
Love all the weird names (where do you find them? Do they mean anything in particular, or did you just group letters together until they looked pleasing?), and the clan names - Savage Horde, Jadeclaws - great stuff! The Hand of Maul emblem recalled to me the White Hand of Saruman, which was also very sinister and very vivid.

Excellent work, backed and starred most happily.

Maria.

The fight in ch 1 is expertly told. The tension escalating until Bulvyf fights Maul one-on-one. A lesser writer would have done the battle in a paragraph, but you exploit every point of tension and make the reader cringe blow after blow until climax of the scene: "I am no human."

By the end of ch 1, the reader is thoroughly invested in this story and it's characters.

My students would eat this up.

I do want to raise two issues in your messages.

The Blood of a Savage: Book 1 - In the first chapter a battle is taking place. The author informs of the cause, who is fighting whom and has injected a good deal of excitement into the action which I am sure many young adults will love. The problem is there are just too many comparisons to be drawn with Lord of the Rings. The red hand on a black field mentioned in the first paragraph equates to the white hand of Saruman - and later similar characters in the form of an alliance between dwarves and elves fighting trolls under the ground, then orcs and goblins. Having said that the Bulvyf's prayer to the 'Lady' before entering the chamber of Maul was very good and descriptions of the chamber are atmospheric. But once again, Bulvyf's sword biting into Maul's leg during the fight conjures up LOTR.
The writing in the second chapter has a lyrical, philosophical quality and it is evident in the third chapter a lot of work has been done to create the world the author's story takes place in. Duke Sootheburn's character is well drawn and it is more than apparent this writer can tell a tale that will hold a young adults attention as the pace is rapid. The author has a good imagination and could easily people his world with something more original than orcs, goblins, elves and dwarves and this is what I would urge him to do, which would make his book stand out in this overcrowded genre. With a little rewriting, editing and polishing he could produce a memorable work young adults, I am sure, would treasure.

Child - Atramentus Speaks

Very Lord of the Rings. Siince you like Jim Butcher, read his advice on POV and character and such. It's free. Just go to his site, click on his blog (which he wrote a few years ago) and start at the bottom. I'm about halfway through it myself. Just found it last night. Good stuff.

It's just that there is such an information dump in the beginning. And though I'm sure you're going for third person, it reads very Omniescent (I'm always getting that word wrong), as in instead of being in the head of your POV character, the POV is outside the battle and the main character. That all knowing, all seeing eye in the sky kind of thing.

He says it won't sell, and I kinda agree.

Loved the descriptions and the names, and the violence was good too. It's just having the POV so removed, it kept me at arm's length, or should I say spear's length.

If I may make a sugestion (and that's all it is), have the main character come in in the first or second paragraph, save the info dump and spread it out, and show the battle through his eyes, his feelings, his lust for the blood and the violence.

Give your worthy hero the stage right from the start.

Ps, You may enjoy reading Laurell K Hamilton, JR Ward and Charlaine Harris too.

l the genre, so l'm a touch bias. you tell it well and serve a real treat of narrative and great characters...on my watchlist for now...
read SEASONS...

Joshua Hernandez (The Blood of a Savage)

The title pulled me in and the first couple of chapters kept me there. I think I would describe this piece of work as 'true fantasy' and having said that, is there anything else to say? I'm BACKING your book and it goes on my bookshelf now. Good luck with your writing in the future.

Frank James (The Contractor)

chapter 2, "a matter of minute's milord" "a matter of minutes(,) milord"
chapter 3, "unholy stench(,)" cried (or ! if you wish)

just two little typos i spotted while reading.

the prologue and first three chapters are loaded with wonderful description and i especially the humor at the end of chapter 2. i've enjoyed what i've read so far despite not being a reader of high fantasy normally. i love watching it, and your book played like a movie in my mind.

great job,

me

Thank you, I appreciate it. Thanks, even, for the corrections. My wife has been helping in the editing and that has been addressed in the re-write!

chapter 2, "a matter of minute's milord" "a matter of minutes(,) milord"
chapter 3, "unholy stench(,)" cried (or ! if you wish)

just two little typos i spotted while reading.

the prologue and first three chapters are loaded with wonderful description and i especially the humor at the end of chapter 2. i've enjoyed what i've read so far despite not being a reader of high fantasy normally. i love watching it, and your book played like a movie in my mind.

great job,

me

Hi Joshua

Fans of the Lord of the Rings will love this! You've obviously absorbed the writing style and world of the motherlode of fantasy and Blood of a Savage looks as though it's going to be a cracking good read, taking the reader into a different blood- and battle-filled reality. Backed.

Nicole
Chosen

A really good story and an interesting beginning. Backed.

I hope you will take a look at my novel, Earth Reaver. I would welcome any comments and your backing.

Herschel Shirley

Backed a day or so ago and at last catching up with comments. Great scene setting, with the pre-story laid out in all of its blood and glory. I think with most stories the important thing is whether the reader is caught up in the world itself and in associated and believable action - I was. Like all of us have heard, our work could do with some tightening, but I enjoyed what I read and will continue reading.

Cheers

Simon

Wow! Really, what a hight fantasy and rich imagination. And then yuo put it all in such a great writing that one can't help it but keep on reading. Backed

Joshua,

Quick note, but I think you have a typo in your long pitch:

de[s]ce[n]dents

Anyway, the work opens with an epic battle scene. This is good old fashioned high fantasy, swords and scorcery that reminds me of my Dungeons and Dragons playing days.

That's one hell of an impressive duel at the end. Love it.

Backed.

Thanks JD, I noticed the typo, but every time I have edited it it has somehow stayed the same. I'll try again. Thank you for the comment, It's much appreciated.

Joshua,

Quick note, but I think you have a typo in your long pitch:

de[s]ce[n]dents

Anyway, the work opens with an epic battle scene. This is good old fashioned high fantasy, swords and scorcery that reminds me of my Dungeons and Dragons playing days.

That's one hell of an impressive duel at the end. Love it.

Backed.

Dear Joshua,
Your opening chapter is filled with imagination and a creative spirit. Some of your phrasing is really nice and unique. "leaked putrid yellow and red blood" "danced around a hurried strike" - both examples of strange, odd language that really captured my attention!

BACKED
Elizabeth Wolfe (MEMORIES OF GLORY)

Cracking fantasy story that feels fresh and new in an oversaurated market. Good, imaginative characters that are very vividly written, in fact the entire culture you've created is wonderful and fascinating. Very well done

Very imaginative. A convincing fantasy. Unique characters depicted with skill and keen observation. Natural conversations that advance the story. Vivid sense of place. Compelling storyline. Thorough world building. Impressive writing. A compulsive read. Backed.

Joshua, your prologue and first-chapter are obviously well-edited, and in my opinion, well-written also. I couldn't find any glaring errors. Good job on this.

Backed with pleasure.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

Joshua, your prologue and first-chapter are obviously well-edited, and in my opinion, well-written also. I couldn't find any glaring errors. Good job on this.

Backed with pleasure.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

Joshua, your prologue and first-chapter are obviously well-edited, and in my opinion, well-written also. I couldn't find any glaring errors. Good job on this.

Backed with pleasure.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

Joshua, your prologue and first-chapter are obviously well-edited, and in my opinion, well-written also. I couldn't find any glaring errors. Good job on this.

Backed with pleasure.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

Joshua, your prologue and first-chapter are obviously well-edited, and in my opinion, well-written also. I couldn't find any glaring errors. Good job on this.

Backed with pleasure.

Joffrey (The Silver Spoon Effect)

The prologue sets the tone and pace for your story extremely well and I do like your use of foreshadowing. You have finely crafted a most interesting fantasy which is rich with unique characters. All of this coupled with your imaginative writing makes your work a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The beginning

This is some of the finest fantasy I've read--published or otherwise. The introduction was a feast for the imagination. Great imagery, great exposition, great narrative. The "David and Goliath" like battle between the demon god and Bulvf was worthy of an epic novel. I'm not sure if this is the first book in a planned series, but you certainly have the makings of a trilogy at least. I particularly would like to see a prequel featuring the rise of Buvf. Just a few suggestions to keep in mind when you become published--which with outstanding writing like this--I don't see any reason why you wouldn't.

Although this is not my genre, you have a wonderful imagination that comes through in your wrting. The battle between Maul and Bulvyf is described tremendously. I would question the introduction of so many new names and details within t=your first few paragraphs, as this can be rather overwhelming. Also, I am not sure that you sow" chaos and death (1st para). Otherwise, backed with pleasure. Colin

Very detailed background, with some vividly imagined characters and settings. The action scenes are fast and exciting. However, my main criticism is that it takes a while to get to them! Especially in the prologue, where a lot of space is given over to explaining the background to the war. To me, this slows things down just when you're getting started. I would consider beginning with the battle, and introduce the background later. In fact, as this is the prologue, perhaps you could cut it back the the essential. To me that seems to be the duel between Bulvyf and Maul.

Of course, that's just my thought on it, to take or leave as you wish. I still found it sufficiently absorbing to read on for several chapters, and it's got a place on my shelf.

Hunger gnawed at the Watcher’s gut. Reaching for a bottle of blood from the minibar refrigerator, he chugged, savoring the slightly bitter iron taste. “Breakfast of Champions,” he chuckled. Tossing the empty in the trash, he dialed Joshua. Getting voice mail, he left a message,”Putting your book on our watchlist. Check out our paranormal thriller, Dark Side.”
CC Brown

The best in this genera I have read to date. It takes an intelligent approach to sociological negative evolution in an interactive logical progression.
A rich descriptive narrative that supports a believable story and provides the backdrop for an interactive appropriate dialogue. Backed.
BK

Excellent names but you've got an excellent imagination. It reminds me of one of the old Norse myths. They say fantasy is crowded on this site and needs to stand out. I can't think of anything better than exciting prose and you've got that. Backed. Lynn

Ha, can I just say first off that I love 'Mosh Pitz' as a name! Also, how does one pronounce 'Bulvyf'? I'm kind of saying it as 'Bull-vee-eef'...
Your writing is amazing! So detailed and descriptive. Prologue is kind of a baptism of fire, which I love - really draws the reader in from the first action-packed paragraph! This is pretty much the epitome of fantasy works, kind of a mixture between lotr/blood of elves/the painted man, though a lot darker and more blood-filled, which I love! It's definitely something I would buy in bookshop, no doubt about that.
Great work, and best of luck with getting published!!

Selena Hallahan - 'With Teeth'

I'm a great fan of fantasy and your book just made it to my mental list of favorites. Right up there with Lord of the Rings. But this has a more action packed, and perhaps darker side, which I immensely enjoy. I hope to see this in a book store some day, and trust me, I'll definitely buy it. Congratulations on a wonderful piece of work.

I think your descriptive narrative is Brilliant!!!
You have immense imagination to create such a vivid world – impressed.
The only thing that would have enhanced the opening for me would be to bring more sensory description in earlier (especially the background sound).
However it doesn’t take away how good this is. – Good luck!

Gifted imagination and intrigueing premise makes this novel a must read for fantasy lovers! Backed with pleasure!

Liz
The Cheech Room

The Blood of a Savage
Joshua C. Hernandez

Nice short pitch Joshua - "The world of Telmar is besieged by darkness, only the mercenaries of the Savage Horde can save it from the evil god Silas Merrtu Maul." I love this classic good versus evil theme. Backed a few days on the basis of your pitches and taking a quick read of your first chapter upload (prologue) during half-time break in the England/US first round match - tense so far!! As is your prologue!
I love that part of your quote "Scars of the spirit carry on, sometimes even after death." A shame it was written by an unknown - where did you find it? Interesting names you chose for your characters which adds to the fantasy. Very imaginative plot I thought and a good read. Your descriptive powers are unusual and special. I love how you describe the "thing" - "The thing looked most like a human crossed with an orc. Light skin, tanned from exposure, had the hint of orange and brown mottling. Sharp tusks grew from an overlarge mouth, and dark hair cascaded over the prone muscular body. Silas Mertuu Maul lay before Bulvyf, still thrashing and gasping for breath. The white flames had gone, but the wounds remained." Had a fun time seeing all of this unravel in my mind and your great decsriptions made this vivid, your fantasy world, believable. In awe of your imagination. The world of Telmar where chaos is the way of life is not one I would like to inhabit - but, it seems a time of change is at hand, a time to rebuild - darkness is pushed back for now as the prologue ends on a very optimistic note, although I suspect judging from your pitches, there is much conflict and excitement to come. Will be back for another fix soon. Now the game has started again and I must post this pronto! Happy to have backed it Joshua and I wish you the best in getting it published.
Zan

The Blood of a Savage
Joshua C. Hernandez

Nice short pitch Joshua - "The world of Telmar is besieged by darkness, only the mercenaries of the Savage Horde can save it from the evil god Silas Merrtu Maul." I love this classic good versus evil theme. Backed a few days on the basis of your pitches and taking a quick read of your first chapter upload (prologue) during half-time break in the England/US first round match - tense so far!! As is your prologue!
I love that part of your quote "Scars of the spirit carry on, sometimes even after death." A shame it is written by an unknown - where did you find it? Interesting names you chose for your characters which adds to the fantasy. Very imaginative plot I though and a good read. Your descriptive powers are unusual and special. I love how you describe the "thing" - "The thing looked most like a human crossed with an orc. Light skin, tanned from exposure, had the hint of orange and brown mottling. Shatp tusks grew from an overlarge mouth, and dark hair cascaded over the prone muscular body. Silas Mertuu Maul lay before Bulvyf, still thrashing an dgasping for breath. The white flames had gone, but the wounds remained." Had a fun time seeing all of this unravel in my mind an dyoiur great decsriptions made this vivid, and your fantasy world, believable. In awe of your imagination. The world of Telmar where chaos is the way of life is not one I would like to inhabit - but, it seems a time of change is at hand, a time to rebuild - darkness is pushed back for now as the prologue ends on a very optimistic note, although I suspect judging from your pitches, there is much conflict and excitement to come. Will be back for another fix soo. Now the game has started again and I must post this pronto! Happy to have backed it Joshua and I wish you the best in getting it published.
Zan

Hi again Joshua, I came back and finished the read, as far as it goes.

Well done.

Dark, brooding and compelling, this work is well crafted and the world of Telmar and it's inhabitants are described with thorough brush strokes, which add immensely to it's overall authenticity

BACKED

Barry
LITTLE KRISNA AND THE BIHAR BOYS

This is a truly compelling premise, written in the tone of the fantasy greats. You keep things moving perfectly, not getting distracted from your key points as you build hte world and bring us there with skill.

Backed with pleasure.
Abi xxx

Great fantasy fiction here. I liked what I read and it moved along at a great pace. I envy your imagination!! I don't really have anything else to say other than the fact that I liked it a lot! Hope that works for you!

Missy

BLOOD OF A SAVAGE
This is an interesting fantasy story. You’ve obviously spent a lot of time developing this imaginary world because you know it so well you describe scenes and character’s actions down to fine details. Goes a long way toward making this feel real. And makes it a good read. I’m adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

Damn, you know this world. Your imagination is quite amazing. You know everything from its history, its climate, its customs, its landscape. Authenticty drips from every page I have read. And you believe it, at least that's how it feels. And for a fantasy writer there is no higher compliment. You believe it and so do we.
Well done
Carl
The Time hunters

You write with skill and incredicble excitement that makes the work a masterpiece in the fantasy genre. Your imagination is immense and vivid and make no bones about it, this one is definetely movie-esque.

A great pleasure
backed
The Lord of the Dawn

Hi Joshua, The landscape builds and builds with the discoveries in the caves and the battle sites. That’s what I liked about the first part and how it gradually resulted in finding Maul. Bulwyn is such a brave character that maybe he could have come in sooner rather than the general “warriors.” It’s exciting and ominous as you’ve described Maul and his scourge so well. Shelved – Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)