Rush Hour Rules

Huw, what can I say, I'm blown away....... This is amazing work. Your pitch alone just sent shivers up my spine. I cannot believe the talent I've come across on this site. Yours is up there and deserves a backing and so much more.
I'm not going to wish you luck with this one Huw, cause I doubt whether your will need it. Since I've only delved into the first chapter, I will return to read further, and also return with further comments.
Brilliant..
Backed
Helen
The Last Dream

This is by far one of the better books here - really well done a pleasure to read - Jack (Soldier Blue)

Great premise, that's what hits you between the eyes when you start reading this book. Strong writing, great characterisation and all the other ingredients for success are right there, but it's the idea behind this that really grabbed my interest.

Excellent work!
Abi xxx

This is quite simply amazing. Gripping, thrilling, and the first chapter has left me buzzing with questions.

Backing, and reading when I have more time on my hands.
D. A. Darlington.

What a great idea for a book - I wish I thought of it! You are a talented writer and have an excellent novel here! Backed 100%

Liz
The Cheech Room

I read very quickly through these first three chapters and enjoyed it a lot.

Wow, This is very interesting! Who wouldn't be able to stop reading after one chapter! Certainly not me! It's so well written and your style is very hard hitting. I couldn't imagine what it would feel like to come out of being hypnotized and find you have a bloody knife! Very intriguing! You certainly give us some WTF moments, which is awesome! Great job with this!

Missy

Tremendous writing. Excellent idea, brilliantly developed. No more to say! Gordon - The Harpist of Madrid

Thanks Nick - this is probably the most useful comment I've had so far.

It's advice like this that makes Authonomy worth while, as most people here are new authors and need some honest views on their work. I must admit, it's funny looking at your observations (and not just all the humming you do), as this novel was published over a year ago and I've learned a lot since then - currently working on a couple more novels and a script, but not ready to load them up just yet.

I'm curious, why do you have 4 different profiles (NickP, Nick Poole, Nick Poole2, and NickP3)? Are you hiding something?

Also, I've checked out your novel, Mirror in the Sky, and ironically, while I need to curb my 'redundancies', I found your style quite simplistic for a fantasy novel, but still, it looks like it has some promise.

Regards.

Huw.

E Z Tyler (or ‘Eee-Zee’ to his friends) stepped cautiously BETTER VERB TO REPLACE ADVERB? onto the hard wooden stage. It wasn’t particularly HMMM large or impressive, yet the weight of expectation made him feel incredibly HMMM small and vulnerable. He took a deep breath and then HMMM turned to acknowledge the audience who were enthusiastically HMMM applauding his entrance. He could hear the odd whistle and cheer from the anonymous HMMM faces hidden in the shadows, lost behind the bright lights that conspired to block his vision.
“What’s your name, sir?” asked a loud and articulate voice [behind him CUT?]. E Z turned to face a rather HMMM old and worn man, who was pointing at him with a pale, shrivelled finger and wearing a less than genuine smile. The man’s other hand rested suspiciously ???? on the back of a plain wooden chair as it sat innocently in front of him.
“E Z,” he replied honestly, “E Z Tyler.”
“Easy?” echoed the man inaccurately, raising an eyebrow to clearly HMMM show his scepticism [that this was a real name CUT?] , “it’s original, I’ll give you that.”
“Easy by name, easy by nature,” shouted someone from the crowd, followed by ripples of laughter. E Z [sighed and] shook his head, refusing [to turn around and] pay any attention to this [obvious] remark, which he had heard many times throughout his life. Instead, he clenched his fists [tightly] and tried to remember why he thought this might be a good idea.
I THINK YOU NEED TO START CHOPPING THESE REDUNDANCIES THAT WEAKEN YOUR PROSE. AND BEWARE "BREEZINESS"

Huw,
I reviewed the first three chapters of Rush Hour Rules and found it filled with suspense. Backed.

It was going so well, I had enjoyed the pitch, been hooked and started to read the book and then.....do you expect me believe a grown man of normal mental faculties is 'usually too paranoid to trust his HUMILITY to other people? And wonders if he has been hypnotised before WITHOUT KNOWING IT? PLEASE.

Good idea, poor execution so far. Write the truth as Stephen King (and remember his billions) says.

All the best, I'll back it for the pitch and potential.

T. L. Bartush
Bleak House Bleak Shed

Hi Huw,

well done, I cannot wait to find out what happens next.

I have backed your book because I was hooked by the pitch, loved the introduction and read on. How much more I read depends on time and commitment.

Enjoy everything and good luck.

Rusty Bernard
The Mental Pause

Huw, what can I say, I'm blown away....... This is amazing work. Your pitch alone just sent shivers up my spine. I cannot believe the talent I've come across on this site. Yours is up there and deserves a backing and so much more.
I'm not going to wish you luck with this one Huw, cause I doubt whether your will need it. Since I've only delved into the first chapter, I will return to read further, and also return with further comments.
Brilliant..
Backed
Helen
The Last Dream

I love the way this reads...the flow. I was flying through this with ease...that's what I want in a book.

Lockjaw

This is a real puzzle.
since the oibject of any book is to keep the reader turning the pages you have succeeded beyond measure
not only did i have to read alll three chapters but I was dying to know what happened next
You are original, layered and an extremely competent story teller
Deservedly backed
Micheal O'Durcain
Murder on the Menu

...raising an eyebrow... = is already enough to tell the reader what's going on
Well written with no obvious 'defects'...good luck
Cheers
Stewart

Excellent book that I hope goes to the top. Excellent premise and obviously well thought out. Backed.

Well Huw I hope you know that you've stopped me cleaning the bathroom. I started reading and was hooked. The predicament E.Z> finds himself in is certainly unusual and would work as a T.V. drama. THere are enough loose ends to engage the reader and Project Phoenix is a complete mystery as yet. I really enjoyed this and hope you post more chapters before too long. Backed Rab14

Great character, great story!
The intrigue you introduce at the beginning sets this up perfectly. – Brilliant way to open a story. – Good luck with this – Sure it will do well!

Welcome aboard, Huw. This website will improve your writing craft, if you allow it. I'm a bit of a pitch doctor, having read thousands of pitches in my time on this website, so I want to share my insight here with you. You have to think of your pitches as your sales tool to grab the casual reader's eyes. The short pitch TELLS instead of SHOWS. The long pitch works better. Perfecting your pitches is how you climb in ranking to gather more exposure and comments to better your novel. The writing is good so I am SHELVING you.

Though I have been a very active member for over a year and have the most commented book on the website, I can still use your comments on my book when you get the chance. Every little bit helps. Cheers!

JC
The Obergemau Key

You have crafted a most intriguing storyline that compels the reader to read on. Well done. The confusion and conflicting emotions that you create in Chapter 1 sets the tone for the balance of your story perfectly. You have created an interesting character in E. Z. and your imaginative writing makes your thriller a pleasure to read. Backed.

Andrew Burans
The Reluctant Warrior: The Beginning

Backed

This is quite simply amazing. Gripping, thrilling, and the first chapter has left me buzzing with questions.

Backing, and reading when I have more time on my hands.
D. A. Darlington.

HI huw . i was taken in by the pitch, always wanted to know whats happens under the spell, 'magic ian' sounds like some you could come across in any village hall.
the first chapter is gripping and magical it held me spellbound , i could not read it quick enough, it has all the makings of a very good read indeed. will certainly read more.
TOM BYE 'FROM HUGS TO KISSES'

What a great idea for a book - I wish I thought of it! You are a talented writer and have an excellent novel here! Backed 100%

Liz
The Cheech Room

Great premise, that's what hits you between the eyes when you start reading this book. Strong writing, great characterisation and all the other ingredients for success are right there, but it's the idea behind this that really grabbed my interest.

Excellent work!
Abi xxx

I like the pitch and the opening is well written and easy to read, backed.
Eveleen
(Turning a new leaf)

This is a really cool story. And it all begins with a hypnotic trance. Well done.
Backed
Kirk
"How to Steal a Lion"

A unique premise told in a edgy voice and tone. Good characterizations and flowing narratives kept me turning the pages. BAcked.

I hope you will give mine a read, and back it if you like it.
Best,
Robert
Golden Conspiracy

RUSH HOUR RULES
This is a book based on a clever premise: a hypnotist session turns deadly. I’ve wondered what would happen if I were ever hypnotized so I really enjoyed reading this to see what was going to happen. EZ is a good main character; he’s likable and sympathetic because he never guessed anything like Jason’s rage would happen. Makes this a good read. I’m adding it to my shelf. Burgio (Grain of Salt).

Excellent book. The opening is brilliant and I can just feel his anticipation as he walks onto the stage, having been on one many times myself. I especially liked the part about the footlights blocking his view. I liked the part when he was seventeen and was sleep walking to find himself standing naked in the middle of one of his mother's dinner parties, brilliant. Excellent pace and dialogue keep this flowing well. Backed with pleasure.

Sandie
The Crown of Crysaldor

This is by far one of the better books here - really well done a pleasure to read - Jack (Soldier Blue)

Hello Huw, and really looking forward to your book cover. In the book stores, unless of course you are a well known author or backed by Oprah, your book cover would be the firs thing that would attract. ....Your short pitch is great and just a suggestion for your long pitch. It gives the impression of being long when it is not, so paras would really be good. This is the first read your potential publishers will have of your work and this book of yours deserves as many readers as possible...again just a suggestion... I would not normally read a book in this genre, but you know I promised myself that I would step across to another genre, and review for skill etc. one cannot just discard a climbing author just because of genre.....BACKED for sure.......I would just love you to step across to my genre and review my book, COMMENTS are so welcome even if it is only the skill etc.... and if you see fit, BACK it.

BEST of luck with yours

Denise
The Letter

Hi Huw
A fantastic start and some really fast paced action. I loved the way the first chapter just ran away out of EZ's control without him hardly realising. You have drafted in the suspense well yet keep this credible and believable. I love a good conspiracy.
DP Walker
Five Dares

Dear Huw, I love EZ's name & that it's in almost every paragraph & stands out readily - great name - his life is something else, too - you put me right ther with him - yes, it is very fast reading. :) Your pitch is excellent, so set the hook for me to read your book. :) When you use short paragraphs & lots of dialogue, it makes me want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen next. I'm backing your book. :) Could you please take a moment to back my TWO memoir books? Thanks. :) Love, Susie :)

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backed :)
Love, Susie :)