The Floating Man

Interesting pitch and quite original also. The sarcasm is right on and the way you look at things is a breath of fresh air. Good stuff that I would like to finsih sometime.

ARISE, AUTHONOMY GHOST!

Ease those weary, withered limbs from your coffin. Push away the stone from the mouth of the tomb.

You have one last task to perform. One last, sacred shelf to confer.

Whether you were plugger, spammer, gusher or troll, whether you flirted or fought in the forum or beavered away in the shadows, now is the time for your resurrection.

One last time. Marshall your strength, muster the last vestiges of your power and carry out your final Authonomy act:

Back my book, MIRROR IN THE SKY.

Then, only then, you may rest easy in your Authonomy grave.

Nick Poole2 (formerly known as NickP)

I think this kicks ass ! you've got a weird quirky style that comes out fresh & I totally like the way your writing sorta 'drifts' ......it's right in tune with the character you've created. YOU ROCK !

Odd. Interesting. But your pitch needs work; it doesn't seem to match the book. Wld.

I like the premise of this very much, and the two chapters I read did not disappoint me. Whilst it is perhaps not the kind of thing I would normally read, the idea of an astronaut floating in space and going over his life is an attractive one. The writing is fluent, the dialogue quick and realistic. I am going to put this on my shelf because I have been looking for a book about aliens I felt I could back for some time. I would ask you to check out Common Places and/or Harbour, but I think that maybe you wouldn't like them that much. But how should I know?

This is a weird tale. It could be seen as the tale of a boy with a literal interpretation of religion. Or as a satire on the age we live in now. Or as a different take on 2001:A Space Odyssey. But it's not derivative. I'd quite like to read it all, at some point.

One thing I would suggest is to flick back ot the drifting astronaut a little more frequently in the first few chapters of backstory, even if it's just for a couple of lines. That way the connection is still there for readers.

Rotating bookshelf.

R

I really like the concept of this, the idea is brillaint because ot it's simplicity. The pitch grabbed me in regard to the subject matter you would be covering, however if I had one reservation is that as interesting as it sounds it does start to become something of a list by the time you get to the bottom. Good work though, I'll be keeping an eye on this.

Lawrence, I dig it. There are a thousand ideas in here and you have knack for smile-inducing turns of phrase. I don't blame you for not wanting to read the crap on here. Neither do I. But yours was well worth the 20 minutes or so I spent on it. Hope that helps.

1. The pitch.

The first para is good. The second.... how busy is that? Strip out some of the details, it reads like a smorgasbord of desperate scattergun attention grabbing. I would probably read the first couple of pages of this book, but you kinda shot yourself in the foot. You start with 100% as always, and despite the pitch I'm not deducting yet.

2. First paragraph. Hmmm. He, he, his, his, he, he, his, his, his. This is rapidly going downhill, and is only saved by the oddly well placed amniotic sea line. Lose 10%

3. It was going ok until the attack of the burger parentheses. Lose 2%

4. The plow back..... not getting this sentence despite reading it twice. Lose 2%

5. Well, I've gotten to the point where mum buys him a telescope, and I'm losing interest, although there was some wry humour along the way, it doesn't deliver the promise of the pitch. Lose 15%

This goes back on the shelf

Lawrence, your log line hooked me. Great, funny premise. I've got you watchlisted and will try to read in the next few days. Good luck!