ZANGA'S DREAMWORLD

This is a most charming children's story, Athman - nicely done! I wish I could have had that magic sword when a boy. In fact, I can imagine every boy reading this (or having it read to them, since the story is perfect bedtime story material) wanting that sword too. Zanga is a wonderful creation, and as someone said before, so is the sword of fire - it has such 'moral power' and only loses this power when used with anger or against good. I like that you inspire 'healthy values' in chapter 2 - children need to hear that - and that you use such short, simple, highly effective sentences to get your message across. This really worked for me, and I'm giving it a max 6 stars.

Joe Kovacs
Rupee Millionaires

(a little edit would turn this fab book into an excellent one. All of Zanga's 'thoughts' in chap 1, for instance, might work better in italics (e.g. I'm dreaming. Please God, let me be just dreaming...'); though I only found one typo - 'on his bottoms' in chap 6 should be 'bottoM'?)

Thanks Joe for the comments. Everything noted. And thanks for the stars.

This is a most charming children's story, Athman - nicely done! I wish I could have had that magic sword when a boy. In fact, I can imagine every boy reading this (or having it read to them, since the story is perfect bedtime story material) wanting that sword too. Zanga is a wonderful creation, and as someone said before, so is the sword of fire - it has such 'moral power' and only loses this power when used with anger or against good. I like that you inspire 'healthy values' in chapter 2 - children need to hear that - and that you use such short, simple, highly effective sentences to get your message across. This really worked for me, and I'm giving it a max 6 stars.

Joe Kovacs
Rupee Millionaires

(a little edit would turn this fab book into an excellent one. All of Zanga's 'thoughts' in chap 1, for instance, might work better in italics (e.g. I'm dreaming. Please God, let me be just dreaming...'); though I only found one typo - 'on his bottoms' in chap 6 should be 'bottoM'?)

Dear Athman,

This is a good story. And Zanga is a great name. Does it mean ‘revolution’?
The opening chapter is well written. Initially, I was keen to point out the simplistic and over-explanatory text, but then I remembered the genre and realised that the kiddies would absolutely love this. Which little boy would not want to be proclaimed as the ‘chosen one’ by the Fire Entity and be handed a sword of fire to vanquish evil?

I was particularly impressed by the next chapter. The ten commandments of the fire entity were fantastic. In the guise of entertainment and adventure, you’ve tried to drive home a very important message. I respect that a lot in an author. In fact, fire and light are themselves symbolic of purity and enlightenment. Well done.
I’ll read more of this. Meanwhile, I’ll be pleased to award 6 big stars to Zanga’s Dreamworld.
Best of luck !!!

Regards,
AGC

Thanks for the comment Chaudhuri and for the stars. I hope you will like the rest of chapters available here.

Dear Athman,

This is a good story. And Zanga is a great name. Does it mean ‘revolution’?
The opening chapter is well written. Initially, I was keen to point out the simplistic and over-explanatory text, but then I remembered the genre and realised that the kiddies would absolutely love this. Which little boy would not want to be proclaimed as the ‘chosen one’ by the Fire Entity and be handed a sword of fire to vanquish evil?

I was particularly impressed by the next chapter. The ten commandments of the fire entity were fantastic. In the guise of entertainment and adventure, you’ve tried to drive home a very important message. I respect that a lot in an author. In fact, fire and light are themselves symbolic of purity and enlightenment. Well done.
I’ll read more of this. Meanwhile, I’ll be pleased to award 6 big stars to Zanga’s Dreamworld.
Best of luck !!!

Regards,
AGC

Hi Zimbo, I hope you're well.
I have just poked my nose into this and would like to make a suggestion about your short pitch if thats OK?

'Twelve year old Zanga is given a powerful sword by a Man of Fire. With it he fights forces of evil in the/a dreamworld/Dark Zone.'

It just neatens it up a tad.
I'll be back to read on, I just wanted to write this while I had it in mind.
I hope you're well and thank so much for your ongoing support.

Alexia
Confessions of a Dervish

I love the name Zanga for a MC. You have a knack for picking great words to fit into your story. I'd be careful of term like the chosen one though, they can sound a tad cliche. Just something to think over, no rush to change anything because of one person's opinion though. Also, I was confused about which of the books was the first in the series? I took my chances on this one. Anyways, it was an interesting idea with a lot of promise. I think MG and YA readers will really like it. Keep up the good work!

Best,

Ashley

Thanks for the comment, Ashley.

I love the name Zanga for a MC. You have a knack for picking great words to fit into your story. I'd be careful of term like the chosen one though, they can sound a tad cliche. Just something to think over, no rush to change anything because of one person's opinion though. Also, I was confused about which of the books was the first in the series? I took my chances on this one. Anyways, it was an interesting idea with a lot of promise. I think MG and YA readers will really like it. Keep up the good work!

Best,

Ashley

wow. You sure get right into things and fast like . . . the first sentence. Just how all books should be. They need to start from the start and hook the reader. And you did that with me.

Zanga. What a funny name. I liked it and I can’t stop laughing as I say it aloud. :)

Again, you get right into things. You say that it’s a story about a powerful guy giving someone a magical sword and you give that to us in the first chapter. I’m glad you put it in the end though and don’t explain too much more and cut it off so we have to venture into chap 2.

What I noticed in chap 2 is that you have a talent for making something that appears simple but it’s really subtle and has great meaning. And because it’s simple it reads very, very well and makes us shocked how we are able to read your story very fast. That’s something not many writers can do.

I’m so glad you named him Zanga. It always puts a smile on my face still as I continue.

The ending was again working for me. This would be a great children’s book because your writing is PERFECT for them, you have good themes already being told like always seek peace and do not discriminate. And this is a time (thinking this can be for middle school kids, too.) that it’s right before they become a teenager and start noticing discrimination.

Chap 3 is equally good as the previous. I’m starting to like this sword. It’s becoming a character. And I like how all your chaps are short. 51/2 stars if I could, but I’ll round up. Can’t back you now because I have just changed my entire shelf and want to give them more than a couple of days.

Thanks for your comment and looking forward for your backing...

wow. You sure get right into things and fast like . . . the first sentence. Just how all books should be. They need to start from the start and hook the reader. And you did that with me.

Zanga. What a funny name. I liked it and I can’t stop laughing as I say it aloud. :)

Again, you get right into things. You say that it’s a story about a powerful guy giving someone a magical sword and you give that to us in the first chapter. I’m glad you put it in the end though and don’t explain too much more and cut it off so we have to venture into chap 2.

What I noticed in chap 2 is that you have a talent for making something that appears simple but it’s really subtle and has great meaning. And because it’s simple it reads very, very well and makes us shocked how we are able to read your story very fast. That’s something not many writers can do.

I’m so glad you named him Zanga. It always puts a smile on my face still as I continue.

The ending was again working for me. This would be a great children’s book because your writing is PERFECT for them, you have good themes already being told like always seek peace and do not discriminate. And this is a time (thinking this can be for middle school kids, too.) that it’s right before they become a teenager and start noticing discrimination.

Chap 3 is equally good as the previous. I’m starting to like this sword. It’s becoming a character. And I like how all your chaps are short. 51/2 stars if I could, but I’ll round up. Can’t back you now because I have just changed my entire shelf and want to give them more than a couple of days.

Hi Athman,

I think that this is a great children’s story. The sentences are short and simple, as are the chapters, and I love the list of virtues that are conveyed at the end of chapter 2 that are necessary to be a “conqueror of evil.” A wonderful set of values that are made important for this character to assume the role that lies ahead—and a great role model set up for kids to aspire to.

I’m not an expert on writing for children’s stories, so I’m not going to attempt a lot of constructive criticism here. One thing that I did notice is that sometimes there are questions that a character might normally think to themselves that you’ve either had them say aloud to themselves, or the thoughts are put in quotation marks. (Like when you say “’But if I can see myself as a reflection in a mirror of fire where is the man of fire?....’ he wondered.) Normally thoughts don’t get put in quotation marks like that, but I know sometimes you can get away with it in children’s stories. Just one thought of something you could look at.

Overall I feel like the story moves at a really good pace for the intended audience. I only had time to read through 5 chapters today, but I would have been very comfortable reading all the way through. I like your writing style and your use of short, succinct sentences. You get right to the point, and it’s easy to read.

Best of luck with this and your other project! It was a pleasure to read.

-Sarah ES

Thanks Sarah for your comment. It is quite encouraging. I also wish you all the best of luck in your ambitions.

Hi Athman,

I think that this is a great children’s story. The sentences are short and simple, as are the chapters, and I love the list of virtues that are conveyed at the end of chapter 2 that are necessary to be a “conqueror of evil.” A wonderful set of values that are made important for this character to assume the role that lies ahead—and a great role model set up for kids to aspire to.

I’m not an expert on writing for children’s stories, so I’m not going to attempt a lot of constructive criticism here. One thing that I did notice is that sometimes there are questions that a character might normally think to themselves that you’ve either had them say aloud to themselves, or the thoughts are put in quotation marks. (Like when you say “’But if I can see myself as a reflection in a mirror of fire where is the man of fire?....’ he wondered.) Normally thoughts don’t get put in quotation marks like that, but I know sometimes you can get away with it in children’s stories. Just one thought of something you could look at.

Overall I feel like the story moves at a really good pace for the intended audience. I only had time to read through 5 chapters today, but I would have been very comfortable reading all the way through. I like your writing style and your use of short, succinct sentences. You get right to the point, and it’s easy to read.

Best of luck with this and your other project! It was a pleasure to read.

-Sarah ES

This is something any 12 year old boy would love to read! Having said that, I have thoroughly enjoyed it too.

Hope this works out for you.

Thanks for the comment, Laura. I also hope it will work out.

This is something any 12 year old boy would love to read! Having said that, I have thoroughly enjoyed it too.

Hope this works out for you.

Quite an epic. Good versus evil. One has to have a good heart, almost perfect morals, spiritual and physical discipline and strength, and one has also to fully believe in oneself. All these combined, no evil can defeat one. That's what I guess the story is all about. Well told and short, simple sentences. Although all happens in a dreamworld, this is very true in our day to day lives.

As promised. A story i'm sure 9 - 12 year old fantasy readers would enjoy. I can't think of another book like it. I loved the first line - "You are the chosen one" - and your writing in general. I wasn't totally convinced by Zanga's twelve-year-old voice and i thought there needed to be a little more description for the readership. As Curiousturtle says, "get painting".
But a job well done.
Lots of stars and on my WL for now.
Kim
St Viper's

Hi Athman, you have written a very good fantasy story here.
Very colourful, with good description.
You‘ve surely captured the young reader with an exciting storyline. Great stuff!!
This will certainly be welcome to many kids...they thrive on fantasy and the unknown.
I did notice a couple of errors, nothing to worry about.

Chapter 5...“ I wish I had the sword in my arms” Zanga said...
I would say ‘in his hands’ since it mentions this in the next paragraph.
Chapter 5...Hyphen required in ‘pushups’...push-ups
Chapter 7. In this chapter, Zanga appears to talk to himself...’This is strange. I have never had so vivid a dream before,’ he whispered.
Might be better if he was thinking this, his thoughts would be better in Italics.
There are a couple of these, where he is thinking aloud.

Love your book and hope you do well with it, certainly a good read for its chosen audience.
Pleased to star rate it and wish you the best.

Kind regards,

Neville. THE SECRETS OF THE FOREST – THE TIME ZONE.

Hi Athman/Zimbo,
Your book is easy to read and although I have not read a lot yet, it seems like an intriguing story! I already feel in the story but would probably suggest slightly more description of the characters, dreamworld, earthly room etc just to fill out the story and make it complete. I do not yet feel that I am absorbed by your world, if you know what I mean as I cannot fully picture it.

Thanks for backing my book, The Mark of the Thirteenth. Hope those comments help and don't seem too negative :?
AM

Thanks Mae for the comment.

Hi Athman/Zimbo,
Your book is easy to read and although I have not read a lot yet, it seems like an intriguing story! I already feel in the story but would probably suggest slightly more description of the characters, dreamworld, earthly room etc just to fill out the story and make it complete. I do not yet feel that I am absorbed by your world, if you know what I mean as I cannot fully picture it.

Thanks for backing my book, The Mark of the Thirteenth. Hope those comments help and don't seem too negative :?
AM

HI,
I must confess that it really very hard to narrate the fiction and sc-fi stories. And I sure that you really excelled in that. Your narration is perfect for the plot. I liked the plot very much.
All the best.

S.VInay kumar
10 roses for love

Thanks S. Vinay kumar for your comment

HI,
I must confess that it really very hard to narrate the fiction and sc-fi stories. And I sure that you really excelled in that. Your narration is perfect for the plot. I liked the plot very much.
All the best.

S.VInay kumar
10 roses for love

Amran

I started reading your Opus and thought I would give you my cent and half:

The story reads like a fable, so I assume is directed to children. The idea of the voice left unattended, that is without a lot of description, is one that stylistically like. Not being an expert on children's book, I would test it if I were you.

That is, I would read it to several children and ask:

did they filled in the blanks with magical thoughts of their own?
or,
did they just get a blank?

All new stylistic devices have to be tested, because what looks delicious in the writer's head......wellllll...by the time time you get to the reader's head ....is a different meal....lol.

but I do like the intention

I also like the dialogue. It has that transcendent/biblical quality, as if happening in a space without a specific time zone. Your write like Paul writes in the bible or the old Jewish ecrivants in the Talmud. That works wonders for children for, they live in a timeless zone.

What I thought was missing, was more of a pictorial language around the dialogue. For children all stories are science fiction stories, that is they present them with an alternative universe they have never experience before. Their minds do not have that library of images that thanks to the media of our day, we adults are saturated with.

Thus, your obligation to provide them with those mind images that will fill their imagination as they read/listen to the story. Think of them as a blank screen, and think of yourself as the painter

Now paint.

Hope that helps

Overall, wonderfully magic, 6 stars

david

Fantastic story! Very well written and expertly dialogued. I enjoyed each chapter that I read, and I think this book will easily make it to the editors desk, as well as eventually being published. It's a great story, I'd recommend it to anyone! Well done!

When I was little I had an imaginary friend named Zanga!!!!!! I mean, it was a she, but still. :)

That's very interesting. Well....Thanks for having a look at my book.

When I was little I had an imaginary friend named Zanga!!!!!! I mean, it was a she, but still. :)

Hey Amran-

You asked me to take a look at your work- so here I am. First, let me start by saying that sometimes as a writer the only way to grow stronger is to hear all constructive critism (good or bad) and take it with a grain of salt. Second, I should probably mention that as a book reviewer, childrens books aren't a genre I normally consider-probably because I don't have any. Nevertheless, I find your writing style elementary enough for a younger crowd to easily comprehend and enjoy (thumbs up!)
The piece is obviously in need of editing but under most circumstances this comes with publishing and time. There's a lot of repetition throughout.
The prose is pretty formal and vaguely made me think of the 10 commandments? Although, I DO think that these are lessons that many generations these days should be aware of and practice!! I appreciate those in writing and they deserve to be read.
One thing I always recommend is reading back over to see if all information is relevant to make the story flow.
Just a few suggestions, however i'm not an expert so take them or leave them.
Either way, I admire anyone who has enough talent to sit down, focus, and just write....not to mention loving it enough to do it a 2nd time around. Touche'
Never give up.
I support... (ie: backed)
-M

Thanks MLSmith for the comment and backing.
It is highly appreciated.

Hey Amran-

You asked me to take a look at your work- so here I am. First, let me start by saying that sometimes as a writer the only way to grow stronger is to hear all constructive critism (good or bad) and take it with a grain of salt. Second, I should probably mention that as a book reviewer, childrens books aren't a genre I normally consider-probably because I don't have any. Nevertheless, I find your writing style elementary enough for a younger crowd to easily comprehend and enjoy (thumbs up!)
The piece is obviously in need of editing but under most circumstances this comes with publishing and time. There's a lot of repetition throughout.
The prose is pretty formal and vaguely made me think of the 10 commandments? Although, I DO think that these are lessons that many generations these days should be aware of and practice!! I appreciate those in writing and they deserve to be read.
One thing I always recommend is reading back over to see if all information is relevant to make the story flow.
Just a few suggestions, however i'm not an expert so take them or leave them.
Either way, I admire anyone who has enough talent to sit down, focus, and just write....not to mention loving it enough to do it a 2nd time around. Touche'
Never give up.
I support... (ie: backed)
-M

A good fantasy piece that is perfect for children. Like others before me have said you need to spend some time improving with a bit of a edit.Do that and you'll have a nice little storybook.

ZANGAS DREAMWORLD
I liked this story when it first came on here. It is a great tale for children, moral and upright. It is the kind of story that I like for children - straightforward but full of mystical intrigue. You write clearly and well. There is a bit of work to be done re editing but I find I do this all the time and every time you read a passAGE you can improve it.
Well done and good luck. Backed
FaitH
THE ASSASSINS VILLAGE

Sounds like a great fantasy piece. Looking forward to reading it.

Thanks matt for your interest in my book and backing it. I am also looking forward for your opinion on it.

Sounds like a great fantasy piece. Looking forward to reading it.

ZANGA'S DREAMWORLD: ATHMAN AMRAN

Hi Athman,
I thought your book sounded a promising beginning - based on the commentary, it would be best to let readers know the age group you are targeting. I am not sure if you are using your repetitions deliberately – seems to me you could very well be!
I have done African literature in school and I am very familiar with the language flow; I think you have a nice book in the making...only do not switch too fast; for instance...

“It is twelve midnight. I have slept for only three hours!” he whispered
However after about 15 minutes he succumbed to sleep.

Not to detract but here’s what I noticed so far from the above:
1. One does not “exclaim” with a whisper…just a thought..
2. You switched too quickly saying that he succumbed to sleep after 15 minutes. Suggest dropping the mention of time here because children are not too acutely aware of time and to suggest 15 minutes makes it obvious that an adult’s mind is at work here. Also add more words that connote visual impact.

In all, I like the book, think it is a wonderful book for a child and wish you well Athman!

Kind Regards,
Romilla
Forgetting Sally

Backed though I would hope to see you address the nitpicks raised in others' comments. You wouldn't want those small things to detract from the story being told.

Jedah Mayberry
-Slow Train Comin'

Thanks Jeddah, I appreciate.
Good luck and all the best.

Hi Athman. I'll pop this in Comments rather than Messages in case it tempts you to come and see the brand-spanking new ranking system. While I figure out how it works, I'm revisiting a few of the novels I previously reviewed, enjoyed and backed, to give them a star rating. Apparently the star system involves cunning maths whereby you have to get rather a lot of high ratings before the score deviates from some average or other. Hopefully, mine will eventually help. [ENDQUOTE

Thanks Sly80, I have yet to come to reading the new ranking system. I have been away and still away for a while and I will settle down mid this coming week. We could exchange info on this new system.

Hi Athman. I'll pop this in Comments rather than Messages in case it tempts you to come and see the brand-spanking new ranking system. While I figure out how it works, I'm revisiting a few of the novels I previously reviewed, enjoyed and backed, to give them a star rating. Apparently the star system involves cunning maths whereby you have to get rather a lot of high ratings before the score deviates from some average or other. Hopefully, mine will eventually help.

Backed though I would hope to see you address the nitpicks raised in others' comments. You wouldn't want those small things to detract from the story being told.

Jedah Mayberry
-Slow Train Comin'

Good morning Athman. I’ve read the opening chapter of your book. The concept of Zanga fighting evil in the dream world is a fascinating one. I already feel engaged by your main character. However, there are quite a few repetitions and adverbs, which mar an otherwise promising story. I’ve outlined some suggestions, which I hope are of use to you. The best of luck.

Nitpicks:
Repetition: With the voice, the boy Zanga felt (great) heat as if he was near a (great) fire. Suggest replacing the 2nd “great” with “blazing” fire.
Punctuation. After a struggle he woke up(!) I don’t think you need the exclamation mark, it makes this sentence a little melodramatic.
Adverbs & repetition: He (slowly) looked around his (nicely) decorated (room). The (room) was (dimly) lit… The adverbs and repetition mar the flow of the sentences. On one side of the (room)… Also, instead of saying the room was “nicely decorated” give the reader some details. What was nice about it? Suggest rejigging along the lines of: He looked around his room. The dim light of the security light shone in through the window… Zanga’s gaze fell on a shelf full of books.
Repetition: “Please God, let me not fall (asleep). Zanga tried hard not to fall (asleep). Zanga tried hard to stay awake.
Wordiness & repetition: He looked at the wall clock (on the wall). You don’t need the bracketed words, as you’ve already told us the clock is a wall clock so where else would it be?

Thanks Katrina for pointing out the nitpicks. Your advise is well taken.

Good morning Athman. I’ve read the opening chapter of your book. The concept of Zanga fighting evil in the dream world is a fascinating one. I already feel engaged by your main character. However, there are quite a few repetitions and adverbs, which mar an otherwise promising story. I’ve outlined some suggestions, which I hope are of use to you. The best of luck.

Nitpicks:
Repetition: With the voice, the boy Zanga felt (great) heat as if he was near a (great) fire. Suggest replacing the 2nd “great” with “blazing” fire.
Punctuation. After a struggle he woke up(!) I don’t think you need the exclamation mark, it makes this sentence a little melodramatic.
Adverbs & repetition: He (slowly) looked around his (nicely) decorated (room). The (room) was (dimly) lit… The adverbs and repetition mar the flow of the sentences. On one side of the (room)… Also, instead of saying the room was “nicely decorated” give the reader some details. What was nice about it? Suggest rejigging along the lines of: He looked around his room. The dim light of the security light shone in through the window… Zanga’s gaze fell on a shelf full of books.
Repetition: “Please God, let me not fall (asleep). Zanga tried hard not to fall (asleep). Zanga tried hard to stay awake.
Wordiness & repetition: He looked at the wall clock (on the wall). You don’t need the bracketed words, as you’ve already told us the clock is a wall clock so where else would it be?

A well told morality tale with good character and plot development. Good children's book writing easy to nread with a positive character, Zanga who succeed at becoming better individual.

Well done
Backed
Scorselo

Well done I enjoyed the simplicity and careful story telling style of your writing which is peppered with references to the super natural and nicely linked to the idea of the quest and a moral code. Two greats early on felt a little clumsy otherwise some enjoyable writing and well honed to a younger audience.

Best wishes

Richard

Men of Dunwich

I like this story very much and am backing it, though I have only read 18 chapters tonight. It is the kind of story my grandsons would enjoy - and probably my granddaughter, also. It is straightforward but full of mystical intrigue. You write clearly and well. I will be back to finish this later - and then to read your second book! Well done.

Patricia West Hays
The Witness Tree

P.S. You backed my book some time ago, and I apologize for just now getting to your book.

Thanks Patricia for the wonderful comment and backing.
Wishing you all the best and looking forward to your take on my other book,

I like this story very much and am backing it, though I have only read 18 chapters tonight. It is the kind of story my grandsons would enjoy - and probably my granddaughter, also. It is straightforward but full of mystical intrigue. You write clearly and well. I will be back to finish this later - and then to read your second book! Well done.

Patricia West Hays
The Witness Tree

P.S. You backed my book some time ago, and I apologize for just now getting to your book.

You have an amazing talent. This is a great story with a fascinating plot. Backed. Eunice - The Temple Dancer.

Thanks Eunice for the comment and backing. Wishing you all the best.

You have an amazing talent. This is a great story with a fascinating plot. Backed. Eunice - The Temple Dancer.

From what I read, very quick read. I can very easily see this as a wonderful book for young adults. I liked the straight drop into action and the boy's reactions felt real. Well done. Backed. Good luck.
Jenny

Thanks for the comment and backing.
Wishing you all the best.

From what I read, very quick read. I can very easily see this as a wonderful book for young adults. I liked the straight drop into action and the boy's reactions felt real. Well done. Backed. Good luck.
Jenny

If the great Soyinka, Achebe, and Laye could please move aside a bit - there is a new literary voice coming from Africa. Athman Amran's distinguished voice combines strong African values with a timeless story set in a familiar yet strange world. Welcome, all, this fine new writer!

Thanks James for the very encouraging comment. Wishing you all the best.

If the great Soyinka, Achebe, and Laye could please move aside a bit - there is a new literary voice coming from Africa. Athman Amran's distinguished voice combines strong African values with a timeless story set in a familiar yet strange world. Welcome, all, this fine new writer!

Just had time for 5, or was it 6, chapters.
I good story for young readers.
You aptly blend narration and dialogue and establish a fast pace from beginning.
I don’t know the market for this genre but expect your clear voice will make it.
Good luck. Backed with pleasurew.

Thanks for the favourable comment. Wishing you all the best.

Just had time for 5, or was it 6, chapters.
I good story for young readers.
You aptly blend narration and dialogue and establish a fast pace from beginning.
I don’t know the market for this genre but expect your clear voice will make it.
Good luck. Backed with pleasurew.

Dear Athman,
I've read your profile and Zanga's Dreamworld, and it doesn't surprise me in the least you've been successful. You're an amazing writer, and I believe Zanga's Dreamworld is a potential best seller.
Best of luck and much success to you.
Backed with pleasure
Helen
The Last Dream

Thanks Helen.
Wishing you all the best.