Bigdeal Tina

Welcome aboard, Yulka. This website will improve your writing craft, if you allow it. I'm a bit of a pitch doctor, having read thousands of pitches in my time on this website, so I want to share my insight here with you. You have to think of your pitches as your sales tool to grab the casual reader's eyes. The short pitch works. The long pitch needs to end with a question so it compels the casual reader to turn pages. Also break it up into smaller paragraphs so it reads faster. Perfecting your pitches is how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments to better your novel. The writing is good so I am SHELVING you.

Though I have been a very active member for over a year and have the most commented book on the website, I can still use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Every little bit helps. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

Yulka, Your story and young Tina are wonderful, I always like to show some positive spin on things, to help the youth of today know how important inner beauty is and that we arer all imperfect and we can aim to accomplish what we want to change, so for me I would have liked a little of that (just an opinion) Your humor is dry and quite good( I love dry humor) and is an asset to the dialogue, being from the USA I had issues with your sentence structure, ie tenses of words and missing words in sentences, I found myself re-reading to grasp your POV in certain paragraphs especially in the first few chapters.

I think this is going to be a hit with your genre as all your other works have done so well. Congratulations on those...Backed Patricia aka Columbia Layers of the Heart

The MC feels real, complete with a delicate sense of self-esteem and a clever wit. The plot is original in many aspects, though I would perhaps have liked to see Tina embrace her curvaceous figure and have some positive reinforcements to boost her self-esteem. Good pitch, cute cover, and overall well-written. Backed.

Amy
Love Match

Yulka -

Happy to back Tina.

And I would love it if you could take look at my book, if you haven't already done so.

Best of luck here.

-Jeff Lee
THE LADIES TEMPERANCE CLUB'S FAREWELL TOUR

Many teenagers should be able to identify with your MC. The names of all your characters are unusual, Tinka, Rossen and Pepa are names which are unfamiliar in England. However that is of no importance as Tinka's issues with her self esteem are universal and you deal with her angst so very well. Look forward to the promised magic. Shelved, Regards, Anne

Hi Yulka, The narrator voice here is inviting and it has the tone for her age. The Tinka name made me laugh and then the description of Tina’s weight problem. I really like the idea of a magic software program as a fantasy element. Looks like a book the age group would fall into and enjoy. Happy to shelve – Katherine (The Swan Bonnet)

Hi,

This is an addictive read. My only critique would be that you promised a magical element in your pitch and after reading twenty chapters there`s still no sign of it materialising, but I still thoroughly enjoyed your chapters, they were well written and you MC is an engaging character, she`s witty, likeable and real. I`m sure that your target audience will love this...Backed with pleasure.

Good luck,
Cerys (Bradan)

Yulka , glad to back your book...have you managed to get around to mine yet? can you comment and possibly back...thanks

Denise
The Letter

You have a very definite character to bolster the plot in this book. She is convincing and easy to sympathise with and that's half the battle. Well done, backed
Lara
Good For Him

This is a great pitch and and automatic read for most girls and women of a certain weight. Great job describing the issues! BACKED -Elizabeth Wolfe (Memories of Glory)

Young adults and old ones will love this! Backed with pleasure.

Liz
The Cheech Room

BIGDEAL TINA

Yulka,
Got a winner here. Well suited for YA

Backed
The Third Eye

Hi Yulka,

I will definitely finish this down the road, but for now had time to read to Ch 5. You bring out teenage body-issue angst so well. Being chubby myself growing up, I can relate to Tinka. Doesn't it always seem that the odd ones out always seem to find each other, almost as a solidarity against the masses.

Love it and happily backed
Denise

Would you mind having a look at my book "Road to Redemption: From Cop's Daughter to Convicted Felon?"

Hi Yulka,
This is a really original and entertaining read. The subject matter is very apposite these days, given the huge amount of obesity, both amongst children and adults in our western society. India is also going the same way. Your story deals with people's phobias and fears, how they feel they want to look, should look. All very sad really.
You've done a great job with this and it's a pleasure to back you.
Best wishes,
Barry
LITTLE KRISNA AND THE BIHAR BOYS

BIGDEAL TINA
This is a timely story because it deals with childhood obesity. I think you’ll find a teenage audience for this of girls who are concerned about their weight who want to follow Tina as she discovers a magic solution to see how all of this turns out (and good or bad, hope the book offers a solution to being overweight). I’m adding this to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

A good lesson for girls and boys that looks are skin deep and appreciate what you have, rather than what is often an illusion. Your writing is very smooth, curling youin the deeper you go. Great stuff and I hope this gets the wider audience it deserves and wakes at least one person up.

Hi Yulka, by the way you write you are obviously very experienced. Tina is perfect in her thoughts and actions, particularly with her obvious lack of confidence that often comes with girls who hate their looks. This work should do well. I’m backing it.
Keith – Unit T

You haven't uploaded all of the book and I see she's still plagued with fat by 20. This is a good teenage read and does voice authentically a lot of the worries and ideas teenagers have. It's sad funny and it's engaging.
Well done
Backed
Lara
Good For Him

You have an authentic narrative voice to this. Your writing flows really well and it is a pleasure to place your novel on my book shelf.

Melxx
Impeding Justice

Hi Yulka,
I read your credentials, looked at your novel, read your pitch, and realized it was extremely unique. I've backed it because it deserves it so much.
Will return with further comments, once I have read it.
Helen

Hello Yulka, and very different storyline which is refreshing in some ways. Your Tina is a very interesting character You have repeated yourself by putting your short pitch in your long pitch, this is the first read your potential readers and publishers may have so just a thoughts to think about, and maybe put a para in the pitch.....Your book is very well done and certainly captured me with issues she has that are very real. BACKED by me and BEST of luck with this........My book is of a different genre but that is the beauty of this site, and if you could 'review' and 'comment' and BACK it, I would be so happy. Again BEST OF LUCK with your book

Denise
The Letter .

Nice to see someone writing a teenage drama about someone who isn't perfect. Anyone can portray the happy popular kid, but it takes thought and consideration to get into the head of someone who is "flawed." Good writing and great characters.

D.E. LaRiviere (AKA Milo Saint) Six of One/The Hand of Cain

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Charles

Nice work on ‘Bigdeal Tina'. You have a terrific knack for capturing teenage angst in your voice. Your prose flows perfectly for your YA audience, in my humble opinion. You have a solid writing talent. I really enjoyed reading part of it. This book is a winner! I am happy to back it and wish you nothing but success.

Richard Bard
BRAINRUSH (2010 ABNA Semi-Finalist)

I have to admit that I've never been able to tolerate teenage female attitudes, even when I was one, and the heroine here is a prime example. That said, you capture her beautifully with a voice that young teenage females of her persuasion will immediately related to!

I am curious - in the pitch you call her Tina, but in the story you call her Tinka. Maybe I just haven't read far enough yet - I've only read the first couple of pages. I think Tinka is a nifty name, but I think she would have hated her name even if she'd been named Sofia. Just something I wondered about.

In any case, no matter what I think of her, I expect this would go over quite well with your target audience. Good luck with it! Backed.

Hi Yulka,

I have backed your book because I was hooked by the pitch, loved the introduction and read on. How much more I read depends on time and commitment.

Enjoy everything and good luck.

Rusty Bernard
Psychiatric Evaluation

This has an excellent voice and you do teenspeak very well! Should appeal to your target audience. Good luck with this, it deserves to do well.
Jim Darcy
The Firelord's Crown

This seems to hit your target audience right on the nose, I can hear my own children in this text, well done. Paula Barrett (Cuthbert-how mean is my valley)

Nice premise,pitches, and writing. Happy to back you.

Rodney B.

Dear Yulka, I love that you have broached this problem, because my granddaughter has the same problem j- what a heartache - esacapism - she has to see the psychiatrist every week. :) Your pitch is excellent, so set the hook for me to read your book. :) When you use short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, it makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm backing your book. :)
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