Grave Detective

Great story, real polished writing I'll rate with three stars.
Daniel Manning
No Compatibility.

Dear KJ,

I have just finished reading all chapters through chapter 12. You have an intriguing story idea and the unique characters to go with it! This showing us what life immediately after death might be like is always an attention-grabber. It is definitely for a YA audience and would do very well with them.

The detail you use to explain how a ghost gets through a wall makes this a practical and unusual plot. This same attention to the detail of "Haunting for Dummies" is great and a hook to keep reading

Getting Baby to show the police an important clue makes use of many of the new things that Izzy is learning as a new ghost.

However, if you continue with this amount of detail every time Izzy accomplishes something, you may lose your reader's interest. Maybe you already are doing this in your later chapters, that is, shortening the descriptions of how things are done in the physical world by spirits. If not, I'd recommend that you check for too much detail when you revise.

This is a lovely start and needs a bit of editing and some revision and tightening and polishing, but I believe it has much promise. Keep up the good work!

I'm backing it!

Ancient Reader

Hi,
Initial impressions are very promising - fluent and entertaining. I loved the way you describe Izzy popping out of her body - not something I've ever had to try!
Lucy

High concept that works because of your writing. Great hot start, fantastic first word, excellent pace. Get ready to ride the rocket to the top this month. Good luck.

tom s

KJ,
What a fresh idea. Clever, too. Gives Waiting for God (British TV sitcom) a new twist. You write very well, and I'm sure this will do very well, too. .Best of luck with this. Stay with it. It's that innovative.
Caroline
KC Hart
Summer Rose

Great introduction to your story. I love it when the realization hits, that she is outside. Then the second pair of legs, leads the reader to think she may have been with a man, but no... you turn it into her, looking on her own body. The way the investigator comes in is natural and just how you might imagine.

Great work,

Kirsty
Prygon: The Circle of Dark Magic

Righ up our alley...CSI and horror rolled into one story. Placed Grave Detective on our watchlist. Will read and comment on at a later date. Thanks for the BACKING.
CC Brown

very good book kj and i cant wait to read the end of it to find out if im right and who the killer is :)

K. J. Fletcher:

I have one admission to make. I was dreading reading this, thinking just another science fiction with little or no meaning --- WRONG!

Good gracious. What a plot! This is writing at its best. Number 1: I don't tend to like science fiction, albeit some of them have proven to be exceptional; this is one of them. This is riveting, alluring, and just plain entertaining. You have a wonderful cliff hanger at the end of chapter 1. WHO could resists turning the page?

Into chapter 2, where I am a bit confused about how the MC ended up in a chair, you clearly explain it, dispelling any doubt how she got there. Now we realize that this girl has just been brought to a morgue, getting ready to be checked into that other world we call death. You paint your scenes masterfully--effortlessly.

I found myself getting a bit confused, not realizing that the nurse and Natalie was ONE and the SAME person, but like I said, this is NOT my genre so it may be just me. But again, you have a wonderful cliff hanger at the end of chapter 2 (Who doesn't want to know what's on the other side of death?) This is brilliant!

You do it again at the end of Chapter 3 when Izze is pushed through the door marked EARTH. I ONLY have one word for this. AWESOME!!! Backed with Pleasure.

Ida L. (Silent Storm)

Great premise, full of creepiness and dark humour.
Backed with pleasure!
Frank.
If you back or have backed my work, you may also want to approach BJD (a big supporter of Sicilian Shadows) for a further possible backing of your book.

I loved this as there were very believable characters and it makes me wonder if it could actually happen? Will there be more of Izzy in the furture?

hullo KJ. We all wonder what will happen when we die, what we will look like, where we will go,if we go at all, when we go. Although your book has a gentle touch about it reminds me of a book by another author P.E. LaRiviere's Hand of Cain in which a ghost attempts to help solve her murder. You should check this book out. I am also not sure if you really what to rate this is 'horror. No one wants to wake up dead and consider it horrific. But, the blending doorways and the interior's are cool. Already shelved and backed.
Please take a look at my book if you have not and thanks for that.
Linda Lou Long
Southern dis-Comfort
http://www.authonomy.com/ViewBook.aspx?bookid=11421

I suspect Horror is a little strong for a classification, but I can appreciate why you added it. In these Twilight Times I suspect it's going to be pretty mainstream... :) However, I'm really impressed with what I've read so far, and apart from a couple of past/present twists which will be sorted out in the revision process, you seem to handle the writing with confidence and style. And yes, I would certainly like to see it completed (that way you can smooth it out into a proper working novel.)

Backed and read with pleasure.

Loved the part of the book available to read - now I want to read the rest!! Great story KJ xx

GRAVE DETECTIVE KJ FLETCHER

Very intriguing premise and an attractive one. I love it. The writing is suspenseful and keeps the reader absorbed.
Your pitch. (wake up dead) to me is an oxymoron. I would say awoke from death.

I would gladly support this.

HI K.J. What a marvelous, flowing story and its well written and I could not stop until I reach Chapter 20! You have woven an intriguing story between the spiritual world and the physical world. I really like your story and I BACK IT!!!!!! Harold Alvin(ICON)Wesley

Hi k.j., The ultimate in a startling murder scene! Izzy’s POV reflects this too and I could feel her surveying these scenes and that she was in total shock. They’re stark and the waiting while the car crash victims are checked in gave atmosphere – and it made me wonder what atmosphere. A pressing outset! Shelved – Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

i've read a few stories on this site, but this is the first one i've commented on - and im really enjoying it. its funny and a little bit creepy, but the most powerful part for me was when Izzy could'nt bare to watch herself being undressed for the autopsy.

im looking forward to reading more...

You had me on your pitch, two of the best shows out there! But the writing inside really won me over. I love the atmosphere you create with this, it's creepy and just the kind of thing I love to read! Without a doubt this should be published. You've got a great thing going here.

Missy

Csi meets Supernatural. Excellent.

Like this!
One you need backing just for the scenes you set with descriptive narrative.
Two you need backing for the concept and storyline, which I think is very good.
Izzy appears to be growing into a great character. This has the feel of a very, very good book! – Good luck

Nearly everyday I come across a book on this site in which the talent amazes me and Grave Detective is no exception! Unique, well crafted, and polished. BACKED with pleasure.

Liz
The Cheech Room

Hi KJ
A fascinating concept which you have drawn out beautifully. The idea of waking up dead is really original or at least I've not seen it done before. Your use of descriptive language is excellent and I was hooked from the start. Very enjoyable.
DP Walker
Five Dares

GRAVE DETECTIVE
This is an interesting slant on a mystery story: a look at murder from the victim’s standpoint. Izzy is a good character; she’s spunky and likable because she’s more angry at being dead than she is sad. I like the way she systematically learns how to invade other’s thoughts to get her points across. Makes this a good read. I’m adding it to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

I like your use of the first person narrative - it personalizes your story well. What you have posted so far is well written and well paced. Your use of imagery is excellent, your character development of Izzy is solid and this coupled with your descriptive writing style makes your crime thriller a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans:
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

A really great read, you had me hooked with the short pitch mentioning CSI and Most Haunted two of my fav programmes. You have a unique premise that lends itself to being a captivating read.

Nicely written and a pleasure to shelve such fine writing.
Melxxx

Hi K J -- I was happy to back this. I think you can write and that says a lot on this site!
Cheers, Barry
Little Krisna and the Bihar Boys

Dear k.j., I got so excited when I saw that you had backed, "Tell Me True Love Stories." :) Thanks so very much. :) Since I have already "backed" your book, I will put your book on my "watchlist." Could you please take a moment to "back" my completed edited memoir version? "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not." I'd be ever so grateful. :) Thank you. :) Love, Susie :)
authonomy quotes: "Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs.
When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved...authonomy.

This is the sort of pitch that sells books. An ingenious premise, very well handled. There's a lightness of touch to the narrative, but a grammatical mistake in the opening line, '...so DO the effects of last night' - plural.
In my opinion, very commercial. Backed. Lynn

This is fascinating. I like the quirky text, makes a refreshing change. I like the ideas of vanishing doors and doors like the door marked 'earth' There is a long run up to her discovering she is dead and this I like plus it makes me wonder how she is going to be once she has accepted that. It has an interesting premise and an excellent pitch which make me want to read more.
Happily backed
Christina
From Under the Bed

Just my kind of read, loved it. E.Loraine Royal Blood Chronicles book one

This is a very engaging and interesting read. I love being hooked into something, and, although there was the occasional typo, there was nothing here to suggest that plot over-rides technical aptitude.

Backed with pleasure.
Abi xxx

what a brilliant concept and so cleverly introduced to the reader
Gamma is a real masterly creation with just the right touch of firmness and kindness
Well done indeed
Backed
Micheal O'Durcain
Murder on the Menu

I don't usually like horror stories, but this is para-normal at its best. Very unusual theme. BACKED -Elizabeth Wolfe (Memories of Glory)

What a unique concept! Very well written in a gripping voice and tone. A dream weaver of sort from the afterworld. Backed.

I hope you will give mine read and back it if you like it.
Best,
Robert
Golden Conspiracy

very well crafted book. You gripped me from the first and then never let me free. Your use of words is brilliant and capturing well your characters and placing them right in my head. You kept them there also.. Please comment on my work thank you

BACKED FOR SURE

Denise

Welcome aboard, k.j. This website will improve your writing craft, if you allow it. I'm a bit of a pitch doctor, having read thousands of pitches in my time on this website, so I want to share my insight here with you. You have to think of your pitches as your sales tool to grab the casual reader's eyes. The short pitch actually works but you still wanna write an original short. The long pitch should be expanded on. Show more of a mini story arch. End the long pitch with a question to pique the interest of your casual reader. Perfecting your pitches is how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments to better your novel. The writing is good so I am SHELVING you.

Though I have been a very active member for over a year and have the most commented book on the website, I can still use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Every little bit helps. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

Dear K.J., I love the premise of waking up dead - I immediately thought of Jesus rising from the dead & then eating fish & honeycomb, & then disappearing after eating with the 2 guys at Amaeus & disappearing earlier - what a concept, huh - I love your fantasy & how she help find clues for the detectives. :) Hope you'll write more books. :) Before I began to read your book, I was prepared by your pitch, which was very well done. :) Your story is good because you create interest by having short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, which makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm "backing" your book. :) "When you back a book, it only improves the ranking of that book, not yours. However, the author whose book you are backing may decide to back your book also, in which case yes, your ranking would be improved"...authonomy quote. :) Please "back" my TWO memoir books, "He Loves Me, He Loves Me Not" & my completed memoir unedited version? "Tell Me True Love Stories," which tells at the end, my illness now & 6th abusive marriage." Thanks, Susie :)
additional authonomy quote: "Every time you place a book on your bookshelf, your recommendation pushes the book up the rankings. And while that book sits on your bookshelf, your reputation as a talent spotter increases depending on how well that book performs." :)
backed :)
Love, Susie :)